Writing Anthony's poetry and stories! Please help with Light Emission!

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Juliacoolo

Mods, I apologize if this isn't aloud, (I re-read the writing corner rules and saw nothing wrong with it) but I thought I'd just make a thread that contains all my stories/poetry. I'll post each chapter/poem, and post a link to it on the main thread for quick access. Any link that has *New* next to was posted within a weeks time ago. I apologize again, if this breaks any rules and I did not realize it.


I guess I don't have much yet so I'll link to posts when I get more:


Poems


Closer to You

The curves of the hills are steep, and ridged

Each, taller than the last

Every ascent leaves me breathless

And every descent leaves me further down

But every day I walk

Down the rocky path

Up the slippery grass

For every every obstacle I go through

Brings me closer to You <3

Forever

The confusion of times tries to keep us apart

But Tenacious, we stand

The apprehension waxes and wanes

But my aplomb in you stays strong

My conspired plot is cloudy and frail

But the light at the end keeps it deep and sincere

Pain is merely temporary

Our love is eternal

Sic semper tyrannis

Und leben Sie in unserem Frieden

Much we have gone through

And much is yet to come

But united, we remain

United, Forever

Limitless

The distance between us is only as far as you want it to be

We have no limitations

It can be as we dream of

As we've done hundreds of times, but never once have

There is always a way

Through the hardships of coming to you

The benefits will never be doubted

I have paved the way for it to work

But it will only work

If you want it to as much as I do




Fan Fics


Light Emission

Jonathan woke up to the sweet aroma of the red tulip tea brewing in the kitchen. He opened his still-weary eyes, rubbing his face, and moaning at the start of a new day. Grunting slowly, he shifted position, and attempted to stand up, failing twice before getting up and nearly tripping over the wire to his alarm clock. After combing his messy hair, he went to go open his door. Jonathan felt a warm, wet feeling when turning the rusting knob. Feeling his face, he realized that he was sweating. He tried to argue himself out of it, but he knew exactly why he was sweating. He knew he could not hold off the inevitable much longer.

Jonathan exited his sleeping chamber, and shielded his eyes from the new light contrast. Closing the door behind him, Jonathan spotted Cynce cooking an egg over the stove. The sizzles and pops coming from the oil in the pan caused him to flinch. On most days, Jonathon would scold Cynce for using the stove without his supervision, but on a day like this, punishment would hold no purpose. Cynce, hearing the sound of the door opening, turned to see his father looking at him. Cynce smiled at Jonathan.

“I made you breakfast, Dad”!

Jonathan replied with a simple smile as well. He was pleased with Cynce’s Innocence. Cynce was a happy child ever since Jonathan adopted him, and Jonathan always took care of him. Cynce felt he had a normal life despite rarely being allowed to be around other children. He was home schooled, and only occasionally left the house. Jonathan knew that it was his responsibility to keep Cynce safe. Cynce knew nothing about that the dangers that surrounded him. Nothing of the many people after him. Nothing, about his significance to the peace of both worlds.
 
Okay, well I would suggest that you continue writing your story and make it a bit longer. In the rules, your fan-fics have to be at least 2 pages long when posted. (Two pages according to Microsoft Word).

Also, your fan-fic has a great start, really. But I feel as if I have read it before. This idea has been used many times, maybe you should give it some twists to make it more creative.

I hope you take this as advice, and not as a cruel remark.
-aggs
 
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