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DrAgOn DrEaMeR

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Prologue
The First Snowfall

The poor glaceon looked out the window. It was iced with a pure, cold frost. The glaceon looked deeper out the thin window and saw something pure from the sky. Something whiter than frost... Something purer than the frost that covered her window. She felt light and icy. A numb, cold feeling swept over her fragile form. She was deathly sick.... The doorman never took care of her or saw her since her arrival at the inn two days ago. She was hungry and thirsty. She needed nourishment before she died. The cruel, fiery doorman had simple locked her in the room without a word. Without a sentence. He hadn't even commented on her loud cough, her tiresome look, or her frail look.

Her blood felt frozen beneath her blue skin. She wondered if she had the strength to attack. The room was made of wood and crudely built. Made only to hold together, she thought examining the room. Her sleepy eyes had only glanced the room before. She had rested both dies, but still needed food and water. Or at least some form of food. The only piece of furnishing in the crude room was the soft bed. It was small and had thin red sheets covering the glaceon.

She wanted to be free, but instead she was stuck in an inn in a cold valley. The valley was having its first snow. The warlock was chasing her. She was now locked away, she couldn't flee from the warlock. His snow would freeze the village. The village wasn't prepared for snow... It was sunny year round. She wanted/needed out of the village. The warlock would devour her otherwise. She was the hope for her people so far away. She thought she lost the warlock farther back. She hadn't. he would kill her as soon as his blood-thirsty eyes laid their gaze on her.

She began to weep. She was too cold to attack. She'd been traveling in snow for so long, for the warlock's snowy veil covered miles. She was trapped in a town's first snowfall...

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Chapter One
Fiery Doorman

The Glaceon waited for days. Seemingly months to her. On day three, She heard many thrashings and pounding. She felt a rumble and then the small broken door opened up to reveal the fiery dark doorman. It was a Magmar as now the Glaceon could tell. It was furious. behind it stood about ten Murkrow gleaming terribly at her with red blazing eyes.The Magamr was angrier than the Houndoom guard of the warlock. He yelled and screamed out with hatred and fire in his voice. "WHY DO YOU HAVE- THESE THESE TERRIBLE FIENDS!! TAKE her fiends and make her regret coming to the village of Junig. KILL HER IF YOU MUST!" At this the murkrow growled with hunger. The warlock must have sent them she thought. She'd been trapped by some grouchy Magmar doorman.

The doorman spoke up again as the ten dark birds surrounded her in her bed. "I want her dead! She came her and I gave her a room... AND NOW I AM REPAYED with WITH FIENDS!" The murkrow threw out red glowing ropes to bind her. She was limp and could not move. The chains bore her down. Soon the warlock would have her and kill her then moving on to capture her homeland in the north. She was afraid. Her eyes burned with a dark hatred for the doorman who'd betrayed her. The warlock had sent the Murkrow in to attack her and bring her back so she the only thing the warlock needed dead- dead. For she was the key into the Chamber of Whispers. The place that housed the Silent Attack... The move that would obliterate the northland when spoken. She was the one with the key... Which she ate and ran away with. Now the warlock had found her when a grouchy innkeeper had trapped her for NO reason. She was furious.

This one mistake on her part had cost her too much... And now she was captured. She suddenly saw a small Potion in the Magmar's hand. He must have had it so he could help OTHER guests beside her. She felt neglected. If only she could use that one thing of health. She looked at it with tears in her eyes. She had to do something. She used Ice beam at the Murkrow nearest to her. It froze. On instinct the Murkrow bite her. She struggled with Murkrow biting her. With the clamped Murkrows on her she snatched the potion and sprayed herself with her dieing strength.

She felt a surge of light and strength through her fragile body....

"I will..."

The Magmar looked at the empty bottle and at the Glaceon with blazing, fiery, red eyes. She looked like a dark vile being.

"I must..."

The Murkrow were flung off her as a Blizzard froze them and flung them off of her into the walls while they were frozen. the ice shattered hitting Murkrow and the Magmar alike.

