Writing Rose Quartz And Onyx- Part 1 Complete!

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Crystal Hikara

Gone
Member
From the shadows, a team claws its way back up to terrorize helpless victims.

Hidden in broad daylight, an organization seeks to burn all away.

Yet there is still a glimmer of light, a glitter of hope left...


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Well, here it is again. It's been nearly 3 years since I've started this journey. On the way I had to tear the entire thing to pieces because of my sheer frustration with writing and the lack of ability I had for it. I had to rewrite it because several characters and plot ideas just didn't work out for me. Yet, having it stand at a good 400 pages, I couldn't just abandon the story.

So, now, I'm semi-proud to present to you the (nearly) completely re-worked epic story of my life's work (thus far), Rose Quartz and Onyx.

For those few that remember old RQO, keep in mind that this has been completely re-written. I've removed numerous characters and replaced them with new ones, or gotten rid of them all together. You'll see some big changes, starting in Chapter 2. The bare-bone basics haven't changed, but I've thought out some things more heavily and I think it's safe to say that this roller-coaster ride will be less bumpy and more thrilly. :3

Oh! And this is the Pokebeach-appropriate version. The true, unedited, PG-15 version will be uploaded to my DA account. I highly suggest that you take a peek if you think yourself mature enough. YES I HAVE A POTTY MOUTH YOU HAVE SOMETHING AGAINST THAT?!

So, with only a bit further ado, here's Chapter 1: Kidnapping.

...oh god I have so much catching up to do on this story it's not even funny. Why why why did I have to fail at writing so much before arghasdf. I do have 6 chapters of buffer but still :/ I WANNA GET BACK UP TO CH25! D:

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Disclaimer: There are no canon characters in this story (at least not maybe for a long time and maybe even then there are none whatsoever). All characters, with very little exception, belong to me and Kiyo. The Beghta Region is a fictional region created by me. There's lots of originality.

MORE IMPORTANT IS THE RATING. This version is deemably PG, borderline PG-13. There are somewhat gruesomely written scenes (that don't actually say much but close enough), swearing, sly sexual jokes, etc. All parts of this story are fictional, and may or may not represent the way I think. However, this story is not intended to offend any sort of race, sex, religion or otherwise insult a particular group of people or an individual. So please don't hate on me for a fictional character's way of thinking. Pokemon isn't serious business.

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Chapter Index

Part 1: Beginnings
Chapter 1- Kidnapping (please scroll down a little further!)
Chapter 2- Breakout
Chapter 3- Recovery
Chapter 4- Gift, Curse
Chapter 5- Makeshift Madness
Chapter 6- A Short Rest
Chapter 7- Suppuration
Chapter 8- Threshold
Chapter 9- Infiltration
Chapter 10- The Battle
Chapter 11- Regroup
Chapter 12- Arrival

Part 2: Coming Soon!

Chapter updates are generally on Tuesdays, but the story is on temporary hiatus right now.

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Art for RQO:

-Aeron Gunnar Reference

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Chapter 1: Kidnapping

The van clattered along the uneven, dirt road riddled with potholes created from the local Diglett. The moving vehicle sped ominously along, causing Pokemon within the far reaches of the Eclipse Woods to scatter and take for cover as they watched it noisily pass.

“Sir, we’ll arrive base-side within approximately ten minutes,” the driver, masked in shadow from his cap, coolly noted. His leather grip on the wheel was tight and concentrated.

“…excellent,” the man in the shotgun seat, readjusting his own black hat on his head, nodded with a victorious smile. Briefly he gazed back into the barred window on the door that led to the cargo compartment of the motor vehicle.

Another male human, clothed in black like his superiors, sneered as growls and barks of sadistic laughter tortured their catch of the year. Frightened, it was all the small female could do to even breathe let alone try to keep her distance from the viciously fanged Pokemon before her in a cramped cage. The dark-colored dog muttered cruel things her way, and when things fell silent for a few moments, he suddenly lashed out at the bars; flames crawled out from his mouth and encircled the iron that imprisoned her. She’d attempt to cry in shock, in absolute fear for her life, but her captors had seen well to her silence already in Stun Spore. Her eyes that were the color of a pure, dry midday sky teared up. She felt some of the hairs on her legs and arms receding under high heat. A bizarre, humanesque smile found its way onto the canine’s muzzle, wrinkling his nose and stretching out an obvious scar over his left eye.

