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Once upon a SOMETHING...

Part One of Chapter One

Suddenly, Dudra woke up. He heard a weird noise in his closet. Dudra tiptoed over and opened the door. Bright purple eyes stared at him.

"Growler, get over here, and use Ember, just don't set the house on fire like you did last time," he ordered his Growlithe.

Growlithe did as he was told. Right before the attack, the Pokemon jumped out of the way. Growler stopped the attack.

"Oh, it's just you, you naughty little duck!" Dudra said to his Golduck.

He had a dislike for his Golduck for a long time. Dudra's Alakazam crawled out from under his bed, covered with blankets and dirty clothes: Alakazam opened the window.

"What's wrong?" Dudra asked the Alakazam.

"Alaka--"

He was inturrupted by a roar. Dudra thought it was familiar, but he couldn't be sure.

To be continued

Note: The reason I'm calling it Part One of Chapter One is because its so small.


Part 2 of Chapter One:

The roar seemed to freeze time itself (Hmmm… What could this be?). A huge Pokemon with… what is that? A sail? On its back exploded through half of Dudra’s room. It roared once more, and then settled down. He pulled out his Pokedex, which told him that the Pokemon standing right in front of him was Dialga, the master of Time itself. It roared again. Dudra was starting to get annoyed of being frozen every time this dude roared. Wow, a real Dialga, thought Dudra. It roared, and motioned for him to come. He left a note for his mom, saying:
Dear Mom,
I will be gone for an amount of days, do not worry about me. I have brought my Pokemon and will be training them on my trip. Do not try to call me, I will not pick up. Yes, I brought something to eat* and, yes, I’ll be safe. I found a very, very powerful Pokemon that will protect me. I packed bandages for my owies and boo-boos. ** OK, you can send me your bird Pokemon for messages. I said: DO NOT TRY TO CALL ME!!!!!
From, your (do not freak out) son
But, she did freak out. So she tried to call him. When he didn’t pick up, she freaked out even more. Then, she called the police. Now, everything was a disaster. Meanwhile… the two were half way up the mountain. The mountain called: Mt. Coronet. That was, when two men with funny hair and weird clothes and a man cornered them.
“Ahhhh… So you are Dialga, Master of Time,” the man said, “My name is Saturn,” and with that Saturn pushed a button and a trap sprung from underneath Dialga’s feet. Dialga roared. Dudra knew what to do. He sent out Growlithe, who used Fury Swipes, to break the trap. The two Grunts, and Saturn, sent out Pokemon. The Grunts sent out Golbats, while Saturn sent out Crobat. He laughed, and told his Pokemon to use Poison Fang. It hit Dialga square in the neck, but, just as soon, Dialga used Roar of Time. The two Golbats were knocked out instantly, but Crobat looked like it had barely taken any damage. Now the two partners, Dialga and Dudra, both knew this was going to be a hard battle.
“Growlithe, Fire Fang, Golduck, Water Gun and Alakazam, Psycho Cut!” ordered the boy.
The attacks hit, but because of Crobat’s speed, it managed to only get hit by half of each of the attacks.
Dialga stamped a foot and caused a cave in.
Suddenly, a huge shadow erupted from the ground, ink dripped from its wings and splattered on to the cave floor. It roared again, once more. Dudra’s Pokedex told him the shadow was a Pokemon named Giratina. Dudra had heard of Giratina before, but only in the stories that his mother and father had told him about the hero, named Ash. They also told him that those stories were about 20 years old. Dialga started hovering, so Dudra decided to get on Giratina’s back. The two Pokemon flew straight up, but a huge avalanche hit them. It was then, when the young boy noticed it was snowing. A figure could just be made out on a cliff. It had something on its arm that was pointed straight at Giratina!! It shot a laser, and Giratina turned to stone. Right before it hit, Dudra jumped on to Dialga. The boy threw an empty Pokeball, right when the mysterious figure shot the laser, and the laser hit the empty ball, instead of Dialga. In that moment, Dudra ordered all of his Pokemon to shoot an attack right under the person, who Dudra now knew was Hunter J. But, right as the cliff was falling, Hunter J called her Salamence to fly away. However, a ray hit her as she was flying, and she was knocked off her Salamence. Finally, he had to ask:
“Why is everyone coming to the top of Mt. Coronet?”
But, Dialga just looked at him with glowing blue eyes, and flew down to secure the statue of Giratina. That was, when something happened.