"I have..." She strode towards the fiery villain. "to..."

The Magmar had a glint of worry in his eyes. he looked around scared. In his mind he thought... 'What to do? I shouldn't be so grouchy... eh who am I fooling? I am crazy. I am mean.'

She burst a storm of ice and snow and blizzards alike. The Magmar was frozen in the tundra. With her strength back she was warmer and ready to attack.

"I am ready."

The Magmar fell down phased. In his frozen tomb he started to warm his body with a steady fire. But She still blew on him with a cold Ice Beam making sure he was stuck in the tomb.

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After she knew he was frozen she walked out into the main hall of the inn. She had after all trained with the Abomasnow master of ice defense and the Mamoswine master of ice offense. Though, she was skilled in speed she wished the warlock, master of ice speed had not become ravage for power.
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I am the new continuer of the series. Luxx. DD is not. So here
 
We both will do it lux. I can do it too. :)
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Chapter 2
E. Gadentinton Franksforst.... Mr.F And Elly

Glaceon stalked around the small entry room. Fifteen doors where marked full of guests. Five open. She wondered if anyone was in one of them. She looked over the guest list. She wanted to befriend someone to learn a quick way out of Sumver. The cold was good to her but soon Sumver, a hot town would be an isle. of frost. She wanted out so others would be fine and she could escape. Basically, she needed an escort to get out.

The Glaceon heard steps from another room shortly out of one of the small stout doors appeared a Gengar and a small Espeon. The two gasped as they saw the icy eon pokemon. The Gengar was quick with words and said, "Why is an icy pokemon like you-here?" Said the Gengar. "I am... going south to the ... other icy lands." "Well fool you've brought a terrible blizzard on us folks of Sumver or travelers. We are stuck here in the Firelands in ice! In Sumver the capital to top that!" "Well..." "And my gal. I was traveling to the Hauntinglands with my friend her. Elly." The small Espeon lowered her head in recognition. "How do you do-" "And I am
E. Gadentinton Franksforst! But you may call me...." "Mr.F." said Elly in a small sweet voice.

"Of course."
"So Mr.F...Do you know a pass to a way south of this fiery isle?"
"No. But Elly does."
The Glaceon turned to Elly.
"Who are you...?"
Elly said whispering.
"A friend from the Icelands and the higher Snowlands... I need south my young cousin."
"Well there is pass known as Jade's Pass that runs to a small port shack that sells boats to those who want souther then the great Oorlands."
"I do."
"Then go south!" Yelled Mr.F.

"Fine I will." said the Glaceon. But she did not know which way was the right way. The Gengar looked around and floated past her. He was looking at the floor, the small innkeeper's desk, and the small boxes behind. His top hat was their, yet his innkeeper 'friend' wasn't.

The Glaceon smiled wryly.

Elly walked to the Gengar and conferred together.

They must've been talking about her. She thought in her mind silently. The again came to her. "What did you do to that evil Magmar?" "So you agree he's cruel." "Yes, but where is he?" "Frozen solid in a prison that he calls a room. I call it jail. He gets a dose of his own-" "ENOUGH! As long as I don't have to pay you needn't ramble on. Elly." He said and the two walked out the entry door over the small green mat saying "Welcome". A sign that should have said Grumpy Innkeeper ahead. She thought. The doctorr and the Espeon must've been traveling around to find medicine and the Espeon a geography teacher. Thats why she knew so much and the doctor was looking for new medicine. She had after all trained with
the logistic icy master a Cloyster named Dr.Roberts. he also was a known doctor of the northern parts of the Oorlands.

The Glaceon was ready for a new day to win a new friend... Or friends. She ran out the door to talk to the two. The two were going past all the wooden and coal built buildings in the rocky plateau on Mt.Uin. They would have to go southward down the mountain to the southernmost point of the great huge island the Oorlands. The Jade pass lead south, but the two were going north to the Hauntinglands miles and miles and miles north. She quickly ran to them.

