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[PikachuFanForever]

RE: Kyle's Journey Chaptor 1 up

Amazing! Will there be a chapter 2?

 

[greenscene]

RE: Kyle's Journey Chaptor 1 up

Ya there will, but in a while. School comes first

 

[PikachuFanForever]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 1 up

yeah.Great, can`t wait!

 

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RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 1 up

Thanks Chaptor 2 will come pretty soon

 

[greenscene]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 2 is up!!

Chaptor 2 is up!!!!!!!!

 

[PikachuFanForever]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 2 is up!!

YUS! It is great! can`t wait until next chapter to see what happens! this chapter is great! sorry for all the !`s lol

 

[greenscene]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 2 is up!!

I have already written the next chaptor, but i cant post it yet

 

[PikachuFanForever]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 2 is up!!

ok! hope you post it soon.

 

[greenscene]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 2 is up!!

Anyone want to post on my story?

 

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RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 3 is up!!

Bump Bump Bump, Anyone want to post??

 

[CT_400]

RE: Kyle's Journey Mareep! Chaptor 3 is up!!

Hmmm, it's an OK story.

Here are my suggestions:

Maybe putting more movement and action into your story will grab more readers

Also, try spacing between each sentance. It'll be easier on the eyes

And replace the 'ROAR' with an actual sound like: 'CHHAARRR!' Charizard roared, spitting multicolored flame from its open mouth

You can also say: Gengar tried to jump out of the way, but Charizard's flamethrower was too quick and slammed the large purple pokemon to the wall ---- or something along those lines

Check out other people's fanfics if you're having trouble


Don't give up!!