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hunter994x

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This includes made up characters along with characters from Pokemon, Yugioh, Yugioh GX and Naruto. The reason is I just felt like doing this. I incluled yugioh, GX, and Naruto characters because Yugioh, GX and Naruto are my favorite shows(I have more but they're not anime and they're about real stuff like criminal investagations). Also some Yugioh monsters have been transormed into pokemon. Finally, I got my fisrt season storyline from Coliseium and XD Gale of Darkness along with Yugioh's Battle City season and some of Yugioh's 4th season. Here's a link to some related stuff: PFF stuff Also if anyone has any ideas for the sotryline or how to improve it, feel free to say.

Main Characters

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Tryce Crawford
Age 17
Mother: Lucy Crawford
Father: Jason Crawford
Sblings: Joey Crawford Age 17, Gary Crawford Age 11, Steven Crawford Age 8
Girlfriend: Susan Cordack
Status: Number 1 trainer in the world known as King of Trainers
Bio: The son of the president of the Pokemon League Inc. He grew up in a luxurious lifestyle. Other than Kaiba and his dad, he's the only known person to catch a legendary pokemon, let alone 4. 4 of his six pokemon are on LV 100
Pokemon are...
Ho-oh LV 100
Mewtwo LV 100
Mew LV 100
Lugia LV 100
Charizard LV 99
Salamence LV 99
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Susan Cordack
Age 17
Mother: ???
Father: William Cordack
Sblings: Mark Cordack Age 9
Boyfriend: Tryce Crawford
Status: Queen of Trainers
Bio: Susan has been arrested many times until she met Tryce. Since then, she has not had any problems. She had a very bad mother who hurt her until she was caught and now in a federal prison serving a life setence.
Pokemon are...
Blastoise LV 100
Feraligater LV 100
Electivire LV 100
Swampert LV 100
Luxray LV 99
Gardevior LV 99


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Joey Crawford
Mother: Lucy Crawford
Father: Jason Cawford
Sblings: Tryce, Gary and Steven.
Status: ???
Bio: Tryce's brother. He doesn't have a girlfriend because he is too lasy(somtimes)

Pokemon are...
Rhyperior LV 100
Garchomp LV 100
Gengar LV 100
Typhlosion LV 99
Camerupt LV 95
Aerodactyl LV 89

If anyone wants to see the remainig main characters, I'll e-mail them.

New Pokemon
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Blorda: Dragon/Ice
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Raidora: Fire/Ghost
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Slifer: Dragon/Fire
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Obelisk: Ghost/Steel
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Ra: Dragon/Thunder
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Hermada: Dragon/Fire
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Tamada: Dragon/Water
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Doomada: Dragon/Ice
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Raintara: Ice/Dragon
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Exorda: Normal

New Moves
Storm Rage: Type: ??? Damage: 200
Dark Mind: Type: Ghost Damage: 50 and causes Pralasyis
Rocket Punch: Type: Fighting Damage: 100
Psychic Crush: Type: Psychic Damage: 90 and causes Pralasyis
Burst Stream: Type: Dragon Damage: 130
Black Flame: Type: Fire Damage: 60 and 40% chance of burn


Prologue
10000 years ago, the planet was in chaos, Kyogre and Groudon had stop fighting but a new threat emerges. The shadows were born, corrupting the minds of the citizens of the lost city of Atlantis. Now the shadows have corrupted a human mind and with him the return of the most feared pokemon in existence, the Shadow Lugia, cloned from the remains of the real Shadow Lugia that died 10000 years ago. The same one that caused the downfall of Atlantis. Atlantis was normal until the Shadow Lugia, followed by a army of Dark Pokemon, caused destruction and devesated lives. Then the King of Atlantis along with his most loyal subjects, Mewtwo and Lugia, destroyed the Shadow Lugia in a fierce battle after Shadow Lugia failed to beat the normal Lugia the first time. Now only one person can stop this madman from helping the Shadow Lugia complete what it started 10000 years ago.