The Houndoom snapped, opening his jaws once again. The fire scorched her right arm. Pain shot through her body as her flesh burned. She yelped a plea to stop, then gasped for air. She had broken the paralysis for only a mere second before she crumbled beneath it again. At last, the dark-fire type seemed to grow bored, retreating to a small corner of the van. He kept his scarred eye upon her cage threateningly.

Crystal Hikara, finally allowed pure air devoid of flame and dog-breath, found herself unable to do much of anything beyond trying to catch her breath. Thoughts of how she would get herself out of this mess nervously crossed her mind. What’s…going to happen to me? Are they going to…kill me? What of Breeze, Flora…? Maybe Mom was right, maybe I was too naïve, to go out into this world so soon…she thought painfully to herself, taking in all that she could from the small window to the driver’s cabin. It was dark, and the image of being shipped off to a lightless facility didn’t help. Memories of home and the start of her journey flooded her mind. Why do they even want me…? I bet it’s because of my gift…or maybe I’m just perfectly good training material…if only I just hadn’t been so stupid a little while back…



Very little sunlight filtered down from the clouds hanging above Route 49. Even with the faint outlines of the woods’ leaves on the summer path, it was still a warm day and an optimum time to start out upon her journey. The young girl, barely a mile from her hometown of Dawndew, stretched as she walked with a satisfied yawn. “Ah! Man, what a great day! I can’t even believe it! After all these years, and after those six months of house arrest, I’m free! I’m free!” she gleefully shouted as she leapt into the air. The light wind coming from the small lake to the west made not only her long, golden blonde hair shimmer, but it also caught and lifted her quaint pink bangs for a brief moment. The little light reflected in her eye, making her come to life.

“And, what a better way to start an adventure than with your longtime friend, whom successfully helped you catch your first Pokemon! What an awesome Pidgey!” Crystal beamed up to the local airspace. Rolling hazel eyes as she flapped mahogany-peach wings, the tiny bird swiveled down beside her. Out of habit the new trainer offered her bare forearm, and quickly the Pidgey roosted. The bird climbed awkwardly up her arm, careful not to poke holes into her trainer’s violet-lined white tee. Successfully the flying type rested on her shoulder, setting to preening her wings, with only a short coo of pride in her victory. “Haha, you’re so weird and modest, aren’tcha Breeze?” the newbie poked her stomach, and Breeze fluffed up with an irritated, faint hiss. “Whatever you say…” she muttered, giving a faint chuckle. Her hand gingerly wrapped around both of the new orbs on her belt. Confidently, she felt the many pockets of her customized shoulder bag buckled onto the matching trainer’s belt. They were fairly empty, but she felt that they would be filled during her long and knowingly arduous adventure before her.

Her hands fell down to her side hesitantly as she noticed the moving van stranded on the side of the road. It was jacked up, and several men in professional black shirts and matching pants attempted to replace a flat with a spare. “Huh…? What’s going on…?” the young trainer whispered to her bird friend. As a response, Breeze clicked her beak slowly, a dubious expression crawling over her face. “Hmm? Yeah, something does feel a little weird about it, I guess…maybe we should just avoid them…”

Quietly, she began to proceed past the van. She noticed some of the workers gaze up curiously. Nervously she glanced back at them, and unexpectedly collided with a man a good foot and then some taller than her petite four-foot-five. Breeze squawked loudly in protest, fluttering off her shoulder for a moment as Crystal stumbled back. “Ah, I’m, I’m sorry!” she tripped over her words, bowing her head shortly before she rose her gaze to the man. He, unlike the others, wore a gray jacket professionally buttoned over a black turtleneck. ‘TJ’s Moving Service’ was emblazoned extremely thickly on his chest pocket, ‘Johnson’ signed below it in curly white lettering. The man himself appeared well on his ways to the thirties, if not already in them; his chocolate hair was not particularly long for an adult within that age group and it was kept rather neat. Something about his cool, near indigo eyes unnerved her, along with his smile.

“Oh, my apologies, miss! I was just pacing about. I didn’t see you there.”

“No, no, it’s alright. I wasn’t watching where I was looking. Pardon…”

“Oh, you have a Pidgey?” Before she was allowed to make a speedy escape, he held his hand out for the bird. Breeze angrily moved in to bite his finger off, but he withdrew in time. “Aggressive little one! She giving you problems?”

“Why would Breeze give me problems?”

“Well, just not too many experienced trainers come down this road too often anymore, you know? Especially not with Pidgey. I heard they’re a rowdy bunch of birds in these parts of the woods. Say, actually…”

His words formed a slow pit within her stomach. The workers of the flat were all staring now. She glanced around subtly, trying to devise a way to escape. “Well, as you can see, me and my moving crew got a flat, so we’re going to be a little late in reaching Sunrise. Is there any way we could borrow your Pidgey and send word there? By the way, my name is Christopher Johnson. You can call me Chris, though. Everyone does.” He extended his hand.

