Writing Extra Voltage Chapter 3 being delayed because of a fail... Sorry!
- Thread starter Inigo Montoya
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EPIC BUMP!!!
I'll be working on a short fic, just to take a break from writing this
. But the short fic will be good, so plz wait for it and occupy yourselves with it while I get the rest of chapter 3 done
I'll be working on a short fic, just to take a break from writing this
. But the short fic will be good, so plz wait for it and occupy yourselves with it while I get the rest of chapter 3 done 
While you're busy, I'll sneak in. >;D
Quick english rule: you write numbers out in words if it's not too long, like "two" and "five." If it's larger than a hundred, then fine, you can write it out liike "134," but otherwise, try to just write it like a word.
You need to proofread. Seriously:
The most glaring problem about your fanfiction is your lack of detail. You tell us who's where and what's happening, but you don't actually go in depth. It's like sketching a picture, but then randomly stop; even if I get what the picture is, it's not fulfilling. Why don't we start with the opening paragraph of your fanfic:
Your plot, like that of most beginners, is very rushed. The timeframe between the battle in Chapter One and the battle in Chapter Two is almost nonexistent, our main character ends up almost everywhere in the span of the six printed pages I have before me. Two key things:
-Have an outline of the plot, and if you do:
-Slow down and enjoy the show. Don't make this a Hollywood movie where there's just a bunch of action with almost no plot.
Work on those things and then we'll talk about your membership.
Quick english rule: you write numbers out in words if it's not too long, like "two" and "five." If it's larger than a hundred, then fine, you can write it out liike "134," but otherwise, try to just write it like a word.
You need to proofread. Seriously:
That's just one of the errors around the place.Chapter One said:
The most glaring problem about your fanfiction is your lack of detail. You tell us who's where and what's happening, but you don't actually go in depth. It's like sketching a picture, but then randomly stop; even if I get what the picture is, it's not fulfilling. Why don't we start with the opening paragraph of your fanfic:
Mm... I sorta see something, but it's - as already said - sketchy. How was the forest lush? Full of what life? How low was the sun hanging in the sky? You really have to take the important parts of the scene and focus in on it.
Your plot, like that of most beginners, is very rushed. The timeframe between the battle in Chapter One and the battle in Chapter Two is almost nonexistent, our main character ends up almost everywhere in the span of the six printed pages I have before me. Two key things:
-Have an outline of the plot, and if you do:
-Slow down and enjoy the show. Don't make this a Hollywood movie where there's just a bunch of action with almost no plot.
Work on those things and then we'll talk about your membership.