Episode 1: Pokemon corruption
KC arena... The International Pokemon Leauge finals
Tryce: Lugia, Hyper Beam!!!
Kaiba: He's champion again... It's a shame he has a brother who doesn't have a brain.
Meanwhile...
Marik: I don't have anything to worry. Anyone who stands in my way will drown in the darkness.
Vicious: Master Marik, shall I send someone to pay Kaiba a visit?
Marik: No, with Heatran on his side, I'll need to face him. Just make sure nobody challenges Tryce. The last thing we need is a trainer with 4 legendaries on his side and they're are on level 100 and have been well trained. Anyway, now my Ghouls, spread out!!!
Vicious: What if they find you?
Marik: It doesn't matter. I can't be beat because I have 6 cloned legendaries are on my side and they're have been corrupted by the shadows making them twice as powerful. Soon the 3 most powerful pokemon will be corrupted.The ones who have been sealed away for centuries. Obelisk, Slifer and Ra, the ones who created the pokemon will be corrupted by shadows and I will be unstoppable(evil laugh)
Vicious: Now we have enough energy to revive Obelisk.
Marik: Very well. God of pokemon who created the land, hear me as I call you from your slumber!!!!!!
A giant pokemon appeared out of nowhere
Marik: Obelisk is too weak now. Now we need enough energy to revive Slifer and Ra and now to give Obelisk his power so he can battle.
Meanwhile...
Joey: Those guys are idiots.
Tryce: They'll never guess that we already revived Ra.
Ra: Actually I awakened myself.
Joey: IT TALKS?!
Ra: Obelisk has already been corrupted by the shadows. We need to call Slifer before they do.
Tryce: Who?
Ra: The Trainers of Darkness. Who are you?
Tryce: I'm Tryce
Ra: From now on, I'll be your partner.
Tryce: I already carry 6 pokemon...
Ra: Don't worry. I don't count and I don't need a pokeball.
Joey: Um... We got a problem
Ra: It's a whole army of Dark Dragonite. I'll handle this.
Tryce: I'll help(pulls out a Master Ball and a Ultra Ball). Go get them, Mewtwo and Lugia, use Ice Beam and Shadow Ball!!!
Joey: It's not working!
Ra: My turn( uses a powerful blast)
The Dark Dragonites fled
Tryce: That is one powerful Hyper Beam...
Ra: Together, we'll stop the darkness!
Tryce: I agree...
Susan: Tryce!!! WHAT IS THAT??!!
Tryce: One of the 3 pokemon gods. Ra created the sun. Obelisk created the land and Slifer created the sky. This one is Ra.
Susan: So where's Obelisk and Slifer?
Tryce: Obelisk has been corrupted while Slifer has yet to be revived.
Meanwhile...
Marik: NOOOO!!! Ra has already been revived!!!!
Vicious: It's worse than that. The rockets have figured out our plan.
Marik: It doesn't matter. They can't stop me.
Somwhere around the world, Kyogre, Groudon and Rayquaza have sensed the awakening of the gods. Dexoys had also sensed it.
Also at a lab in Iceland...
Scincetist: W-What is going on?
In Florida...
Kid: Woah cool!
In Indiana...
??? What is happening
At Kaibacorp HQ
Kaiba: What the...?!
Tryce, Joey, Susan and Tryce's friends don't relaize that the fate of all pokemon are in their hands.

