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Incinermyn

The Crusade of Dark Nostalgia
Biohazard
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Rating: PG-13 for some language, moderate violence, occasional adult humor and insinuation, implied death, and dark themes throughout
Disclaimer: This fiction is the work of a fan author and is in no means meant to infringe on the copyrights of Nintendo, Game Freak, or Pokémon. As a work of fiction, this story is written under the premise of fair use, is not for monetary gain, and is meant for the entertainment of fellow Pokémon fans in the public domain. However, plagiarism of this work elsewhere online where I (the original author) have not posted it myself won’t be tolerated, and shall be dealt with swiftly and severely.
Genres: Dark Fantasy, Science Fiction, and Horror
Bases: Pokémon Mystery Dungeon-Blue Rescue Team, Explorers of Time, and Explorers of Sky; Original Characters; and the History Channel docudrama “Life After People”

Chapter List (WordCountTool.com Approximate/Apparent Pages on MS Word)
p. Relic (1,346 words)
1. Archangel (5,268 words)
2. Deliverance? (3,394 words)
3. Temptation's Woes (4,282 words)
4. Tribunal (preview version)
5. Soothsayer (tentative title)
6. Signs of Infection (tentative title)
7. Voyage of Dreams (tentative title)
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Prologue: Relic

The question is, as it always has been, what does it take to survive? During the time of Man, it was easy enough for one to merely feast off the scraps of humanity or, furthermore, take refuge within the confines of a Poké Ball. But in the world after people, will primal savagery take hold once again? …And what about those never born into the wild? Those unholy few for whom God was no Creator…
~Speculations of Otulp, the Judge-Sovereign

Doxisite slunk silently through the air ducts, contracting his long snakelike body just slightly with each movement. Years of rust scraped harshly against the leech’s skin but did little to hinder him as he focused below. To his eyes, the thermal signatures of two Pokémon ambling through the lower corridor stuck out plain as day.

Directly beneath him, the first creature he recognized as a hearty dragon. He gauged that the bluish-white reptile stood upright at an approximate height of two meters with his muscular wings spread out to only three, though he knew the hallway was much wider. Unlike the Fire Pokémon he’d consumed long ago, this creature looked unusually bottom-heavy. Even so, the beast would make a more fitting meal than his partner.

Utterly the contrast of the dragon, the meter-and-a-half-tall hominid up ahead appeared horribly weak. This entity’s abnormally stout body, including his foreshortened arms and stocky legs, was clearly deprived of proper blood flow because of its unhealthy magenta hue. How he could even be alive defied all reasoning! Only his oversized star-shaped cranium seemed remotely appetizing due to the vivid yellowish hue it exuded.

Acidic froth seeped through the numerous daggers in the predator’s maw as he hungered. They’d been on the island for days, no doubt to plunder the derelict city of whatever artifacts they found. If only they knew just what relics awaited them here…

Several moments passed before the twosome unexpectedly stopped. Perturbed, the leech retracted his body into a thick conical shape, leaving only his stumpy head out to watch. Momentarily angered, the notched spines in his back ejected and pierced the metal overhead.

The humanoid suddenly gazed upward, its squinty eye sockets flaring white. Burning waves of energy successively spread throughout Doxisite’s cells. The pain ended quickly enough but he had to fight all instinct not to scream. Agonizingly, the parasite squirmed his way forward while his targets quibbled amongst themselves. Once he came upon an open vent, the monster screeched into it at as high of frequency he could muster.

His physiology constituted itself to neutralize psychokinesis, but he didn’t know of anything else that would hurt him the way that attack just did. Until now, he’d been certain they were nothing more than the same types of Pokémon he consumed in eras past. Natural selection by itself could never produce something to counter his species no matter how long he and his kin had been dormant. But then, how in the hell did this atrocity occur?

Looming over the outlet, Doxisite waited for his prey. Within seconds, they passed underneath him. Froth formed around his maw again, and more rabidly this time once the dragon went past; the venom even dripped onto the floor because it was so thick.

“Yuck! What the…?” a deep voice grumbled as a faint pair of russet eyes suddenly glared directly at him.

Fearfully the leech retracted his head from the hole. Of all things, this group possessed a third member. Obviously the creature wasn’t organic-based, otherwise Doxisite would have seen him beforehand. As such, this situation just became far more complicated…

“Tyranitar!” the beast’s allies called. The building quaked as the behemoth lumbered after his comrades. Once the tremors stopped, Doxisite exhaled a sigh of relief that the structure didn’t collapse altogether, then stretched his neck through the vent, and continued down the hall after them.

Honing in, the leech noticed something intriguing. His targets had taken up a new formation exactly where he knew the passage diverged. The humanoid stood dominantly at the center of the corridor, while the dragon positioned himself off to the right with the Tyranitar presumably off to the left.

‘Mother…’ Doxisite thought to himself, knowing they were no doubt awestruck by the festering ooze that had long since settled in the fork ahead.

“Gross… What is that stuff?” Tyranitar asked disgustedly.

“A microbial colony,” the hominid commented, his voice mellow, “It should be easily dispatched with Psychic.”

Mixture of dread and pleasure overtook Doxisite as he heard those last words. Lunging boldly, the leech bit hard into what he presumed was Tyranitar’s abdomen. Managing to just break the creature’s skin, he injected his neurotoxins and quickly withdrew his teeth from the Pokémon’s rock-hard hide. But upon doing so, his victim bellowed out in horrific pain.

“What happened?” the others shouted, whipping their bodies around.

The dragon immediately spotted Doxisite, but before he could even react, the leech clamped onto the reptile’s throat and forcefully yanked him back down the corridor. During the haul, Doxisite shot narrow tubes into the beast’s jugular vein and headed straight for his heart. Once inside the organ, he breached its chamber walls and began draining his victim’s blood with tornado-like suction.

“Charizard!” the humanoid yelled.

It took mere seconds for the parasite to bring his meal back to the vent. When they arrived, Doxisite set the beast down and then dropped the rest of his body through the opening. Finally he constricted himself tightly around the creature’s neck, left arm, chest, and abdomen.

“Get…off!” Charizard choked, shaking wildly to get loose. With his free hand, the dragon clawed Doxisite’s head simply to have his talons slip right off. Adrenaline released into his bloodstream as a result, and likewise the leech finished draining the remaining bodily fluids in one powerful suck.

Bloated from his feast, the leech relaxed his bind and laid himself out on the floor around his prey’s corpse. Now he felt sated enough to rest. The last biochemical fusion inebriated him in a way that he hadn’t felt in generations…it was nothing less than his liquor!

Suddenly the burning sensation overwhelmed his cells again, making Doxisite cry out horrifically. However, this time it controlled his form wholly. Then he found himself forced back into his conical form and flying through the air back towards the hallway’s fork.

“Just who the hell do you think you are?” the Tyranitar managed to bark while gasping for air.

“Conserve your strength, Tyranitar. We don’t know why he attacked yet,” his leader ordered.

“Pretty obvious, I’d say, Alakazam!”

While being pulled towards the remaining twosome, Doxisite sensed something awry about his captor. There couldn’t be any mistaking the genetic frequency this Pokémon possessed; though the enhanced traits had become hybrid with his ancestors’ bloodline, they were still very much detectable. Surely that was the reason why his telekinesis harmed him…

“Alright!” Alakazam finally demanded, “Who are you, and why did you kill Charizard?” In virtual response, a shrill voice angrily wailed all throughout the building.

Something immediately grappled firmly onto Tyranitar’s lagging tail. The entity then towed the craggy beast forcefully away down the left-branching hall before he could even scream.

“Tyranitar!” Alakazam shouted, cocking his head slightly and unwittingly releasing Doxisite.

Flopping on the floor, the leech snapped at his enemy’s chest, just scraping it with two fangs. Instantly paralyzed by his poison, the Psychic Pokémon could do nothing but stare as the monster rose like a cobra to meet him eye to blood-red eye.

“I never thought I’d see the day when your kind would return…” Doxisite clicked as he eyed over each of the Pokémon’s shoulders, “Mother is going to want a long word with you, my friend.” On that note, the parasite turned back down the corridor and slunk away, knowing well what awaited this poor soul.

<End Prologue>
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

I enjoyed this prologue! The first paragraph (after the quote) was written very well – it painted a vivid picture in my head and drudged forth my morbid fascination for grotesque creatures. Yay! :3

-Ahem- I apologize, I like dark literature. I have an aversion to critiquing or providing any reviews because I don't want to risk sounding harsh. Nevertheless, I liked your story so much...I wanted to review it. If that's okay :3

Most of these suggestions are grammar preferences; your sentences are written well, so these are just my thoughts. I also love to point out specific things that made me giddy, impressed, or infatuated (I'm weird, I know). Without further ado...

I love the quote in the beginning – it delivers an excellent introduction to the story by ushering in the dark, macabre atmosphere. Although, I noticed a tiny structural discrepancy:

...Those unsacred few for whom God was no Creator…~Speculations of Otulp, the Judge-Sovereign

The original speaker (in this case, speculator) of a quote should have its own line and aligned to the right. This is mainly for aesthetic purposes – you don't have to change it if you don't want to.

...the bluish-white reptile stood upright at a height of 1.7 meters

It may be a bit too specific to dictate a decimal point, though this is purely personal preference. A suggestion might be to use the term 'roughly two meters'. It still reads nicely, so alteration isn't necessary.

Utterly the beast’s contrast, the meter-and-a-half-tall hominid several feet ahead of him looked unbelievably weak.

The sentence structure is a bit odd. It may be the word choice and I'm simply not used to it.

Examples

In contrast, the meter-and-a-half tall hominid several feet ahead of him looked unbelievably weak.

or

In utter contrast, the meter-and-a-half tall hominid several feet ahead of him looked unbelievably weak.

or

Utterly, the beast's counterpart - a meter-and-a-half tall hominid, was several feet ahead of him and looked unbelievably weak.

Again, these are just speculative suggestions. It may have been the word 'contrast' – since it can be used in a multitude of ways, it read itself as another definition than what I'm used to observing.

derelict city

Coolest. Adjective. Ever. :3

Perturbed, the leech retracted his body into a thick conical form, with only his stump of a head remaining out and watch.

'Perturbed' should have a comma after it; the second comma in that sentence is considered an extra. It might also sound better to use 'to watch' or 'and watched'.

Agonizingly, the parasite squirmed his way forward...

The beginning word should have a comma after it. 'Agonized' might be a better word to use in that sentence, because it is an adjective and describes Doxisite's emotions; adverbs like 'Agonizingly' don't work as nicely when used before an object. If you wanted to keep the adverb, you could revise the sentence to say:

Agonizingly squirming forward, the parasite made its way through the narrow passage while his prey quibbled amongst themselves.

...Or something. XD

The next section is very intriguing. I was impressed by how even a parasite has family, and will protect it when in crisis. It enlightens us on the phenomenon of instinct – no matter what you are, you cherish those close to your heart (or other equivalent fibrous organs) just like any other creature. In that instant, I felt sympathy for Doxisite.

I felt shivers when you described the next phase. I love anatomy, so when someone describes it with intricate detail, I can't help but get excited. Nicely done!

Then the craggy beast was pulled forcibly down...

It might be better to switch the 'Then' for 'Suddenly' (with a comma) to better describe an abrupt action but either way it still reads well. It may also sound better to switch 'pulled' and 'forcibly', to have the adjective-verb order.

I love how you ended the prologue – ominous and foreboding, this definitely gets the reader yearning to discover more. I really like this story. I can't wait to read more :3
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

As I said via PM, I love how you critique and think you should do more than just ones for my story, but it's up to you if you want to or not. In any case, I'm also happy someone other than Zy (in the previous thread) showed interest in this. But then PMD and anthro Pokemon fics don't really appeal to a lot of people, though I don't think it's because of the association with furry fandom as opposed to them just puttering out due to the ideas usually being really dry (but then, this is about the only fanfic I do like this, and it really uses more ferals/creature characters than half-human anthro characters).

