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RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! (OOC: Nicky hasn't she just left Petalburg City and started her journey.) ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky had turned around to see Isa in a van. Her eyes bulged in shock, but she quickly regained composure, "I do, it's like the flames have a mind of their own." ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! (OOC: Then at least let Nick get her first badge before blasting me off to Dewford City.) "Shadow Ball!" Nicky commanded. Her Eevee nodded and fired a purple orb of energy at the ember of flames that surrounded them. The flames...

RE: Becoming Civilized This is an interesting concept. I don't know too much about this since it just started, but I hope to read more from you soon! ~NZ

Thank you Zy for your critique. I think we can count on you to hit the major weakness with out the sugar coat. For Nicky's Point of View, I wrote it in a new style that I have been developing. It seems though that it isn't great yet, but I am glad that you hit the major weak points in it. I will...

AN: Just like I have said in the title, this is a collaboration between myself and CrazyAipom, so please don't just criticize just one of us, criticize both of us. We both wanted to wait a while for someone to review and give us tips before we posted this, but she didn't reply because she is an...

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky had looked at her, but didn't question her. She put the towel over her face and ran to the opposite direction of the forest. ~Holy Star

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! "I don't know, I just got here," Nicky replied. ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky had set off for Petalburg Woods, but when she got there people were screaming. The forest was set ablaze, embers flying everywhere, the rushing sound of burning wood filled the air, Pokemon were escaping as fast as they could...

RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival I like the way you are developing Eru. She is as stubborn as a mule, but I can see a lot of character development potential. I can tell you are pulling off the tragic past thing well, most people these days can't pull it off correctly. ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky checked the map that the Pokemon Center had provided. Anyone could use it since it was hung on the wall. Nicky decided that she should go to Rustburo since that she could get her first gym badge. "Ah, Nicky, you're Pokemon are...

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky had taken a rest in the Petalburg Pokemon center. She was a bit tired because she decided to trek even further then to just stop at Odale. The trainer around were pretty mean, which made her a bit mad, but she seemed to be fine...

RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival I like the Charmeleon for some reason. Anyways she got an egg! I really don't know what it is at the moment since the mother Pokemon wasn't revealed, but I will find out! ~NZ

I would love an Espeon and a Togekiss if Pokemon were real. ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! OOC: Things are starting to not make sense. How does Cody know Joey in the RP? Cody is a new character that is introduced, he can't magically know everybody, plus he hasn't met Joey yet. I don't get why people are merging their...

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Nicky sighed as she exited her house. It was time for her to leave the humble and peaceful town of Littleroot. She would have much rather left on a journey in Johto, but that wasn't an option ever since the appearance of Team Rogue...

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Ooc: I know I am not in charge of the game, but I can tell that Joey won't except the form you just submitted, Nod. The character you submitted is a Mary Sue. Everyone has weaknesses, we are not all perfect. A nuke to the head isn't...

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! OOC: So do I just jump in or what? (How do I start) ~NZ

RE: A New Dawn RPG. Started, but still taking registrations! Trainer name: Nicky Stones (Yes I'll be a girl for this RP because I happen to feel like being one in this RP) Pokemon: (All Level 5) Torchic, Eevee, Wurmple, and Snorunt. Special Moves: Torchic can use Ember, Eevee can use Shadow...

I am not a great a good critique, but I have to say this is good. I like how you describe the characters naturally instead of a list, like other people do. The characters aren't out of place and random and I like the way you moved it along. There are points in the chapter where the punctuation...