Writing The Leafeon an Glaceon Tale

[piplupx33]

ok now in the beginning it is kind of like a mystery, and then adventure, and savory. just to let you know! and at first I don't know what pokemon are

oh characters:
leafeon
me
glaceon

Chapter One​

"Crash" a tree fell over as lightning struck.I quickly jumped and hid my head under the covers.I was scared to death as i heard voices mumbling in my head that seemed to say, "Help,Save Us!".I tried to calm down by going to sleep, but nothing helped. As the storm slowly passed by i decided to go out-side to see what troubles the storm had caused.When I heard a whimpering coming from a bush. To my mind it seemed as there were two weird creatures one was green and had a leaf as a tail and the other was blue and had ice cold breath.I didn't know what to do so I took them inside to hide them in my room.As it seemed they were crying I gave them some water to drink. Then they both hummed a happy tune.It gave me an idea. "If i record their sounds and put them online people will tell me what they are" I told myself.

chapter 2 coming soon!

 

[Lenny]

Uhh, I'm kinda of confused, but that like what you said, in the beginning its a mystery.

So far, it is ok. Nothing out of the ordinary. I'll read Ch. 2 when you update it.

 

[Chuck Norris]

Hmmm...nice plot, but you should defineitly make the chapters longer.

 

[Lenny]

Oh ya, I forgot to mention that. Make a the chapters longer. I Like Pokeymanz gave me good advice. Try to make your chapters like I Like Pokeymanz's writing style. It makes the writing more clear and more enjoyable to read.

 

[piplupx33]

ok thanks for info!

 

[piplupx33]

ok chapter 2:

I quickly held my breath as i posted the creatures sounds online.Five minutes had passed and still nobody replied."Had I discovered a new species of animals" I thought to myself. When "ding" the computer let off a sound. I knew that somebody had answered my post.I clicked on it to find somebody had said" Those creature's names are Leafeon and Glaceon, they are pokemon, people say that pokemon are from another world, but what do they know, i own one myself! ~Gary
"Ok who the heck is Gary, and what are pokemon, i still don't get it!," i said if i were questioning the so called "pokemon".I quickly typed in google.com so i could do more research on Leafeon and Glaceon.
There were a whole bunch of websites, the first one was pokemon.com and pokebeach.com. I checked out the websites, It was true! The one with the green leaf was leafeon and had all sorts of grass ability.The second one that was blue and had ice breath was glaceon and had the ability of ice. I gasped as i ran for my friend's house to tell them the news, nobody was home. I turned my back to find Leafeon and Glaceon by my side. one had this weird watch thing in it's mouth while the other had this pocket sized computer gadget. I was in Sinnoh, with two pokemon, their weird gadgets when a man with white hair and moutache.Hello, Professer..Oak? "Do I know you from somewhere?," he questioned me.
"I live right down the street," I told him. "Ah, I see you have found my lost pokemon, leafeon and glaceon."he told me. "you know about those pokemon creatures too??" I said "Do you by any chance know a boy named Gary" I continued. "why, why yes i do, he is my neice.
If you start your pokemon journey he will probaly be your rival."replied Prof.Oak."Woah, what pokemon journey?"I questioned him again."With Leafeon and Glaceon of course, pokemon don't just come out of the air you know!"Prof. Oak stated. So following the directions Leafeon, Glaceon and I set out on our jouney through the pokemon world.

ok now through the story there is going to be gary,prof.oak,different pokemon,leafeon,glaceon,me,and last but not least trainers,ash, misty,brock,dawn,may,max and Team Rocket