Anyways, I intend to get the next chapter up soon and make the revisions you suggested the next chance I get.

Thanks again, UU!
~Apollo
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

For those few of you out there who were probably starting to doubt I was writing again...

*Revivial Update: Chapter One completed!*


Chapter One: Archangel

‘Three years…’ Seraph whispered as she sat alone, high in an oak tree. Silently she watched as the vernal moon rose over the timberlands west of Pokémon Square, its light revitalizing the lush colors daytime had otherwise denied her.

At seventeen-years-old, the Skunanne fancied the silhouette of a human child save only for her slight maw and bushy tail. Silken fur flowed back and forth across her sylphic figure with the gentle breeze while her sapphire eyes glistened. Lines of purest white circumscribed the gems and curved up toward her temples before vanishing underneath the tresses atop her crown. Neatly combed, the locks draped down her back and to her side, partially cloaking the twin cascades of small slanted marks as they continued down to her tail. Her stripes merged into one upon reaching the appendage and slowly fanned out as the streak headed for its tip.

The forest here reminded her fully of the homeland she’d left behind on the southern continent. How difficult it was to believe it had already been so long since that tragic day. ‘Insolent b*tch! Get out of here and never return!’ her father’s voice echoed at the back of her mind. She cringed as sniping pain returned with her horrific memories. Even after all this time the welts of her brutal sendoff seemed fresh as ever, and she knew things would never be like before ever again.

Catching her opal earring as she scratched the side of her head, Seraph realized she could also take some solace in the fact that she’d survived this long. Other tribeswomen might have perished if they hadn’t found civilization outside the Furlong Hollow. But in this day and age, actual boon towns were scarce. Though, admittedly, escaping the hellhole that was Treasure Town had been more than a relief for the skunk and her comrades.

“Good Lord, Kit! Walk on your own two feet for a change!” a gruff voice barked down below.

“Here we go again…” she sighed with soprano softness.

Snatching the bow and quiver resting at her side, she dropped from her perch to a lower branch. Landing with catlike grace, Seraph quietly positioned herself to watch as her teammates readied for another of their nightly squabbles in the grove they’d set-up camp within.

Nearest the tree, one of her partners was a robust three-and-a-half-foot tall canine with a darkish tan pelt. The creature wore an odd plate fused into his brow and over his real eyes, which itself appeared to be adored with a white oval that in turn had an amber iris focused on their other ally in front of him. A trio of red scars coursed his backside, extending from the black ring around his neck straight to his tail. Symbolic of the wolf’s own exile, he had a paw-shaped tattoo burned into the fur on the reverse side of his head and two silver anklets on his hind legs.

The beast slowly circled his other ally, perhaps the scrawniest mammal imaginable. As he did, the skunk drew a blunt arrow from her holder, notched it securely into her bowstring, and prepared to take aim.

With a dingy brown pelt, the two-foot-tall opossum standing several yards from the tree possessed a mostly rounded head with a pair of large trapezoidal ears coming off of them, the right one having a portion bitten off its top. The lower of his narrow jaws looked half-hinged as if the bone had been broken, and he had several incisors missing. His arms and legs appeared as nothing more than bony tubes with stumpy three-toed paws from which large pointed claws grew out. Due to severe malnourishment, the skin around his abdomen seemed tight to the point where his ribcage and pelvis stuck out. Lastly, the poor critter’s tail was apparently just a rope of vertebrae.

The Oposease glanced briefly at the skunk with the tiny dots he had for irises. Pulling her weapon taut, she shot the projectile at the side of the Caniclops’s mask so that it ricocheted off right as he lunged towards Kit.

“Serves you right, Cairo!” Seraph snickered as the mutt yelped, plopping onto his paws a few inches from his target.

“Damn it, girl!” Cairo woofed at her, “You know I’m tired of hauling him all over the place!”

“Tough! You’re older, stronger, and faster. His weight’s nothing for you to handle, so stop whining.”

It was the same thing almost every night. Cairo and Kit would wake up, start bickering about some random thing, and inevitably lead into this argument over one having to carry the other around all the time. If not for the fact they’d more than proven themselves during their flight from the southern continent, she’d have left them weeks ago.

“You carry him around on your back all the time and see how easy it is!” the wolf growled. Seraph flipped her hair over her right shoulder as she reached for a sharpened arrow this time.

When she readied her weapon again, Kit squealed a moment before whining, “Seraph, wait! He’s just kidding!”

“Ha! I’d love to see her try, Kit!” Cairo laughed, rearing his head. Afterwards the beast focused his eyeball back on her and formed a shadowy sphere with his psychokinesis. Likewise, she took deadly aim at his now-contorting iris.

Fearing that neither would call the other’s bluff, Kit inhaled deeply and let out a terrifying wail to momentarily stun his friends. Then the critter began to bawl while Cairo’s attack faded into nothingness and Seraph relaxed the grip on her bowstring.

‘Even with all the crap he gets, Kit still doesn’t want me hurting Cairo… What goes through his mind, I’ll never know…’ she reminded herself for the umpteenth time.

“One day you won’t be so lucky, Cairo. I swear, someday soon this arrow is going through your head. In the meantime, though…” Unstringing her bow and shuffling it into her quiver along with the arrow, the skunk slung the case around her backside. Then she jumped down to convene with her comrades.

Hardly a group of ragamuffins, Team Feral Fang first met up as recruits at the infamous Wigglytuff Guild. Shortly after her exile, Seraph became an apprentice explorer for the association stationed in Treasure Town under the mentorship of Cairo, and soon became completely assigned to his Gold Rank team after some circumstances involving its former members played well in her favor. A few months ago, Kit joined their group during a reconnaissance mission that developed into a full-blown rescue. Despite being elites, though, they quickly became disgraced when a conspiracy within the organization itself made them into fugitives.

“I just don’t want you two screwing up this heist tonight,” she said, shifting her hair around to her back again.

“So what’s the plan then?” Kit asked.

Seraph huffed and commented, “Well, this sure as hell isn’t Treasure Town. It won’t surprise me if we don’t find anything worthwhile here besides food.”

“Ha! And your first clue was what?” Cairo scoffed, lying down in front her.

‘Right, and you’re an expert on a place where you haven’t even been to since you were a pup?’ she sneered.

Admittedly though, his insight paid off a little earlier today when she scouted out the town. Granted his information was pretty dated; some of the Pokémon he remembered being there were either absent from the village now or just long-since dead. Even so, the general layout and locations of things remained exactly as he described them from memory, give or take a few changes to the townscape in the twenty-something years he’d been gone. At least she picked up a map to help her better explain things she learned to them.

Pivoting around, Seraph saw a mismatched pair of satchels placed neatly against the tree trunk. To the right sat a dainty green sack, nothing more than a set of overlapping leaves and silk thread sewn taut to keep them together, atop her leather-bound Beyi Buckler. The larger bag off to its left was a standard-issue brown duffle bag they’d received upon certification from the Exploration Corp, complete with numerous pockets and the organization’s insignia of a sphere flanked by tiny wings stitched into its main flap.

The skunk grabbed her pouch and opened it posthaste. Inside it she had her Luna Fang (a stone dagger chiseled so it formed an arc similar to the crescent moon), a whip, and a folded-up piece of paper. Seraph shuffled her equipment aside so she could reach for the parchment.

“While you were both sleeping, I staked out a couple sites we should hit this evening. Luckily I swiped this from a shopkeeper when she wasn’t paying attention,” she then commented as she opened it up and laid it out flat on the ground.

“A Kangaskhan, per chance?” Cairo asked as she simultaneously nodded, “Ha! I’m surprised the old hag’s still alive!” Pity he didn’t know a younger one now ran the shop while her elderly mother supervised her, from what Seraph surmised anyhow.

Crudely illustrated at best, the map she’d obtained depicted the layout of a village established upon an eastward facing cliff. Overall, the settlement appeared to be divided into four main sections defined by its main roadways that crossed through the heart of town. In the northwest, southwest, and northeast quadrants, she already had several locations circled with charcoal markings.

Pointing to the upper left part first, Seraph commented, “Don’t be surprised if you don’t find much here. Knowing those godforsaken Kecleon Brothers, or rather their cousins in this case, they’ve got food and other basic stocks on-hand like we need but no real cash since they presumably put their profits into a savings account nightly. Remember to be careful anyways due to them normally being light sleepers.”

The other two nodded but Kit immediately asked, “What do we do if we wake them, though?”

“Gouge their throats, of course! Their deaths would be sweet revenge for all the crap their lot put us through in the past,” Cairo cackled.

“What?” the opossum whined.

Seraph tilted her head back for a moment and closed her eyes. He did raise a good point this time around. Their relatives back home swindled them all the time whenever they tried to make substantial purchases and often shortchanged them for items that they sold to them reciprocally. But creating a stir like that in this rural of an area would undoubtedly bring unwanted attention, even at night when everyone presumably slept.

“No!” she shook her head.

“No, my…” Cairo started.

“Enough!” she interrupted, “If you go and kill someone here, and it’ll draw people in like moths to a flame. Damn it, Cairo, small towns are harder to get away with crimes in than larger ones.”

“You never lived here before, so you don’t know what this town’s like. These Pokémon are idiots who love keeping to themselves. They’ll never find out something happened until well after we’re done and gone!”

“This from a mutt who hasn’t been here in years? Fact of the matter remains that we can’t risk anything at this point, Cairo, just because you want to off someone for what his or her relatives did to us. We need supplies, and I want to be as stealthy as possible in these heists!”

Cairo squinted and grumbled, “So be it… But if you must know, I have issues with people here, and I doubt some of them would be happy to see me after all this time. My clan especially since we have longer-than-average life spans.” Blood feuds were something her kind knew about all too well, but even she found it hard to swallow that his banishment would be remembered after this long, considering how he was in his late thirties.

“Whatever. Just don’t get stupid,” she told him, turning back to the map.

Pointing at a next spot underneath the previous one, she continued, “These buildings interested me because they were part of a storage facility similar to what we used back home. Coincidentally it’s owned by the Kangaskhan you just mentioned, Cairo.”

“Yeah, the old lady’s really not as tough as she looks. A little bit of sweet-talking will pretty much get you anything you need from her, so yours isn’t going to be as hard of task as you think.”

She shrugged and then concluded, pointing at the last mark she’d made, “This place right here might be a bit tricky. I’ll try to handle it myself, but I’d rather wait for you guys since you’ll have the coin pouch and I’d rather not overload my sack with cash when I need it for larder.”

“Yeah, we’ll be quick then,” Cairo said, “My Hypnosis will put the bank owner out easily.”

“But what if we do find money at the Kecleon Brother’s stand too?” Kit asked.

Seraph and Cairo pawed their faces and yelled, “Then take it! It all spends the same.”

The skunk pivoted around again and picked up the group’s bag. Opening its biggest flap, she took out a smaller purse and threw it to Kit. Then she turned back to her compatriots and fit the larger satchel’s strap over Cairo’s shoulder.

“No witnesses, but I want as clean of getaway as possible,” she commented as she finally returned to the tree trunk to retrieve her own backpack.

Reopening the sack, she stuffed her map inside and brought her Luna Fang out. Afterwards, she slung the thing across her body so it rested under her right arm. Grabbing her shield and positioning it properly on her arm, the skunk started to climb the tree.

“See you at the bank!” she told her allies as she reached an eastward pointing branch. Gazing downward, Kit already saddled himself on Cairo’s back, and both then headed out of sight into the underbrush.