"You two." She said. "I can give you a powerful medicine if you come with me south. I need a guide." The tow were shocked. Dr.F said, "Who'd you know I was a doctor?" "I was trained in logic." The two said nothing and thought. Dr.F spoke up. "Well Elly I guess this would help we need more medicine for our country. he tried to look smart and came to shake the Glaceon's paw. "Thank you lass I will come.... Save the medicine for later. I would like to know why you are going south." "First we must get to the small port and sail before I explain." The two ghostly figures nodded as the three sped out of the mountainous town towards the rough jagged mountain pass.
 
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Chapter Three
The Race Down The Mountain

The wind swept across the party's face as they went down hill. The large mountain was marked with many red runes of the early fire settlers. Mostly Charizard and Typhlosion trying to become explorers. apart from that the first organized government was a group of highly dignified Magmar, Magmortar and the monarchy fire king, Infernape Starlight. As witha ll kings in the monarchy their species was given then their name. Starlight was a wonderful king, he was the one who made boundaries and the runes of the Oorlands himself.

As the group neared a daunting slope the Dr. said quickly, "Why are we running?" "From the warlock." "The evil devil is back?" 'Yes I am afraid. She never died." "But... that means..." "She has an army of ghosts, ices, and darks at her side." "But why is she chasing you." "I have the key to the Silent Attack. The most powerful attack." "I know." Elly was shocked. The Espeon was hiding something. "I knew you were since I saw you." "You did?" "You have an aura had I can sense that." "..." The Glaceon sighed. "My secret is out." "Not entirely." "Why?" "I don't know your name..." The three laughed hardily. "Its-" Suddenly a roar of orck crumbled. Out of no where a fire started rushing behind them. the fiery doorman stood next to the three Murkrow. he was using Overheat! He was going to cut them off from the harbor. The three raced down the hillside.

The three were scared as they caught sight of the small town. Only a few huts stood around with a few Slugma, Magby, Cyndaquil, and such. They raced threw the small market and into the harbor. There were three boats all chained up. They jumped into one and Elly used Psybeam to cut the chain. The boat drifted away. Mr.F though found oars and rowed north going up over the Firelands up to the Galelands. Home to the Pokemon of Flying type. They'd need to go north to the Hauntingland. The Glaceon snapped 'South!' And Elly snapped 'West!' But Dr.F was stubbornly going north to the Galelands. Why? He had a friend their... General Farlton. The great Galelands military general. They saw a few dark looking shadows strike the water. The boat rocked on the glassy surface. Then a fire shot over the water towards the boat. "YOU OWE ME RENT!" Said the doorman in a angry tone. Going North West with the boat the Dr. eluded the fire and shadows but still went north. Confusion rung over the Murkrow and Magmar as Espeon used Confuse Ray to buy time. "HURRY DR.!" Yelled Elly.

They barely made it out of the south tip towards the Galelands passing the great rocks of the Firelands carved in the giant mountains. They passed over after a few hours to the seaside of a large forest with many tall stone castles and a few meadows. The Galelands. Many strong winds were blowing to the mainland. The Gengar lost control as the boat wrecked onto the white shore. They cried in happiness. But all were tired as they passed out. They all saw though before that an Altaria with many colors painted in its fluff and a blue and red feather form its blue sleek head.

They had been with the tribal leader Aliae. Who took them with his tribe of Swablu, Tailow, Farfetched, and a few Starly to the General of the entire nation. Thru the forests, thru the high winds, thru the meadows into the tall blue stone castle. The altaria marched on. At the stone building she entered from all sides cascades of water streamed down onto the small ponds on both sides of the main hall. doors and doors streamed about. She dragged them into the military room with a map of all the Oorlands. "General Farlton?"
 
