the story is good i like those kinds of stories like jimanji and that space thing where they are in a game, they only thing i dont like about is the name not only to your story but to others "SUMMER" "APRIL" "JULY" "MARCH" JUNE" and ect. just like MAY.... i understand you like may or want may to be in your story make up names like jenny, cindy, sarah, anna, shirley, and stuff but the story is good i give you 8 out of 10 keep it up
the story is good i like those kinds of stories like jimanji and that space thing where they are in a game, they only thing i dont like about is the name not only to your story but to others "SUMMER" "APRIL" "JULY" "MARCH" JUNE" and ect. just like MAY.... i understand you like may or want may to be in your story make up names like jenny, cindy, sarah, anna, shirley, and stuff but the story is good i give you 7 out of 10 keep it up
the story is good i like those kinds of stories like jimanji and that space thing where they are in a game, they only thing i dont like about is the name not only to your story but to others "SUMMER" "APRIL" "JULY" "MARCH" JUNE" and ect. just like MAY.... i understand you like may or want may to be in your story make up names like jenny, cindy, sarah, anna, shirley, and stuff but the story is good i give you 7 out of 10 keep it up