Alone now, the skunk made her way across the limb until she reached its end, where she sprung to a higher one in the next tree. Gracefully she landed and continued her trek through the treetops, soaring from branch to branch with ninja-like speed. While she was fleet footed on the ground, it had always been more efficient for her to travel this way. By doing so, she could spot and eliminate threats before they’d get at her cohorts. Tonight, however, her trip went off without a hitch and she arrived near the outskirts of town in a matter of moments.

Before entering the village proper, the Skunanne stopped briefly in a birch tree to catch her breath while surveying the township that lie ahead. Oddly enough, the atmosphere of the cliff-side community had changed drastically since she left earlier. The dome-shaped huts spread out like they were made for quite a foreboding setting due to so few of them having torches lit at this hour. Also, the air seemed thick with the stench of some diurnal beasts still loitering about. Surely they’d be going to bed soon, but she knew she’d have to be even more vigilant now.

Her ears twitched suddenly to the sound of leaves ruffling a few yards directly behind her. Somebody found her already, and another Dark-type Pokémon too. She could barely skim his thoughts, but knew this creep was definitely after her for something sensual.

“Well, well, well… Look who we have here!” a shrill voice cackled, “You’re up kind of late, aren’t ya, little girl?” Seraph flipped her hair over her shoulder again and cooed warningly.

“Ho-ho! Feisty one, eh? Well…” he continued until he realized she’d also hunched over and raised her tail, “W-wait a second!” A horrible cloud of gluey musk exploded from her buttocks, launching her forward simultaneously. Her victim screamed out in agony a moment but then yawned loudly.

Landing on all fours, Seraph pivoted to watch as the short biped fell backwards into the foliage off to the side of the trail. Flipping her knife so she wielded it backhandedly, she dashed towards the shrubbery ready to finish him off with a subtle slice across the throat.

Nauseated by the sight of whom she’d sprayed, the skunk fought all instinct not to scream out in pure disgust. Of all things, the creature just had to be the same species of imp she despised having run-ins with back home. The gremlin wasn’t much taller than her, but his skin tone looked at least a few shades lighter than her fur. There was a wide red frill across the top of his crown with two dangling ears and a collar that matched. His arms seemed unusually scrawny in comparison to his relatively large hands with sharp grayish claws. Lastly, sticking out of the Weavile’s butt were two reddish feathers she knew to really be part of his tail.

Hiding her knife underarm, Seraph grabbed the cretin’s right hand and dragged him into the underbrush. Once she thought they’d gone far enough away from the main path, the skunk flung the imp strongly into the bushes. After he landed, she quickly dashed back towards the village. Thanks to her attack, he’d be out cold well through tomorrow morning at least, and there wasn’t much point in hiding him better since most people usually didn’t trek from forest paths without good reason.

Upon reaching the outskirts again, the Skunanne stopped dead in her tracks right before the bridge that crossed a stream into town. For a moment she felt a tremendous force pass through her body with a bone-chilling presence. The sensation ended shortly yet she still readied her bow expecting an immediate fight against a Ghost Pokémon. After momentary silence dispatched her trepidation, the girl shook her head denying what just happened and made a sprint towards the village’s southern district.

Darting from hut to hut, Seraph hid herself the best within the shadows she noticed along the western sides of the houses. Her pelt served as perfect camouflage at night. Even if someone stared directly at her, they’d never spot the Skunanne whether her stripes were visible or not.

When she finally arrived at the largest building in the neighborhood, the girl stopped a moment to better examine it than she did earlier. Easily clearing twenty-feet in height, the structure bared a vague resemblance to its Kangaskhan proprietor with thick brown shingles forming callused skin along the sides and back of the shed as well as having a pair of raised upper-level windows that looked like the creature’s eyes. Likewise, the front had lighter colored siding and a slight protrusion over the entrance crudely served as the Pokémon’s mouth. No doubt the reason for the outlandish architecture was to give still-illiterate Pokémon a landmark to identify in town, given they couldn’t read signs like Seraph and most others were able to.

Ears twitching wildly, the skunk drew an arrow and pivoted swiftly around to shoot at an oncoming foe; however, she didn’t see anything nearby again. Were her senses betraying her now of all times, or was someone actually stalking her but hiding just before she could spot him?

“Saul! Oh, Saul!” an elderly female with a drawl called from somewhere on the other side of the building.

Curiosity getting the better of her, Seraph scaled the building with her weapons still out. Once there, she peeked over the top to see the shadows of two Pokémon stretching outward from torchlight a couple houses away. The first she recognized as the storage unit’s owner, while the other appeared to be the silhouette of a large wolf Pokémon.

“Good evening, Katherine! How are you tonight?” the beast replied in a gruff voice that mimicked Cairo’s tone.

“I’m fine, thank you. But I was wondering if you found that girl yet.”

“The Skunanne from this afternoon? Alas, she seems to have vanished into the wind. Her scent trail ends right at the woods.” Seraph chuckled a bit, knowing her acrobatic skills paid off more and more by the day.

“Poor child seemed awful shy. I hope we didn’t scare her or nothing. I tried to make conversation and even left a gift out of her, which she clearly took.”

“Don’t fret over it. She’ll return eventually. Meanwhile, get some rest. Good night!”

“Good night!” Immediately afterward the twosome started to move into sight. Seraph scooted down the side of the shed and flipped her body over slowly so she could brace her back against it.

“I bet you think you’re so smart, little girl?” a feminine voice purred from directly overhead. Large black paws pressed down on both of Seraph’s shoulders and then sent powerful jolts of electricity through her body. After the attacker finished, the creature shoved her off the building and let her fall limply to the ground along with her weapons.

Paralyzed from head to toe, the skunk did nothing but watch as the silhouette of a four-and-a-half-foot tall lioness leapt onto a patch of dirt next to her, glaring at her with disdainful golden eyes. Moving into the moonlight, Seraph saw that the feline had a thick black mane coursing the length of her head, neck, back, shoulders, tail, and part of her forelegs. Similarly, royal blue fur covered a good portion of her face and ears, her abdomen, and most of her hind legs. Lastly, she noted how the creature possessed peculiar gold rings around the back of her front legs as well as similar spots inside her ears and a matching spur on the tip of her tail.

“It’s times like these that I’m proud to be a Luxray! You might’ve gotten my partner with that spray of yours, but unlike him I know how to handle you godforsaken Psychic-types. It’s so easy to confound your senses using Wraith Run,” her captor laughed as she circled around Seraph. Figured that this Pokémon knew the only attack that would turn her into a literal phantom temporary.

Noting two facts just mentioned, Seraph cracked a little smile and commented, “You’re right, you know? You almost did get me with Wraith Run.”

“Almost? What the hell do you mean ‘almost’?” the Luxray sneered, stomped in front of her victim’s face.

“Hmm… Let me put things this way. Skunanne aren’t just Psychic Pokémon but Dark ones too, and Wraith Run is best utilized by Ghost-types.”

The lioness stuck her maw in a little closer, baring her fangs and making sparks appear throughout her mane, and then growled, “What’s your point?”

“Well… You’re none of them!” Seraph remarked, making the opal earrings glow with a violet gleam. Suddenly, her attacker felt a terrible pain spread throughout her body as she was overpowered by the skunk’s Confusion attack. Then Seraph threw her into the side of the nearby hut as hard as she could in order to knockout her foe.

Slowly, Seraph caught her breath and forced herself back on her feet. Her muscles were completely numb and her stance quite wobbly, but even so she grabbed her bow, arrow, and knife before ambling northward to the main road. While she’d be unable to finish her part of the job now, Cairo and Kit hopefully managed to rob the Kecleon Brothers’ stand. That way tonight wouldn’t be a total waste.

Reaching the roadside, though, she took a long moment to scout up-and-down Main Street. There looked to be nobody down either part of the paved road, which she should’ve been expecting. However, something just seemed amiss right now. Even with her opponent out cold, the spiritual trauma from a bit ago felt as if it were still lingering…and stronger than before too!

“Vyi-os… Nef-yi?” a voice faintly whispered nearby. He’s close… But where?

Spooked suddenly, Seraph panned her gaze from left-to-right trying to locate the speaker. Down the eastern part of the roadway, she made out the vague outline of a phantasmal quadruped walking towards her. As he approached, though, his form became somewhat more distinct, that of a giant lupine beast with a semi-prominent brow and an abysmal maw.

“Vek-toma, lyi-shuroc…” the phantom grumbled, stopping right in front of Seraph. Indeed, tat traitor has returned… Opening a single eye, he stared directly at her with a bloodshot fury from his amber iris. Transfixed for a long moment, she inevitably blinked and the creature instantly vanished.

Unsure of what she just saw, Seraph snapped herself out of the daze as her body’s numbness finally wore off. Feeling up to running again, she made a beeline for the west of town.

As she neared the Kecleons’ shop by the end of the road, Seraph saw several blackish-blue fireballs launch and then explode in the immediate vicinity of the shop. Right afterwards, two Pokémon began screaming and yelling incoherently, presumably about what just happened. Just then, she saw Kit waddling onto the roadside and Cairo backing up alongside him.

“Hellfire!” the wolf screamed, surrounding himself with shadowy flame orbs that he instantly shot into the area again. His victims cried out once more before he finished them off with an attack from Psyshock, which brought their makeshift building down completely.

“Cairo… What have you done…?” Kit quibbled.

“Shut up, and let’s go!” Cairo demanded, lying down for a second. The Oposease climbed onto his back and the wolf bolted headlong towards the forest.

“Damn you, Cairo!” Seraph bellowed as she reached the former marketplace. The wooden storefront and dwelling had collapsed in on its tenants, pinning both reptiles under a pile of burning lumber. Likewise, the cinderblock storehouse behind the shop was mostly destroyed with rubble covering the short footpath leading into it.

Suddenly the bone chilling sensation from before passed straight through Seraph’s body again. She immediately turned terrified to watch as the spectral entity reappeared in order to make its way into the woodland after her teammates.

“What the hell is going on?!” Saul’s voice bellowed throughout the village. Right then, torches began to ignite from inside all of the huts one after another.

Without a second thought, Seraph headed into the forest, pursuing her comrades and the specter. Taking to the treetops, she searched the ground level frantically for her allies before the monster could get at them. After several minutes, the skunk spotted them heading for a clearing at the northern fringe of the timberland. Cutting off their escape, Seraph leaped into the meadow just as they were coming out of the underbrush.

“What did you think you were doing with that stunt back there, Cairo?” she demanded loading her bowstring, this time ready to take his life for sure.

“S-Seraph…” Kit cried, dismounting, “They caught us right away and we got into a fight. I just wanted to knock them out, but…” Cairo nipped him just then, and the Oposease appeared to faint instantly.

“I was going to kill some of them eventually, so I figured I might as well do it then and there,” the wolf smirked at her.

“*sshole! You ever think about the consequences? The whole town woke up right after you left! We’re going to have pursuers on trail any moment now!”

“So be it! I’ll still get away with Teleport even if you two don’t!” he cackled but then froze the second he sensed something powerful approaching them. She could feel it too, and recognized it immediately as the monster stalking Cairo and Kit.

“On top of exciting the denizens of Pokémon Square, I had a run-in a bit ago with an old adversary of yours, I take it? From what I can tell, he isn’t some run-of-the-mill Ghost Pokémon, if there’s such a thing.” Cairo stood there with his iris widening to the point were it consumed his whole brow. The terror on the mutt’s face now was simply unbelievable.

“You saw…him…? How could you possibly see…him…? This Ghost Pokémon is unlike anything you’d scarcely imagine…and his presence is completely undetectable, even by the gods! The fact I know of him is only because I broke a pact I made with him years ago, and if he’s still after me, we are all dead!” he whined, the wind blowing briskly with his yelp.

