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Maybe, depending on how timely you introduce them. If you are going to introduce about, say, three characters or four, it would be fine if you don't confuse the reader by introducing all characters at once. If I was you, I would introduce the main characters first, then go along slowly.
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Maybe, depending on how timely you introduce them. If you are going to introduce about, say, three characters or four, it would be fine if you don't confuse the reader by introducing all characters at once. If I was you, I would introduce the main characters first, then go along slowly.
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I need an opinion on a scenario I'm trying to work into chapter six of my story Feral Twilight. In a slight change of pace, I've been trying to integrate an action scene involving a powerful Psychic-type wolfman named Canersia in which he attacks my main character Jay with the move Psychic. The issue I'm trying to figure out is how the attack would actually work if used on a human. I always assumed it directly assualted a target's brain, and so I've currently written the part out with Jay experiencing a splitting headache first before he starts to suffer from tremendous pain throughout his mind and body. I'm just unsure how believable this would be or if it would sound sort of cliche, since it's sort of an idea I spoofed from somewhere...
I need an opinion on a scenario I'm trying to work into chapter six of my story Feral Twilight. In a slight change of pace, I've been trying to integrate an action scene involving a powerful Psychic-type wolfman named Canersia in which he attacks my main character Jay with the move Psychic. The issue I'm trying to figure out is how the attack would actually work if used on a human. I always assumed it directly assualted a target's brain, and so I've currently written the part out with Jay experiencing a splitting headache first before he starts to suffer from tremendous pain throughout his mind and body. I'm just unsure how believable this would be or if it would sound sort of cliche, since it's sort of an idea I spoofed from somewhere...
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Psychic is a powerful mental attack in which the target is hit with a psychokinetic force. Lemme bring up the description in B/W...
"The target is hit by a strong telekinetic force."
Telekinesis is the power to move things with one's mind, so realistically, it would be as if Jay would be pushed back a long ways...sort of like Force Push in the Star Wars saga, but much more potent.
Of course, mental assault could work too.
Psychic is a powerful mental attack in which the target is hit with a psychokinetic force. Lemme bring up the description in B/W...
"The target is hit by a strong telekinetic force."
Telekinesis is the power to move things with one's mind, so realistically, it would be as if Jay would be pushed back a long ways...sort of like Force Push in the Star Wars saga, but much more potent.
Of course, mental assault could work too.
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I always thought Psychic was more of an assualt on a targets brain based on how the in-game animation usually looked like it cause the target's body to distort from some type of telepathic shockwave. However, I guess my interpretation was always based off how the generic psychic in fantasy or sci-fi always seemed to use their powers to control their victims' minds rather than move things like with the Force Push from Star Wars.
I always thought Psychic was more of an assualt on a targets brain based on how the in-game animation usually looked like it cause the target's body to distort from some type of telepathic shockwave. However, I guess my interpretation was always based off how the generic psychic in fantasy or sci-fi always seemed to use their powers to control their victims' minds rather than move things like with the Force Push from Star Wars.
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Let's say that being psychic means your own mind waves have power. This could be manifested in either physical power as a kinetic force of some sort, or as a thought that reachs someone else's mind and influences them. The point is that you can pretty much do quite a bit with psychic, which is why I tend do avoid giving main characters such powers.
But back to the point of this conversation: Psychic is a move that has physical consequences (based on the description in the games). If anything, a powerful version of Confusion would seem to be more fitting.
Let's say that being psychic means your own mind waves have power. This could be manifested in either physical power as a kinetic force of some sort, or as a thought that reachs someone else's mind and influences them. The point is that you can pretty much do quite a bit with psychic, which is why I tend do avoid giving main characters such powers.
But back to the point of this conversation: Psychic is a move that has physical consequences (based on the description in the games). If anything, a powerful version of Confusion would seem to be more fitting.
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I thought it'd go without saying that Canersia's actually the villain in this case, but I think I may just edit out the part where I actually say it's the move Psychic that Jay gets attacked with to build on the fact that Canersia is a Psychic/Dark-type a little more.
I thought it'd go without saying that Canersia's actually the villain in this case, but I think I may just edit out the part where I actually say it's the move Psychic that Jay gets attacked with to build on the fact that Canersia is a Psychic/Dark-type a little more.
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I would think that Jay would be shoved backward or hit by some physical force, because in the Pokemon anime, when a Pokemon uses Psychic (Psyduck/Mewtwo/Alakazam/etc.), the opposing Pokemon/object/person. is lifted in the air or shoved backward. However, I think if you want to write it as Jay being afflicted by a headache, I think that would be fine as well. In fact, I think that the sentence "his head was wracked by splitting pains" or an other such idea is much more dramatic than "he was lifted and thrown against the wall".
Apollo the Incinermyn said:
I would think that Jay would be shoved backward or hit by some physical force, because in the Pokemon anime, when a Pokemon uses Psychic (Psyduck/Mewtwo/Alakazam/etc.), the opposing Pokemon/object/person. is lifted in the air or shoved backward. However, I think if you want to write it as Jay being afflicted by a headache, I think that would be fine as well. In fact, I think that the sentence "his head was wracked by splitting pains" or an other such idea is much more dramatic than "he was lifted and thrown against the wall".