Warning bells clanged in her head. Dawndew and Sunrise were the only two areas connected by Route 49, and she heard of none of the families moving from Dawndew to Sunrise recently. “Ah,” Crystal reluctantly took his hand in the shake. He firmly grasped her hand, as though threatening to never let go. “Nice to meet you, Chris, but I don’t think she knows the way that well. I’m sorry, but I have to reach Sunrise by nightfall, and…”

Her words halted as she attempted to draw her hand away. He still clung onto it. “You never told me your name, Crystal Hikara…” he whispered.

Everything happened within seconds. The workers had thrown on gas masks and caps, sealing their already faint identities away. Breeze screeched and attempted to attack her friend’s aggressor, but was unceremoniously thrown into a satchel from behind. Swiftly one of the grunts secured a mask onto Chris’s face, before rushing into the back of the van. “Don’t you know it’s rude not to give your name when someone tells you their name?”

She screamed, crying for help, and managed to writhe herself out of his vile grip. Her footsteps were no match for the trained professional peons, and soon she was brought to her knees by two ‘movers’. She yelped as they yanked on her blonde hair mercilessly, pulling her head back uncomfortably. Her eyes caught sight of faint yellow pollen drifting closer. Following one of the members of the sinister group was a Vileplume, scattering Stun Spore left and right. She inhaled clean air before it surrounded her, and though her heart was pumping hard and fast, she hoped she could hold it for long enough to think of something to do.

“Do you really think that holding your breath will prevent you from Bad Nastay’s pollen for long? His Stun Spore is potent beyond belief. I’d make it easy on yourself, Crystal, and just allow yourself a small lungful. It’ll make things easier on us and for you,” Chris hummed as men swept her bag off her shoulders instantly, shortly followed by her belt.

Still she held her breath.

“No? Alright. I didn’t want to do this, but…bring me the Pidgey.”

She shot worried eyes over.

Flapping her wings like mad and squawking more than likely about pecking their brains out, Breeze hung upside-down by her legs. Soon the effects of the spore came over her, and she swung limply. He shook her, and several of the nearby men watched without a flinch. “Stubborn little chicken, aren’t we? Well, I like my chicken best served fresh and hot…Doomsday!”

From the contents of the van once again shot out a Pokemon, this time upon its own accord. The beast was black with bone-like growths over its body. Eagerly it leapt over, acidic saliva dripping from his open jaw. One of its demonic eyes was damaged, the scar over the eyelid obvious and deep. It barked, and leapt for the bird. The flying type screeched repetitively as she was just held to the side of his jaws at the last possible moment.

Crystal felt herself becoming faint. Her lungs were burning.

Laughter flew about the men as Johnson pointed at the Houndoom. “Now, now, Doomsday. Let’s not be so eager to eat dinner when we haven’t even finished a job…” he reprimanded, and eyed the young trainer. “She breathe yet?”

“No, sir,” both curtly responded.

“Well, maybe a little more persuasion is in order…dinner time, Doomsday, but make it slow. Don’t kill it yet.”

With that, he lowered the bird into the dog’s face. Breeze cried in agony as he took her left wing into his mouth. Sickening crunches were heard.

“No!” Crystal finally shouted. Her breath was automatic, and she coughed on the thick air. Tears formed as she watched the Pidgey taken by her once well-kept wing and treated as though she was a chew toy. “N-no!” she attempted again, but the cloud of paralyzing spores was seeping into her lungs and bloodstream with great speed. Weakly she found herself unable to remain on her knees. The grip on her arms tightened, keeping her up.

“She’s inhaled!” one reported.

“Good. Doomsday, that’s enough. You’ll get your true treat later. Leave it for a grunt to pick up. As for our dear, rude friend Crystal…” He walked over casually. Her scalp was released, and her head flopped forward. He soon brought her chin up, to his face. He almost appeared like a father punishing a demanding child, more than a sadistic kidnapper. “Let’s show her to her new home. Throw her in the cage, get the van on the ground, let’s move.” Carelessly he released his grip on her chin.

“Sir!”



Tears of worry for her own well being and for Breeze’s poured down her cheeks. Two men of the heist, no longer having the moving company shirts on but uniforms emblazoned with a bloodred RM, idly gossiped and laughed. Crystal knew it was at her expense. Suddenly they silenced as their authoritative figure spoke. The vehicle was slowing.