His body suddenly jerked as if he’d just been struck by lightning. In the next instant, Seraph watched in horror as the jaws of the phantasmal beast forcefully pulled an unseen object from within Cairo’s form and began to chew it. Listlessly Cairo seemed to flop onto the ground belly-first, the eyeball on his faceplate clearly devoid of his life force.

“S-Seraph… What’s going on…?” Kit muttered, snapping out of his trance and no doubt feeling the presence hovering over him now. Immediately the monster clamped his immense fangs onto Kit’s body. Then, just like he’d done to Cairo, the demon yanked out the Oposease’s soul and devoured it.

“N-N-NO!” the skunk quibbled as she shot her arrow at the entity’s forehead. However, the projectile passed through his brow unfazed.

“Vek, Meyi-lyi,” he stated bluntly to her as he finished his meal. Farewell, Archangel. A small whirlwind began to form around the quadruped’s legs as he slowly turned away from her.

Before he could leave, she cried out, “Veyi-tok no hema!” Get back here, you jack*ss!

Growling, the monster returned his attentive gaze back at her, opening one of his eyes in clear response. Waves of malice-filled vibes pulsed through Seraph’s body as he now circle towards her.

“Young girl, I have no quarrel with you. I only slay those undeserving of life, or the traitors who turned against me,” he spoke harshly, only using English rather than Quofyi this time to clarify his intentions.

“Bullcrap!” she replied, drawing another arrow. Looming directly over her now, he opened another eye to the previous one and then two more right above them on his brow. This time, his intimidation tactics worked perfectly as the skunk started to whine from the utter terror of fully recognizing whom this creature was.

“I’ve got her scent!” Saul barked in the distance.

Grinningly the demon tilted his head back and then let out a saddening wail. The sheer sound of it seemed to resonate from the depths of Seraph’s mind and made her cringe in absolute pain. The torture of Lamentation had gone down in legend amongst Pokémon worldwide, but so few ever heard its ghastly tone because there were only a handful of creatures who could learn it, and being near one of the most powerful users was bound to be the single worst experience anyone would ever have. It echoed throughout the cosmos and stemmed from the world known to her clan as Beyi Quofyi, and then utterly destroyed one’s consciousness.

“There she is!” Cairo’s father shouted nearby. Finally, Seraph blacked out from exhaustion, just as the demon vanished without a trace.

<End Chapter One>
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

Well, your return to the WC is successful. I like this new team, Feral Fang. The members all have intriguing appearances and the like. The personalities of them also urge me to read on. Good job.

The only edit I have now, since it's late in my neck of the woods, is that one of the voices at the beginning said "Here we ago again...". Change ago to go. And I caught where Saul "bellowed through the village", the sentence he uttered should end in a question mark and some combination of ? or ! after the first ?.

Otherwise, I say it's perfect, but I'll review it more later.

~AoH
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

My main concerns as always are fluidness of plot/events and believe-ability of my characters. PMD's set-up is a little hard for me to do those without feeling like I'm writing a cartoon-like scenario. Any insight helps, though, even if it's for edits I otherwise missed during my own proofreading. So, thanks, AoH! ;)
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

First off, "Furry-PMD Style"? Your tendacy to label yourself as unique/weird is even stranger than what you're into.

Well, let's see what's new with Chapter One's revision. This is going ot be a bit more in detail, so don't worry if I seem picky, because I'm just encouraging you to be conscious of even the itty-bitty details. I'll give my thoughts on the work as a whole after the revisions.

Silken fur flowed back and forth across her sylphlike figure with the gentle breeze, while her sapphire eyes glistened as starlight.
"Sylphic" is better and actually a word. Personally, I'd kill "as startlight" with a lighter; it's cliche.

The forest here reminded he fully of the homeland she’d left behind on the southern continent.
No need to explain here.

“Here we ago again…” she huffed in her soprano-like voice.
Good adjective, but why the lame attachment of "like"? Moreover, the negative connotation of "huff" contrasts easily with the positive description of her leading to this point. Something more like "she sighed in soprano [a better noun than voice, if I say so myself]" clashes much less and has a bonus alliteration.

The beast slowly circled her other ally, perhaps one of the scrawniest mammals imaginable.
Though "her" really points at Seraph, a quick read could lead to confusing attribution to Cairo instead. Try not to use a pronoun to refer to someone/something that's pretty far back in the text.

You used "possessed" twice as far as I've seen right now. You might want to fix it. Also, do you realize "damn" and "crap" is actually no longer censored? =D

Hardly a group of ragamuffins, the members of Team Feral Fang first met up as recruits at the infamous Wigglytuff Guild.
Your vocabulary has yet to cease amazing me.

“Ha! And you’re first clue was what?” Cairo scoffed, lying down before her.
Happens to all of us.

Her moderate-sized shoulder bag was a dainty sack, made from leaves hand-sewn together with silk-thread given to her clan by a group of Leavanny that visited the Furlong Hollow autumnally to trade goods, and sat lightly atop her Beyi Buckler (an oval-shaped wooden shield bound by the leather made from a Pokémon’s hide, which in turn was decorated with her tribe’s ornate symbol of an upside-down triangle with twin arcs traced from its top and bottom so that they formed an ellipse near its center where an brownish circle formed the iris of an illusionary eye).
Woooooahh.... Unlike you to pull off such a convuluted sentence (largely owing its contributions to the parenthetical depictions, but still unusually long). Being long, this is flagged for attention due to one flaw: it's boring. Having a short, boring sentence is one thing, but you can't write a long sentence and get away with it if you don't give it the attention it demands (otherwise, it gets jumped over by the reader). The first five words of the sentence has a dull adjective (moderate-sized) and verb (was) that strips the sentence of any disguise from its purpose: describing the scene. Yes, you're supposed to describe the scene, but you can't do it with the reader consciously knowing it, because reading something that one knows is a description is... well... lacking action. Let's attack this problem at the core. Here's the main clause, right in front of the sentence:

Her moderate-sized shoulder bag was a dainty sack...
Okay, so what explain does the main part of the sentence tell us? Almost nothing really. That's what negates anything interesting after it. Just start with "To the right sat a dainty sack..." It's still not interesting, but we at least have something going with some type of action right from the beginning rather than saying it sat later on. Moving on:

... made from leaves hand-sewn together with silk-thread given to her clan by a group of Leavanny that visited the Furlong Hollow autumnally to trade goods...
I don't know about you, but that is a mouthful to read for one phrase, and all momentum is lost (crucial in helping a reader to get by a long sentence). You have to take it slow and seriously make one part be just one part. To demonstrate, I'll revise the entire sentence for you to see:

To the right sat a dainty sack, nothing more than a set of green, overlapping leaves, silk thread (given to her clan by a group of Leavanny that visited the Furlong Hollow autumnally to trade goods) sewn taught to keep them together, atop her Beyi Buckler, an oval-shaped wooden shield bound by the leather made from a Pokémon’s hide, decorated with her tribe’s ornate symbol of an upside-down triangle with twin arcs traced from its top and bottom so that they formed an ellipse near its center where an brownish circle formed the iris of an illusionary eye.
The parentheses you used were not needed, as they're actually important descriptions of the buckler. On the other hand, the origin of the silk is not as essential to the appearance of the sack, and thus casted as an aside. A note I'd like to make is that my version is heavily periodic; my main clause is "To the right sat a dainty sack... atop her Beyi Buckler," but there's so much in between that the sentence isn't fully satisfied until it almost fully read. It does lead to possible reread in order to be understood, but it's not the linear style that many of your other sentences have been following.

“While you two sleeping, I staked out a couple sites we should be able to hit. Luckily I purloined this from a shopkeeper when she wasn’t paying attention,”
I can't quite imagine Seraph with a rich-enough vocabulary to use "purloined." Her earlier dialogue show her to be... more rough with her words.

The rest of the chapter is mechanically fine for the most part. Overall, I think you realize that it's tough to sell a situation with so little known to the reader in the meantime. Concerning Seraph and the wraith, I feel something similar to one of my mistakes with one of my older fanfiction: overuse of foreign language. You can introduce it, sure, but try to cut back and just let us know they're speaking in that different language then and there, as most science-fiction novels I've read has done. Concerning characterization, I think you've done a decent job, really (better than what I can manage, at least). Seraph is one of those people with a tough personality but with a haunted memory. It's probably likely she'll crack open sometime later on, if not soon (after what just happened to her).

Happy writing,

~Zyflair
 
RE: Dark Nostalgia: Biohazard (PG-13/Furry-PMD fanfic)

*blushes* Alright, alright, I'll edit the furries bit out of the title next chance I get. I just wasn't sure how to really categorize it way back when I made the OP since this qualifies as PMD and an anthro-Pokemon fanfic (the latter more so, since I'm not really sticking to the PMD set-up as opposed to working with my own adventure with this).

Anywho, I've made all the edits on my MS Word file, but I just need to wait until I can get to my library next to re-paste them here. Also, I re-edited around all those bulky descriptions and explainations in the one paragraph based a bit on your rewrite (but also taking out a chunk of the unneeded stuff since I plan on incorporating them in chapter two's introductory scenes somehow).

Edit: Slightly revised edition posted, but I may still come back to this later on if I can figure out something more based on what you said, Zy.
 
And finally I got around to finishing up my long-needed rewrites for chapter two. Granted, I feel it should be longer, having turned out to be approximately seven pages (give or take) on MS Word. However, I guess that may or may not change depending on whether I feel it should be expanded beyond where I ended the chapter...

Chapter Two: Deliverance?

Three years ago…

It was early in the evening when I gradually began to awaken. Cool autumnal air flowed through our cabin, carrying the scents of burning wood and roasting meat from the village proper. Glints of the waning sunlight filtered in through a nearby window, a daft reminder of the life we cherished hidden in the Furlong Hollow within the depths of the Midnight Forest.

Reluctantly I opened my eyes, the dreams of a good night’s sleep quickly fleeting like birds at our tribal war cries. My side felt strangely numb along with my left arm also feeling stiff, both no doubt because I’d slept awkwardly in my hammock again for the umpteenth time this month. What I’d give for an actual bed like the traders keep preaching about.

Yawningly I flipped myself upward to face the thatched ceiling.

“Chea-yi!” I called tenderly. Father!

With no response, I rolled over and slowly sat upright. After rubbing my eyes, I took a long glance around the room. Being the only one in our cottage, the interior was surrounded by four walls formed by logs cemented together putty to make the building sturdy enough to withstand storms. Adorning the walls were the tanned pelts of Pokémon that Dad had killed on hunting trips to different parts of the continent, particularly those where mammalian prey such as Ninetales and Linoone were abundant; additionally, a couple of them had various markings or paintings on their leather sides depicting various scenes significant to our family’s heritage.

Gazing over towards my father’s hammock, the makeshift bed seemed desolate without its owner resting upon it, especially since he normally slept longer than I did. Some tears dripped down my cheeks as I thought about how the other one was stored neatly underneath his and hadn’t been disturbed much if at all in the past six months.

“Chea-yi?” I cried again. Still he didn’t give me a response, probably because he went in-town for something.

Scooting out of bed, I crouched down on the ground to gather my equipment for the evening’s hunt. Unlike most girls in the clan, I’d been lucky enough to be born into the patriarchal family. As such, it meant having to be trained night after night in the arts of combat and hunting due to us lacking proper land for any serious agricultural development. This only because our kind fled the mythical Hidden Land generations ago to regress to livelihoods of savagery.

Seeing my weaponry, I grabbed for my Vyi Tof-cu, a ‘child’s practice bow,’ and quiver full of Vyi Ta-cu, ‘children’s arrows.’ Males and females were trained in archery, and given short bows along with assorted arrows so their parents could train them. It seemed boys seldom mastered it as well as girls did, but we each held our own considering only tribeswoman possessed the ability to learn magic. My skills in this, though, far surpassed those I had in the mystic arts.

