Writing Ricochet

[HypnoticChairman]

Mmm.... The e-cookie is delicious! Nice and mysterious, just like I like 'em. My complements to the chef. Give some to the author too, since it's exactly the same as the awesome e-cookie!

 

[Cinesra]

The cool ocean air felt good on Aiden's face, and the smell of smelt pervaded the air.

Typo!
I'm liking it so far. The jumping around from points of view isn't a problem, but it is a little odd when you skip ahead and then go back.

 

[Zenith]

Thanks for the catch! I've gone back and fixed it.

I love stories that jump between time periods or scenes abruptly. While it can be a bit jarring at first, after you get used to it the world feels a lot more fleshed out.