Chapter Four
The Pass Through Twister Meadow

The party awoke to a startling cry of a Farfetch'd. General Farlton and
the Chief Altaria were around the sleepy travelers. "Dr.F? If I still may call you that. Dr.F was overjoyed he smiled deeply. "I told you Elly I have friends here." He winked at the feline like psychic Pokemon. The general and the Gengar continued in hushed tomes while Elly and the Glaceon conversed about the medicine they were going to get. Apparently a cure for the common cold.Finally Dr.F said," He will have Chief Aliae take us across the Twister Meadow to the NormPlains."

"Of course. I thank you greatly for visiting... Sorry it was under you being chased." General Farlton said boomingly. He was second in command at the Galelands. Only the king of the Galelands himself was over him. The Altaria motioned to the door with its painted fluffy wing.

They all went down a few white stone halls lined with portraits, helmets, and armor. A few tables and candles though.After a while they went into the grand entry room with many waterfalls and desks and a few warrior birds like a Dragonite, a Charizard, a Crobat, a few Staraptor and a Pidgeot where in the room and watched the four pass by.

Their eyes nailed themselves on the odd party of travelers.

After a while they got out of the tall crooked white stone castle with crooked towers to match. They marched off into the distance. The first obstacle were tall purple peaks with majestic clouds all around."We are going to fly over them. "How?" Elly said to the Altaria amazed. The Altaria whistled and her squad of Swablu, Tailow, Starly, Pidgey, Hoothoot, and Farfetch'd came. More variety and numbers then last time.

They surrounded all but Altiae. Suddenly they were going up. The birds had lifted Elly, the Dr, and the Glaceon. They all were flying up, up, and towards the purple mountains.They soared as their wings gllazed the rocky peaks as they sailed to the other side of the cliffs. On th other side the party saw a plain of grass. Green, pure grass with a few large gales... No tornadoes. Twisters. Thought the Glaceon and Elly...

"Elly?" Said the Glaceon.
"What?"
"You're a good friend if we don't make it." She said fearfully looking at the ground far, far below.
"You too."
Dr.F saw the two talking.
"SHUSH! Or we will fall."
He was surrounded by mostly Pidgey and they barely touched him do to his part poison nature... wich made it seem odd he was a doctor.

He did it because long ago he'd hurt a kid Misdreavous on a date. Now scarred for life, he sought medicine for his poor dear friend Cherro, the Froslass at his home. His girlfriend he loved so dearly. But she had a terrible Pokedeahu condition. (She was poisoned by a dark berry poison.)

A small pass led through the grassy plains. But twister on twister flew through the plains.The group started off through the pass. The long rocky road led far down to a large elevated plateau. The size of a country with a few bridges up on a few sides. The NormPlains.As they marched steadily on they were on the border of the NormPlains and the Galelands.They were half way across when a twister was only but fifteen yards away...

It was now only ten yards away.

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It was only ten feet away! The small Espeon was scared all others wore happy faces as they marched silently on. The Altaria saw it next. Then the small tribe of flying Pokemon. Then Gengar... I mean the Dr. It was closer to the Glaceon then they had thought. It was only a foot away from the Glaceon. She finally saw it as it threw her up high in the air. "GO TO THE TOWN OF GARIA!" Yelled Dr.F. "WE'LL WAIT FOR YOU!!" Elly frowned as the windy gale tossed the Glaceon up into the air and down, down down miles away later on.

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When she awoke she was on the edge of the plateau of the NormPlains. A few miles away from Garia, though she didn't know. When she woke more she saw a furry figure with a furret like body. It had a snaky, rabbit like build with a brown ringed tail. "Hello? Is anyone in there?" Said the Furret politely.

"Yes. I am... here."
"Whats your name?"
"Solan."
"I'm Luterna. You can call me Lu though." Her eyes closed happily as she smiled.

"You seem sad." Said Luterna surprised.
 
