Writing Arxman: The Beginning (Viewer Discretion Is Advised)

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Ch. 1: Shriek


The sky was gray and no stars were flashing brightly. All that was there were the moon and the clouds drifting aimlessly. The grass whistled next to the old cabin house. It was made of wood, burnt wood. It could barely keep itself up. The wind hit the old cabin and it shook, and then brought itself back to position.

A man walked into the cabin. He couldn’t have been older than Sixty years old. He had a shotgun in his hand. He put the bullets inside of it before he went inside, though. When he was inside, a cry could be heard. But from the outside, it would sound like a dog.

“Shut up you old mutt! I’ll kill you before you’ll make that call” the man said, and it could be heard perfectly from outside. More cries were heard and then the shotgun was fired. But the cries were still heard. Did he miss or did he kill something else?

He walked out and then a loud shriek blasted, opening the closed, wooden door. A woman who as probably in her late 20’s came out of the cabin. She had bullet marks in her chest and tears were flowing down her face. The man looked backwards and fired again. Still, the woman was unhurt. She shouted again and the man flew backwards and hit the wall, at least giving him a concussion. She walked toward his body and she looked at it, and walked away.

She then turned around with a knife in her hand. “Now you get what you deserve!” the woman said. She threw the knife and it punctured his heart. His eyes opened quickly then closed. The blood squirted out of his body like a full water gun. The woman had disappeared into the night sky.



The next morning, it was broad daylight. “Honey, honey, where are you?” said a voice not too far from the body. The elderly lady went to the garden and she trembled. Her eyes widened and she screamed in fear. Tears came from her wrinkled eyes. She was probably older than him. Maybe the mother, or sister. The neighbors came out of the house. “Call 911! Call 911!” she shouted again. The neighbor ran back inside the house and dialed the number.

No later than 9 minutes did both an Ambulance and a few private investigators appear. It turned out she was the mother, she was 79, her son, 57. She told them everything that she knew. And she didn’t know anything except that her husband was stabbed. She was still crying, hoping things would get better. But from this point, things could only get worse.

It was the day of the funeral. The cousins, aunts, uncles, grandparents, everyone was there to mourn of the tragedy. The only one that was missing was a 23 year old man, who is in a taxi, hoping he’d get there in time. “Drive faster!” the goofy nephew screamed. The taxi was going 83 miles per hour on the street. The taxi driver pulled over and a loud noise was heard. It was a gun fire. The nephew, whose name was Peter ducked behind the taxi. The taxi driver came out of the car and he was so startled! “There is a man with a gun, a gun!” the driver shouted. But before any other words could come out of his mouth, 3 bullets were fired, 2 hitting, one missing and cut through the metal of the car. Peter looked under the car and saw the driver’s body, so lonely and helpless. “Come on! I have to stop everything here don’t I” Peter said in a whiny voice. Peter always had a gun with him, he was a retired cop. He was a cop from the age of 20-22, he stopped after his partner was killed from a Heart Attack. Peter could see the murderer running on the sidewalk. He knew he didn’t have much time. He was running, running! Peter got up and had a better view. He aimed at his torso and fired! The man fell and hit the ground hard. He went to check the driver’s pulse, but sadly, he didn’t make it.

Peter entered through the gates and into the funeral home. “Am I late?” he said, jokingly. “This isn’t a good way to act when your favorite Uncle has just been murdered. “Maybe he deserved it?” Peter said, jokingly, again. “Peter, shut your mouth, if he would have heard this right now he might have stabbed you!” Peter’s aunt said. “Alright, alright, I’ll shut up!” Peter said.

The cops were investigating the scene. Peter was asked a few questions and he seemed to be a hero! The man he had shot was not killed, but would be paralyzed for the rest of his life. “That man deserves to be paralyzed. Killing two people is disgusting” he thought. He felt a tap on his shoulder. There were 3 girls, teenagers, who wanted his autograph. “Here you go” he said as he signed all of the papers.

“Mom, I know this isn’t how you expected your brother’s funeral to be like, but I guess I was just at the right place at the right time. He would have killed many more people if I didn’t stop him! I have to bring justice to the world” Peter said. “You are not a cop anymore. Get your life together, it is falling apart” his mom said.

