Writing Pokémon Halfempty! (a more comical pokémon story! Chapter 6 online) Comments welcome!

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Yes, title says all!

Unlike most pokémon stories, this story has a rather unique way of bringing the story... It's rather comical in the way everything happens, unlike some other serious stories.

It's a serious story nevertheless, so please judge fair while reading this, even though it might seem all that serious at all times...

Anways, here's the prelude and first chapter, and I hope you'll all enjoy it!

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[Prelude:]

This story takes place in the continent of Shiogo. Shiogo is inhabited by various species of pokémon, and humans and pokémon live in peace.

As it is with most continents, children receive their first pokémon at the age of ten. Usually a pokémon professor gives out these pokémon, but on rare occasions a child can receive its first pokémon in other ways…

This story focuses on Djowie, a boy with a very common dream among pokémon trainers worldwide… To become the best trainer that ever was of course! However, Djowie isn’t the brightest star on the horizon, so he often ends up in situations that aren’t all that conformable…

So please sit back, fasten your seatbelts, grab your popcorn and drinks, and most importantly, enjoy the show!

[End Prelude]

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Chapter 1: Get that pokémon!

On a nice, sunny day in Smallthorn town an alarm went off at 9.00 am in the morning. A shady person quickly subdued the alarm with a single strike of his fist as he still lies in bed.

’’Stupid alarm… I want to sleep more… Zzzzzzzzzzz…’’

The place this all familiar event takes place is Djowie’s room. However, as Djowie slams his alarm off, he hears a voice from outside.

’’Hi Djowie!’’

Still half drowsy, Djowie decides to take a look, and sees Shary standing outside, waving at him. Shary is a good friend of Djowie, and they’ve known each other for quite a while now. Djowie greets Shary, but is so drowsy that shortly thereafter he falls asleep again. Unfortunately he doesn’t hear that Shary tells him to go to Professor Ivan’s place in time to pick up his first pokémon before she leaves.

Of course, as the narrator I could annoy and bug you with tons of useless information, but since I’m a nice guy we’ll just skip that. However, story wise the clock shifts from 9.00 am to 1.34 pm…! And finally Djowie wakes up…

’’Man, I’m glad I took that few minutes extra… I’m feeling fully refreshed right now!’’

Djowie rises from his bed, and with a big smile on his face he stretches his body as he allows a final moan to leave his mouth before getting out of bed. As he looks on his alarm he notices the time…

’’What the…?! I’m LATE!!! Noooooooooooooo!!!’’

Shocked by this event, Djowie quickly dresses and gets down his stairs at the same time, which isn’t such a successful combination… While complaining about being late and talking to himself he’s hurt when he hits something along the way down, he finally reaches the ground floor of his house. He took a quick look in the mirror, and noticed his short brown hair was in a good model. He decided to clean up his face before finally leaving, but he then realised he was way too late by now… So Djowie ran outside with haste, and he met up with his neighbour John.

’’Hey there Djowie! You’re kinda late, aren’t you? Shary passed by a few hours ago to see Prof Ivan… Weren’t you supposed to meet Prof Ivan as well…?’’
’’Rub it in, rub it in…’’

Upon seeing Djowie’s disappointed and angry face, John decided to convert the subject of the conversation to something else…

’’My my, calm down sport! I’m sure Prof Ivan still has a pokémon left for you! Today is your big day, so cheer up! Did you have any thoughts on which pokémon you’ll get?’’

For a moment Djowie drifted away in thoughts, and he imagined himself ruling the world with either a Metagross or a Flygon to blast away all the competition, as he took on some odd pose with his hands pointing out in the air as if he was ready to let out an evil laughter… But he then saw John looking at him with an odd look in his eyes, so he decided to snap back to reality and bluntly replied…

’’The best I can hope to get is a Squirtle!’’
’’Ah, I see! Good choice! Good luck with your upcoming journey Djowie! I’m going back inside to read the paper together with Stella.’’
’’Ah, yes, thank you and of course greetings to your wife! I’m going on as well! Take care!’’

As soon as Djowie was far enough from sight John sighed and softly said something while entering his house to read his newspaper…

’’Poor pokémon that ends up with that kid… He’s a good boy and all, but he’s as clumsy as… as… He’s the clumsiest person or thing ever! I can’t compare him with anything in the world…!’’

Luckily Djowie didn’t hear a thing John said, and he continued his trip to Professor Ivan’s place. Once Djowie arrived there, he slowly went inside, kind of nervous of what Professor Ivan’s reaction would be as Djowie came in…

’’Euh… Prof Ivan…?’’
’’Welcome Djowie. You’re kind of late, aren’t you…? But that doesn’t matter, come on in!’’
’’Thanks Prof Ivan… I’m so sorry I’m late! I overslept, but I’m here now…!’’
’’It’s all good, Djowie. The only problem is… I’m all out of pokémon to give away!’’

For a moment Djowie froze on the spot he stood. All his life he had waited for this day, for this moment… He even waited two whole years before departing on his journey, saving up money for when he was finally ready to leave his house behind.

’’T-That… Can’t be…’’
’’Well now, don’t worry too much about it… Tomorrow I will have a new pokémon for you…’’

Professor Ivan reached in his pocket, and grabbed a pokéball. He handed it over to Djowie, and gave him the following advice…

’’Why don’t you already study this pokéball? I’d say, study it, and come back tomorrow to get your first pokémon!’’
’’T-Thanks… I guess…’’

With a sad look on his face Djowie left Professor Ivan’s place again, constantly staring at the pokéball. As he left, Professor Ivan told him not to be too late again tomorrow, but Djowie didn’t catch that at all as he began to talk to himself…

’’Guess it’s my own fault for being late… I better go and relax in the mountains…’’

While walking up into the mountains, Djowie began to think what pokémon Shary would have gotten, as well as one of Djowie’s other friends, Edward. He imagined them both having these super strong pokémon, and he could do nothing else but envy them… For who would not envy a girl sitting on top of a Dragonite and a boy sitting on top of a Salamence…?!

’’I bet all kids have a pokémon in Smallthorn town, except for me…!’’

Djowie looked down again, feeling sort of left behind, but then he decided to look on the bright side of things, and he gave himself a little pep talk to cheer up.

’’Oh well! I should enjoy this walk, and wait for tomorrow! I bet my own pokémon will be way cooler than the pokémon those other kids have!’’

Right after Djowie gave himself a little pep talk, something large and hard hit his head as it came falling down the mountain, and with a large thud both the object and Djowie hit the floor. Not long thereafter a bulb the size of both Djowie’s thumbs rose from his head… Djowie crawled back to his feet surprised, for what could have hit him…?! Upon closer inspection, Djowie noticed that the object had eyes as well, and that the object also had quite a bulb on its head from the collision. The object looked quite angry at Djowie, and Djowie couldn’t do much else except for looking angry as well…

’’Aha!!! So you’re alive as well! I’ll teach you to mess with me while I’m on a stroll!!!’’

