Writing the story of the lost mudkip

[Staraptor]

Umm..
I'm not exactly sure what to say...

First of all, the story is tiny. That can't even be considered a prolougue.
Next time, type it into a word processing document. It'll help you to see how much you've written (a page is a decent legth for a chapter) and can also fix spelling and grammatical errors.

Which brings me to my next point; your spelling is awful. Use spellcheck, or you might be considered a n00b by other members.
Spellcheck can be found in most good quality word processing packages, or failing that, I believe that the internet browser known as Mozilla Firefox comes with a spellcheck feature.


A final point is, the story doesn't make sense at all. I mean, it doesn't have any plot aside from a Mudkip running away to Africa. Please read over things before you post them.

Take a look at some of the other stories here. That should give you an idea of what a story should look like.

 

[twin tails]

this story suck sorry to say but plz work it the spelling stinks and there isn't a line in your story
do you really want to be ig,ored by the rest i really don't mean to be rude but plz do something about it

 

[~Magma King~]

but he lefft cuz who wants to live in africa????

That was actually quite hilarious XD
And, uh yeah, work on your story writing skills. And FrozenGallade, although it isn't as bad as this, your story is sucky too. You said his spelling sucks, which is true, but so does yours. Don't be a hypocrit.

 

[Staraptor]

I'm pretty sure I remember frozengallade mentioning that he is foreign. So don't be too harsh on him for his spelling mistakes.
And the plot of his story isn't bad at all. It's mainly just grammatical issues that make it look bad.

my english teacher gave me an A+ on this paper.

For some reason, I doubt that...
Unlike frozengallade's story, your story has no conceivable plot whatsoever.

 

[twin tails]

thx for the compliment piplup
and your 100% right

ps yeary lump wages if you don't like my story don't read it
and i TRY to be as good in grammar that i can that's easier for someone who always talks and writes english then some who just learns it at school (i mean with the last part ME)

 

[~Magma King~]

I wasn't intending to be harsh :S. And I know your foreign, but still, don't be hypocritical.

 

[twin tails]

okay i'm glad that your honest but you could do it it without being rude
and your right even if i'm foreign i still eedt o do my very best to spell correctly i already try to do so by using word and translate from dutch to english but it isn't always correct
so

 

[darkrai1246]

Actually there are some things I need to explain...
1. The account was banned
2. the story was part of "the test"
3. It was just a mod testing us to see if we give out proper reps'...

 

[~Magma King~]

okay I'm glad that your honest but you could do it it without being rude

In no way was that post rude, or intended to be rude. I told you that you shouldn't be hypocrticial. There's nothing wrong with that.

Where'd the story go?