Shuffling the unstrung bow into my arrow case, I set it aside and grabbed for my Beyi Buckler. I flipped the leather-bound shield from its facedown position and noted the distinct markings that decorated it. Our family crest was one of several symbols used to identify the goddess Beyi-geyi. The insignia consisted of a red triangular pattern that touched two upper spots of the border and then reached for the bottom of the concaved shield, though the one point never touched the rim; within the shape, two arcs from its uppermost and lowest parts forms an illusionary eye complete with an amber iris painted at its center.

After getting the buckler set on my left arm, I grabbed for my bag that remained. I took my Luna Fang out of it, slung the satchel and my quiver over my right shoulder, and headed for the single door out the front of our cabin.

“Chea-yi!” I called again as I went towards the path heading into the village.

The town itself seemed fairly spaced out due to other homes being at least fifty yards from one another to prevent land disputes amongst our kinfolk. However, the buildings were also positioned in a crude circular formation to distinguish to outsiders that this was our land. Not as though we were invaded frequently, but occasionally idiots would wander in hoping to claim some acreage as their own.

“Meyi-lyi! Cu-chyi!” a stern voice shouted from behind me. Archangel! Halt!

Recognizing his call immediately, I slowly pivoted around to acknowledge my father’s presence. About six-feet-tall, the clan chieftain Meyi-kotan towered over me as a lithe shadow with the distinct humanlike form we’d all adapted over the past several millennia. His maw matched my own, a bit smaller than usual for our kind, but his tail was larger and bushier than anyone else’s in the tribe. He wielded a long bowstaff that looked to be just a few feet taller than him in his right hand, and stared me down harshly with his strict emerald-green eyes.

“Veyi-tek mo larn yi-toma!” he growled at me, baring his teeth like a savage beast. You were supposed to be up an hour ago!

“Nyi-cu, Chea-yi…” I whimpered. Sorry, Father… Suddenly he smacked me across the face with his paw.

“Nef-qaya! Nol lof teyi-mo!” he remarked, clenching his fist. No sobbing! Get to the square now! Forcing back possible tears, I turned back around and started jogging towards the center of town.

He seldom used physical punishment on me, but this evening I kind of deserved it… Punctuality had to be the strong suit of every Furlong tribesman and woman period, despite the latter rarely doing anything except brood children as her life went on. I suppose I’d be the only exception to that if I could someday escape the hell brought upon us by the village shaman who served as local matchmaker too. But then, it would all be in due time anyways if I could get away from this place alive…

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Seraph Furlong awoke silently to the chirping of bird Pokémon outside. Morning sunbeams filtered in through the window off to her right, radiating soothing warmth across her face that she hadn’t felt in several years. For the first time, she’d had a full night’s sleep that didn’t happen to be plagued with the nightmares of being hunted by fellow tribe members and beaten to near-death by her father before he finally let her escape. Alas, she knew this comfort wouldn’t last…

Slowly the Skunanne sat upright, shoving back the Linoone-pelt blanket and bed of thick leaves she’d been allowed sleep in. Groggily she then looked around the hovel she’d evidently been brought to overnight.

Overall, the single-room cabin appeared to be a sort of dome with its ceiling peaking at about twelve feet high and a small vent holed out at the middle of the apex. There were several circular windows on the sides of the hut other than the one right next to her, each looked to have crisscrossing planks of wood affixed in them for either decoration or support. Near the middle of the shack, there was a large table off to the side of a central fire-pit, where a makeshift grill had been constructed for presumably roasting meat. Otherwise, miscellaneous tools had been scattered throughout the building as well as a couple stools and benches, giving her the impression a carpenter lived here.

Suddenly the reality of her situation struck her like a club. This had to be the home of that woman whose storage shacks she failed to rob last night because she recalled overhearing yesterday how the lady had taken to craftsmanship in her downtime. Despite the homely surroundings, the fact of the matter remained that she’d been taken prisoner!

Tears rolled down her cheek at the further realization about what happened to her comrades last night. That spectral force she saw last night could only have been one entity… His name was Ah-kyi Os Beyi Quofyi, literally the “Sovereign Judge of Dark Memories” as translated from her native tongue of Quofyi. A deity of unparalleled strength, her clan heralded him as the arch-nemesis of Arceus since, in their legends, he lorded over the Dreamtime where Arceus ruled the physical realms. Unlike Arceus, though, Ah-kyi Os possessed the ghastly ability to consume his enemies’ souls with a single bite, which would then be lost forever within his maw… As if that weren’t bad enough, there were also rumors that it somehow sent a rippling effect throughout all planes of being to wipeout any trace that the victims had ever existed at all. But were that the case, how would she remember her allies now?

“Isn’t she up yet?” the voice of Cairo’s father hollered right outside. Suddenly spooked, Seraph looked at the makeshift door across the room from her.

“Keep your voice down, Saul!” the elderly woman with the drawl immediately scolded him, “The trauma that girl must’ve face last night was unbelievable, and you treat it like she’s just going to walk around completely unscaved? No Pokémon can take Lamentation head-on and walk away like nothin’ happened. You heard it last night too, and know just that.”

“Regardless of the circumstances, she is still a criminal. I want her head after the bullcrap she, Cairo, and that Oposease pulled last night. Now, let me pass!” he demanded.

“NO!” the lady shouted. Then there was a violent slam followed by a heavy crash. Seraph then heard the sound of shifting metal-links move away from the building momentarily.

Saul growled at the woman for long moment and then finally huffed, “Very well. But as soon as she’s recuperated enough, I’m going to have a long talk with her. She’s not to leave the village until then, understood?”

Hearing the door creak open, Seraph flopped back down in bed, turned to face the nearby wall, and threw the blanket over her body again. The metallic sound seemed to move around the building before finally heading away. Afterwards, the other Pokémon outside came in and slammed the door behind her. She walked towards the center of the room, lingered near the fireplace for a moment or so, and then slowly made her way over to Seraph’s bedside.

She sighed deeply before saying, “Poor little thing… Sorry you had to hear all that, child, but I’m even more shocked you were partners with Cairo this whole time. I can’t imagine all you’ve been through to resort to thievery and murder like y’all did.” Seraph snorted and tried to hide her face under her covers.

With a rough hand, the lady coursed the Skunanne’s tresses and commented, “I love what you’ve done with your hair. Honestly, I can’t recall the last Pokémon I saw who had locks this gorgeous…” Pretending to be insulted, the girl began to coo angrily.

“Sweetie, all I’m trying to do is be neighborly. Not to sound mean, but couldn’t y’all just do the same and tell me your name at least?”

“Meyi-lyi,” Seraph grumbled.

“Beg pardon?”

“It means ‘Archangel,’ but I usually go by Seraph. Seraph Furlong, to be more specific, since that’s the surname my tribe was given by outlanders.”

“I know what it means, but how would you? Quofyi’s supposed to be a dead language that only scholarly folk know about. I only do ‘cause I used to traverse ruins and such.”

“Ha! It’s still very much alive down south where I’m from! In my tribe anyways…” Seraph then cackled.

“Whoa, then you are smarter and more well-traveled than most, aren’t you?”

Seraph cracked a wide grin just then. At least this woman knew how to recognize intelligence when it was right in front of her. Perhaps she could use this to her advantage…

Slowly the Skunanne turned over and reopened her eyes to the sight of a bulky seven-foot-tall marsupial staring back at her. The Kangaskhan appeared far older than most, having craggier and grayish-brown skin than she’d probably had in her younger years. Likewise her cream-colored underbelly and pouch were wrinkly, as did her darker brown forehead. Her strong arms, stocky legs, and thick tail still looked as callused as any other Kangaskhan as she’d seen, or perhaps even more so than normal due to her evidently continuing to do physical labor this late in life. All in all, though, her russet-red eyes appeared to have a gentle glint to offset her otherwise rough-and-tumble nature.

“There, that’s what I wanted to see,” the Kangaskhan commented, smiling back, “Any who, my name’s Katherine Jamina. As you probably guessed by now, this is my home and I own the storage units around here.”

“Listen, Katherine… I’m sorry for what Cairo did. I couldn’t stop him before he…”

“It’s fine, child. Not your fault for something he did on his own, though his father’s a mighty bit upset that he didn’t get a chance to kill him before someone else did.”

Immediately Seraph tucked her head and turned away. Those words hit her hard, and Katherine clearly had no idea just how terrible the situation was for her comrades.

“What’s wrong, dear?”

“Last night… I saw a monster that I don’t think anyone else could see…”

“Oh?”

“And it was that demon who killed Cairo and Kit… How the hell does that help my case if nobody else…?” she stuttered as Katherine placed a mitt on her again.

“Don’t you worry about that. Saul’s more reasonable than he sounds, and all I think he wants is an explanation more than retribution…” Katherine said to try and calm her down, “In any case, you were close to him, weren’t you? This whole village was at until the night after he evolved. That night turned from bad to worse when he killed two of his younger brothers to invoke the powers of a demon, whom he supposedly broke a pact with by fleeing these lands.”

‘That would explain some of it then…but why did he kill Kit too?’ the skunk pondered.

“A lot of strange occurrences have been going on since then. So it’d be no surprise to us if you had some encounter with the occult, hun.” Hardly the term Seraph would have used to describe a face-to-face meeting with a forlorn deity like him…

After a few seconds, Seraph’s stomach started to growl loudly. With all the daydreaming and nostalgia being evoked, she’d completely forgotten to ask if she could at least have some sort of meal.

“Aw, honey, you haven’t eaten a thing since last night, have you?” Katherine then asked.

“Since yesterday morning actually…” Seraph sobbed in return.

“Don’t you fret none!” the Kangaskhan said, lovingly nuzzling the girl’s forehead, “Aunt Kathy will be right back with breakfast.” Afterwards, Katherine headed for the door and outside, leaving it just partway open.

Seraph jumped to her feet almost immediately and stretched out her body. It felt good to, but she couldn’t waste any time now… This was her only sure-fire chance to escape, and she had to be quick. However, with her normal gear confiscated, she’d stand no chance of surviving the wilderness.

Glancing at the objects around her, she decided a hatchet would probably be better than anything else since it may well double as a club and throwing arm when necessary. She grabbed the nearest stone-carved tool she found and made a beeline for the exit.

Stepping out into broad daylight usually proved to be pure hell for poor Seraph… Her eyes burned for several moments before finally adjusting to the full-blown intensity of the sun, but her daytime sight never focused as well as her night vision. Brighter colors seemed distorted while darker ones looked blotchy. Beautiful flowers appeared dull, and the grass became bland with the dirt. Shelters dampened the sunbeams greatly, though only dense forests provided her with enough shade to see normally at these hours.

Taking a second to clear her head, Seraph accessed her surrounding to double-check that she was really in the southern part of town like she’d been assuming. Noting the particularly large building she’d visited last night, she knew her best route for escape would likely be to head northwest over the rooftops. But then, climbing up them could leave her exposed as a target for any avian Pokémon flying from the village that might realize that she’s a known criminal now. So for now, it probably was best just to continue on foot until she reached the forest.

She circled around the backside of the Kangaskhan’s home and immediately ran north towards the main road. Upon reaching the paved footpath through the center of town, the skunk hid in the bushes for a moment and surveyed the street to make sure that nobody was traveling either direction on it. After a moment or so, she then jumped out of the foliage and headed directly for the timberland just outside the village.

Once she’d cross the bridge out of town, Seraph stopped dead in her tracks, her ear twitching wildly as she sensed someone approach. Gripping her weapon tightly, the skunk readied herself for the impending fight about to come to her.

“Hey, wait up!” called the voice of a young boy from down the lane.

“Bullcrap…” she uttered.

“Please wait! You’ve gotta help me!” the kid huffed as he stopped directly behind her.

