Writing Choose your Destiny: A pokemon Adventure for the Ages

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This is my new fanfic! The story includes the two writing styles I talked about in this thread.


http://www.pokebeach.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=17156&page=1

Heres the List of Characters.

Name: Andrew [Black Rayquaza]
Pokemon: Lucario,Alakazam,Arceus[UBER],Metagross,Dragonite,and Roserade*.
Reserves:Gengar,Starmie, and Gyarados.
Bio:A very competitve, respectful person, who is very strong-willed and willing to help anyone.

Name: Jack [Torrmence]
Pokemon: Infernape, Dakrai, Abomasnow, Rhyperior, Garchomp, Gallade Reserves: Swampert, Typhlosion, Venomoth, Electivire
Bio: He is never shy and is always confident in his skill. He has a natural ability to battle well and is always aggresive, he is a good leader and teacher but can also learn at an enormous pace.

Name: Aden [Master of the 6 Kings]
Pokemon: Ramparados, Cleffable, Chatot, Quilava, Wigglytuff, Cherrium
Reserves: Miltank, Hippowdon, Carnivine and Cloyster
Charectristics: More of a staragist, who rarely gets worked up. A natural shirker who often forgets to train until last minute. Has more desire for a tatical team with tactical moves, rather then a full powerful collection.

Name: Max [MaxPokemonMaster]
Pokemon: Charizard, Furret, Lizardon, Nidoking, Aggron, Feraligatr
Reserves: Manectric, Infernape, Drapion, Torterra
Bio: For more info, visit http://www.pokebeach.com/forums/showthread.php?tid=14055

Name: Will [shard79]  
Pokemon:Sceptile, Swellow, Luxray, Weavile, Pikachu, Floatzel
Reserves:Staraptor,Chimchar,Quilava,Noctowl
Bio:Calm, usually kind, thinks before he acts, skinny, regular size, 15 years old

Name: James [James]
Pokemon: Tyranitar, Flugon, Froslass, Snorlax, Salamence, Medicham
Reserves: Vespiquen, Kyogre , Mismagius, and Aggron
Bio: silent type, avoids contact with most others, but always helps the ones he respects and knows as friends without hesistation and determingly

Name: Sam
Pokemon: Ludicolo, Bronzong, Magmotar, Venasaur, Blissey, Honchkrow Reserve: Snorlax, Mantine, Blaziken, Driftblim Charactistics about your Bio: Smart, helpful, makes wise decisions, kind

I will be posting the prologue tommorrow. Hope to see a lot of readers! Please comment if you like!
 
The characters are a bit strong at the moment. I usually find it fascinating when someone tracks the adventures of one just starting their adventure. But then again, I'm just writing my own Sci-fi, Fantasy story titled "Lunare"... well it's a tentative title.
 
Well, here it is! The official start!


Prologue
"Goodnight....its time for bed now, sweetie"
"but Daddy! You promised you'd tell me a story!!!!"
"All right.....what kind of story do you want to hear?"
"Tell me a new one....one about POKEMON!"
"I have just the one.....lay down, sweetie and I'll tell you a story about when I was your age. Well, I was about 7, a little younger than you, when I first recieved my pokemon game and learned all about it. Your grandpa even played too.....he helped me complete the pokedex. My best friends at the time, Ricky, Anthony, and your Uncle Kyle, all played too."
"But Daddy! What about Uncle AJ????"
"He didnt move to where we lived until Uncle Kyle moved."
"Ok, Daddy you can keep going now."
"Well, Uncle Kyle started this little clan....called the Pokemon Masters. We used to battle, trade and have a great time playing with and against each other. It was a blast. Then when I was 14, I went to New York and Max told me all about the discovery of Pokemon. Then, I went on a couple journeys, helped Max out with his troubles, and then I found Raychel and we had you. Good Story huh?"
She was too asleep to even notice the ending of the story.

"Wow" Andrew said once he took off the Glowing Necklace. "You really can look into the future."
"Thats not all this baby does! Azelf, Mespirit, and Uxie are quite the generous friends! They gave this to my father before he passed away.....I want you to have it. You need it more than I do." Max said
"Thanks....this'll be really useful when I get bored on Saturday mornings" Andrew said laughing.
"Now, we have a talk with some of the best pokemon players in the world at Madison Square Garden tonight.....were going to tell them that Pokemon are real.....we have to. For if we dont, all hope is lost."