“Knock her out. No need for her to see anything besides her real home.”

“Sir,” they soullessly responded, their gas masks replaced. Doomsday lazily opened his eye, before scratching at the door to where his master remained. He was swiftly allowed in. The kidnapped trainer made out Chris and the driver each having put on their own masks. Dark pollen seeped into the air as the Vileplume was ordered to use Sleep Powder. The pain of her burns and paralysis faded into the unconscious realm as all spun away into darkness.



A foul smell of the noxious Sleep Powder and something else lingered in Crystal’s nose as the world spun back to her. Her stomach upset and her mind still trying to re-boot after the forced fainting spell, the actual picture of the room finally began to make sense to her minutes later.

Behind her miniature cage bars was a surprisingly small room lined with rows of other empty cages. The light of the room was poor; one of the fluorescent light tubes on the ceiling flickered sporadically and the other was dim. She hesitated for a moment, registering the smell of the room as a faint urine mixed with mildew. Various of the holding cells so carelessly stacked on top of each other were clawed at, bit at, and had been exposed to the elements. Clearly Pokemon had been kept here more than against their will, the young girl pondered weakly to herself. Not only did the smell make her want to wretch, but the thought of all those stolen or otherwise illegally obtained Pokemon…

Cramped and her arm still suffering from the burns of Doomsday, she moved to resituate herself. However, she was only able to lift a finger dully and shift her head about. She attempted to take control of her mouth. It, too, felt lame as though her dentist had shot her tongue and lips full up with novocaine. Her movement didn’t escape the notice of the only other living thing within the room.

“Grunt number one-one-zero-two-five reporting in. The girl has awoken,” he hushed into a walkie-talkie. He paused, and a muffled response followed that the new trainer couldn’t make out in the haze of the Stun Spore and the Sleep Powder.

Within a minute, the end message became clear. Two men with the same outfit Chris Johnson wore soon entered the room. Crystal’s stomach churned further as she heard Johnson instruct, “Unlock her door. Administrator Nersu is waiting to meet her, and we shan’t keep her.”

“Sir,” the grunt responded like a lifeless robot, before striding over to the blonde girl’s cage. Crystal’s legs immediately pushed out a few inches as the door of the cage shot out.

“Is she still paralyzed?” the third voice questioned, the other one of Chris’s position.

“Yes, sir.”

“I made sure to it that she inhaled a clear lungful,” Johnson nearly sneered, before he bent down. The frightened, new trainer tried to shrink back as she was forced to gaze into his sick, fake smile and those cunning violet eyes. “Hi Crystal. You learn your lesson? I do hope so, because someone very important wants to meet you today, so you’d better answer her when told to. Ms. Nersu is kind and understanding if you do what she wants. I can’t say what she would do to you otherwise, though…” he casually rambled on, before his gloved hand lunged out and wrapped itself tightly around her left arm. She gave a faint yelp of fright. Whomever this Nersu was, she did not want to meet her. She had pins and needles brushing all over her already from her inferior.

She was tugged out and hauled like a rug from her cage. She fought to get free, so she could at least stand on her own, but the option was not available as he dug his fingertips into her flesh harshly. She winced, and felt her other arm, her wounded arm, taken up just as quickly. The other promoted grunt was definitely more gentle than Christopher, being careful to not allow his hands near her wounds. Still, his grip was forte, and she was supported just barely enough so her knees wouldn’t remain on the ground and drag.

Without having to be instructed to, the grunt forcibly opened and shut the only door out of the holding cell room. Crystal found her hair hanging down limply from the sides of her face and flowing along the midnight-colored marble as she was transported out. She caught sight of their highly polished boots, well kept and taken care for, and she matched the echoing of their footsteps to their physical movements. She rolled her eyes upwards for a few seconds to try and see the rest of the hall. It stretched onwards for several yards, illuminated by brighter fluorescent tubes and concrete walls. Everything pushed down on her, and even with the silver security doors dotting the hall and the branch off into a new hallway, she felt as though she would never escape in this huge warehouse area. Posters littered the walls where billboards hung. Crystal was forced to look down from her eye muscles burning and stars filling her eyes, but one poster definitely held her bright pink bangs, blonde hair and sky blue eyes.

Her arms throbbed, being so carelessly totted along. Still no sign of relief was in sight as they took what appeared the main hallway to the base. They were far from the only ones now- all men and women, dressed in black with the RM symbol on their chest paused in their activities, facing the center of the hall and clearing the path quickly. The blonde gazed up. Like trained officers from the army, all of them saluted the men as they passed, but as soon as they were out of their visible eyesight she knew they would stare all at her emptily.