Enraged Djowie jumped at the object, which was hardly any bigger than his feet up till the knee, and the object jumped back at him, and a fierce fight ensured. While being scratched, bitten, slashed, spitted at, and punched, Djowie fought fiercely, until he accidentally hit the object on the head with the pokéball he received from Professor Ivan… The fight stopped for a moment, and the printing of the back of the pokéball could be clearly seen in the objects head… Djowie doubted what to do, but after seeing the object’s even more enraged look, Djowie decided to take a run for it…!

Unfortunately for him, the object came running after him, and being the clumsy guy he is, Djowie ran into a dead end… Almost as if mocking him, the object slowly walked after him while laughing softly, but Djowie decided to stand his ground…!

’’Okay, I have no choice! Very well, bring it on!’’

With those brave words Djowie and the object once again jumped to battle, and a new series of bites, punches, spitting, and slashing ensured. And once more, Djowie hit the object with the newly received pokéball, only this time with the front side… To Djowie’s surprise the object entered the ball in a bright red light, and the ball closed… Shaking three times on the floor, the ball finally stopped moving, and the dot in the middle of the ball turned white once more after glowing in a bright red.

’’ I-It’s… Inside the… pokéball…?!’’

Djowie paused for a moment to fully understand what had just happened, and of course to catch his breath.

’’Okay, so that little terror is inside the ball… So now what?’’

Djowie knew it would be better to let the thing inside the ball, but as usual his curiosity took over his body, and he decided to look what was inside the ball…

’’Oh well, I better check out what that thing actually is…! So show yourself!’’

Upon opening the ball, the object once more entered the scene, and as soon a sit made eye contact with Djowie, the object furiously jumped at him, and a new fight ensured… Only this time Djowie was totally unprepared, so he took all the beating…

’’Okay! That’s enough! If you’re so eager to beat me up I’ll put you back in the pokéball!’’

The object seemed to understand what Djowie said somehow, and punched the ball from Djowie’s hand.

’’Ah, so you don’t like the ball…? In that case, why not make an agreement…?’’

The object looked in question at Djowie, but was willing to listen. Djowie and the object came to the agreement that Djowie wouldn’t use the pokéball anymore if the object wouldn’t beat him up anymore. After that, Djowie finished his stroll in the mountains, and returned to Professor Ivan’s place to tell him what had happened.

’’Euh… Prof Ivan…?’’
’’Oh? Hello Djowie! What can I do for you?’’
’’Well, Prof Ivan, I’d like to ask you a question… I’d like to know who this is…?’’

Djowie revealed the object from behind his back, and showed it to Professor Ivan.

’’M-My my…! Djowie, how did you get that pokémon…?’’
’’P-Pokémon…?! You mean this thing is a pokémon…?!’’
’’But of course…! How did you get it…?’’

And of course, once again I’ll play the nice guy. We’ll skip the long explanation of Djowie, and we’ll skip right trough to the part we want to know…!

’’So you just ended up in a fight with this pokémon and caught it in the ball I gave you…? That’s awesome Djowie! Congratulations on your first pokémon! And, as you wanted to know, the pokémon you’re holding is a Larvitar. It’s a small pokémon that lives on soil and rocks. Don’t take it too close to water, since it dislikes that. I won’t spoil too much of course, since I’m sure you’d like to learn all kind of things about your Larvitar yourself!’’

Professor Ivan moved to a room straight behind him, and in the meanwhile Djowie took the opportunity to properly introduce himself to his pokémon.

’’Well, I finally know your name Larvitar! I’m Djowie, so nice to meetcha! I’m sure we’ll have lots of fun together!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar nodded agreeing, and in the meanwhile Professor Ivan returned with a lot of stuff.

’’Well, here you go Djowie, this is a bag with all the goods you need for exploring the world of pokémon! Take care, and give me a call or a mail sometimes!’’

Djowie gratefully took the bag from Professor Ivan and went home, to finish the preparations to begin his journey.

’’Well mom and dad, it’s time for me to go… I’m sure neighbour Stella will take good care of you, as well as for the rest of the house while I’m gone… I hope you understand I can’t take you with me, since I don’t want to lose you twice…!’’

Djowie put back the photo of his parents back on the shelf where it stood, put out the lights in his home, and went outside with his Larvitar. He took a last glimpse inside his house, and finally closed the door.

’’Alright Larvitar, let’s go… Our journey begins…!’’

With his head raised up in the air, his bag on his waist and over his shoulder, and his Larvitar by his side, Djowie ventured off into the world of pokémon…!

[End chapter 1]
 
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What can I say... this is really something else. Off the wall kinda wacko stuff, that's about all I can think of to describe it. I laughed to myself a good few times through that... there's potential parallels to rl in that which make this hit home in a really unique sort of way... BTW, I believe this is CURRENTLY 3rd-person narration, cause the narrator himself isn't actually in the story :p

Great beginning though; I'll look forward to reading this :D
 
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However, story wise the clock shifts from 9.00 am to 1.34 pm…! And finally Djowie wakes up…

’’Man, I’m glad I took that few minutes extra… I’m feeling fully refreshed right now!’’
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^Lol. :p
I really liked it. :) Parts of it were very funny, and it gives the average pokemon story a little twist. :p
Keep it up. :)
I'm looking forward to finding out which pokemon that Shary and Edward got.
 
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Thank you for your comments! I'm glad you like it, and here's chapter 2 for you to judge! Enjoy!

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Chapter 2: The begin of the journey!

Last time we checked on our hero, Djowie took off to start his journey in the world of pokémon. While we weren’t watching him, he managed to cross his first route, and he even encountered a trainer…! As we tune in to his exciting life, we are right I nthe middle of the battle!

’’Larvitar! Use a tackle on that monkey!’’

Djowie was very nervous about his first battle ever, and he thought of any battle he had seen before. He remembered he saw a lot of pokémon using tackle as their most powerful move to start with, so he thought it was a good idea to let his Larvitar perform a tackle as well… So little did he understand when his Larvitar got mad at him, and heavily nodded in disagreement…

’’Why not?! Just do it! Oh, and watch out!!!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar turned around, but it was already too late… The other trainer’s Mankey already moved behind Djowie’s Larvitar, and a swift karate chop ended the match. Djowie’s Larvitar hit the ground, and Djowie quickly ran towards it to pick it up to check on nay injuries, but to his relief his Larvitar was alright. The other trainer also retrieved his Mankey in its pokéball and went up to Djowie to have a little chat.

’’Y’know kiddo, you’re not so smart at battling, aren’t you?’’
’’I… I just started my journey as a pokémon trainer, so I don’t have a clue how to battle properly…’’

Upon hearing those words, the trainer looked astonished at Djowie…

’’You… You just… started…?! The how’d ya get that Larvitar…?!’’
’’I fought it in the mountains, and caught it by accident. Now’s he’s my pokémon.’’
’’I see… Well, before you head out you should train! Lot’s of trainers await you on the road further ahead, and they’re not the best, but they’re not rookies like you either… So just focus on training for now, and I hope the next time we meet you’ll be a lot stronger! Good luck and see ya!’’

