Writing The Darkness Chronicles

J

Juliacoolo

He looms over city and state.
Planning his revenge.
Watching the destroyed sky.
Bluffing as
Blossoming dawn overwhelms the imense darkness
and the reaper, flies down, to greet his next victim


"Mom" yelled Casey, reaching for her backpack,
"We're going to be late for school if you don't hurry up".
"Coming!" Yells her mom, annoyed with caseys sassy tone.
Casey slides down her steps, anxious for her first day at Cleadon high.
The two of them start the Honda, greeted by the gutit-gutit-gutit of the motor. They pass through milktank farms, and past the zoo.The loud sould of casey's pokepod, is interupted by a loud sonic boom. She quikely looks out the window. Suddenly, the window shatters into pieces, and a huge grey and gold beast swoops down and picks her up, and knocking her out cold. Taking her to his base of darkness. The lost zone.

More to come. Any good?
 
I know its short and bad. I jst want to know if I should stay with this, or start a different.
 
Needs to be longer, a lot longer but if you just re-do it then you might, might get more readers!
 
I read, I liked, I think you should continue.The only thing I have to say is: WORK ON YOUR SPELLING!!!!
 
Yes I know. I have chapters 1, 2, 3, and 4 done. I'll post tuesday night. Left them at school. In segment two, view point switches to Brett, a kid in our world, (you know, NOT pokemon) Who gets cursed with a horrible fate, not knowing, that his killer is being controlled by a evil creature that has his 22,000thgreat grandmother hold captive. Yes, I imagine that the pokemon world would be in the past, not future. It will be explained iin chapter 41-44. I'll work on spelling.
 
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