The end of the Death Row walk abruptly arrived. She forced her eyes up once again. A grand door of gleaming silver and the same team symbol emblazoned on the metal shone down on them menacingly. Two grunts saluted them both, before stepping aside when they gazed at the two superiors briefly and asked for identification cards.

“Open the doors for the two Junior Administrator’s meeting with Administrator Nersu!” one of the grunts called into his walkie-talkie, and there was the sound of powerful motors unlocking the tough security of the door. Smoothly, yet eerily silently, the double doors pulled back to reveal a massive room.

The room almost appeared to be a spherical, underground coliseum illuminated by powerful lighting orbs stuck in the ground and in the walls. On second glance the room itself was a narrow rectangle. Gentle spotlights carried all the way to the back of the room. A figure, obscured by the light, seem preoccupied at her desk. Patiently the two men waited, daring not to step any further into the room. Typing noises carried through the vast room, before the figure leaned upwards.

“Sorry to keep you two waiting,” the woman casually noted, her figure slowly coming into view beneath the dim spotlight.

“You didn’t keep us waiting, Administrator Nersu.” After Chris’s words, Crystal felt him give a short bow. The other Junior Administrator followed suit.

“Good, then. …I see you’ve brought the girl?”

“Yes, ma’am.”

“And I do hope she’s awake and able to talk.” The Administrator’s voice…something about her apathetic words were laced with ill intent.

“She is awake, ma’am,” answered the right-hand Junior Administrator.

“She cried when I pulled her out of the cage, ma’am.”

“Good…alright, bring her here so I can see her.”

Loathing every step onto the battle square they took, Crystal forced her eyes down to the ground stubbornly. The area was well-kept for, but brown spots that appeared suspiciously like blood stains made her close her eyes all together in nausea. She felt her captors take a set of small steps until they had reached the desk. Finally they pulled back slightly, propping the frightened girl up onto her knees. Her breath was once again lost. Tears were threatening to roll, even as she faced asphyxiation. Even though she was terrified, there was the strange need to gaze at this administrator, or what she could make out from her still-limp head.

The woman was obviously a good foot and a little taller than the blonde. Work pants, neatly pressed without a wrinkle, covered her glossy leather boots on small heels. A strand of deep blue hair passed into her sight, illuminated by the poor light briefly. ‘Nersu’ walked around Crystal slowly, taking in her every sight, before pausing in front of her.

“…so, you’re Crystal Hikara,” she offered, that same apathetic tone in her wispy voice. “The youngest of the Hikara siblings, sister to not only Ryouo Hikara, an extremely talented trainer, but Kira Hikara, one of the Elite Four members. Age ten and a half, hometown of Dawndew, embodied with a special…gift.” At her words, the blue-eyed girl shuddered. She felt violated. It felt like they knew every bit of her life. “…well, as our leader can’t be here at this moment, I, Kinshayti Nersu, first administrator of Team Missile, say…welcome.”

Crystal kept her gaze firmly on the ground. After a moment of silence, Kinshayti continued to pace around her.

“I know…we must look like a band of criminals here. I know you’ve heard about us, maybe even scoffed at our name. It’s to be expected. But, trust me, we aren’t. You know what we want most? In this world? I myself wanted it, and when they let me into this team, I got it. Respect. Everyone wants respect. We’re all not so different. People, every day throughout the Beghta Region, Johto, Kanto, Hoenn, Sinnoh, Orre, hell all of these regions we know about, sign up to become Pokemon trainers. To try and be the best. Some grow, become powerful, some fail. I was one of the failures until I made the decision to come to this team, among many others.

“I can tell, even without looking at your face. You’re near tears. I know so many people who have been like you, and the ones that joined this team, they got somewhere. They’re someone. …You want to be someone. We’ll help you be someone. We’ll benefit off each other, like this true team does. Won’t you help us?”

Another long pause followed. The Administrator’s footsteps ended behind her. Crystal felt the hot pressure of her eyes glued onto her. She fought to say anything, anything to counter what she had said. They're an awful team, Team Missile, she thought furiously and frightened. No crime is too heinous and no morals hold any value for them. They’re public Pokemon abusers and killers, cheaters, extorters, robbers, and human murderers…

Finally, she managed a response weakly. “No.” It was the only word able to give all her reasons against them in one fell blow.

