Writing Platina

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Ok, I kind of wanted to contribute to the Writing Corner, so I came up with this. Enjoy!:D


Chapter 1: Dead Meat's Memory


"Waaaaaaa!!" Platina screamed as she scurried as fast as she could ever go. The Mightyena that was chasing Platina was very angry. The more Platina taunted the Mightyena, the faster it would run. "Oh, I can't
just fight that big thing but if I don't, it'll kill me and eat me as a baby Giratina stew!" Platina thought to herself. The Mightyena was about to pounce. It ferociously jumped toward Platina. Platina ducked swiftly. The Mightyena went flying and hit a tree. "Pffft, sucker!" Platina yelled as she ran away. Platina was back on track on figuring out where she was. Platina was a baby Giratina who was different from all the others. Instead of the normal "yellow armor, red detail, and gray all over" color scheme, she was rather oddly colored. She had a "lime green armor, teal detail, and gray all over" color scheme. "Oh, why did I run away from home?" she silently asked herself. She stoped cold to remember everything in her past. It was very clear why she ran away from home.
 
Awesome, dudette! That's an odd looking Giratina! Could you please enable Private Messaging so I can PM you real quick?
 
Oh, thanks!! Er..... I hate to be stupid, but how do I enable PM?

Oh, I think I got it. Anyways, here's Chapter 2.




Chapter 2: Little Platina's Memory



*flashback* "Oh, look at all of them, they are so beautiful," Platina's mother, Opal, said to herself. "Haruph, they are quite adorable. Wait, why is that one GREEN?" Platina's dad, Platinum, said. "Oh, Platinum, does it REALLY matter? Besides, it adds more variety to the family!" Opal said putting a smile on her face. "Ok, that one's Sol, that's Nightclaw, that's Platinum Jr., and the green one is...." Platinum said with a rushed tone. " We should name her Platina," Opal said softly. "Then it's DONE AND DONE!!" Platinum yelled gleefully. Oh, it was a happy day for Opal and Platinum, but little did they know that little Platina would
leave them forever. A few years past by and the litter of young Giratinas were matured and could talk. " Why...awe..you gween?" Luna asked. "I down't know," Platina answered. "Har, GWEEN IS AN UGWY COWOR!!" Nightclaw teased. "YEAH!!" Platinum Jr. and Sol telled. *flashback ends* "Hmp, it's because of those jerks! I can't stand those idiots!" Platina yelled. Platina continued her journey but stopped cold again. She heard something coming towards her. And it didn't sound like a Mightyena. It sounded like something far worse and huge. Platina scurried to the nearest bush. She hid only to find out this might be the end.

OH NO!! I meant to put "Sol" instead of "Luna". Sorry. ):)
 
Sort, of good.

Just work on your grammar and you will be good.
Maybe make longer chapters every now and then, but I like it keep up the good work ;D
 
Cool, I'm glad you sort of like it, SotH! I'll try as best as I can to work on my grammer. I don't think I can absolutely pefect my grammer, but I can take the time to write my stories. I've been banging out these chapters so quickly and not checking them. I think you're right. And I can make the chapters longer. Thanks for pointing that out. Even if you didn't like my story, I'm glad you took the time to post what I did wrong. You and Shining Suicune just made my day. :D
 
Lol, anytime.
If you ever need someone to proofread your stories/chapters, feel free to PM me, and I will inform ya pm on whats wrong,ok. =3

I should write some stories.
 
I edited the story for you.
But, you should enable your PM's so I can send it back. ^^;
 
Um, I think I enabled it. Do you go to PM then edit options? I'm still trying to figure out everything. ):)

Oh, by the way, thanks. :D
 
Chapter 3 is up! d: I would love to thank SotH for editing my story. Kudos to you. ^^


Chapter 3: Spacemen?!?

The sound drew closer and closer until Platina thought the noise-maker was near the bush she was hiding in. "Hello? Is anybody here?" a young girl shouted. Platina poked her head out and found that the noise was coming from the little girl. "Awwwww..... you look so cute!!" the girl said as she picked Platina up. Platina was caught red-handed. But that might be a good thing. "Hi, I'm Dawn. What's your name?" the little girl asked. ".....I'm.... Platina," Platina silently answered. "Oh, you should meet Lucy too!" Dawn said as she took out a Pokeball. "Lucy! Come on out!" Dawn yelled. She through the Pokeball, not hard, but just enough for Lucy to come out. Out came a little Riolu. "Hi..., I'm Lucy." the little Riolu said. Platina seemed enlightened that she found friends. " Hi Lucy!!" Platina gleefully said. "Before I go any further, I wanna show you to Professor Rowan. Maybe he'll know what you are and where you came from. Dawn picked up Platina and started her short walk to Sangem Town with Lucy beside her. When the trio arrived there, Dawn noticed something different about the small, little town. Weird people dressed in space suits were all over town. Some of the "spacemen" was surrounding one of Dawn's best friends, Lucas. Dawn, along with Lucy and Platina crept closer to see what was happening. "Give us that Turtwig or we'll take it by force," one of the "spacemen" demanded. "NO!! You can't take him away from me!" Lucas yelled. "Well, we'll just have to take it by FORCE!" the other "spaceman" said. Both of the "spacemen" sent out their Pokemon. One sent out a Glameow while the other sent out a Stunky. "Hey! Leave him alone!" Dawn yelled. "Oh, and a little girl is gonna tell us what to do?" one of the "spacemen" taunted. "Stunky, use Fury Swipe on that little girl!" the other "spaceman" yelled. Platina was down-right furious. The Stunky went and charged for Dawn. Just before the Stunky could attack her, Platina popped out of nowhere and blocked the attack. "WOW!!" both of the "spacemen" said in awe after witnessing what just happened. Platina swiftly jumped up and used Dragonbreath on the "spacemen". "AHHHHH!! RETREAT!!" both of them yelled. All of the "spacemen" scurried out of the little, peaceful town of Sandgem. "Quite remarkable, Dawn." ProfessorRowan said as he came out of th lab." I watched everything unfold from the window. Dawn, may I see your Giratina?" "My what?" Dawn asked confused. "A Giratina is that little creature you have." Professor Rowan said. "Oh, Platina, sure!" Dawn said. "Did she get hurt from those Fury Swipes, Professor?" Lucas asked. "Nope, not at all." He replied," Giratina is a Ghost Dragon combination so Normal and Fighting types can't hurt her." Professor Rowan gave Dawn the little Giratina back. Dawn cradled her with care. "Hi there little fella!" Lucas said to Platina. Platina, offended, spit in Lucas's face. "Hey, that wasn't very NICE!!" Lucas said while rubbing the spit of his face.
 
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