Writing Forte's Fan-fic Side Chapter is up.

RE: Forte's Fan-fic Ch. 3 is up.

Nice :) As ive said before could a been longer but heck this is getting a good storyline now.

Keep it up..but carefully and longer lol
 
RE: Forte's Fan-fic Ch. 3 is up.

The other guy in the prologue is an absolute idiot. Why would he counter with ice punch? And howcome that did equal damage?

I also find that the battle scenes are very dull and boring and could use some description. Take more time on these chapters and it'll turn out better.
 
RE: Forte's Fan-fic Ch. 3 is up.

Chapter X1

It was four years before Tyler’s adventure had begun.

All the children ran to the fence by Mt. Mag. It was time for one of the Metagross, Metang, and Beldum swarms to come. The whole town had showed up.

“Where are they?” could be heard everywhere as the children asked their parents as they answered, “Just wait.”

“Where is he?” Tyler’s mom asked herself, “He never misses these.”
“This is the perfect spot,” Tyler said as he sat on a rock in the mountain, “I don’t know why we aren’t allowed up here?”

Then the swarm came through. The swarm flew in a perfect formation while the towns folk all yelled, “There they are…YAY!” and, “This is always magnificent.”

“Wow this is better than watching from the fence!” Tyler yelled. BOOM! “What was that?” Tyler asked himself as he ran to the source of the sound. When he arrived he found a Beldum crashed into the ground. “I have to help it,” he said as he got ready to pull it free. “IT’S NOT MOVING!” yelled Tyler as he tried and failed to pull it out, “One more time!” CRACK! The Beldum flew out of the crater and followed Tyler to the ground. Tyler quickly looked over the Beldum, “This can’t be good,” he said looking at the wounds, “We need to get you healed.”

In the four years that Tyler had Beldum they became the best of friends, and have helped each other in ways people could only imagine.
 
pretty good but X1 could have been a little longer (like tylers mom asking where he was and where the beldum came from ect.)
 
fortegoddx said:
First time writing so here it is. All grammar and spelling checks done by PMJfan001.


Prologue

Gengar use Shadow Ball. The ball of darkness hit Garchomp knocking him out.
The crowd’s roar was the last thing he heard before going to sleep.

Six years later

Tyler was waiting for the final match to begin. He was finally ten and could leave on his quest to become Pokémon Champion. Being about 4’ 11”, with black hair, a serious face, and a burning passion for Pokémon, he was the most likely in his small town to become a Pokémon trainer. His birthday always fell in the league championship. It was 8 at night and the battle was about to begin.

Contestants send out your Pokémon.

Returning champ Kyle sent out his Metagross and Magnezone. The later was two steel domes fitted together with a steel plate. With 3 eyes, 2 magnets, and 2 screws it was one crazy looking Pokémon. While the first, Metagross, had four legs and an X on its face and was one of the most known powerhouses, and Tyler’s favorite.

Across the field Bob had sent out his 2 Pokémon. The first one out was a peaceful dragon with wings that could somehow support its weight, Dragonite. The final one was another powerful Pokémon, Tyranitar, who wiped up a sandstorm by coming into play.

"Contestants, this match is a double battle. You may now start the battle."

Kyle started with Magnezone’s eyes turning red, locking-on to Dragonite. While Metagross used Meteor Mass on Tyranitar. Tyranitar countered it with an Ice Punch. The collision from the icy fists of Tyranitar and the fast powerful mash from Metagross sent both pokemon into the walls of the stadium. Dragonite launched a Hyper Beam at Magnezone who took the white beam of pure energy head on. Next Magnezone sent a powerful Zap Cannon at Dragonite. Dragonite got knocked out after the the ball of electric energy hit it. Metagross rushed at Tyranitar using Take Down while Tyranitar used another Ice Punch. As Metagross came into contact with Tyranitar it used explosion. The explosion sent dust and debris into the air. As the dust cleared only one pokemon stood. The winner was Kyle with Magnezone still standing.


“I’m going to be that good one day,” declared Tyler. Knowing that his adventure would begin tomorrow, Kyle went to sleep.​


Chapter 1
Chapter 2
Chapter 3

Side Chapters
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I mostly heard critizm but I thought it was okay.
 
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