With those words the trainer left Djowie behind, and Djowie decided to discuss how the battle went with his Larvitar. For who knew, maybe they’d come up with some sort of brilliant battle plan…?!

’’Well, that didn’t go all that well, now did it, Larvitar?’’

But right as Djowie wanted to discuss it in detail with his Larvitar, they both heard a soft crackle in the bushes up ahead… Both Djowie and his Larvitar set up their guard, ready face anything that came from the bushes… They noticed something moving from behind a rock, and Djowie noticed that it was a pokémon…! Djowie grabbed his pokédex he got from Professor Ivan, and scanned the pokémon immediately.

’’Pokémon species: Nidoran. Gender: Male. Special notes: Be careful of the toxic spikes this pokémon has on its body and head. Description: A small, yet violent pokémon. Defends and attacks using its poisonous horns.’’

Djowie was pretty excited, as this was his first wild pokémon encounter, apart from his encounter with his Larvitar… So Djowie decided to catch the Nidoran!

’’Alright Larvitar, let’s go and catch it!’’

Upon hearing Djowie’s words, the Nidoran jumped fiercely out of the bushes, and readied itself for battle! As soon as Djowie’s Larvitar and the wild Nidoran’s eyes met, some sort of odd staring contest began, until Djowie ordered his Larvitar to use a rock throw attack.

’’Alright Larvitar, let’s show ’em who’s boss!’’

Upon seeing the rocks coming his way, the Nidoran fiercely jumped up into the sky… Crying tears of being scared, but it was futile. In the rain of rocks coming down, there was at least one that would hit the helpless Nidoran… And so it did. Djowie took his chance, and immediately threw a pokéball at the pokémon, which shook three times from right to left, and then stopped.

’’Alright! I caught it!’’

Upon hearing those words, Djowie’s Larvitar looked kind of mad at its trainer… Djowie didn’t understand what his Larvitar meant, and looked quite surprised back at him, enraging his Larvitar even more…

’’WHAT?! Aren’t you happy for me?!’’

Djowie became quite mad at his Larvitar for looking mad at him, but at the same time Djowie’s Larvitar became even more enraged by the reaction of its trainer… Both parties began staring angry at each other, and in no time they jumped angry at each other, beginning a fight. Both parties were fighting fiercely by biting, scratching, punching, kicking, and head-butting each other, and as they both got tired they once more looked angry at each other, but Djowie suddenly understood it.

’’Okay, okay, I get it…! WE caught it, you and me buddy!’’

Upon hearing those words Djowie’s Larvitar calmed down again, and the two once more made a truce. They both decided to take out the newly captured Nidoran, to begin a new training session, and to welcome it in their party of course.

’’Well, welcome to the club Nidoran!’’

Djowie began the conversation with his pokémon, but his Larvitar quickly turned it into a conversation between himself and the Nidoran… Djowie’s Larvitar convinced the Nidoran that Djowie was Larvitar’s slave, and Larvitar was the actual leader of the party. Nidoran had some hard time believing it all, looking in disbelief at both Djowie and Larvitar, but Larvitar nodded in agreement for it to be true… Nidoran wasn’t quite sure of what to do, but he didn’t care much either. He just decided to do what Djowie said, since he was the one who caught him.

’’Well, I don’t know what’s up with that look Nidoran, but let’s continue with our conversation. As you might have already noticed, Larvitar and I were discussing our first battle…! Things didn’t go too well in it, so we decided to train! And your first assignment is to help us train! So are you with us?!’’

Fully energised by Djowie’s sort of speech, Nidoran showed to be fully ready to train, and it took on a battle position towards Djowie’s Larvitar, aiming all of its toxic horns at it.

’’Alright! Let’s begin!’’

They two pokémon fought for a short while, but after a few seconds both pokémon fell over to the ground, as did Djowie…

’’Man, we’re wasted, and what did we do…? We did a few punches here and there, and we were out… What can be the cause…?’’

To answer Djowie’s question his stomach made quite some noise, followed by Larvitar and Nidoran’s stomach…

’’Ah, so that’s the cause… Well, I’ll get us some food, and we’ll eat!’’

So Djowie prepared a nice meal for all of them, and told them to jump in for a tasty treat. After holding a gruesome eating fest, all three party members were bloated, and they needed to relax for a while… All three burped in agreement, but they were disturbed by a wandering trainer with some small shades on…

’’Hey, you there! Lazy kid!’’
’’What the…?!’’
’’How about you get back to your feet, and we have a pokémon battle?’’
’’Alright! You ready guys?’’

Both Djowie’s Larvitar and Nidoran took on battling positions, showing they were ready for a fight.

’’Alright, that’s the way I like it! Go! My Nidoking!’’

In front of Djowie, Larvitar, and Nidoran a giant purple pokémon entered the battlefield. It looked furious, with big spikes all around its back, and powerful muscles could be seen all over its body. An angry glare looked down on the scared Djowie and his pokémon, and the pokémon’s tail waggled slowly from left to right as it had to wait for its fight.

’’W-What the…?! I have to face…?!’’
’’What’s the matter kid? Choose your pokémon!’’

Djowie didn’t know what to do, so he was unsure if he should actually fight, and if he fought, which pokémon would he send in the fray…? But before he could decide on what to do his Larvitar jumped furious to the battlefield, surprising Djowie and Nidoran alike…!

’’Ah! So your Larvitar it is, hm? Very well! Nidoking! Hyper beam!’’

The purple giant opened its mouth, and a ball of energy could be seen inside it. Djowie tried to warn his Larvitar, but his warning came too late… A powerful beam of energy was fired trough the air, aiming directly at Djowie’s Larvitar…

[End chapter 2]
 
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Not too bad overall! Although what kind of freak would go around challenging newbs like that? Honestly...

Only thing I could comment on was the lack of battling for your Nido. BUT, that really only a side-comment - the rest was fine :)

Keep at it ^_^
 
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Hopefully I'll get more comments on this! :( But for now, here's chapter 3! Enjoy!

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Chapter 3: Meeting up in Lakeroot Town!

As we tune back in to Djowie’s epic and mysterious journey, he is running towards the pokécenter of Lakeroot town. With haste and sort of in panic, we watch Djowie as he enters the pokécenter…

’’Nurse! Nurse!’’
’’Oh, please don’t tell me you’re also here because a trainer’s Nidoking hurt your pokémon…!’’
’’Well, actually… My Larvitar’s hurt pretty badly…! Can you please help me…?’’
’’Sure… Just put it next to the others…’’
’’The others…?’’

Djowie looked surprised as the nurse told him to follow her, and they both entered a room next to the counter. Once inside, Djowie didn’t believe his eyes… All sorts of pokémon were resting on different beds, with bandages all over them on various places. Djowie wanted to ask the nurse if these pokémon were all suffering due to that trainer’s Nidoking, but before he could say a word, the nurse began to speak herself.