*End of Prologue*
 
Chapter One- The Adventure Begins! *Third Person*
The lights dimmed and the spotlight came bright and unexpected. Two men, dressed in red pinstripe suits will a pokeball pocket came walking from the what seemed to be a battle arena, just like those in the TV series. The two walked down and on the Jumbotron appeared the Pokemon logo that all of us remember seeing in our DS game cases.

"Welcome.....you are offically the chosen ones. We have a great favor to ask, and if you succeed the rewards will be endless." said Max.
"Let me take a quick attendence report" Andrew said into the mic. "Will?"
"Here!" Will said. "Jack?" The room was silent.....everybody was quiet when what seemed to be Jack ran into the room, all wet and cold from the rain. "Sorry im Late!" Jack said.
"Moving On.....Aden and Sam?"
"HERE!" they all said simotaniously.
"Ok, good." Max said.
"Now to buisness. Last year, after much reaserch and some of the smartest scientists in the world, we have created REAL pokemon. However, we encountered a problem.....the pokemon wouldnt listen to the staff we hired, and they rebeled. Fortunately, thanks to my good friends James and Andrew the pokemon returned to normal. But then tragedy happened. A group of Poachers came across our island and took all the pokemon on the island. Good thing, we can still produce pokemon at our lab. The point is, we need a team of people to recover the pokemon and take them back......you might think this would be an easy job, but this group of Poachers is none to be messed with. They are the biggest crooks in the world, having a record a mile long. The Leader is known as Deep Throat. So we have researched you and picked you out of a huge croud of pokemon players to find out who is worthy to help us. If you accept, here is the details. We will split into 2 teams.... one team will consist of Andrew, James, Myself, and the winner of you guys.Thats where this arena comes in. There is four of you....you will face off in single or double battles. Winner comes on our team. Losers will make a different team and will be lead by a friend of mine. You will each recieve your D/P team, but real this time. So, Lets get the Battle Started!"



"Round 1! Aden vs Jack and then Will vs Sam" Andrew announced. "Please take the stage, Aden and Jack!"

"Go Chatot and Quilava!" Aden said.
"Gallade and Gachomp COME ON OUT!" Jack commanded.
"Chatot use Chatter, Quilava Flame Wheel on Gallade!"
"Gallade, dodge and Hit Chatot with Shockwave! Gachomp use Dragon Pulse on Quilava."
The two pokemon of Adens hit the floor quickly, both knocked out.
"Wow.....that was quick." Andrew said. Well next match, Will and Sam your up!"

"Go Sceptile and Luxray!" Will said
"Magmortar, Bronzong Go!"
"Magmortar Fire Blast on Sceptile, Bronzong Flash Cannon on Luxray!"
"Sceptile DOD!!!!" Will was caught off guard when the Sceptile fell quicker than expected. Sceptile fell, and Luxray had gotten directly hit, and was barely alive.
"Luxray use Attract on Magmortar!"
"Ugh.....Attract? Thats the best you've got? Bronzong finish him off with Flash Cannon!"
Luxray had no shot....the pokemon hit the ground right after the attack skimmed him.

"All right! Good battles all around! Sam and Jack come up to the arena for the deciding match." Andrew announced.

"All right, Gachomp and Infernape its your time to shine!"
"Ludicolo, Venusaur GO!"
"Infernape, Flamethrower!"
"Ludicolo, counter it with Hydro PUMP!
Infernape was caught off guard and defeated quickly.
"One down, TWO TO GO!" Sam said
"Gachomp use Flamethrower on Veunsaur!"
"Now, Ludicolo Hydro Pump Again!"
"YES! Just what I was waiting for! Now Gachomp dodge, and hit Ludicolo with Dragon Pulse!"
"NO, LUDICOLO!!"
"The score is even.....and its time to END THIS!"
"Veunsaur use Petal Dance!"
"Its over! Gachomp is UNABLE to battle. Sam is the WINNER!"
"Good Game, Jack!"
"You Too! We gotta do that again sometime!"

