Writing Team Galactic's Reign of Terror. My first Fanfic ever!

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Ho-Oh_Master

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Introduction
What if the Palkia AND Dialga's capture by Cyrus was sucessful and the Main Characters in Diamond/Pearl , Lucas and Dawn , had fallen into the grasp of Team Galactic. This is one man's story to get everything that was lost back...

Chapter one: The Dawn of a new legend
**Scene=In the forest**
And Ralph suddenly woke up, noticing the bright sun shining on his face. That's weird Ralph thought as he remembered the dream he had last night.Your destiny is something that you can never change he remembered as the last thing he heard before he woke up. Suddenly, he discovered a strange ball with red on the top and white on the bottom with a small circle in the middle of the front.
"Why am I here?" He said, frustatingly, and threw the ball and then the ball opened and showed a red ray to what looks like a chick.
Use it wisely Ralph heard in his head and without warning he was ambushed by a Team Galactic Grunt and a Scizor. "This is Grunt no. 375, Mars, and I just found myself a Ho-Oh!" The grunt said. But without knowing what Ralph is doing, he commanded the baby
Ho-Oh, "Sacred Fire!". The Baby Ho-Oh showed Thousands of flames burning the Scizor and it's master. Ralph looks up and says "Ho-Oh, I think this is going to be a wonderful friendship" as he stares up to the now darkened sky, without knowing what he and Ho-Oh will face...

Author's notes
Well, what do you think? Please give me some slack since this is my first fanfic.
 
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