’’So, what’s your Larvitar’s problem…?’’
’’Well, I have no idea how severe it is, but he has a crack in its shell, and he’s pretty beaten up…’’
’’Alright then, let me take a look at your Larvitar…!’’

The nurse took Djowie’s Larvitar, and studied using various methods. After a while she turned back to Djowie.

’’Your Larvitar is indeed pretty wounded…’’

The nurse pointed at the large crack in Larvitar’s shall, but she quickly continued speaking.

’’But don’t worry, it’s nothing that I can’t fix! But you’ll have to wait about an hour or six, so please keep yourself busy in the meanwhile.’’
’’S-Six hours…?! What am I supposed to do in that time…?!’’
’’I don’t know, just go and make fun or something…?’’
’’Okay… I’ll be back in six hours… and thank you nurse…’’
’’It’s my job, don’t worry. I’ll see you in six hours or so!’’

And so Djowie left the pokécenter, leaving his Larvitar behind. He decided to make a little stroll to explore the town and its surroundings, but soon ended up in the park surrounding Lakeroot town together with his Nidoran as he took a little rest.

’’Man… Nidoran, it sure stinks to be here without Larvitar…!’’

Nidoran looked in question at Djowie, who was sobbing all over the place… It understood what Djowie meant, but tried to cheer him up anyways… However, as Nidoran tried to do at least something, Djowie already began to talk…

’’If only we were stronger back then… Larvitar wouldn’t be in the pokécenter right now…’’

For a moment Djowie drifted away in his thoughts, and Nidoran saw his chance to make a move, but before long Djowie once again continued to talk…!

’’That’s why we’re gonna train for real this time, Nidoran! We have to get stronger! Not only for Larvitar’s sake, but also for our own!’’

Nidoran took on a puzzled look, eventually turning into a nervous look, but Djowie and Nidoran began the training. Djowie set up some courses to run, as well as to avoid certain obstacles, along with some other training methods.

’’Alright, let’s get started!’’

Nidoran gave it all, and ran the hinder course as fast as possible, dodging all kinds of obstacles, jumping over various holes and other obstacles, and eventually avoiding some trip wire.

After that Nidoran had to catch Djowie as fast as possible, and it soon proved Djowie was no match for the swift pokémon. As soon as Nidoran got bored of the training and left Djowie to run away on his own, Djowie decided to move on the next course…

’’Alright Nidoran! Avoid all the rocks I throw at you, and attack all the twigs!’’

Djowie hurled a rain of twigs and rocks at his Nidoran, which in turn did its best to do what it was told to, and to Djowie’s surprised Nidoran managed a lot better than he expected. In total Djowie threw about fifty rocks and thirty twigs, and Nidoran avoided all the rocks, and hit about twenty eight twigs.

’’Way to go Nidoran! Let’s go on to the final course! We’re gonna work on your accuracy, so hit the stick as good as you can!’’

Djowie threw a few sticks, and all except one were hit perfectly. But then again, who could expect his pokémon to hit a stick while his pokémon was using the bathroom in the bushes…?

’’Great job Nidoran! Let’s call it a day! Now let’s see… Only four more hours to go until we can pick up Larvitar… SO why not explore the many shops in Lakeroot town?’’

Nidoran looked surprised and even a little scared, but soon jumped on Djowie’s shoulder, aiming its front paw towards the town before letting out an excited cry.

’’Yup, let’s go! We might even buy something nice for Larvitar if we see it!’’

Djowie was about to take off with his Nidoran, as a shady figure behind a tree decided to call out for them…

’’Not so fast! I’ve finally found you!’’

Djowie turned around to face the person who was hiding behind the large tree, and the person’s glasses reflected Djowie’s startled face…

’’And you are…? … Wait a minute… I know you…!’’

The shady figure took a small step forward, and began to talk back, but he was still covered in the shadow of the tree…

’’Yes, it is true… You know me…! I would never forgive you if you didn’t know me…!’’
’’Then show yourself!’’
’’Oh, but it is I… Your worst nemesis to ever walk the very soil of this planet…’’

The shady figure finally stepped forward to reveal itself, and continued speaking as he saw Djowie’s surprised face…!

’’It is I… Edward!!! Oh yes, you thought you could beat me by leaving early… Leaving Shary and me behind… At that moment, I knew exactly what you thought…’’

Edward then imagined Djowie in the past, as he went to Professor Ivan’s place way earlier, leaving Shary and Edward behind…

’’Haha! I’ll leave early so I’ll be way ahead of those losers… No one can stop me from becoming the greatest trainer ever, heh heh heh!!!’’

In Edwards fantasy Djowie also summoned dark clouds, and as Djowie laughed, thunder spread trough the clouds, as it is famous in certain movie scenes…

’’Yes, that’s what you thought, didn’t you…? And so, I decided to train even harder than you, so that if we met… I could challenge you to a pokémon battle!!!’’

Edward pointed at Djowie as if he was accusing him of something, rather than just pointing at him to challenge him, but that didn’t stop him from talking…

’’And seeing you carry two pokéballs, let’s make it a match where we both use two pokémon!’’

Unfortunately Edward talked way ahead of himself, as he all of a sudden remembered something that he could never forget for as long as he would be a pokémon trainer… Exact details are left for another moment in this story, but Edward feared to use his own beginner pokémon against anyone he’d met… He was rather ashamed of his starter pokémon, but most importantly he feared it as well… As Edward sought an excuse to revert the battle back to a one versus one battle, Djowie began to talk…

’’I accept your challenge Edward, but…! Currently one of my pokémon is recovering at the pokécenter, which means I only have my Nidoran with me for the moment. So for now, let’s stick to a one versus one match…!’’

Filled with joy Edward thought that he didn’t have to use ’it’ against Djowie, and he happily accepted the one on one match.

’’Fine, just to make it fair for you, we’ll make it a one on one match…!’’
’’Deal! Go! Nidoran! Let’s see what the training has done for us!’’

Fully energised and excited Nidoran jumped off Djowie’s shoulder, ready to attack.

’’Heh, since my starter pokémon is WAY too tough for you, I’ll use the one that I caught! Go! Skarmory!’’

In front of Nidoran a large metallic bird appeared, which upon entering the fight opened its large and impressive wings to intimidate the Nidoran it was facing. Nidoran seemed unimpressed however…!

’’Skarmory! Fly up high!’’
’’Nidoran! Let’s take it down! Don’t let it get away!’’

As Edward’s Skarmory flew up high, Djowie’s Nidoran moved backwards, and took a large sprint forwards, before jumping up with all its might…! Djowie didn’t believe what he saw, and neither did Edward or his Skarmory…!

’’What the…?! Since when is a Nidoran capable of jumping that high…?!’’

Their surprised look quickly changed though, as when Djowie’s Nidoran flew so high that it blocked out the sun for a split second, Djowie came to a shocking conclusion…

’’Wait! Nidoran…! You’re going… Too fast…!’’