The group leaves the Garden and goes to The HQ outside the city.
"Details Will be given out tommorrow" Max said."I saw some great battleing out there! Go and have a good nights rest! Andrew will show you to your rooms. Goodnight."

Later, after everyone was asleep, Andrew makes his way into Max's office to see Max and James, there waiting for him.
"You think we've got a shot, Max?" James asked.
"I really do...we have some great battlers to help us. Were gonna need to really work for this one guys."
"I know....but weve got some serious competitors on our side now.We really got a shot." Andrew said.
"Well, we'll see tommorrow now wont we" Max said...."I've recieved a message from Deep Throat. The message was......bring it on."

*End of Chapter ONE*

Comment plz!
 
Jeez you couldn't have picked 2 worse Pokemon in combination and my guy sounds like a wimp. No offense to you but I really think we the characters should have a say in what happens.
 
well, I didnt mean to.....I just picked two random pokemon and went from there.....just be patient......you'll have your turn.
 
I, MPM, have three things to say.

1. I'll be writing Chapter 2

2. There is one minor change to Chapter one that i have to talk to you about ASAP bray cuz even though its a minor change, its a big problem

3. other than that, great story, but the battles could be a little longer...other than that, its looking good!
 
you guys gotta understand something.....the battles were quick for a reason. I knew who was gonna win, and I didnt wanna drag it out. You have to realize that battles usually only take 5-6 turns in the game.....if that. They were only one on one. Dont worry guys! That was just picking teams with PIZZAZZ. Watch for chapter 2!
 
Now that weve layed Chapter One, its time to begin implementing the writing styles. Starting with chapter two, it will now be in First Person. You can tell who the thoughts are foused on by looking at the top of the chapter inside the *'s

So if I were to write a chapter I'd write

Chapter 9-Title Goes Here *Andrew*

so that means the first person would be in Andrew's point of view.

The second writing style will be revealed soon :D

Thanks!
 
WEll, here it is, Chapter 2. i got the all clear from bray, so enjoy (Keep in mind this is the first time i've ever writen first person!)




Chapter 2: The Start of a Dangerous Journey *Max*
I walked into the conference room. It was amazing, I could feel the energy radiating off of our newest recruits.
“Good morning!” I said.
“Good morning!” they replied to me.
Andrew and James were sitting at the head of the table, with one chair between them, the one I sat in.
“As you all know, my name is Max Shade IV. Andrew and I are the Leaders of the Masters. James is our second in command, but you will treat his word as though it came from me or Andrew.
“As you should know by now, I founded the Masters years ago, and Andrew is the one who helped us solve my first problem, with the help of James of course. That is why he shares my leadership position here.
“Back during the Watergate scandal with Nixon, a man dubbed the name ‘Deep Throat’, whose real name is William Mark Felt, Sr., is supposedly the one who blew in Nixon. He’s an FBI member, who has been tracking us for…well, we don’t know how long.”
I sighed. What I was about to say pained me badly.
“He led the FBI to our remote island” I continued, “And took all the Pokémon there…that is where the Pokémon you know from the game as “legendaries” and “Shines” were also kept. The only Pokémon still here are the ones from our vault. Now, we know that the FBI operates in many areas of the country, so we have to make a plan that will catch them off guard. This can only happen by splitting up…..so here are the teams “Team A: Andrew, James, Sam, and myself. We will be going to a remote area in Nevada, known as Area 51. It’s the only base that is one-hundred percent top secret. The rest of you will head to their D.C. base. Your job is to infiltrate, and download as much data as possible from their computer mainframe. Sam, you will be briefed on our way to Nevada.
“I warn all of you now: this is not for the weak-of-heart. There is a high risk of getting caught, imprisoned, and possibly death. Your best and only true weapons are you brain combined with your Pokémon.
“From Red version I began training all of you, and with the release of Diamond and Pearl you have all completed your training. Once on board your plane, you will find a pack filled with gadgets that you should recognize very well.
“Team A will be in the Black Charizard plane, while B is in the Black Rayquaza plane. Be in the hanger at eight o'clock sharp, or we leave without you.”

