Writing The Divide

[dragonspit999]

I have a reading project to do at school, and I did it on a book. I did a poem, and was suprised. This is my poem:

Divides are places in the earth.
Where the plates come apart.
They are awesome.
They are magical.
They can warp you
To another world.
In this world
Humans aren’t real.
Mythical animals
Founded this place.
There are dragons
Unicorns, and elves.
Real things are fake.
Fake things are real.
But a boy gets warped
To this other land.
When he comes
It causes trouble.
Everyone wants
What is in his head.
They want the secret
To this “myth” called science.
He has to make friends
And keep science hidden.
An evil elf named Snakeweed
Wants to control the world.
He needs the science
And will do anything to get it.

Good, or no good? Criticizm please.

 

[Zorua]

Very nice little story within a poem. I suggest continueing the poem, so the story can wrap up in the end

 

[dragonspit999]

Well, in the reading project, we want to get people to read the book. Not telll them the end so they can know the begining and the end without reading the book. I might finish it for the fun of it though.