Nidoran looked surprised, and as soon as it flew over Edwards Skarmory it realised that it had jumped way to high… Djowie’s Nidoran made a large smack to the floor, and Edward took his chance to strike!

’’Skarmory! Drill peck! Now’s our chance!’’

Edward’s Skarmory flew up high, and its beak began to shine in a bright white light, before it came crashing down, circling along the way as it aimed for Djowie’s Nidoran… Both trainers looked tense at the scene, as a familiar voice interrupted them…

’’Ah! So I see you guys already met!’’

Both Edward and Djowie turned around to look who it was, and at the same time they replied surprised…’

’’Huh…? Shary…?’’

[End chapter 3]
 
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What IS it with you and broken poke starts? I mean, come on, less than a day and already a SKARMORY? o_O

Other than that, that was lmao cool. But... really, the pokes they have to start with here are ridiculous. If only I could have started with that kind of power... :p
 
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i like it and gamercal

1) it is supossed (don't know for sure if this is spelled correct plz correct if needed) to be strange
2) it's a fan-fic he can do what he wants
3) your right it's a nice fan-fic
 
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Your doing a good job with a created region, James. Just make sure you run this through Spell Check to fix any simple spelling errors.

Can't wait for the next chapter!
 
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Woah, way to fail lade... just because someone can do what they want with their fic, it doesn't mean that it's not worthy of a comment like I made. James is one of my closest mates on here, and he's been talking to me all the time when making this story. So, I think I know what it's meant to be like tyvm.

(For the record, it's supposed :p)

I'll probably see James tonight or tomorrow to check on the progress on this :)
 
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sorry gamercal i didn't mean to insult you i just said it to put in my way of thinking
 
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Chapter 4: The quest continues!

Welcome back to a new chapter of this story! Edward and Djowie are in the heat of a battle, with both sides giving it their all! Let’s take a look how it’s going!

’’No way! Skarmory, watch out!’’

Edward looked astonished as Djowie’s Nidoran jumped up to attack his Skarmory, and some fury swipes scratched Skarmory’s face…!

’’Since when can a Nidoran’s fury swipes hurt the metal skin of Skarmory…?!’’
’’A lot of training can make the difference!’’
’’Grrrr..! Skarmory! Steel wing!’’
’’Uh-oh…!’’

Drifting away from the battle scene were the Nidoran and Skarmory clashed fiercely, we look at Shary, who looks kind of awkward at both Edward and Djowie as they wage their own battle with insults and orders for their pokémon…

’’Boy stuff I guess…’’

Shary’s Chikorita agreed with her trainer, and took a step backwards in agony of the two fighting pokémon… and humans…!

’’Well, let’s go Chikorita! Torchic’s waiting at the pokécenter, and these two aren’t finished in a long while…!’’

Just when Shary was about to leave she suddenly felt a very awkward atmosphere behind her, and she had the feeling she was shrinking by the pressure she felt… She turned around to face Edward and Djowie, who were both looking down on Shary and her Chikorita quite angry…!

’’And where do we think we’re going…?!’’
’’Euh… Weren’t you boys busy battling earlier…?’’
’’Yeah, but the battle’s over…’’
’’No kidding…? So, who won…?’’

For a moment it went quiet, and both Edward and Djowie had a very awkward look on their faces… Then they began to talk in stereo…

’’It’s a draw…’’

Shary looked behind the twosome, and saw Edward’s Skarmory and Djowie’s Nidoran lying in the grass, both exhausted from the battle…

’’Well, that it’s a draw is a good thing right…? Now neither of you can tease nor brag against the other…?’’
’’Who are you kidding…?! My Skarmory’s WAY better than that Nidoran!’’
’’Hey! My Nidoran can make that chicken in tin faint in no time!’’
’’Why you…!’’
’’Come and get some…!’’

Shary sighed and pulled both trainers with her to go to the pokécenter to pick their pokémon up. By the time they arrived at the pokécenter, the six hours the nurse needed to fix up Djowie’s Larvitar had passed.

’’Larvitar! I’m so glad you’re okay!’’

Djowie ran up to his Larvitar, who was indeed healed completely. Djowie picked his Larvitar up, and gave it a big hug, but it appeared his Larvitar didn’t enjoy that and it wanted that Djowie put it back on the ground. Once back on the ground, it directly turned it’s back towards Djowie, and looked the other way.

’’W-what’s wrong…? Aren’t you happy to see me, Larvitar…?’’

Larvitar slightly turned around its head and glared at Djowie for a moment. Then it quickly turned around to face Djowie and it ran up to him, hugging his leg tightly.

’’Ah, I’m glad you’re okay after all! I missed you as well!’’

Larvitar quickly let go of Djowie’s leg, and crossed its arms and looked the other way. When Djowie checked his Larvitar out, he noticed it was slightly blushing. Only then did he understand what his Larvitar meant and felt…

’’Okay, okay…! I won’t mention it again, so let’s quickly go! I also want to introduce you to some of my friends I met up with!’’

Larvitar looked in question at Djowie, and followed it to the main room of the pokécenter, where Shary and her Torchic awaited them.

’’Well Larvitar, this here is Shary. She’s one of my friends from Smallthorn town.’’

Larvitar looked a little scared at Shary at first, but then approached her slowly.

’’It’s okay Larvitar, she’s a good person.’’
’’Don’t worry Larvitar, I won’t hurt you. If you don’t want me to touch you, then I won’t. Still I’m pleased to meet you!’’

Larvitar nodded, and quickly returned behind Djowie’s leg, glaring at Shary.

’’I’m sure Larvitar will eventually get used to you, so don’t mind him too much. Anyways, where’s Edward…?’’
’’He’s outside; he said he had to check on his starter pokémon.’’
’’Alright, let’s go and see him then.’’

Shary and Djowie went outside, but couldn’t see Edward anywhere.

’’What’s this…? Where’s Edward gone to…?’’
’’I don’t know, he told me he’d wait in front of the pokécenter for us…?’’

As Shary and Djowie looked around, they all of a sudden were startled by an arm that emerged from the bushes which grabbed a small tree. Both Shary and Djowie fell backwards from their fear, and they both landed on their bum… The arm pulled out a body from the bushes, and it was none other than Edward…!

’’GAH! Let go already! My leg isn’t a chew stick! You’re ruining my pants by the way…! Let go, or no more food for you! I said now! Let g-’’

Edward noticed Shary and Djowie, who didn’t know how to react on what they saw…

’’E-Edward…? Are you… alright…?’’
’’Heh, nothing’s wrong here Shary… Return to your pokéball!’’

Edward retrieved his pokémon from the bushes, and neither Shary nor Djowie actually saw what it was…

’’Y-you sure about that…?’’
’’Listen up Djowie, when I say everything’s fine, its fine, okay? Now, let us move on.’’
’’O-okay…!’’