Later that evening…
“You were really harsh in there,” Andrew said to me.
“I know,” I replied, “I hate public speaking.”
“Are you sure these guys are the best?”
“The best PokéBeach had to offer. Some of our best friends, and they don’t even know it.”

Eight o'clock…
“Please fasten your seatbelts,” said a computerized voice over the loudspeaker.
“Sam,” said James, “Please open your pack.”
Sam opened the pack and couldn’t believe his eyes.
“As you will see,” said James, “There are some major items in your pack: Potions, Elixirs, Revives, PokéBalls, and a complete set of TMs and HMs for your own use in whatever way you like…and don’t worry, TMs are reusable, we just wanted them to be the way they were in the game so people would create better strategy.”
“Sweet!” said Sam, “What are these?”
He pulled out three items. They were my personal favorite item the Masters ever made.
“The PokéGear,” I said, “This is our main means for communication. Don’t lose it, no matter what.”
“The PokéNav,” said Andrew, “This is slightly different from Ruby, Sapphire and Emerald. This has the ability to map out complete schematics of a building within one hundred miles, very useful.”
“And,” said James, “is our latest invention, the Pokétch. All the apps are in it, that is, the ones that you can really use. There is no WiFi seeker or Daycare checkup. You can download maps from your PokéNav and use the marking map app to show where you have gone and where you have yet to go. The Dousing machine will locate hidden passages that the PokéNav cannot.”
“Wow,” said Sam, “I can’t believe half of this.”
“Good,” I said, “Because you need to believe ALL of it.”
“Hey,” said Andrew, “It’s a long flight, lets get some shut eye.”
We all layed down in our seats.
I put on my iPod and scrolled through my album list until I found one of my favorites: all the orchestra music from Pokémon 2000, including the full length theme from the Orange Island series. I relaxed my head and fell asleep.

“Please report to back of plane in preparation for launch,” said the computer as I woke up.
“What does it mean, ‘launch’?” asked Sam.
“You’ll see,” said James.
We went into the cargo room, where there were four motorcycles.
One was a regular Harley for Sam; he would have it customized next time we went home.
The next was James’ T-Tar style bike. He had it customized to look like a Tyranitar on two wheels.
Andrews was a Blue Mew themed bike, with the Mew head in the front and the light blue shined in the light overhead.
Mine was the same half-hover motorcycle from Pokémon Coliseum, only without the side-rider.
“Now,” I said, “Sam, remember in Coliseum and XD how you had to Snag Shadow Pokémon?”
“Of course,” said Sam
“Good! You see, just like the games, all of Deep Throats’ Pokémon are already in PokéBalls, which means we CANNOT just take them. So, we have to Snag them. On your bike is a Snag machine, the same one we all have, the one from Coliseum. Also, each bike can deploy Snag Balls for high speed chases. Now, mount your bikes!”
We all got onto our bikes, and then, a hatch opened.
“GO!” yelled Andrew over the roaring winds.
We all started the bikes and went off into the air. Sam was obviously nervous, as he had no idea what we were doing. Then, James pressed a button on his that made everyone’s bikes spring out glider wings!
“Wow!” said Sam, “This is so cool!”
“Yeah,” I said to myself. I began to remember about first starting the Masters. And now, Sam felt the same way as I did then: exhilarated.
“Prepare to land!” yelled Andrew.
“Viva Las Vegas!” yelled James.


End Chapter 2


COMMENT AWAY PLEAZZZZZZZZZ!!
 
Mo6k-yeah, I think so.....lemme figure out exactly what I want and I'll PM you.

Shard-lol, sorry James called Chap 4. You get Dibs on 5.
 
Thanks...but who gets 3? I don't want it...but just wondering.


-The Guardian of the Sea
 
Heres the upcoming schedule *subject to change*

Chapter 3-TBD
Chapter 4- James
Chapter 5- Shard
Chapter 6- Lugia
Chapter 7-Mo6K

I think I might do Chapter 3.....but Im not completly sure. I need to talk with some people.....lemme figure things out and I'll eather re-post or edit this one when I know.
 
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