Writing Project Mew (in progress)

CJBlazerX87

CJBlazerX87

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Prologue
Alarms blared throughout the confines of Team Rocket’s headquarters. Disturbed by the noise, the dark silver Pokémon opened his eyes and looked back and forth across the lab. He couldn’t move, unfortunately, due to the restraints. He could only watch.

Just then, the door slid open and a member in a black outfit stepped through the door. He paused in front of the Pokémon in the restraints.
“Giovanni, sir, what shall we do with Prototype Three?” The man asked. At first, it seemed as if the member was talking to something unseen, but then the Pokémon noticed a headset attached to his ears.
“Just leave it,” came the voice from the headset. “Mewthree is too risky. Mewtwo should be good enough.

“Yes, sir,” said the member. He looked at the Pokémon, who was staring back at him, his red eyes locked on the member. The member sighed and turned to leave.

Oh no you don’t the Pokémon hissed. He tried to perform a psychic attack, but it failed due to the restraints. The lights went out in the lab and within minutes, Mewthree slipped back into unconsciousness with a single thought: Giovanni must die.
 
Alright, since Psychic does not need any physical movement from the user like The Force does, the restraints would be obsolete. Try describing the surroundings a little more: What does the room look like? Are the floors cracked and dirty, or are they clean and crisp? Is the room well-lit? Is Mewthree strapped in a tank or tied to a table? What shoes is the man wearing? Is there anything about his clothes that make him stand out?

It seems much too short, as well.

Sorry if I sound negative, but this is constructive criticism and you should build off it, and do not take offense.
 
What part about the 1000 word minimum, and the spaces between every paragraph did you forget? ._.
 
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