Edward stepped out of the bushes, and one of his legs was completely covered in drool and his pants had some teeth marks in them, as well as it missed some parts… Djowie couldn’t help but to react on the sight as he and Shary got back to their feet…

’’Euh… Edward…?’’
’’What is it…?’’
’’Is that… drool on your pants…?’’
’’Maybe… Just ignore it.’’
’’And what about the teeth markings and the missing pieces…?’’
’’Like I said, just ignore it. I’ll go chance later on, and maybe even buy me some new pants, okay? Let’s head on.’’

Shary decided to interfere with the conversation, and she had a REALLY good argument for the two quarrelling boys…

’’So, where should we head out for…?’’

For a moment both Edward and Djowie got quiet, which was a rare thing to happen… They then looked at each other, and afterwards they looked at Shary.

’’Well, how am I supposed to know…? What about you, Edward?’’
’’Hey, don’t look at me! I’m just here to follow you and to eventually defeat you!’’
’’As if… Anyways, what about you, Shary?’’
’’Well, first I’m going to visit my parents in Dobuy city. My aunt gave me something to deliver to them, and then I’m going to explore the world first. I don’t have any goal at the moment, except for having fun with my pokémon and to enjoy this journey. I might even end up visiting other regions, like Kanto or Sinnoh!’’
’’Well, I suppose Edward and I could join you to see your parents, right? Or at least, for now?’’
’’Hey! Who said I wanted to join?!’’
’’You want to follow me, right…? Then you should follow me everywhere you know… And beating me is impossible anyways, so…’’’
’’You think that?! I’ll chase you to the end of the world if I must, solely to beat you!’’
’’You guys can come under one condition… And that is if you stop arguing all the time…!’’
’’Well, okay. I think I can ignore Edward for some time…’’
’’Hey! I heard that! Likewise mister!’’
’’Just cut it out already and hurry up. I want to get there before it gets dark.’’
’’So, how far is it precisely? I’ve never left Smallthorn’s surroundings, so I would have no idea where it would be?’’
’’It’s to the north-west of Lakeroot, and about a two hour walk.’’
’’Alright, what are we waiting for?! Let’s head out!’’
’’Okay!’’

The threesome moved out of Lakeroot town to visit Shary’s family in Dobuy City, after Edward changed his pants of course.

As the narrator I can tell you the real story will begin here, so please stay tuned for the next chapter and any future chapters!

[end chapter 4]
 
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It's a Totodile. Gotta be. 100% certainty. No way that can be wrong. What. So. Ever.

:p

Cool stuff though... funny to hear that these guys have NO idea where they're going in the world at all, despite having lived for this moment for the whole of their lives. You'd think they'd be prepared? :p

Guys, not girl. Shary knows what she's doing at least :p

Lade, don't worry about it. I'm not mad or anything, I just wanted to point out that everyone is entitled to their own opinions, and they aren't necessarily wrong on that alone. No harm done :)

Let's all rally to get James to make the next instalment ASAP! :D
 
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Keep it up, James. Your work is really funny!
 
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Chapter 5: The second day of the journey begins!

Last time we checked on our hero, Djowie, Shary, and Edward made way for Dobuy city. Let’s take a look at what they are doing right now…!

‘’You will never win! Go! Metagross!’’

Djowie hurled his pokéball, and in front of him a mighty Metagross emerged on the battlefield. It was ready to face a mysterious pokémon, who was responsible for all the waste around them. The pokémon had a deep blue skin, with whiskers emerging from both sides of its mouth, and a deep gaping mouth to pair it up with. It had fins emerging from all over its back, and a mighty crown separated its eyes who were evilly shining in a bright red light. Even though it was swimming in the lake that surrounded all the rubbish which was once a nice flourishing city, Djowie knew he could take on the pokémon with his Metagross…! And if he couldn’t defeat the pokémon, he would assault the trainer himself…! The trainer was standing in some sort of shade, and he couldn’t be seen clearly…

’’Ha! You think that silly Metagross of you can defeat my Gyarados…?! Gyarados! Show that trainer what true power means!’’

The Gyarados lunged out forward, ready to attack Djowie’s Metagross, but right before it hit its target it stopped in its tracks, and it looked at Djowie. All of a sudden it began to talk…

’’Are you sure you don’t want some eggs?’’

Djowie was startled by what had happened…! Since when could pokémon talk to human beings, let alone that they could ask if someone wanted… eggs…?

’’E-excuse me…?’’
’’You heard me right? Would you like some eggs for breakfast…?’’

For a moment Djowie was dazzled… He then decided to answer politely…

’’Well, yeah, sure… Why not? I like eggs… But what breakfast…?’’
’’The breakfast I’m preparing, silly…!’’

All of a sudden the trainer of the Gyarados stapped from the shade, and began to talk to the two of them…!

’’Forget about him, I guess he’s still not ready…’’

When Djowie took a good look at the trainer, he managed to see it was no other than… Edward…!

’’W-What the…?! Edward…?! I won’t stand for this! Metagross, attack Edward!!!’’

Djowie’s Metagross flew up high, and with a single gesture of Djowie’s hand the pokémon flew trough the air, hitting Edward direct on his head…!

’’Bulls eye!’’
’’What’s wrong with you…?! What was that for?!’’
’’What was that for…?! You ruined this city, swamped half of my team, and then you still have to ask what that was for…?!’’

The Gyarados came closer to Djowie, and with its mighty tail it slapped Djowie in the face…!

’’W-What the…?!’’
’’You ought to wake up! Do you have any idea what you’re doing…?!’’

Djowie looked at the Gyarados, and he realised he finally opened his eyes… The Gyarados slowly transformed into Shary, who was quite angry… He then looked at Edward, who stood behind Shary with a can in his hands…

’’W-Wha…? Where’s my Metagross…?’’
’’You idiot, your so called Metagross is this can you threw at my head in your sleep!’’
’’In my sleep…? But the ruined city… and the Gyarados…? What about the eggs…?’’
’’That’s what I’m asking you all the time…! Would you like some eggs or not?! Edward and I are already finished with our breakfast while you were busy dreaming about your Metagross and stuff… We tried to wake you up about an hour ago, but it seems as if a snoring Snorlax can’t even wake you from your dreams…!’’
’’Oh, well… euh… I’m sorry I guess…?’’
’’Sometimes you’re really hopeless, you know that…? But whatever, let’s forget it and get you some breakfast… after that we can see what to do…!’’
’’I can’t say no to that!’’

After Djowie finally woke up and went downside, he finally realized what had happened…

Of course, I could let Djowie explain it all, but as the narrator I’ll give you the shorter version so we can move on with the story…!

The day before Djowie, Shary, and Edward reached Dobuy city, and visited Shary’s family. Shary had to deliver a parcel to her parents, and it turned out to be nothing more than a new remote for their television…! However, when the threesome wanted to move on again it was already getting dark, so Shary’s family offered them to spend the night there. It was a nice opportunity for Shary’s parents to catch up with her again, since she had been living for almost two years with her aunt in Smallthorn town. She had a nice family, consisting of her father Albert who was 50 years old, her mother Yeming who was 49 years old, and her older brother Ives, who was 22 years old and he was roaming the world with his pokémon. So after spending the night there, the traveling trainers got ready for breakfast…!