Peter walked away and more people tried to get his autograph, but he refused. He got into a taxi and was driven to his house in DC. He lied down on his couch and turned on the TV. “The man who saved the rest of the town. Peter Wensler story at 9” the reporter said. “Well, I’m a big here and I am awesome. Soon, I will be a celebrity. People will ask me to be in their shows, give me money, I’ll become richer than my Uncle!” Peter said to himself.

The phone rang, it was his mother. “Yes mom?” Peter asked. “We just looked at your Uncle’s will. He gave you everything! The whole Wensler Enterprise!” his mom screamed in the phone. Peter was shocked, he could barely breathe! “Me in front of Wensler Enterprise. I would never imagine” Peter thought, while he got yogurt out of the fridge and daydreamed him, the new heir of the Wensler Enterprise.


(Tell me what you think about it, it isn't pokemon and I put a lot of effort into it so please comment)
 
Ch. 2 will be up soon. Until then, please reply. And again, Viewer Discretion Is Advised. Pretty much, this would be 12-13+...whatever. Ch. 1 isn't that horrible, but things will get bloody later on.
 
Ch. 2 is here! I'll post it on this post, instead of on the first post.




Ch. 2: Beyond Legendary

Peter got up out of bed and took a shower, but to his surprise, the water was running.

"Is anyone there?" said Peter's somewhat scared voice. Then the water stopped running and then there was a loud noise in the living room.

”I told you not to break anything" whispered a man. "How should I know he has a vase right here?" the other man whispered.

Peter came in, and saw the two men on the ground crawling. "May I help you?" Peter asked, as he was about to take a pocket knife from his pocket.

"Hey, hey, whoa, were not here to hurt you" the first man said. "Then why are you here?" Peter asked. "We need you to see our boss. I've bet you've heard of her before" the second man said. "How the heck could he have ever heard of her, you don’t even know who she is exactly!" the first man shouted.

Peter took out his knife. "Why should I trust you? How would I know that you're not lying to my face right now?" Peter said as he drew the knife closer and closer to them.

Then a loud noise was heard from outside like a Helicopter. "Dang It! Boss is here, we have to go or else she will kill us since we didn't get you to come" said both of them in unison, and ran out the back door.

Then a loud shriek was heard and the two men flew right through the wall and hit the ground hard. "Too late" the first man said and then he fell unconscious.

A woman stepped through the back door. She had curly hair, but somewhat long. Her eyes were Green and Blue, a mixture. She was wearing a red dress, looking quite hot in Peter's point of view.

"Hello there" Peter said. The woman looked at him and said nothing. She inspected the house, turned around and saw Peter right in her face. "Excuse me, we will need you to come with us please" she said. "Um, what will you do to me?" His face was full of confusion.

She then took out this watch from her pocket. He looked at it and then mist appeared in the house.

"What's going on?" Peter wondered. Then the mist disappeared and they were in a whole other place.

"What the-" Peter was then slapped by the woman that was in his house before. "What the heck did I do already?" Peter said. The woman looked at him with her big eyes, so confused of the world around her.

"Are you looking for a job? I can hire you? Money, you want money?" Peter just kept saying random things. "Oh shut the-" Gun shots were heard and the woman stopped talking. A man, short and stocky came in with a gun in his hand. "Don't move!" he shouted.

Peter took the knife from his pocket and threw it at the man. It cut through his throat and them man fell to the ground and blood was all over him. "Well, seems like the bad die old since that guy was at least in his 70's!" Peter said.

"Come with me" said the woman. Then Peter realized something that changed his whole attitude about this. "Excuse me, but what the heck is going on here? Tell me now!" Peter demanded.

"Calm down sir, it'll be over before you know it!" Then the mist filled up the room again and they appeared in a forest. "This forest is my home" the woman said.

"Beyond Forest, I came here when I was a little boy. This whole thing is becoming Beyond Legendary"
 
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Ch. 3: The Dark Knight



The city burned to cinders. Only a small amount of people survived and ran to the nearest police station.

"May I help you?" the police man asked, as if he didn't see the fire that lit the whole sky.

"Don't you see what's going on? Look over there! The whole city is falling apart because of some weird creatures!" the woman shouted.

"I don't see anything" the police man said. Then his face started to glitch up.

"You're one of them, aren't you?" a boy about 11 years old said.

"You're smart, aren't you?" he replied. Then the police man's arm became metallic and stretched out to grab the boy by his throat. "You'll be my first victim, alright?"

"Like they have a choice" a voice said from behind. A man in dark appeared. He had his sword on his back, 2 guns on his side.