Even if whispered, the negative response was deafening and echoed about the room. The silence was even more overpowering. The sharp clatter of rushed footsteps to Crystal’s side made her shrink back once again, but soon enough she found two long fingers almost glued together shove her chin up. She winced, but she was forced to gawk deep into Kinshayti’s face as she glared into hers. The Admin’s eyes were of a cold steel color, laced with flecks of lighter gold near the pupil. Her hair was ragged and hung down, contrasting on her blank face.

“Crystal…I think you fail to realize the delicate situation you are in right now,” she whispered coldly. “You shall help us with our goal, be it on your own will, or after we’ve dealt further with your longtime Pidgey friend, whom is in critical care at this moment…”

The girl froze dead in her place, tears welding up quickly.

“The bird, or your stubborn beliefs. Your choice.”

Crystal finally allowed her gaze down, submitting sorrowfully to the Administrator. She gave a brief, nonchalant smile, before she withdrew her fingers from her chin. Immediately blonde hair fell into the child’s face once again.

“Good. Alright. Please show Ms. Hikara to the packaging room, will you? I’ve heard the Alakazam has a long list of complaints to register with the lead supervisor.”

“Yes, ma’am,” the two Junior Admins affirmed soullessly, and once again she was dragged off. Her head was bowed shamefully and tears streamed down her cheek as the majestic doors closed behind them once again. Breeze…please get better so we can somehow escape from this horrible place…


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For the record, formatting stuff is a general pain in the butt. :B

C'n'C if you desire. I tried to tone this down as much as humanly possible cause I was looking at it and I was like WORDS WHAT THE- but yeah, hopefully it's a 200% improvement over before. PMJ YOU FAN GET OVER HERE AND READ THIS PLEASE KAY THANKS.
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Well I daresay this has been long awaited! And whether it's just me loving the concept here or something like that, you never fail to disappoint :p

I think there's just something about this story, like a couple others of note, that captures the essence of what pokémon *SHOULD* (or at least COULD) be like if it wasn't restricted to all that mega kiddy bs. Although centred around a child, the way this story is written is way more mature than anything you could ever think of coming out of a "mainstream" pokémon writing, and I think that is what makes it so appealing.

That and your masterful use of English which is way above what mine will ever be >_<

I've been talking to you as I've read this, so I don't feel the need to say much more apart from have fun changing the tags and all that for the next part :p
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Simply awesome! I have been waiting for this since, I don't even know! Heck, this thing got me pumped to improve what I've been (attempting) to work on!
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Its a great start CH! I hope your other chapters are this good or even better! =)

~NZ
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

First thing I will say is that your opening is much better compared to that of the opening.

Of course, that doesn't mean it's perfect. Let's go over a few things.

I don't care if you don't proofread (or that you wrote this in less-than-perfect times of the day). Just make sure that the first paragraph or even the first sentence is grammatically fine.
The van clattered along the uneven [Comma splice; "dirt road" is a full noun, so no comma is needed] dirt road riddled with potholes created from the local Diglett. The moving vehicle sped ominously along, causing Pokemon within the far reaches of the Eclipse Woods to scatter and take for cover as they watched it noisily pass.

An interesting thing about your reformatted piece is that you have some unique descriptions connected to your nouns/other-objects being-described:
Paragraph #2 said:
His leather grip on the wheel...
Paragraph #4 said:
It was all she could do... to keep her distance from the viciously fanged Pokemon...
Of course, we all know that gloves are made out of leather, not grips, and the Pokemon's fangs were vicious and that the Pokemon was not viciously given fangs. My guess is that you wanted to stay concise.

Strangely, you had quite a few issues with pronoun, most of them (not so strangely) dealing with "she." I suggest you look over them and try to get rid of as many as possible.

Now, one thing I'm confidently critical about is the momlogue. ._. Why the... is Crystal simply speaking to herself in such a free manner? Sure, no one's there, and she actually is out in the open, but still. And she might have said the whole thing much earlier, not "barely a mile from her hometowm. She'd probably say the moment she's out of town. Regardless, it just seems like stock behavior...

Beyond a few other technical issues that I'm not going to bother mentioning (because they AREN'T wother mentioning), the plot isn't original as of now; girl in the free area gets kidnapped and she is held there against her will as she tries to escape, but I'm sure it gets better from there.

It's not bad at the least, so I'm definitely anxious to read more.
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Nice to see this back. I really like the changes you made to Chapter 1.
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Know what, I'm glad you pestered me to read this, because it's actually rather brilliant. I loved the sharp contrast of childlike innocence and Team Missile's devious intentions in the earlier paragraphs, and the Pidgey thing was absolutely gruesome but nonetheless well written. Powerful stuff, yo.