To be continued...

*Not true
**Not true
 
RE: Once upon a... JUST READ IT!! Please comment.

Pretty good I guess.... It's more like a conversation with the Pokemon instead of a story....
I hope in the next chapter that it is longer with more story.
 
RE: Once upon a... JUST READ IT!! Please comment. Chapter 2 is now up!!!

Ok, now that someone has finally posted, I'll start the next chapter. It will probably be up on Friday. That's what I was thinking when I made it,that there was too much conversation. Ok, I'm just about halfway done with the 2nd chapter

TIDE: Part 2 is here!!!!!

Part 2 of Chapter One:

The roar seemed to freeze time itself (Hmmm… What could this be?). A huge Pokemon with… what is that? A sail? On its back exploded through half of Dudra’s room. It roared once more, and then settled down. He pulled out his Pokedex, which told him that the Pokemon standing right in front of him was Dialga, the master of Time itself. It roared again. Dudra was starting to get annoyed of being frozen every time this dude roared. Wow, a real Dialga, thought Dudra. It roared, and motioned for him to come. He left a note for his mom, saying:
Dear Mom,
I will be gone for an amount of days, do not worry about me. I have brought my Pokemon and will be training them on my trip. Do not try to call me, I will not pick up. Yes, I brought something to eat* and, yes, I’ll be safe. I found a very, very powerful Pokemon that will protect me. I packed bandages for my owies and boo-boos. ** OK, you can send me your bird Pokemon for messages. I said: DO NOT TRY TO CALL ME!!!!!
From, your (do not freak out) son
But, she did freak out. So she tried to call him. When he didn’t pick up, she freaked out even more. Then, she called the police. Now, everything was a disaster. Meanwhile… the two were half way up the mountain. The mountain called: Mt. Coronet. That was, when two men with funny hair and weird clothes and a man cornered them.
“Ahhhh… So you are Dialga, Master of Time,” the man said, “My name is Saturn,” and with that Saturn pushed a button and a trap sprung from underneath Dialga’s feet. Dialga roared. Dudra knew what to do. He sent out Growlithe, who used Fury Swipes, to break the trap. The two Grunts, and Saturn, sent out Pokemon. The Grunts sent out Golbats, while Saturn sent out Crobat. He laughed, and told his Pokemon to use Poison Fang. It hit Dialga square in the neck, but, just as soon, Dialga used Roar of Time. The two Golbats were knocked out instantly, but Crobat looked like it had barely taken any damage. Now the two partners, Dialga and Dudra, both knew this was going to be a hard battle.
“Growlithe, Fire Fang, Golduck, Water Gun and Alakazam, Psycho Cut!” ordered the boy.
The attacks hit, but because of Crobat’s speed, it managed to only get hit by half of each of the attacks.
Dialga stamped a foot and caused a cave in.
Suddenly, a huge shadow erupted from the ground, ink dripped from its wings and splattered on to the cave floor. It roared again, once more. Dudra’s Pokedex told him the shadow was a Pokemon named Giratina. Dudra had heard of Giratina before, but only in the stories that his mother and father had told him about the hero, named Ash. They also told him that those stories were about 20 years old. Dialga started hovering, so Dudra decided to get on Giratina’s back. The two Pokemon flew straight up, but a huge avalanche hit them. It was then, when the young boy noticed it was snowing. A figure could just be made out on a cliff. It had something on its arm that was pointed straight at Giratina!! It shot a laser, and Giratina turned to stone. Right before it hit, Dudra jumped on to Dialga. The boy threw an empty Pokeball, right when the mysterious figure shot the laser, and the laser hit the empty ball, instead of Dialga. In that moment, Dudra ordered all of his Pokemon to shoot an attack right under the person, who Dudra now knew was Hunter J. But, right as the cliff was falling, Hunter J called her Salamence to fly away. However, a ray hit her as she was flying, and she was knocked off her Salamence. Finally, he had to ask:
“Why is everyone coming to the top of Mt. Coronet?”
But, Dialga just looked at him with glowing blue eyes, and flew down to secure the statue of Giratina. That was, when something happened.

To be continued...

*Not true
**Not true
 
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