"What do we have here? A hero is that what I see?" the police man said. He squeezed the boy's throat, but then before he killed him, there was a tap on his shoulder. "Yes?" he said.

"Let go of the boy!" a woman voice shouted. The metallic man flew backwards and his face went crazy again. "I warned you" she said as she cracked her knuckles.

He lay on the ground unconscious. "You know, the whole gang is coming" said a hologram that popped up from the metallic man's back.

"Tell them to screw themselves" she replied. She attached a bomb onto the man and got everyone out of the station. The city still burned, but what could they do?

"Ready, Peter?" she asked.

"Ready" he replied.

The whole building fell into dark flames and the metallic man's body flew out the window, and landed next to the boy. "I'll get you, you little squirt" the man said. The woman walked over and stepped on his face, killing him.

"What a mess that guy is. So, when will you tell me your name?" Peter asked.

"It's Shriek. Got it? Get it? Good" she said. Footsteps were heard from somewhere. They were tapping their way. It was a man, cloaked in black, like Peter.

"You're stealing my style?" Peter asked as he approached the man. The man took out a sword and slashed Peter in the chest. Peter fell to the ground and a puddle of blood appeared around him.

Then the man's cloak came off. There were metallic tentacles on his back. He grabbed Shriek and threw her into the burning city which had to be at least a mile away. His metallic tentacles had to be really strong to do that!

Shriek fell to the ground and her body was shrouded in fire. "Peter, kill him" she mumbled as she fell unconscious.

Peter got up and looked around. He looked at his chest and there was a huge slash on it, he remembered that darkness cloaked man.

"Where are you?" Peter said as he got up. The man was right behind him. He was holding his sword. "Ughh, die!" Peter shouted. He took out his gun and shot the sword. It flew right out of his hands. The man turned around in shock.

Peter pulled the trigger again and got a shot right through his head. Sparks flew out of his head. "A robot" Peter thought. He looked around the area again. There were no people, except there was the body of the boy.

"The boy, why the boy?" Peter thought. His anger crept under his skin. Peter pressed a button on his jacket. A jet pack appeared and he shot into the sky. He flew over the burning city. It was a total barren wasteland.

Then a loud noise covered the sky. It was Shriek. He swooped down and saved her.

'Did you have a fun time?" Peter joked.

She didn't seem to have such a good expression. "Let's go back, it'll be safe" she said.



(Please comment, I have 3 chapters up, I will keep making new chapters even if you dont reply. But I really want to know what you guys think!)
 
The metal door slid until there was an opening. Two large creatures stepped through the opening. One was thin wearing a robe. His face was the only part you could see of him. The other one was a big green beast. He had a gun in his hand. It said Laser Fuel Productions on the side of it.

“Do you have the stuff?” the thin creature asked. “Yes sir,” the green creature replied. “Good” he said as he opened a suitcase. It had a thin gun with funny symbols on it.

“We have you surrounded” said a voice from outside the building. Gun shots hit the metal wall of the building.

“Kill them all” the thin man said as he disappeared. The creature fired his gun at all the metallic human-like figures. They all blew up one by one from just one big creature.

“Fire!” said the voice from outside again. A huge fireball was sent at the building. The building blew up, everything inside it died. The creatures body lay there burned to cinders.

The metallic man came into the building. He shot the body a few times to make sure it was dead. He picked up the gun he was holding. “Laser Fuel Productions” he thought as he stepped out of the building.



“Are you alright, Shriek?” Peter asked. She lay there and her whole body was full of burns. “Is, is the boy alive?” she asked. She was stuttering and she was afraid. “No, he didn’t make it” Peter replied.

She then fell unconscious. Peter tucked her into her bed and went home. He could only imagine what pain she must be going through.

As Peter lay in bed, he heard knocks on his door. He opened the door and there was a cop with a gun in his hand. Then he saw his mom in the police man’s car. “I remember you” Peter said. He took out his sword and slashed the man. Blood spurred out of him and Peter opened the door to his mom. But it was just another hologram.

He got his jetpack and flew all the way back to Shriek. But to his surprise, she was not there. He turned around and headed out when he saw a thin creature heading toward their base. He took out the sniper in their base and headed to the roof. The creature knocked on the door and Peter pulled the trigger. The bullet ripped through his head and he fell to the ground.