I know you are no doubt hankering for some C&C but I'd like to hold off for now, at least until I see more of the story unravel. That's mainly because I can't really fault your writing style much and any grammatical errors show up on the Zyflair radar, so plot and character profiles are the only grounds left for me to cover.

Although I must confess, the name "Team Missile" comes across as slightly goofy. I can see myself growing used to it over time though.
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

I somewhat enjoyed reading this first part. I've never read any of your stuff before, but I can say that if this is the first part, the rest gets absolutely emotional and gripping and that's the stuff I can't wait for. So I'm going to keep on reading, mainly ignoring the spelling/grammar, etc. and enjoy the rest of the story since it's too early for plot failings yet.

dmaster out.
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Oh wow lots of comments :D Lemme know if you guys want a PM list set up so you know when I update!

gamercal: Glad to know I don't disappoint still after coming out of retirement ;D
Anyways, yeessssss, you got what I was aiming for! Yayness :3 Need moar mature fics, IMHO. Also, lolwhut D:
And tags >< AUGH

CA: Waiting since forever is quite a while ;D But yay for inspiration! It's always a good thing to see other authors getting inspired by my work. Feels like I am really helping at least a little bit. :3

NZ: Eh he he he! I hope so too. It's hard to get back on track after so long, you know? ;0

Zyflair: Hoo boy, what I've been waiting for! ;D Yummeh critique. :3
-You're totally right on that opening thing. AUGH. I can't believe I missed stuff like that. D: I shall edit all of that when I can, given right now I'm on my Wii and even typing this on my keyboard is one huge challenge in itself. -_-' But yeah, totally dumb mistakes right thar. :<
-As for the 'monologue'...well, the excuse will be revealed in Chapter 4. Well, it was revealed sorta in 2 but whatevs |D; Trust me, it'll [hopefully] seem less out of place in a chapter or two.
-Who said anything about her trying to escape? ;0 Crystal's a very weak character; she can't even think about escape if she doesn't know that Breeze is okay and by her side. I think that even Crystal knows she couldn't do anything anyways, even if she tried. ;P BUT THAT'S WHAT CHAPTER 2 IS FOR! That and for you to rip apart

eevee: Thanks. I'm kinda pleased myself, all grammar mistakes aside. Before it was just kinda...pathetic and not serious at all. Now it's all serious and better and yeah. :3

bacon: Pester? I did nothing of the sort. I simply strongly suggested it to you. ;0 But all the same, I'm glad you're enjoying the contrast thus far! ;D Good to see someone else pointing it out. (And I coulda gone more gruesome ya know...but then I wouldn't have been able to post it up here.)
I can't wait to hear what you think about our second protagonist and the Pokemon teehee. I think you may have some ridiculous fun with this story. |D
BTW I know we already covered this in chat but Team Missile is just as silly as Team Rocket and I will make the connection to the in-game kind and not the dumb failures of the anime so yeah. YOU WILL FEAR THEIR NAME WHEN ALL IS SAID AND DONE D<

dmaster: Awriiiiight, another reader joins the reading bandwagon(?)! Hopefully I'll be able to deliver that powerful stuff as the story goes on. I like to think some of the plottwists are preeeeetty heavy. ;0 Thanks again!

D-d-d-d-double update via a chapter for BOTH of my stories! Whoo hoo! (Don't expect this any time soon again lol)

Anyways, time to move forward! I love this part of the story almost as much as some of the bigger twists. ;D

Yet, something seems amiss...no mismatching eyes- the staple of the past, second protagonist? Just muddy brown eyes? Seems like that one trainer's been replaced! :0000 What reason could I have to replace her?!

Well, like I said a few characters have been replaced. This is one of the more notable ones of course.

Anyhoo, enough with the blather! Just go on and man up, and READ RQO! *dully shakes pompoms*

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Chapter 2: Breakout

Dragged further and further away from where Kinshayti’s chamber rested, Crystal found her will to remain awake only dependent on the pain shooting through her burned arm. She had no energy left, even with the paralysis fading from her body at last. She didn’t bother to look up at all the faces saluting the two Junior Administrators, who then stared at her without pity. She didn’t bother to look up at the paper-clogged bulletin boards when they passed them. She didn’t bother to give a glance up as another one of the silver doors was opened and she was brought inside. Immediately she heard footsteps clatter in unison to direct their owners into a neat line. The left Junior Admin pinioning her, Christopher Johnson, jerked his head over to Crystal. She felt his tight grip loosen and being replaced by bare hands. The other Junior Admin, too, released his hand to another worker.