Sighing, Seraph slowly pivoted to see that her pursuer was nothing more than a foot-and-a-half-tall weasel with a gorgeous ruby embedded in his forehead. Evidently a Fire Pokémon, the creature had a peculiar pelt that transitioned from dark red near his face to pink around his abdomen and finally to white by his hips. His eyes were an unusual burgundy tint with deep silvery-white irises, and he possessed a cute black nose that oddly accented them perfectly. There was also a curious stripe of burnt fur coursing his back all the way from his forehead to his short half-cone of a tail.

Looking at her sadly, the Weasinge stood somewhat upright and pressed his paws against her shoulders. His mitts felt unusually warm, as if they were on fire themselves.

He cried again, “You’re going into the Tiny Woods, right? A monstrous bird is hunting a friend of mine, but nobody in town will come with me to save her.”

With a sneer, she replied, “Sorry, kid. But I honestly don’t have the time for this.”

“Oh, come on! This is an emergency!” he whined, unintentionally digging his ivory-white claws into her skin.

His paws began to sear her fur, and then she told him, “Fine! I’ll help you save your girlfriend! Just don’t expect me to stick around long afterward.”

“Oh, thank you!” He nuzzled her cheek, burning her pelt even more.

“Get off!” she demanded, pushing him back, “Damn, keep your pyrokinesis under wraps, will you?”

“Oh? Sorry about that… I usually don’t get that excited.”

“Yeah, whatever…” Seraph said, brushing her fur. It would take at least a month to re-grow what he damaged.

“Anyways, my name’s Chip. What’s yours?” he smiled, wagging his tail.

“Seraph. Just forget it when I leave, got that? So what’s wrong again?”

“A friend of mine’s being chased by a local Destail named Sirocco. She’s been trying to evade him for months, but he’s finally caught up to her.”

“A Destail, huh? She’s really in trouble then! Let’s just go!” she said, turning to go. Chip scuttled alongside her and then dashed on ahead.

“Follow me! I’ll track her scent!”

Seraph nodded as she chased him down the path into the woods. This hadn’t been what she had in mind, but so long as she was still heading away from town, she didn’t care. Worst came to worst, she’d now have a hostage she could make perfect use of.

<End Chapter Two>

Next time: Far off the northern coastline, Maritide Island has sat quietly for generations undisturbed until Team ACT arrived on the scene but only to their own demises. With just one member remaining alive (and barely), a mysterious entity comes into the fray to question his presence and snuff out his allies' souls from all existence. Depsite her hallowed appeal, this being had mal-ntent at heart...

Meanwhile, joined now by Chip, Seraph plots her escape from the vicinity of Pokemon Square after she helps the young Weasinge rescue a friend from the villianous Destail Sirocco who'd been stalking her these past few months. Even with her hatchet and his pyrokinesis, the Skunanne realizes that they're in for the fight of their lives if they can't bring the bird down fast and hard.
 
It took me about three hours to finish writing this morning, considering I ended up writing a few extra pages than I was originally planning on, but this chapter is finished. As usual, I may come back through for remedial revisions somewhere down the line. Otherwise I'm probably not going to be too much as far as drastic or plot altering modifications go since I've already got the plotline planned on better this time around for the story in general.

Chapter Three: Temptation’s Woes

‘How long has it been?’ thought the wraith as she soared around the airspace over Maritide Island.

Far below, the once-bustling city lied in ruin as it had for generations. The buildings, ranging from contemporary twenty-first century homes in the north to rustic 1970’s factories in the south, were either toppled over or simply collapsed in on them thanks to the structural weakness brought on by old age. Likewise the abandoned vehicles on former roadways had rusted out, and occasional bones of man and beast alike littered the remaining sidewalks…the aptness of plague’s resolve…

‘Four, five hundred years?’ she continued, banking left sharply and diving towards an isolated area near the island’s northernmost peninsula.

Upon reaching ground level, the eight-and-a-half-foot avian pulled her elongated neck up and landed on the parking lot’s deteriorating blacktop with the tiny points of her cone-shaped feet. Her body was overall arrow-like since she had a relatively small egg-shaped body and sharply curved wings that arced outward from it. Though the morning mist, the creature’s metallic skin seemed to radiate an ethereal gleam due to some filtering sunlight.

‘And I have not aged a day…’ the entity scoffed as she gazed upon the relatively preserved site of a former college.

It had been eons since she’d last been to this place. The central building was a multilevel octagonal structure with several adjoining wings off to its sides. Overall, the annexes seemed to be in a dire state of disrepair, where as the main hall seemed mostly intact save for the glass that had been shattered from the two-story lobby entranceway long ago. Likewise, the adorning statues out front of Palkia and Dialga lay as piles of rubble strewn across the pavement. Seeing that alone brewed a sense of pride deep within her being.

“Yi quay-os sul,” she whispered, her voice cold and raspy. As always, betrayed.

The blood feud between her children and her nephew existed before even The Creation itself. From the moment she and her twin emerged within the void, their unbridled fury towards one another spewed forth the energies that forged the bases of physical mass and spiritual essence, thus birthing the so-called ‘Original One’ and Nostalgia’s Keepers in the process. Likewise, the force of their ultimate clash caused enough damage to each that she lost all emotions while her brother’s rationale was strewn to the cosmos. Though their conflicts had long-since calmed, the sheer fact Arceus still presented himself as the supreme god of Leyi Quofyi even now seemed more than enough of a reason to unleash the abomination resting here upon the world once again.

Slowly the entity drifted inside the structure. With the foyer exposed time ravaged the elegant décor of the facility. Previously lustrous tiles that formed paths to the corridor ahead and sides of the large room were now either yellowed or cracked, and the regal carpets in between them had almost completely disintegrated over the years. Similarly, the tables and seats within the commons looked to be tipped over and occasionally broken, most likely due to the infestations of scavenging Pokémon who ransacked the island after mankind went extinct; alas, those creatures too succumb to the same illness that wiped out humanity, given that she could still sense that their spirits lingered despite the beckoning of her son from the world beyond.

Approaching the hall leading further inward, the being slowed to a near stop because she detected something awry. Several Pokémon apparently explored this place, and in recent days no less. She could feel that two of their spirits loitering ahead, while a third one’s life force had yet to be extinguished. Turning her form transparent, she continued onward.

“Tyranitar… Alakazam… I’m sorry for being such a klutz…” a faint but gruff male voice muttered as she reached the halfway point of the corridor. There the dehydrated corpse of a Charizard sat idly as if waiting to the eons to decompose him. Similarly she noticed that he also had a glowing red halo surrounding his body.

“Quay-vu lar-nyi…” she whispered to him. Pathetic, to say the least…

“Who’s there?” he cried as she passed right through his corona.

If his spirit couldn’t detect her, then it only meant the leech had caught him instead of the abomination herself… In any case, there were more pressing matters to attend to than those regarding the fates of these wayward souls.

“Listen, Alakazam… No matter what happens, we’ll always be here for you. I can promise you that…” another gruff voiced spirit spoke as she found the junction where the corridor split. Startled by her presence, the grayish-brown aura of a deceased Tyranitar suddenly rushed her as if hoping to cause some sort of collateral damage. Though he merely phased around her invisible body, she still felt that there was only one recourse for such arrogance.

Revealing herself completely, Beyi-geyi whipped her neck around and stared down the confused spirit with her slanted glowing-auburn eyes. Suddenly, she unleashed an ungodly howl at him with her Lamentation attack. The sound waves instantly dispatched both the spirits of the fool and his partner back down the passage from existence completely.

“You monster!” boomed the voice of a third male. But then, this one actually used telepathy as opposed to the mimicking of the other two did, and so she just barely heard it.

Vanishing and reappearing right before the fork, she glowered at the Alakazam whom stood paralyzed on top of a pool of lime-and-black streaked slime. The infection hadn’t taken over his body just yet, simply for the reason that the colony expected her inevitable return

“Right as I left him. I presume he is what remains in the world of the experiments from years ago,” Doxisite clicked as he coiled himself around her body and neck.

“Vyi cuth mey-yek ta,” she responded. Your brothers had not done their job then…

“My apologies… I do not speak Quofyi, remember? But I assume you have a task for me,” he said as he rotated his head underneath her own.

‘Indeed. Starting with him…’ she thought, reflecting the horrified expression of Alakazam’s face on her metallic brow.

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As far as Weasinge went, Chip Irvine was considered to be quite the trailblazer and, at times, a bit of an oddball. While most of his kind preferred to live solitary lifestyles, he had always been a lot more outgoing. Even growing up around the foothills of Mount Freeze, the ermine spend countless days exploring hidden caves and occasionally venturing into the depths of Frosty Forest. However, one day last year, his parents finally suggested traveling on his own to Pokémon Square, where he soon became a trainee under the watchful eyes of the Rescue Brigade’s captain Saul Retford and its commander Kent Zoltaine.

With his sixth birthday behind him, the young Pokémon had grown much wiser since when he first arrived here and was now on the verge of completing his apprenticeship to become a full-fledged leader of his own team. However, recent events such as increasing attacks from renegade Pokémon like Sirocco and the delayed return of Team ACT served only to deter any potential recruits from signing up for training. As such, it became evermore important to request assistance from any Pokémon with spare time on their hands, even if it meant resorting to begging.

Following him down the virtually endless forest paths, Seraph remained silent as she tried to comprehend how she’d take her leave once things were over. Clearly this kid didn’t know she was a fugitive, and furthermore he seemed nice enough to start with. Even so, sympathy rarely paid off in this day and age, so the sooner they saved his girlfriend the better.

“Quiet one, aren’t ya?” he asked, trying to break the ice.

“Yeah, I think you’d have gotten that already,” she sneered, twirling her hatchet slowly in her right paw.

“Oh, sorry then. We just don’t see a lot Skunanne around these parts,” he replied while slowing his pace, “Are you from the eastern or western tribe?”

“Neither.”

“Then where are you from?”

“Listen, Chip… I’m don’t have a lot of time to waste today. So are we going to find this Sirocco or not?” Saying those words left a very bitter taste in her mouth. Despite not being avian, a Destail would still try to woo her like any other female in his harem; either that, or he might try to pluck her eyes clean out after hypnotizing her with his elegant dancing styles.

“Right!” Chip commented, sticking his nose to the ground again and trudging forward, “It’s not his scent I’m following but my friend’s, just to be clarify.”

‘Same old sh*t, different day…’ Seraph sighed while looking towards the sky and continuing to follow him, ‘At least he’s not as bad as Cairo and Kit were…

Her eyes started to mist up a little. She still found it hard to believe the two really did die last night. Perhaps she’d track down their death site and give proper prayers the same way her tribe’s shaman would at funerals before heading off into the great unknown later. So long as she didn’t linger too long in these woods, escaping to the northwestern territories of this continent like they’d originally planned seemed to be her only viable option at this point.

“Hey!” Chip cried out. Seraph gazed ahead to see that he’d stopped before an area down the path completely surrounded by bushes and trees.

“Congratulations! You just discovered what most of us know as a dead end, Chip,” she remarked sarcastically, “You sure you’ve got the right scent still?”

“Yeah, but it ends here…” he whimpered as she caught up.

“Your friend’s a Flying-type Pokémon, right?” Seraph finally asked, “I’ve never known Destail to go after anything else unless they were trying to kill something.”

“She’s a Swablu, so yes…” the Weasinge replied, looking at her face, “But Cheyenne injured her right wing a little while back, so she couldn’t have flown away like you’re probably thinking.”

“Temptail?” someone chirped overhead. The twosome immediately glanced upward in the direction of the noise.