Peter got the body out of the front door and cremated it. “Well, that guy had to be trouble. I just feel like I’m killing people senselessly” Peter thought. He saw that Shriek appeared. “Where were you?” Peter asked. The thin man appeared in the front door again with a gun. Peter moved out of the way and the bullet was fired right into Shriek’s head. She fell to the ground and peter checked her pulse, nothing. She was dead!

“What did you do?!” Peter shouted. Peter just wanted to kill that guy once and for all. The creature aimed the gun at Peter and fired. It hit Peter in the chest and he fell to the ground. The room was silent and the creature disappeared.


There is the next chapter. Please, please comment...
 
What do you mean? Can you give me some advice? You look like the good fanfic kind of guy. So tell me, what can I improve on it?
 
I am going to put up the first hidden chapter pretty soon. It takes place between Ch. 2-Ch. 3. There will be at least 3 Hidden Chapters. All the hidden chapters will be called Hidden Ch. 1: Beyond Legendary (Continuation), Hidden Ch. 2: Beyond Legendary (Continuation), Hidden Ch. 3: Beyond Legendary (Continuation), and so on. It should be up in a few minutes. I'll update this post later.
 
What do you mean form of writing? Could you suggest something different?

Anyways, when you read Ch. 2 and then went to Ch. 3, did you feel like you skipped over a blur of information? Well, that was on purpose to get you thinking what actually happened between that time. Well, that is what the Hidden Chapters are all about. They'll fill in everything, and well, lots of things will be answered, lots of questions, and the true beginning of Arxman. I think after the Hidden Chapters are over, I'll continue the normal Chapters and then it will end Arxman: The Beginning. This is only how he becomes Arxman. His main adventures will be a new fanfic on a different thread.
 
Give your mind a rest. I don't care how fast you read it, I just want to know that at least one person actually read it. My friends have read it, but they are not pokebeach members so they obviously cant post.
 
Here is the next chapter! Remember, this is a Hidden Chapter!

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Hidden Ch. 1: Beyond Legendary (Continuation)


The whole forest was full of green. Bugs and animals were everywhere. “So, why are we here?” Peter asked. Shriek looks at him. “We are here to find the missing amulet, the one that will unlock all the secrets beyond what you can imagine” Shriek replied.

Peter was confused. He still didn’t know who she was and what she wanted. He just wanted to go back home. “Why are you bringing me with you?” Peter asked. He attacked her with a few other unimportant questions but she completely ignored him.

Shriek took out a sword and put it on his mouth. “Shh” she said quietly. A huge green monster came out of the ground and punched Shriek into a tree. “What the heck is going on here?” Peter thought. The monster came charging at him. He ducked down but that wasn’t needed. A huge light aura covered his body and the beast crashed into a tree, knocked out.

“Please tell me what is going on here!?” Peter demanded. She was on the ground, unconscious. “Are you alright?” he said as he walked over to her body. He put his hand on her neck to check her pulse. His hand then lit up with aura and her eyes opened. “You, you saved me?” she said confused. “Yes, I don’t know how though! I just don’t understand what is going on! Why did you bring me here? What use do I have?” Peter began to attack her with more questions.

Her face became worried. Peter still asked questions. She still didn’t answer. Then she cut him off and screamed as loud as she could, “Because I am your daughter!” The whole forest turned silent. Peter didn’t understand. “I am your daughter from the future. I have to lead you to the future you must become. But people are here to stop you. People who don’t trust us heroes, they are trying to ruin the future. In the future, your name is Arxman, a superhero. You saved our wonderful world from the great dangers that it has. You are the most majestic but most determined person ever. Mom demanded me to find you and I have. I am not giving up this easily!” she shouted again.

Peter was speechless. He didn’t have anything to say. “What’s your name?” Peter asked. “It is Maya, but call me Shriek. If you call me Maya I will hurt you. Shriek is my codename. If anybody finds out that Maya is in the past, I might get killed unexpectedly” she said. Peter sat on the cold ground. All his thoughts were jumbled up inside. He was terrified. He didn’t know what kind of crazy things he was getting himself into. He then stood up with a confident look, but inside he really wasn’t ready for what she would do to him now. “We have to train you! You must become the one who you are in the future!” she shouted. Peter stepped back. She shouted at him without any real reason. “I saved you! What gives you the right to push me around?! And I’m your dad!” he shouted. “Not yet” she replied back.
 
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