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Those were basically what my thoughts were. If the attack can be used to result in physical harm on a foe (though it's technically still a "special attack"), why couldn't it also be used to take over a victim's mind and cause pain during the process?
Those were basically what my thoughts were. If the attack can be used to result in physical harm on a foe (though it's technically still a "special attack"), why couldn't it also be used to take over a victim's mind and cause pain during the process?
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because that's not the type of psychic attack it is. telekinesis is very different from telepathic assault. Psywave and Extrasensory are better choices of attack if you want to do mental damage (esp. Extrasensory, which I always forget about but is basically exactly what you are describing).
because that's not the type of psychic attack it is. telekinesis is very different from telepathic assault. Psywave and Extrasensory are better choices of attack if you want to do mental damage (esp. Extrasensory, which I always forget about but is basically exactly what you are describing).
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In the anime, whenever I see a Psychic, the user picks the opponent up with its mind and can do whatwever he/she chooses, including shove backwards, thrown into the sky, or slammed into the ground, or whatever they wish to do.
Kinesis is more of communicting via two minds together andcan be only done to anotherr Pokemon, while Psychic you can pick up a rock or a boulder or the like and launch it.
Hope I helped....
In the anime, whenever I see a Psychic, the user picks the opponent up with its mind and can do whatwever he/she chooses, including shove backwards, thrown into the sky, or slammed into the ground, or whatever they wish to do.
Kinesis is more of communicting via two minds together andcan be only done to anotherr Pokemon, while Psychic you can pick up a rock or a boulder or the like and launch it.
Hope I helped....
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Um hello. In a story whereas the main characters travel from world to world, what would be a good way for them to hop to a new planet, without the use of sci-fi spaceships?
The concept of worlds is similar to Super Mario Galaxy, and the story's design is slightly cartoony while at the same time being fairly serious. I've been stumped on this for some time and would appreciate a spot of help.
Um hello. In a story whereas the main characters travel from world to world, what would be a good way for them to hop to a new planet, without the use of sci-fi spaceships?
The concept of worlds is similar to Super Mario Galaxy, and the story's design is slightly cartoony while at the same time being fairly serious. I've been stumped on this for some time and would appreciate a spot of help.
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I've thought of using portals, but it didn't seem to be good idea.
I don't wanna give the characters the power to make portals because then they'll go to whatever world they want. I also don't want to have natural portals or items that teleport to other worlds, because of the same reason.
I guess I'm trying to ask for an idea about manually going from planet to planet without the use of a common starship.
I've thought of using portals, but it didn't seem to be good idea.
I don't wanna give the characters the power to make portals because then they'll go to whatever world they want. I also don't want to have natural portals or items that teleport to other worlds, because of the same reason.
I guess I'm trying to ask for an idea about manually going from planet to planet without the use of a common starship.
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The idea of portals is not necessarily broken. For example, say a character can traverse across the universe by being able to walk through a extradimensional (I'm pretty that's not a word) area for a short distance, whereas in the universe we live in, he's really going lightyears. A major issue is that it's difficult to move from one place to another unless you really know where the destination is in relation to where you were. You can also further complicate this method of transportation (mentioned extradimensional space is distorted by some unknown/evil force).
P.S. I attribute idea of walking through the universe to A Wrinkle in Time
The idea of portals is not necessarily broken. For example, say a character can traverse across the universe by being able to walk through a extradimensional (I'm pretty that's not a word) area for a short distance, whereas in the universe we live in, he's really going lightyears. A major issue is that it's difficult to move from one place to another unless you really know where the destination is in relation to where you were. You can also further complicate this method of transportation (mentioned extradimensional space is distorted by some unknown/evil force).
P.S. I attribute idea of walking through the universe to A Wrinkle in Time
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So right now, I'm planning on working on my fanfiction which had been put off for a long time.
But the thing is, I don't have any ideas for it at the moment.
I do have a few ideas for the first few chapters, but some of it may not be permanent because I can change my mind a lot during the planning process.
Can you guys give some ideas or advice? Don't wanna throw the main story idea out there too much!
So right now, I'm planning on working on my fanfiction which had been put off for a long time.
But the thing is, I don't have any ideas for it at the moment.
I do have a few ideas for the first few chapters, but some of it may not be permanent because I can change my mind a lot during the planning process.
Can you guys give some ideas or advice? Don't wanna throw the main story idea out there too much!
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Okay. Maybe you could work on a Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story. Or, if you prefer, you can work on one of those stories where there are three characters in the first chapter, introducing them nicely, and then you can add three or four characters in the next chapter. But those are only ideas for introductions. Mostly, the best choice for you is to choose which genre (kinds of books you like to read) that you like the most, and then write the type of story that matches the genre. I sometimes can't come with any ideas that hasn't been used for previous stories, so it might be hard.
Okay. Maybe you could work on a Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story. Or, if you prefer, you can work on one of those stories where there are three characters in the first chapter, introducing them nicely, and then you can add three or four characters in the next chapter. But those are only ideas for introductions. Mostly, the best choice for you is to choose which genre (kinds of books you like to read) that you like the most, and then write the type of story that matches the genre. I sometimes can't come with any ideas that hasn't been used for previous stories, so it might be hard.