Perched on a branch of a nearby tree sat three jade-colored birds with unusually long necks and glowing teal eyes. Each looked to be about two-and-a-half-feet tall with identical black, purple, and dark blue markings on their wings as well as a large teal triangle across their breasts and yellow-orange beaks and legs. The two flanking ones seemed slightly different from the one in the middle because they just had golden hair-like feathers atop their heads when he had an accentuating feather sticking up from his brow. Likewise their purplish tail feathers appeared shorter as they drooped down the backside of the limb.

“Yeah, so I was thinking…” the Temptail in the middle whispered to the right one’s ear hole, and then she turned her head from him. Immediately he talked to the other on his left, only to have her coo angrily and peck him in the side of the face. Right afterwards, the two females flew away cawing unintelligibly about whatever he’d just told them.

“Damn it! Every time! Every freaking time!” the male clucked irately, “This rate, I’ll be single forever! Why can’t I know Siren Song like Sirocco?”

‘Of all things to flip out over…’ Seraph thought to herself, knowing subordinate males in most Destail flocks were used to seldom if ever mating period.

“You know Pyro Salvo?” she then asked Chip.

“Huh?” the ermine replied, “Yeah, kind of. All I can do right now is make fireballs one at a time, though.”

“Good enough,” she shrugged, “Shoot him down.”

“Say what? Why?” he said puzzled.

“You want to find Sirocco quick, right? Temptail are Destail’s minions, and very stupid ones at that… Knock him senseless and he’ll do whatever you ask.”

“I’m not about to just attack somebody, though!” Seraph sighed and then flung her hatchet at the bird instead. The peacock screamed as the weapon just hit the branch right under his feet and fell back to the ground.

“Hey, watch where you’re throwing that!” he then yelled at her.

“Where the hell’s Sirocco then? Next time I won’t miss!” Seraph demanded.

Dropping down in front of her, the Temptail asked, “Who wants to know? I ain’t saying a thing ‘til you tell me who you are, little girl.”

“Wait a sec! I know you!” Chip hollered, “You’re Mints, Sirocco’s right-wing!” Seraph pawed her forehead embarrassedly.

“Yeah, what of…?” Mints started and then smirked, “Oh, you again… What’s wrong this time, ya little whiner?”

They weren’t friends, per say, but Mints and Chip knew each other well enough to be on speaking terms. Having met up more often than not, Chip could sort of rely on Mints to call off Sirocco whenever he’d gotten too close for Cheyenne’s comfort. Hopefully this time he’d be willing to do the same.

“Mints, Sirocco’s got Cheyenne again.”

“No crap. Why the hell do you think I’m away from the nesting grounds?”

“Yeah, yeah, yeah… We know all about your master’s absurd rituals this time of year, especially for something that ultimately lasts about two seconds,” Seraph shunned him as she went to look for her weapon. It was no secret these birds all turned into perverts when springtime came, but Destail were the worst of them all.

“Hey, you listen here, little missy! I don’t know who you are, but it ain’t like you knows us personally, so what do you care about our ‘rituals?’” Mints squawked. Seraph snarled at his poor English as she reclaimed her hatchet and pivoted toward the narcissistic Temptail.

“I don’t give a damn about your flock. What I’m out to do is stop a presumably underage girl from getting Stolen!” she suddenly growled, holding her hand-ax back as if to fling it again.

“Seraph, wait!” Chip begged, standing between her and Mints with his head towards the peacock, “Just take us to Sirocco before he does something to Cheyenne, okay?”

“Fine, but don’t say I didn’t warn you,” Mints agreed and then jumped a few feet off the ground. Once he had some air under his wings, the bird quickly flew between the trees towards the shrubbery behind Seraph; the two mammals immediately followed him.

Managing to avoid any of the thicker foliage, Chip and Seraph came upon another path far on the other side of the woods in matter of moments. Mints himself stopped on a branch just ahead of them to catch his breath. When they caught up to him, the ermine suddenly picked up Cheyenne’s scent once again and started jumping about gleefully.

“Our current nesting area’s up ahead. Sirocco demanded he be left alone with Cheyenne, so I’m not heading back until I hear his cry to do so. Sorry, but you’re on your own now, yous guys,” Mints huffed and then flew back into the woods away from them.

“Good riddance!” Seraph shouted once he was out of sight.

“Let’s go!” Chip demanded, suddenly charging headlong down the trail. She followed after him again, hoping this time they’d actually find Sirocco so she could be done with this nonsensical trek.

After another few moments, they reached an expansive clearing near a small pond surrounded by a low embankment. By the look of it, nests thickly made of leaves and branches were scattered all over the place, including a solitary one where a lonely bluish bird with fluffy white wings sat crying while hiding her face. Other than her, nobody else seemed to be around right now.

“Cheyenne!” Chip cried.

“L-l-leave…m-m-me…ALONE!” the Pokémon screamed, trying to hide her face. The Weasinge started to dash for his friend until Seraph grabbed on his tail’s tip to stop him.

“Idiot!” she then scolded, “Can’t you smell that must in the air? That mixture of dust from the forest and thick dander? It’s the telltale sign that a Destail’s nearby still. As suave as they think they are, the birds won’t bathe more than a few times a week.”

“But, Sirocco’s not here right now. That means…”

“He’ll be back for her quickly, even if he hasn’t done anything yet. It’s a trap, no matter how you size things up!”

“Oh, ho-ho-ho! Much worse than a trap, chica,” crooned a smooth male voice with a slight accent. The shadow of a huge bird flew gracefully overhead and landed across the way near Cheyenne.

From behind, all they could see of the seven-and-a-half-foot tall avian were his massive purple tail feathers that were fanned out so they stood almost upright, his buttocks from which they protruded, and his slender orange legs. Across his sprawling ‘fan,’ the peacock possessed a unique pattern in the form of two slanted eyes with hazel irises and a large silver streak down the center accentuated by a multicolor triangle near its top.

“This is a beat down!” Sirocco then cawed, swiftly pivoting around to face them.

Like his underling they’d just met, he was a long-necked peafowl whom had a distinctive jade-green plumage down his head, neck, upper wings, and main body. Because his wings were spread wide, the additional black and purple areas across their drape-like feathers appeared to create a menacing grin; likewise, the blue splotches with small teal triangles inside them only increased the mesmerizing appeal of the intimidation tactic. Lastly, his golden locks and ornate brow-feather seemed to shiver malevolently as he began sashaying towards to.

“You, boy! I told you this the last time!” he shouted, while pointing at Chip with his right wing, “If I ever caught up with this Swablu again, she’d become part of my harem! And if I ever found you trying to save her, I’d peck your goddamn eyes out!”

As if entranced, the Weasinge just stood there as the bird honed in and jabbed his stout beak at his target. Suddenly Seraph shoved the ermine out of the way and took the blow in her side, which seemed to weaken just before it connected.

“I’ve got no beef with you, chica,” the Destail muttered softly, “So, stand aside.” He then tried to grab her with his wings to move her aside, but she smacked him with the side of her hatchet. Sirocco squawked out of shock and then hopped back several yards to his captive girlfriend.

“Hey, idiot! Get out of the way when your enemy closes in, why don’t you?” Seraph finally scolded Chip, and turned her attention back to Sirocco, “And you…”

“This is why I hate mammals. You have no respect for courtesy when I show it to you,” Sirocco commented as he dusted himself off.

“Bullcrap! You’re not the only Pokémon who knows how to use Flirt, you know?” she scoffed.

Sirocco turned his beak upward and said, “Touché, mine chica, touché… But you’re hardly the well versed in the art of seduction, unlike you’ll be as a full-grown Skuntress…and contrary to how I am now…”

He slowly inhaled and let out a spectacular call to the heavens. Within seconds, the chirps and caws of his followers filled the air. Afterwards, three short-tailed Temptail swooped down from above and landed in front of him.

“Get up and help me fight, Chip!” Seraph demanded.

“Right!” the dazed Weasinge replied, jumping to his feet and scampering over to her.

“I shall take my leave. Darlings, have your way with them?” the peacock then cackled as he pivoted towards Cheyenne again. His peahen mistresses followed suit and waddled towards them.

“Oh, no, you don’t!” Seraph bellowed as she charged them, ready to swing her weapon. Chip caused his ruby to glow brightly and launched a fireball past Seraph at the middle member of the Temptail group. The attack immediately knocked out its victim, and he launched two more to hit the remaining birds with.

“What the hell…?” Sirocco squawked loudly as Seraph leaped over his unconscious mistresses and hacked part of his leftmost tail-feathers clean off. Countering he swatted her down with his wing and jabbed her hard in the shoulder blade with his beak.

“Little b*tch! You’re dead!” he then screamed, aimed now for her chest.

“Leave her alone!” Chip barked as he shot another fireball at Sirocco’s face. The blast hit and singed the Destail’s hair-feathers.

Irately Sirocco jumped into the air and flapped his wings forcefully. The resulting Hurricane attack almost sent Chip flying back into the woods, but the ermine managed to brace himself before it reached full intensity. As the bird landed again, a lightning bolt suddenly struck near Seraph, catching him in the process and knocked the peacock out.

“I think I got her this time, sir,” the voice of the Luxray she’d encountered last night said off in the distance.

“Good work, Leona. The sooner we recapture that prisoner, the better,” a gruff-sounding male responded.

“I see her! But it looks like you got that Sirocco Feranshire guy instead,” the Weavile from last night called from the treetops nearby. Glancing around, Seraph spotted the imp as soon as he jumped down into the clearing.

“In any case, she’s not going anywhere. Looks like she took a beating trying to fight him,” he continued, looking at the underbrush and then back at her, “Stupid girl… You deserve this after the crap you pulled on me last night.”

‘Jerk…’ Seraph sneered in response.

“Hey, Chet! What’s going on?” Chip asked as he scampered over to his newfound friend’s side.

“Oh, hiya, Chip! Didn’t notice you there,” the Weavile replied, waving slightly.

“Yo, what are you doing here, Chip? We thought everyone was getting ready for the tribunal this morning,” Leona the Luxray asked as she entered the copse.

“Well, I was going to be, but Cheyenne disappeared earlier and I got worried. A gut-feeling told me that Sirocco had something to do with it, so I came into the woods to save her.”

“A little guy like shouldn’t have come here alone, though. Brigade trainees still need supervision even if they’re close to graduation. Why didn’t you get Saul or Kent to come with you?” the other Pokémon inquired.

Slowly Seraph tilted her head to see the distinguished figure of a hellhound approach. The beast stood heartily at approximately four-and-a-half-feet tall, though the thick horns curling back out of his skull made him appear much larger. He had pitch-black fur over most of his body save only for his powerful maw and underbelly that were reddish brown instead. Adoring his body, the canine wore a bone-choker complete with a miniature skull as a charm as well as rib-like bones on his backside and matching sets of twin anklets on each of his legs. Lastly she noted how his slender tail ended with an arrow-like tip.

“But I didn’t, Cerberus…”

“That so? Who’d you bring then?” the Houndoom asked, glancing around puzzled, “Certainly not this girl, I hope…”

“W-why not?” Chip replied nervously.

“She’s the former leader of a band of outlaws who tried ransacking the village last night,” Leona explained, “I heard she ordered Cairo and her Oposease friend to murder the Kecleon Brother just to rob their stand last night.”

“I had nothing to do with that bullcrap. Cairo did that on his own!” Seraph shouted. Putting a forepaw on the girl’s shoulder, Leona paralyzed her with Thunder Wave just to shut her up for the moment.

“Just to clarify, it doesn’t matter who did the deed, little girl. Since Cairo mysterious dropped dead last night, you’re considered responsible for his actions,” Leona told her. Afterwards she turned the skunk girl over onto her stomach and grabbed her by the scruff of her neck with her teeth.

“Wait, she just helped me save Cheyenne! Doesn’t that account for anything?” Chip begged.