End of Episode 1

Episode 2: The evil is known

Marik: You're a Team Rocket Admin aren't you?
Oakley: Yes and I challenge you!! Go Shedinga
Marik: That must be your strongest pokemon. If so then here's mine... COME FORTH SHADOW LUGIA!!!!!!!
A cage opened and a black Lugia came out.
Marik: You can use all your pokemon but they'll all fall against the Shadow Lugia.
She calls out her Toxiccroak, Crobat and Rapidash but with just one Hyper Beam, the Shadow Lugia defeats all 4 of her pokemon.
Oakley: I-I lose...
Marik: Now you know who your dealing with(evil laugh).
Vicious: Master Marik, The leauge is hosting a tournament.
Marik: I know. I've send Camula, Aaron and a few others to enter.
Meanwhile...
Jaden: So whats going on?
Ash: I'm hungry
Aster: Excatly what's ging on.
Tryce: My dad is hosting a tournament and he wanted me to tell you guys that you've been invited to participate in it.
At the same time...
Aaron: So we meet again Mr Kaiba.
Kaiba: What do you want Aaron, come to beg to give your job back?
Aaron: Actually I've come to take you down(snaps his fingers) Meet my Dark Salamence and Dark Hitmochan.
Kaiba: A double battle huh. Go Heatran and Blorda!!
Aaron: Dark Salamence Hyper Beam!!!!!!!
The Hyper Beam missed but destroyed the gate to the KC parking lot.
Aaron: You see, Dark pokemon are more powerful and when you lose this battle, the shadows will strip you of your soul. However I'm protected because with this anti shadow charm, even if I lose my soul will remain!!!
Kaiba: This will shut you up, Blorda use Hyper Beam!!! Heatran use Overheat!!!
Kaiba wins the battle
Aaron: T-th-this isn't over Mr Kaiba, I'll be back to destroy you!!!
Meanwhile...
Susan: Tryce what is this place?
Tryce: I'll be managing the tournament from here... Well what do you know, this is a book on Team Rocket.
Susan: There's more!
Tryce: It seems this is also a pokemon libaray... Intersting... I'll put thie contols on automatic so it'll record data itself.
Susan: Isn't this a book on the battle of Atlantis?
Tryce: Yes... Let's see... 10000 years ago, the Shadow Lugia battled the normal Lugia and it was a draw.
Meanwhile...
Ash: It's starting!!
??? We meet again Jaden.
Jaden: Tell me that's not who I think it is...
Mark: You know the rules. Show how many star chips you bet?
Jaden: 2
Mark: Fine now let's battle.
Jaden: You're on!! Go Blazekin!!
Mark: Again with your starter? Hmph...This will be easy. Come out Gengar!!!
Jaden: Blazekin, Flamethrower!!!
Mark: Gengar counter with Shadow Ball!!!
Joey: That's one powerful Shadow Ball...
Jaden: Oh no!!!
Mark: Now we know who's been training...
Jaden: Return!!! Alright... Go Absol!!! Use Shadow Ball!!
It was a direct hit...
Mark; GRRRRR!!! Gengar, Thunder!!!
Jaden: Absol use your Thunder!!!
Both pokemon were knocked out
Jaden: Go Metagross!!!
Mark: Go Dusclops!!!
Jaden: Metagross Psychic!!!
Metagross's Psychic knocked out Mark's Dusclops wiht one attack. By using Metagross, Jaden won.
Mark: GRRR!! Here's your star chips...
Jaden: I have 4...
Meanwhile...
Tryce: So Jaden has 4 star chips...
Mewtwo: I sense a dark presence...
Tryce: Don't worry about it Mewtwo. The Trainers of Darkness are too busy for all of them to come here but there might be a few here...
Susan: I wonder how the others are doing?
Meanwhile...
Bakura: Fool!! I will drown you in the darkness!!!
Trainer: I-I don't s-stand a chance...
Bakura: Of course you don't!! Dark Blastoise, Storm Rage!!!
Trainer: I-I lose...
Bakura: Your soul is mine(evil laugh)!!!
Trainer: NOOOOO!!
Bakura: Now since his soul is gone... Let the darkness take over!!!
The person rises
Trainer: The darkness is with me... My name is Thomas
Bakura: Now feed your pokemon this. Thses are Dark Pokeblock. This will make your pokemon even stronger.
Thomas does and all 6 of his pokemon are dark pokemon...



End of Episode 2
 
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Episode 3

Joey: Aerodactyl use Hyper Beam!!
Kid: NOOOOO!! MIGHTYENA!!
Joey: Yes!! I have 4!!
Later...
Mako: Hey you!
Joey; Me?!
Mako: You're Joey Crawford, brother of Tryce Crawford, aren't you?
Joey: Yeah...
Mako: Let's see if you're as good as your brother!!
Joey: I accept!! I'll bet 3 star chips
Mako: Fine...
Joey: Go Metagross!!
Mako: Gyarados!!
Mteagross use Shadow Ball!!
The attack was a direct hit.
Mako: Gyarados use Flamethrower!!
Joey: WHAT?! GRRR!! Reutrn... Go Feraligater!! Use Hydro Cannon!!
Gyarados was knocked out in one hit
Mako: Go Milotic!!
Joey: Feraligater return... Go Metagross!!
Mako: Milotic use Hydro Pump
Metagross took little damage.
Joey: Metagross use Hyper Beam!!
Milotic was knocked out...
Mako: Blastiose!!
Joey: Metagross return... Go Garchomp!!
Mako: Blastoise Hydro Pump
It did minimal damage
Mako: WHAT?! That should have been super effective!
Joey: Should be... but Garchomp is a ground/dragon type. Now Garchomp Hyper Beam!!
Blastiose was knocked out
Mako: GRRR!!
Mako's next pokemon is Satmie but it's defeated by Garchomp's Dragon Claw. Next, Mako uses his Empoleon but it's also defeated by Garchomp's Earthquake. Mako last pokemon is Crawdaunt but it's also defeated by a direct hit from Garchomp's Fire Blast which was werid since fire types are weak against water.
Joey: Now I have 7... 3 more...
Meanwhile...
Aster: I have 10 star chips...
At the same time...
Kaiba: Hmph. I have 10 star chips...
Meanwhile:
Marik: I have 10 star chips. The shadows will consume all(evil laugh)
5of the 8 finalist were Joey, Kaiba, Camula, Ash and Jaden. Susan was atuomatically in the finals