’’Man, this is delicious! I could get used to this!’’
’’Well, don’t. Since we’ll be leaving quite soon…!’’
’’Well, that’s great and all, but where are we going then…?’’
’’Well, we’re quite lucky actually! Today’s the beauty contest in Dobuy’s shopping center! I’m curious how the judges will rate my pokémon on beauty…!’’

For a moment Djowie paused eating his eggs, and he slowly turned his head to watch at Edward…

’’Are you… going as well…?’’
’’Are you?’’
’’I’ll stick to my breakfast for now… are you going…?’’
’’Ha! No excuses! I will trace you down anyways, so simply tell me if you’re going!’’
’’What?! I just asked you if you’d go!’’
’’I’ll answer as soon as you’ve answered me!’’
’’That’s not fair! I asked you first!’’
’’Oh, just cut it out you two! Djowie, eat your eggs or I’ll smack them in your face! Edward, you should just get us some fresh water for now!’’

Startled by Shary’s furious response, Djowie continued eating his eggs and Edward went outside to fetch some water.

’’And still I want to know if you’re going…!’’

Djowie mumbled against Edward, but as soon as he saw Shary was looking at him with fire burning in her eyes he quickly finished his breakfast…! Afterwards Shary cleaned up the dishes, and Edward returned with some fresh water.

’’Euh… Shary? Why did I need to get some fresh water while you can get some water from the sink and all…?’’’
’’It was to keep you busy, and now that you’ve gotten it, we can use it to fill our bottles with it. We’ll be exploring the world after all.’’
’’Yeah, I guess so… what about food?’’
’’Don’t worry, I got it all ready.’’

Shary opened the fridge and showed Edward and Djowie some lunch packages.

’’Wow, Shary, how can we thank you?’’
’’Eating it will be satisfying enough.’’
’’Don’t worry, we will!’’

What Shary didn’t mention was that she wasn’t all that good at making any food with the exception of eggs, and that even her Growlithe ran away as soon as Shary made something for it. It’s still missing to this day on…!

’’So, for the last time Edward, are you going to the beauty contest…?!’’
’’Are you?!’’
’’I asked it first!’’
’’I don’t care! You just answer me!’’
’’No I won’t! You should answer-‘’
’’Both of you! Knock it off! If that’s the way its gonna be it, we’ll ALL go!’’
’’Wha…? But I don’t really feel like-‘’
’’No buts mister! You’re coming as well, and since Edward will follow you everywhere you go, that means he automatically also comes!’’
’’Y-Yes ma’am…!’’
’’Good. Now let’s going, I don’t want to be late…!’’

The threesome grabbed their bags and pokémon and left for the beauty contest. While walking toward Dobuy’s shopping center Djowie noticed just how many people lived here, and how crowded it all was in the streets… It was something completely different from Smallthorn!

’’Woah Shary, a lot of people live here… and when I say a lot, I mean a LOT!’’
’’Oh, you really think so? I must admit there are more people here than in Smallthorn, but I grew up here, so I don’t notice it all that much I guess.’’
’’Well, if there are more people here than in Smallthorn… Then this will be the place where more people will see me beating you Djowie!’’
’’Oh, just cut it out Edward, as if you can beat me…!’’
’’Is that a challenge…?!’’
’’Guys, cut it out! I mean it! If you argue one more time about something as small as that, I’ll abandon you to your fate in this crowded streets…!’’
’’Okay, okay…’’

After a while the threesome arrived in the shopping center, and Edward and Djowie couldn’t believe their eyes…! All kinds of shops were everywhere, and they had anything you could imagine for sale!

’’Oh my goodness, this is what I’ve been dreaming of all my life! Shops you can buy things you won’t even need but that are still fun to have are everywhere here! I bet Nidoran and Larvita-’’

For a moment Djowie froze. He suddenly remembered that he had put Larvitar inside its pokéball, but that he would release it as soon as they woke up…!

’’I better hurry up! Go! Larvitar!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar emerged on the scene, with its back against Djowie. It then slowly turned its head in Djowie’s direction, and as soon as Djowie had released his Nidoran, Larvitar jumped at Djowie, and a fight between the two ensured…!

’’H-hey! I didn’t mean to put you in there for so long…! Cut it out! Aaaaaaaaaaaah!!!’’

Larvitar stopped biting, scratching, hurling stones at Djowie, and kicking Djowie after a while. Djowie lay beaten up on the floor, but Shary quickly pulled him back to his feet.

’’Look! There they are! The contest judges!’’
’’Well, isn’t that just… great… Ugh…’’

Shortly thereafter Djowie fell back to the floor, exhausted of the busy morning…!

[end chapter 5]
 
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Hehe... oh dear, looks like Larvitar wasn't impressed by the forgetfulness of ol' Djowie there!

Lol, at the food comments though... kinda reminds me of what I'd have been like when I first left home ;)

Keep it up man :D
 
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Edward is screwed. Everyone knows they don't sell pants in Pokemon.

It's possible his starter is something that's not your average starter, like, Growlithe, or... Heatran, or something. Although Totodile is known for his relentlessness when he's bit into something, so chances are his starter may very well be a Totodile.

I was amused by the Nidoking stompdown, and Edward's second Pokemon being a Skarmory. Other than that I didn't really find it all that amusing.

Also, weird names. D:
 
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Chapter 6: Beauty contest, here we come!

Welcome, welcome! Welcome back to the latest chapter from this ever exciting story! Djowie and co have just encountered the beauty contest’s judges, and Shary is very excited to meet them!

’’Look! Look!’’
’’Ugh… Leave me alone… I didn’t want to come in the first place…’’
’’When I tell you to look, you look! Okay, Djowie?!’’
’’Yeah, yeah…! Just calm down…! I’ll look already…’’

Djowie stared in front of him, and noticed the contest judges. A very nicely shaped woman, a man in a neat suit, and an older man at age seemed to be the judges…

’’Okay, I looked, so now what…?’’
’’Well… euh… Djowie…?’’
’’What is it this time…? Can’t I just relax for a moment…?’’
’’Well… Where’s your Larvitar…?’’’
’’Why? He’s right in front of me?’’
’’Are you sure…?’’
’’Yeah, he’s right her-’’

But Djowie couldn’t believe his eyes as he said that… His Larvitar was gone!

’’Nidoran! Where’s Larvitar…?!’’

Djowie asked his Nidoran desperate, but without success… Instead of answering, Djowie’s Nidoran got this awkward facial expression, and it stepped backwards to hide behind Shary’s legs.

’’What’s wrong with you…?’’
’’Euh... Djowie…?’’
’’What?’’
’’Isn’t that… Your Larvitar…?’’
’’What…?!’’