Cerberus sighed and stated, “No. We’ll escort you back to town and you can plead your case, but I highly doubt it will do any good. Saul’s beyond irate on this matter already, and I’m sure nothing’s going to change his mind about whatever punishment he has in store for her. At this point, it’ll likely be public execution and on the spot too.”

‘What…?’ the partway-conscious Skunanne thought as she limply tried to jerk free.

“Here, I’ll help you get Cheyenne out of that nest. Then we’re heading straight to that pond Old-Man Whiscash used to live in,” Chet said, patting the ermine on his head. Chip and him immediately went back to the nest where Cheyenne was. While they were doing that, Leona started heading out of the woods with her team’s quarry in tote, essentially noting she’d be waiting for the others back in town.

What lie in store for Seraph now, she didn’t even want to guess. All she could do was hope that some godsend would stop her from being mauled alive by the lupine terror her late teammate knew all too well…

<End Chapter Three>

Next Time (The Tribunal): The ancient and exiled son of the Clan Retford, an undying monk wanders the desert region at the behest of Foremother and his master Lord Otulp. Seeking ruins from Old Ronac, the entity intends to arrest the treasure within as the first act of severing the bonds that tether this reality to the Dreamtime. But he soon discovers he is not unopposed…

All the while, Seraph is finally brought to trial by the very creatures she’d thwarted the night before. Even though the attitude towards her is bitter, good deeds and consequential evidence aren’t likely to be overlooked due to bad blood and blind fury she’d been expecting turns out to be almost nonexistent.

End Notes: If I missed any minor things as far as tags for italics and such or if I wrote something that got censored, let me know so I can either fix and/or eliminate them depending on what's best (especially when it comes to the issue language, since even I'm not allowed to go over the PG-13 limit in the Writer's Corner.
 
Well, finally got around to this. Unfortunately, there's not too much I have to say about the additions, but here's what I do have:

- The recovery: Perhaps you felt that you needed to add in a back story to your main character, Seraph, just to make her look like she had learned to gain an outer hard shell. Even still, the act of having watched the horrors of her companions' last fate would definitely leave a lasting impression that she shook off in mere hours since she met Chip. By chapter tree, it's clear she's not affected by yesterday's events. At all.
(As a side note, I got caught with something along these lines as well.)

- Plot movement: Contrary to real life, fictional works tend to profit when you settle slightly more, rather than constantly moving around as you would in an adventure. Particularly in such a significant town to the main character, Seraph should have wandered around it more to develop out the place, to flesh it out, rather than trying to keep the momentum (which you already sacrificed in the beginning of Chapter Two to develop Seraph).

- Dialogue in Chapter Three: It's off. I can't really help you at this point, but it definitely feels really fake when Destail shows up. There's no built up suspense or emotion from it.
 
I'll see if I can't make things gel better with a few revisions I've got in mind. This all kind of proves a weak point in the writing style I was trying for this anyways (basically, a psuedo-mimic of the PMD: Explorers games' narration in which some parts were't really meant to leave heavy emotional impact, as opposed to just be sort of cute and kiddy...or that's how I always saw it...).

In any case, I'll leave these as is for the moment and try to get the next chapter up and see if that reveals anything more...
 
A minor update right now to see if I can't get some input on this chapter as it stands right now. I'm still revising parts of the previous chapters, though I haven't edited anything but the prologue as of yet. Still, this chapter will be concluded soon enough.

Chapter Four: Tribunal

The noonday sun scorched the shifting sands of the Meradai Wastes as Canersia made his trek through the vast desert alone. Undaunted by the rising temperatures, the monk had the cowl of his thick cloak fully drawn over his head to show local predators he would not be made an easy meal. Yet also he dreaded that this voyage into a world he’d long abandoned might turn out to be for naught if what he sought no longer existed.

Eyes to the horizon, the humanoid neither saw nor sensed any landmarks he could use to locate ancient ruins of the Meradai Tribe whom once thrived in this region during the Age of Man. Even since their time, further settlers had gone on to create numerous cities and towns throughout the area he knew was once part of his homeland Ronac. Sadly, it seemed that geologic shift as well as the dimensional cross-hashing caused by Dialga and Palkia in recent centuries razed any surface remnants of mankind’s dominance here. But surely, something remained underfoot…

Stopping at a point nestled between a couple sand dunes, Canersia sent out a powerful shockwave to blast away most of the nearby sediment. As the resulting dust plume lingered overhead, the monk gazed downward at the rectangular limestone entryway he revealed that still remained sealed a giant slab despite the ages.

“Go…away…” a ghastly voice rasped from the sands all around him as Canersia stared upon the doorway intrigued. Lifting his right paw with an eyeball pattern tattooed across its palm, the monk formed a shadowy sphere and launched it at the blockage to destroy it.

“I said… Go away…” the entity grumbled again. Canersia could sense an immense phantasmal force churning far underground. At first he assumed the tomb’s guardian simply didn’t recognize him; however, he then detected something else was awry.

Honing his extrasensory powers on the demon’s location, the monk now felt the presences of two weaker Pokémon who had somehow infiltrated the crypt. One appeared to have a body shaped similar to a sarcophagus, while the other looked to be a spirit bound to a mask.

“Whoa, whoa, whoa! Easy, Mack, easy!” he heard the anxious voice of the Cofagrigus say, “We’re just wandering nomads who’d been searching the desert for generations looking for a new home. If we’d known this place was yours, we’d…”

“How could you not…? The impeding slab remained intact while you phased inside of your own free will,” the demon’s voice scolded, “This is my final warning, claim jumper. Be gone at once!”

“Dad, Dad! Let’s am-scray!” the whiny voice of the younger Yamask then demanded, and he seemed to move away from the Cofagrigus posthaste.

“Hey! You get back here right now, Ramses!” the boy’s father yelled before giving out a bloodcurdling scream.

“FATHER!”

“Let that be a lesson to you, boy. Now, LEAVE!” the demon howled as the desert seemed to tremble beneath Canersia’s feet. A harsh wind blew the golden faceplate of the unconscious Yamask out of the temple’s entrance just then so that it landed right in front of the monk.

Unabatedly the humanoid continued on his quest into the labyrinth below. Though the ruins were constructed with mazelike complexity, the actual path to its innermost sanctum couldn’t have been more direct than a straight drop down a large hole situated right in the middle of the stone-brick entry chamber. Mortal creatures would never survive such a plummet, yet even he might suffer severe wounds despite having ever-lasting life. Likewise, teleportation could leave him open to a potential spiritual attack. Even so, he needed to reclaim the temple’s jewel for his master.

Sighing Canersia warped into the cavernous area far below. Upon reappearing, he felt the demon’s soul pass through his body as if to gauge his strength. Then as he gazed onto the darkness that engulfed him, the monk saw the reddish glowing eye-sockets of the entity stare down at him.

“Interesting that you would return now after all this time. Your journey here must mean only one thing. Lady Chastity seeks detach this world from Nostalgia…” the beast whispered, “I shall not allow this, traitor.”

‘And so…it begins…’ Canersia thought to himself, holding out a knife and ready to duel the entity.

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Saul Retford stood alone on the cliff edge facing away from Pokémon Square. The events of the past evening and this morning frustrated the elder wolf in ways he hadn’t been since his youth.

A rugged beast, the clansman stood imposingly on all fours at a height of six-and-a-half feet. Lustrous armor encased most of his body from head to mid-abdomen, including a helmet shaped to fit most of his head and upper muzzle, a sturdy shell protecting his torso, and lastly chain-mail that covered most of his neck, the entirety of his forelegs, as well as a portion of his belly. His hind legs were muscular in comparison to his front ones, as was his long tail with an upward kink in it; as if to make up for the fact, though, he also had a set of three long razor-talons that arced forward from a band on each forepaw.

Ears folded back, he sighed and looked back at the midday sun. The glare forced him to squint, but likewise he knew the light caused the paw-eye insignia of his clan to shimmer with a gleam of hope that he’d soon have the answer he wanted for so many years after Cairo escaped.

“Captain Retford, sir!” someone called from behind. Turning partway around, he saw a familiar Weavile saluting him.

“You’re losing your touch, Kent. Chet Dawson was dispatched with the other members of Team Hellfire,” the wolf grumbled, eyeing the lower-ranked commander wearily with his amber irises.

“Aye, you got me, Saul,” Kent chuckled, “But I’m keeping this guise for the moment.”

“What news have you?” Captain Saul then asked as he began to walk towards town.

“I just received word the fugitive’s been recaptured. Leona Dumont will be bringing her into town shortly.”

“Those damn Pelipper carry news too quick these days. I suppose it’s for the best, though.” Saul picked up his pace a bit, and Kent started to run after him.

“There’s more, sir. Chip ran out into the woods again…”

“So? The boy’s not bound to our commands all the time.”

“With the girl…”

Saul stopped suddenly at the heart of town, where the crossroads met, and barked, “What in God’s name do you mean ‘WITH the girl?’”

“Well, you see…” Kent stuttered, afraid he’d suddenly get slashed at again like any other time he gave Saul bad news. Despite being age sixty-five, the wolf’s temper hadn’t mellowed and he was quick as ever to strike anyone down who got him even remotely upset.

“I’ll hear it from him later. Get this girl ready for the tribunal. I’m tired of having to wait for answers I should’ve had decades ago!” With that, Saul headed up the northbound path to the wellspring that used to be Whiscash Pond.

Giving a sigh of relief, the anguished commander tilted his head back while starting to revert back to his regular form. Quickly his imp-like body began to transmute into the shape of a five-foot-three-inch-tall bipedal fox with a grayish-brown pelt. Though his frame was overall slim, the creature’s hind legs and forearms looked somewhat muscular. His long but spiky locks flowed backwards from his scalp, their blood-crimson hue offset slightly by occasional pitch-black accents and the jade jewel tightening them into a ponytail. Fluffing the thick fur around his chest and then tightening the weapons’ belt around his waist, the blue-eyed demon made sure he appeared presentable enough for when the tribunal started.

Gazing on into the distance, he noticed the familiar shadow of Leona as she came into town from the woods carrying the prisoner from last night. A sneer of disgust grew across Kent’s muzzle as he recalled the hell this one girl had put them through so far. But the worse of it was hopefully over at this point, and the trial would grind that rebellious attitude right out of her. If not, Saul may see to end her life once and for all like he tried Cairo’s…or even Kent’s own years ago.

“About damn time!” Kent called as Leona approached.

Dropping her still-stunned quarry on the road before him, the Luxray retorted, “Well, excuse me! I’m not the one who ordered to have her put in the home of the most unreliable caretaker in town.”

“I wasn’t talking to you. But good job nonetheless,” the Zoroark responded, putting a foot on the skunk girl’s shoulder, “Yeah, I bet you think you’re so smart, little missy? You’ll find we aren’t so easy to give up on criminals around these parts, though.” Seraph just cooed angrily and turned away.

“My team’s heading back right now, as the Pelipper probably told you already. Chip had a bit of a mishap involving Sirocco and Cheyenne, sir, but I think it’s resolved itself now.”

“Your services are no longer required today then,” Kent said, reaching for a pouch tied to his leather belt, “Here’s your share of the reward money. Two hundred coins per teammate, as promised.” He untied it with his reddish claws and handed it to Leona, who nodded in return and took it in her mouth. Afterwards, she left for the pond up ahead.

“Anything to say for yourself before I escort you up there?” he then asked Seraph.

“Vek Tyi-mu!” she swore at him.

‘Good thing I don’t understand Quofyi…’ he sighed to himself.

Grabbing her sides firmly, the beast gently threw her over his right shoulder and pivoted to face the path leading northward from the village square. For a moment, he glimpsed his opposite shoulder to make sure that nobody else was coming into town just yet. Seeing no one, he finally headed uphill to the copse.

<Full Version Coming>
 
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