This is extremely good. I only have a few coments and issues, although not with your writing, DD. If Luxx is continuing the story, he/she may want to pay a little more close attention to word choice. Lastly (yes, there are only two things wrong with it at all), what is with the countdown at the last chapter? If it is the number of yards, then it should stop around four because anything less would be less than the ten feet you mention in your next paragraph. I noticed you had other problems in the beginning, but you gradually began to almost auto-correct yourself and no longer make those mistakes, so they don't need metioning.

I love the storyline, it keeps me on the edge of my seat and gives me a lot to look forward to. I love how you incorperated medievial mythology with Pokemon for a Mystery Dungeon-esque feel.

Can't wait to read more!
 
Chapter Five
Garia​

The Glaceon and Furret walked across the grassy plains near the rocky side that sloped down into Twister Meadow. The Furret, Luterna 'Lu' was one of the few who knew the Glaceon's name now. Solan. The Glaceon was wondering why the Furret was so jolly. But then again, people of the NormPlains were always good natured. Though the people of the Firelands weren't. The tow were talking about why Solan had come here. She started from the start, "Ever since I was a bay I was special. I was chosen to protect the key to the Silent Attack. The most powerful move ever. It could destroy all the Oorlands if the user wanted to. Its stored in a Citadel in the Icelands. I protected the key that was in another Citadel. I trained with masters of icy defense and attack. But not speed. For thats the warlock. The one who caused the first ice age. He has come back and wants to rule the Oorlands with the attack. He's a true tyrant. An evil beast!" Lu started to talk but Solan told the rest of her travels first. She traveled south to the Firelands, the Glalends and now this. Lu smiled. "Well I'll help you. I am a school drop out... I dropped out and became an explorer. I was traveling when I saw you. I'll help you wherever you go." She closed her eyes again in happiness.

Its a great day today." The Furret said. She walked bathing in the sunlight. She was very excited to have a new friend and maybe go to the Icelands to help save the world... Or anyplace. The three romped over hills talking and gossiping. Finally they saw a small city within sight. "Garia." Said the Furret.

The two walked down a last hill into the small village. Inside were a few Wigglytuff guarding a hotel. The two looked around all over for them. Finally Solan spotted Mr.F. "MR.F!" She yelled happily. The Gengar turned around. "Glaceon?" "Its Solan." "Oh so thats your name." The Dr. said. She nodded. "Who's this?" "This is Lu. She's going to help us... Wait where is Elly?" "She is going to the Hauntlands." "Oh." "How did you know that General?" Solan said. The Furret tried to follow the conversation hearing it and knowing some. "We met while I was looking for medicine. I saved him from an evil Fearow. He never got to thank me... So he sent Altiae." "Where is she and her tribe?" "They went back." "So now what Dr.?" "We go get Elly and go to the Icelands." "Of course." The Furret giggled. The trio floated and walked out to the hotel. The pink puffballs let Dr.F and his posse in. "So why did Elly go?" "To give some medicine. By the way you promised me medicine." "Well its a treatment." "For what?" "A cure for the common cold." He was shocked. "HOW?!?!?!" He screamed. "You must get a Maple Leaf and dip it in honey, then get bread and a Potion.2 feed both to the patient. Then wash it down with milk... only milk or they get a cluttered throat." The Gengar had her repeat it and wrote it down in his notebook. "Tomorrows we go north." He said. The trio retired into their own room. Solan's was a red room with a bed, bath, sink, dresser, closet, wardrobe, mirror and tv.

She remembered this was how it all started. She smiled as she started to dream. But was thrown awake by the sounds of fire. Outisde the Magmar was with an army of dark, fire, ice, and evil pokemon. There behind the the Magamr was a Mewtwo. The purple enigma was the warlock's invention. So was Doduo. But Mewtwo was his best invention... Not to others. She got up quickly and got Dr.F and Lu as they took off out the back door past the crowds the scared civilians, the onlookers, the guard of Wigglytuffs into the plains behind going north west to the Hauntlands.
 
