Writing Cynthia's Childhood (Part 1)

MightyMightyena

MightyMightyena

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Credit to Juliacoolo for inspiration.

Chapter 1
Cynthia leafed through the pages of the book she had found in the attic. It was titled "Sinnoh Mythology" and was extremely interesting, even though she had to refer to the dictionary for a few words. A few faded ink drawings of legendary Pokemon still covered whole pages.

Cynthia was only ten years old, but she knew a lot. She spent countless hours poring over old books and journals. Cynthia glanced at the clock and gasped. "I'm late!" Hastily she put the book back into the box and rushed down the stairs and out the door. Mounting her bike, she sped off down the old, rugged Celestic Town road to the Museum, where Professor Rowan was giving away starters. She pondered which one to pick. Chimchar was nice, but it could be a handful. Piplup never gave up but had a lot of pride. And Turtwig was very sturdy, but also very slow.

She jumped off her bike in front of the Museum and dashed inside. She was too late, the sign on Professor Rowan's booth said NO MORE STARTERS.

Cynthia was very upset, but she held back her tears and walked outside to her bike. on the ride home, however, she swerved to avoid a Gible... (TO BE CONTINUED.)
 
ok ummm good story, but thats ALL of chapter 1? And you said you were an awesome writer...ummm well its good for what it is but you need to ADD MORE
 
Yay. You did it. Like seth said, it's more of a prolouge than a chapter. It has great potential, keep up the good work!
 
When I started on the first paragraph, I knew my reply was heading positive, after finishing the story, I could give you a standing ovation. Seth and Julia, what mighty is doing is that he is giving quality not quantity, readers would find this interesting and will "hey dude, give me more or I swear I'll shoot you on the limbs without anesthesia". This guarantees readers would be ready to "I shoot you twice" in order to lay their hands on the second precious masterpiece, which would be the sequel. Thus, I congratulate you by using this evil tech to inject murderous feelings into innocent nerds.
 
Right. Yeah it's too short :p but what you've done is good.

I'd advise making this the prologue and having chapter 1 more than 3 times longer. Yes, quality>quantity SOMEtimes, but in writing you need a healthy mix of both.
 
well....mine is gonna have 10+ chapters or so.. possibly about 20. And none of them are going to be less than 2,000 words xD. Mightyena's is 209 with some grammar and spelling mistakes..
 
Your username kinda freaks me out^^

He's punctuation slacks. But I like the plot^^
 
One thing, i don't think you should have an extra thread for each chapter because theres a good chance of all of them being locked..

And if you can't write the rest of the chapter on one night, leave it and finish it the next day! xD then you should be able to have longer chapters. But from what i read, it was a good second chapter.
 
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