1st round: Marik vs Jaden... Marik wins(poor Jaden)
2nd round: Aster vs Kaiba... Kaiba wins
3rd round: Susan vs Ash... Susan wins
4th round: Joey vs Camula... Joey wins

In the semifinals, Marik and Kaiba wins and in the finals it was a draw.
Marik: We'll see how long you guys last before I banish you into the darkness
The next day
Tryce: Dad, what's up?
Jason: I was supposed to give a trainer named Dawn her first pokemon, a Piplup. Then a Pidgeot escaped and she took after it so I waht you and Joey to find her.
Tryce: You got it. Let's go Joey
Joey: Wait up!!
They end up in a forest
Tryce: crud... This forest is home to some powerful pokemon... We better hurry...
Meanwhile...
Dawn: Where are we?
Then a group of aabout 25 Mightyena appear.
Dawn: Oh no!!
She runs into a dead end
Dawn: What do we do now Piplup?
Piplup is scared. Then a Hyper Beam comes out of nowhere scaring some of the Mightyena.
Tryce: Looks likes we came at the right time. Joey you stay with her, I'll handle this.
Joey: Okay...
Tryce: Alright you oversized Poochyenas let's fight!! Ho-oh come out!! Lugia use Aeroblast!! Ho-oh use Scared Fire!!
All the Mightyena was defeated
Tryce: Let's get out of here.
At the lab
Jason: Thanks you two. You're free to go.
Tryce: Joey, you want to get some pizza with the others?
Joey: Of course. I'm starving!!
Dawn(blushes)T-thanks...
Tryce: No problem. By the way, my name is Tryce. See you...
They leave...
Jason: Dawn good luck catching pokemon.
Dawn: Thanks...
She leaves. Meahwhile...
Tryce: King of Atlantis?
Joey: Bakura what wrong with you?
Bakura: Bakura... Is no longer here. His soul has been taken by the shadows and I've taken his place!! We'll meet again... WHAT THE?!
Tryce's voice changes
Tryce(King of Atlantis) I never thought the shadows will return.
Bakura: Ah the King of Atlantis... I don't have time...
Tryce returns to normal
Tryce: What the...?!
Meanwhile, Regirock decided to come out of its cave due to the massive amount of energy created by thr Shadow Lugia.
Tryce: Who are you?!
? Listen. The Trainer of Darkness leader is a man named Marik. Farewell.
Joey: I swear, we always encounter werid things...
The next day
Tryce: So have you caught any pokemon Dawn?
Dawn: Yes take a look.
She shows him a Pidgeotto, Vaporeon, Espeon, Luxio, Primplup, Slugma and Staravia.
Susan(thinking) Who does she think she is? Tryce is mine!!
Meanwhile...
Kaiba: Who are you?!
Bakura: I've come to crush you and steal your soul. Go Dark Manetric!!
Kaiba: Steelix you're up.
Bakura: Manetric Volt Tackle
Kaiba: WHAT?! That did more damage than usual.
Bakura: Don't you ever learn? Dark Pokemon are twice as powerful than non-legendary pokemon and when you lose, your soul will be sealed away for eternity(evil laugh)
Kaiba: Hmph. Steelix use Iron Tail!!
It was a direct hit
Bakura: That's nothing Dark Manetric use Hyper Beam
Steelix was knocked out
Kaiba: GRRR!! Go Raidora!! Use Flamethrower!!
Dark Manetric was knocked out
Bakura: Not bad but how will you handle this!! Go Dark Typhlosion
Kaiba: You're crazy. I'm gonna crush you!!
Bakura: I'd like to see you try.
Kaiba: Answer this: What are you guys up to?
Bakura: I guess I'll tell you... I'm one of the exceutives of the Trainer of Darkness. There are 4 more exceutives As for our plan, we are going to take over the pokemon world. We are going to clone every legendary and make them dark pokemon. There's more, we are going to corrupt the Pokemon gods. We already have one.
Kaiba: I've heard enough!! Raidora, Hyper Beam!!
Bakura: Dark Typhlosion use Overheat
Both attacks hit their target and both pokemon are knocked out.

To be continued...
 
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