Writing PokéPoetry! II (Winner Announced: Congratulations, camoclone!)
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RE: PokéPoetry! #2
O_O
Falls asleep for a few hours, comes back on to find that people are thinking about voting, and I can't submit...
Would it be alright if I submitted anyway?
EDIT: I submitted anyway.
Stuff the system
O_O
Falls asleep for a few hours, comes back on to find that people are thinking about voting, and I can't submit...
Would it be alright if I submitted anyway?
EDIT: I submitted anyway.
Stuff the system
RE: PokéPoetry! #2
I'll vote anyway... Because I can (Literally, I can)
Delta said:
I'll vote anyway... Because I can (Literally, I can)
RE: PokéPoetry! #2
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Voting ends at 7 PM EST! Winners will be announced shortly after!
SynxS1N said:
Sorry, sign ups ended a few weeks ago. Be sure to check back for the third round.
RE: PokéPoetry! #2
Congrats to camoclone for coming in first place!!!!
Second place: Delta & Thetwiggy13 (Tied with 4)
Third place: Ice Arceus, Luckyfire, and SheNinja (Tied with 3)
Fourth place: James86134 (1)
Congrats to camoclone for coming in first place!!!!
Second place: Delta & Thetwiggy13 (Tied with 4)
Third place: Ice Arceus, Luckyfire, and SheNinja (Tied with 3)
Fourth place: James86134 (1)
camoclone: 5
Delta: 4
Thetwiggy13: 4
Ice Arceus: 3
Luckfire: 3
SheNinja: 3
James86134: 1
Delta: 4
Thetwiggy13: 4
Ice Arceus: 3
Luckfire: 3
SheNinja: 3
James86134: 1
RE: PokéPoetry! #2
Always nice to know that I came last with two points behind...
Meh, LETS HOPE I DONT FALL ASLEEP NEXT TIME, AND CAN BE BOTHERED WRITING MORE THEN A HAIKU
Ice Arceus said:
Always nice to know that I came last with two points behind...
Meh, LETS HOPE I DONT FALL ASLEEP NEXT TIME, AND CAN BE BOTHERED WRITING MORE THEN A HAIKU
RE: PokéPoetry! #2 (Winner Announced: Congratulations, camoclone!)
:/
Sorry to put a damp on things, but camoclone's poem shouldn't have won whatsoever.
Please don't take any of this to heart, camoclone
Your poem was long and had rhymes. That was the only thing going for it. It had grammar issues such as "Then chamber opens" and "sacraficed", tense issues such as "I fear I won't reach the door, I had lost all escaping hope", irregular rhyming (which isn't a bad thing, but it didn't suit the style of the poem imo), consistency issues (not putting capital letters on a lot of the sentence starters you should have, also not capitalising Regice but capatalising Wurmple), and the whole poem seems, forgive me for saying this, rather "simple". The poem hasn't been developed enough to produce good rhymes. Here, for example:
"I wait
and wait
It is so cold that I am getting faint"
It seems like you used that last sentence just to rhyme with "wait" (it doesn't anyway, but poetic's license~), rather than making the poem flow more. You state that it is cold but you don't lead on from that.
"the great regice
I readied my ultraballs
with a catch rate of thrice"
Rhymes like these seem very contrived. If you're shaping the second rhyming sentence just so that it rhymes with the first, it will make the rhyme seem awkward. Do you usually say "of thrice"? I don't think so.
"for I had already used my masterball
on that Wurmple which I oh so loved it's call"
The same applies to this rhyme.
Sorry for this drilling but I'm kinda disappointed that this poem won when there were so many errors. Please don't take this personally camoclone ;_;
:/
Sorry to put a damp on things, but camoclone's poem shouldn't have won whatsoever.
Please don't take any of this to heart, camoclone
Your poem was long and had rhymes. That was the only thing going for it. It had grammar issues such as "Then chamber opens" and "sacraficed", tense issues such as "I fear I won't reach the door, I had lost all escaping hope", irregular rhyming (which isn't a bad thing, but it didn't suit the style of the poem imo), consistency issues (not putting capital letters on a lot of the sentence starters you should have, also not capitalising Regice but capatalising Wurmple), and the whole poem seems, forgive me for saying this, rather "simple". The poem hasn't been developed enough to produce good rhymes. Here, for example:
"I wait
and wait
It is so cold that I am getting faint"
It seems like you used that last sentence just to rhyme with "wait" (it doesn't anyway, but poetic's license~), rather than making the poem flow more. You state that it is cold but you don't lead on from that.
"the great regice
I readied my ultraballs
with a catch rate of thrice"
Rhymes like these seem very contrived. If you're shaping the second rhyming sentence just so that it rhymes with the first, it will make the rhyme seem awkward. Do you usually say "of thrice"? I don't think so.
"for I had already used my masterball
on that Wurmple which I oh so loved it's call"
The same applies to this rhyme.
Sorry for this drilling but I'm kinda disappointed that this poem won when there were so many errors. Please don't take this personally camoclone ;_;
RE: PokéPoetry! #2 (Winner Announced: Congratulations, camoclone!)
Also I'm no professional poet and threw it together in 5 minutes.
Look up Regice and then you will understand... In the video games it required waiting to unlock Regice.Eagle4 said::/
Sorry to put a damp on things, but camoclone's poem shouldn't have won whatsoever.
Please don't take any of this to heart, camoclone
Your poem was long and had rhymes. That was the only thing going for it. It had grammar issues such as "Then chamber opens" and "sacraficed", tense issues such as "I fear I won't reach the door, I had lost all escaping hope", irregular rhyming (which isn't a bad thing, but it didn't suit the style of the poem imo), consistency issues (not putting capital letters on a lot of the sentence starters you should have, also not capitalising Regice but capatalising Wurmple), and the whole poem seems, forgive me for saying this, rather "simple". The poem hasn't been developed enough to produce good rhymes. Here, for example:
"I wait
and wait
It is so cold that I am getting faint"
It seems like you used that last sentence just to rhyme with "wait" (it doesn't anyway, but poetic's license~), rather than making the poem flow more. You state that it is cold but you don't lead on from that.
"the great regice
I readied my ultraballs
with a catch rate of thrice"
Rhymes like these seem very contrived. If you're shaping the second rhyming sentence just so that it rhymes with the first, it will make the rhyme seem awkward. Do you usually say "of thrice"? I don't think so.
"for I had already used my masterball
on that Wurmple which I oh so loved it's call"
The same applies to this rhyme.
Sorry for this drilling but I'm kinda disappointed that this poem won when there were so many errors. Please don't take this personally camoclone ;_;
Also I'm no professional poet and threw it together in 5 minutes
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RE: PokéPoetry! #2 (Winner Announced: Congratulations, camoclone!)
Maybe we should do something like "every two errors you make will result in a deduction of one point." Grammar and Spelling are important in writing, so it should be natural that it would be addressed in poetry.
Edit: and Ultra Balls only have a catch rate 2x that of a Pokeball
Maybe we should do something like "every two errors you make will result in a deduction of one point." Grammar and Spelling are important in writing, so it should be natural that it would be addressed in poetry.
Edit: and Ultra Balls only have a catch rate 2x that of a Pokeball
RE: PokéPoetry! #2 (Winner Announced: Congratulations, camoclone!)
I honestly don't mind getting second, but:
I think the style is limited to this as it is part of the rules. Otherwise, I would agree with you (though I would hate to read the mistake-filled poem).
I honestly don't mind getting second, but:
Ice Arceus said:
I think the style is limited to this as it is part of the rules. Otherwise, I would agree with you (though I would hate to read the mistake-filled poem).