Chapter 6
Mewtwo's Hand

All was falling into place thought the Mewtwo. The Warlock had hired him as a bounty hunter along with theMagmar. Out popped Mewtwo's long time Best friend. Heatwave. A tough, outgoing Charizard. The two were both powerful and mighty bounty hunters. They were hired to kill the Glaceon., Solan. Now they would. Now that Espeon... or Elly as they called her was gone. The trio of Bounty hunters were happy. For she had foresight. Now they could trick the rest. All they had to do was the kill the silly trio before they got to the Icelands... But they could get there. And thats what Heatwave feared. the Mewtwo had no fear. And the Magmar didn't care... He was just mad at Solan. His name was Burne./ They flew over the plains following the silly trio as they were now
dubbed.

Mewtwo was like the warlock's toy. Now Garia was controlled by the warlock because of Mewtwo. But the warlock thought him a tool....
A tool. The thought echoed in Heatwave's mind. His best friend was a tool. he stored the thought away. "Who cares?" he said aloud accidentally. They were after all being payed big time... Unless the warlock had lied. That was Heatwave's biggest fear. that it was a setup a game. A ploy... No. Mewtwo could swipe the warlock away fi it was... But then again... The warlock had a huge army that was coming.... If he really did have an army... As he said he did... Heatwave doubted it but the warlock did.... Then they were toast.

"When will we be there?" The Magmar Burne said.
"Soon" Said the Mewtwo.
"When?" Said Burne.
"Soon."
"WHEN!"
"Soon."

Then the two stopped and looked ahead. The silly trio had crossed over a large hole in the plateau. Inside the hole was an everlasting hole. The Mewtwo floated over, the Charizard flew, and the Magmar jogged around it.

"Mewtwo what if its all a ploy?" Said the Charizard Heatwave.
"We don't." Said the Mewtwo.

The Magmar started complaining about if it was a ploy he'd sue.

"He'd kill you." Reasoned Heatwave.
"So!" Yelled the Magmar, Burne.
" You want to be dead?" Yelled the Charizard.
"Sure."
"Fool. You are stupid!"
"NO!"
Then Mewtwo spoke.
"STOP ALL OF YOU!"
Then Mewtwo shot a Shadow Ball at them and the two shut up.
For a while.
Soon they would have a huge problem.

"Mewtwo." Said the Charizard.
"You know my name is Mu."
"Mu.... What if it is a ploy?"
"Then we kill him."
Somehow Heatwave was scared....
"Mu..."
"Don't worry. We can get his money. Plus... Solan may be helpful.... We won't kill her. She may have more info about this key and stuff."

The two argued for quite a while Then agreed they wouldn't kill Solan. All the while Burne plotted to kill all of them... Though he was very vain. But he would fail miserably... Obviously.

Mu was not angry at all.
Burne was wanting to kill.
And Heatwave.... was ready to see action.
Little did they know Solan and co were close by.

***

Solan was ready to run. At that moment the three ran all the way to the other side of the plateau uneventfully. Going past small shacks. Past holes, past people. Past everything. It took over five hours. Now they were at the other side. Staring down at the Hauntinglands.
"Wow..."
The three said.
Lu was still very peppy.
"Who was that?"
"I think it was a bounty hunter Lu." Said Solan.
"O." The other two said.
"Now what?" They said.
"We get Elly and go to the Icelands." Said Mr.F.
Solan nodded.
"Off we go!" Piped up Mr.F whimsically.
The three merrily went down. It had taken them hours to get here. Now they were going even further without stop...
But behind them about a third of a mile away were the 'dark' trio as the 'silly' trio said.

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"Dark and silly don't match."
Said a lone rouge figure on the World's Largest Tree. Miles and miles away looking from a golden, silvery, delicate, beautiful, elegant telescope. It was in this huge tree miles and miles away on a lone island. The tree had many passages, halls, rooms, etc. This was on the top with this large telescope to view all the world. The world tree was one of a kind... But not special just this lone rouge figures hideout. his base. "The warlock is dangerous... And a rouge Mewtwo is even worse...." The figure said again.
 
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