Shary pointed at the nicely shaped lady, who was obviously holding a pokémon in her arms…

’’Larvitar! I’ll save you!’’
’’Djowie! Wait! I don’t think your Larvitar was kidnappe-’’

But Shary’s warning came too late. Djowie raced across the shopping center like a madman, ready to rescue his Larvitar! As he came closer, he began to shout, and he easily became the center of attention…

’’Larvitar! I’ll save you! Hold on!’’

Djowie jumped, and he quickly grabbed the waist of the lady. They then fell to the floor, en the woman got an even tighter hold of Djowie’s Larvitar, pushing it tight against her breasts.

’’Let go of my Larvitar, you… you… You contest judge type of woman, you!’’
’’Oooh… Excuse me, young man…? Is this your Larvitar…?’’
’’You betcha it is! So you better give it back!’’
’’Don’t worry, I will… here you go…’’

The lady stretched her arms out, handing out Djowie’s Larvitar back at him. To Djowie’s surprise his Larvitar was openly blushing, and even drooling for a little…! Its eyes stood focused up high, as if Larvitar was daydreaming.

’’Oh no! Larvitar! What has this foul woman done to you…?! Are you alright…?!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar snapped out of its trance, but it wasn’t all that happy to see Djowie… It looked mad at Djowie, and after a single loud shout it fiercely attack Djowie, and they two were rolling across the whole shopping center while fighting…!

’’Well, at least I’m happy to see you! That’s the last time I’ll try to save you from kidnappers!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar became even more enraged, and the two actually rolled off the shopping center, and ended up in the city pool…! Both Djowie and his Larvitar quickly stopped the fight, and they both reached for solid land as soon as they could… As soon as they crawled back on land, Shary and Edward came running towards them.

’’Way to go, you idiot!’’
’’What is it this time…?’’
’’Not only did you assault Miss Lazuli, you also ended up drawing all attention from everyone here, you managed to get all wet, and the last time I checked you left all your spare clothes at my place…’’
’’Hey, I had to save my Larvitar! That kidnappe-‘’
’’You idiot! Miss Lazuli isn’t a kidnapper! A judge from the beauty contest would never do such a thing!’’
’’I want evidence for that statement!’’

But before Shary could reply, Djowie’s Larvitar gave him a kick against his head.

’’Geez, alright, alright! I’ll go back and apologize then…!’’
’’You better! I don’t want my chances of entering the beauty contest ruined because you felt it so necessary to assault one of the judges!’’
’’Okay, okay, chill already…!’’

While still being wet from the fresh dive he made, Djowie walked up to the lady he had attacked to get his Larvitar back.

’’I’m sorry ma’am. I thought you had kidnapped my Larvitar… I hope you’re not all that angry…?’’
’’Have no worries young man. I find it rather cute that you risk so much to protect your Larvitar. You should watch it a little better though, as it came walking towards me on its own. I thought it might’ve been lost, so I picked it up.’’
’’Well, I guess I should be thanking you then… For looking after my Larvitar…!’’
’’Well, no thanks needed.’’

After a while Shary bumped into the conversation…

’’We’re so sorry Miss Lazuli! Are you hurt?’’
’’No, don’t worry. I made a little bump, but I’m perfectly fine, thank you.’’
’’Is there anything we can do to repay you…?’’
’’Well, now that you mention it…’’

Djowie swallowed for a moment. What could this woman possibly want in return for his reckless behavior…?! Djowie imagined himself serving as a slave in the woman’s house, doing dishes, cleaning the house, and feeding the animals… for eternity!

’’… I would like to see you and your friends entering the beauty contest!’’

Djowie was relieved to hear those words, but after a few seconds he realized what that meant…!

’’WHAT?!!’’

Shary quickly shut his mouth with her hand, and dragged him away from the scene.

’’We’d love to! Thank you so much for the invitation!’’
’’No problem at all! Just be sure you get some dry clothes on before entering little boy! We wouldn’t want you to catch a cold!’’
’’Don’t worry, he will!’’
’’Alright, I’ll be seeing you at the contest then! Take care!’’
’’Thank you, and we will be there!’’

Shary dragged Djowie over the floor while they where on their way back to her place. Edward and Djowie’s pokémon followed the dragging trail, and while they returned to Shary’s house, all that Djowie could pronounce was…

’’Little… boy…?’’

Once back inside, Shary didn’t want to waste a single second. She undressed Djowie bar his underwear, and put clothes back on. At least… Shary tried to put clothes back on. Half dressed she once more dragged Djowie back to the shopping center and once again Edward and Djowie’s pokémon followed… Once they arrived at the contest hall Djowie finally snapped back to his senses…

’’Little boy?! Larvitar! Let’s do this! We’ll show them who’s the little kid around here! We’ll win that beauty contest!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar looked very angry at Djowie at first, but after Djowie’s Nidoran had whispered something in its ear, it calmed down, and even gave Djowie a big smile…!

’’Now that’s the spirit! If she wants some proof I’m NOT a little kid anymore, then she’ll have it! I’ll win that contest with ease! What about it, Larvitar?!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar nodded in agreement, and the two formed a fist and raised it I nthe air full of determination! By forces unknown, fireworks were launched into the air behind them, and smoke filled the scene they were standing on…! After a few seconds both Djowie and his Larvitar came running out of the smoke heavily coughing…

’’Blegh, where did that come from…?!’’
’’The fireworks from up ahead in town silly. It’s the opening ceremony of the beauty contest!’’
’’Oh… I suppose we better hurry then!’’
’’Let’s go!’’

Djowie returned his Nidoran to its pokéball, and took his Larvitar on his shoulder. The threesome of Djowie, Shary, and Edward then began running towards the contest hall in order to attain to the contest. While on the way running Edward finally opened his mouth after being so quiet all the time…

’’Djowie, you are aware this is a BEAUTY contest right…?’’
’’Of course I am! I will win this battle by kicking every other pokémon’s butt with some serene grace from my Larvitar’s attacks, heh heh heh! They’ll never knew what hit them! What do you say, Larvitar…?!’’

Djowie’s Larvitar nodded, and Edward sighed. Edward wanted to reply to Djowie, but Shary interrupted him by whispering something in his ear…

’’Don’t you dare say a word against Djowie about the truth of these contests, or I won’t be making any more food for you…! Besides, the facial expression he’ll have after realizing it will be priceless…!’’

After Shary had convinced Edward not to tell anything, both Shary and Edward began to chuckle, as did Djowie and his Larvitar, but both parties where probably chuckling over something completely different…!

[end chapter 6]
 
RE: Pokémon Halfempty! (a more comical pokémon story! Chapter 5 online) Comments welcome!

Oh god, this is gonna be ridiculously funny next time round if you pull it off right. Not that it wasn't funny THIS time (I mean hey, Larvitar being babied is obviously going to win a funny award somewhere ;)), but you know, it should be even better next time.

Although if it wasn't for the fact that Edward can't make ANY food himself, I would've thought that the threat of not making any food would've been a GOOD thing for him :p

Keep at it :D
 
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