“Alright, prop her in a chair next to the Pokemon Supervisor. Be sure to tie her up. The Stun Spore she was given should be wearing off by now,” Chris ordered. The two men weakly noted ‘sir’ before once again she was towed off. “After your shifts are done, call us back here. The movement of a valuable prisoner such as herself has been ordered by Administrator Nersu herself to be done only by Junior Administrator hands. Any disobedience of this will result in a loss of two weeks pay…”

His words were lost in the sound of monotonous cranking gears and conveyer belts. As Johnson's deadly grip was released on her, Crystal found herself more curious and less tired; her energy had recovered enough to allow herself to drag her head up a few inches. The work room she was assigned to appeared more like a sweat shop. The noise was nearly deafening as they passed different machines left on in the worker’s rush to greet the Junior Administrators. Machines still calculated and waited for a person’s input, hovering over a dark, menacing Pokeball with a solder tip. One conveyer belt halted, boxes half-full of the miniature catching orbs waiting for the rest of their load before they were pushed onwards. Sewing machines weaving the black garments were, too, stopped.

The sound of bare electricity caught the girl’s attention. She turned her head to the side gently. Tired Pikachu and Electrike rested, panting and gripping onto the glass walls of the capsules in which they were contained. The electric mouse’s cheeks sizzled with lightning sickly. The lightning dogs collapsed on their side, fur discharging every so often as they winced. Still other Pokemon worked to supply a generator more than likely used for powering half of the warehouse plant. The sight of it made her want to throw up.

Soon the noise completely disappeared as she was brought into a small room overlooking the area. Left inside of the area were control panels flashing ‘temp. shut-off of all machines for attendance’. A patient, yet clearly cold Pokemon waited inside, gazing over the area and only offering a sideward glance as the workers and Crystal entered. Silently the golden brown Pokemon rose his hand to the side, summoning a chair overlooking the work zone and turning it to face the girl in one psychic motion. Without a word she was shoved into the chair and tied up swiftly, her hands locked behind her back. Her legs and chest, too, were tightly bound into place. Immediately they left, leaving Crystal to be resituated once again by the Alakazam in an uncomfortable silence.

Soon the noise of the workplace bustled up once again and hushed itself as a man let himself through the door. Though dressed in white professional clothing, the new trainer could clearly tell that he was a Team Missile Grunt. He gazed up through a pair of heavy lenses; the light prevented her from seeing his eyes.

“Alright, so you’re Crystal Hikara. Good, maybe now I can get reassurance on one of the workers whom have been slacking and stealing our items greedily for themselves. …well, you know what to do with him.”

The ‘gifted’ girl hesitated, her eyes slowly falling to the psychic Pokemon. Her lips still felt reluctant to form syllables with her tongue.

“What are you waiting for? Talk, else your little Pidgey friend-”

At once she fought to organize her words. She slurred, paralysis still affecting her. “Uh, who do y-you thhhhhink is behind thhhhe stealing and slacking…?”

“Ala, alakazam,” the Pokemon noted, nodding down to the work room. She gazed down, following his eyes as he spoke further. A man hovered about, and though from her angle he appeared to be working, she could make out something odd about him. “Zam, kazam ala.”

“…well, girl? What did he have to say?”

She remained silent for a moment more. What would happen to the man if I ratted him out? she wondered. Would he be discharged, hurt, or even ...killed?

“Girl? Talk now.”

“…it’s…thhhhat man down thhhere,” she nudged off to the man working on packing Missile Balls. Her syllables were now also slurred from nervousness.“Hhhhe’s been doing it for as long as hhhhhe’s been hhhhere...”

“Good, thank you. That’s what I thought, but I wasn’t completely sure. Don’t go anywhere, there’s further protocol to cover and the like…”

The supervisor left the cabin area. Crystal shamefully couldn’t bear to watch as he and other assistant grunts dragged him away and out of the work room all together.

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Cast carelessly again into her cage, she was quickly locked away what seemed to be days later from her ‘shift’. More than fifteen men and Pokemon workers had been hauled away by her expense, with only one to return to his job. Even then he was severely beaten, and could barely stand the rest of his shift, let alone press himself to work. She rested her head uncomfortably on the bars. At least she could fully move her head, lips and hands again, but everything else was still numb. Her hair dully shone in gray colors in the lack of light. Her clothes were lightly stained and a small rip found itself on her shirt sleeve. Her arm still throbbed from the borderline second degree burns, still left untreated.

All at once her position hit her. They probably had killed off Breeze and Flora already, and were just lying to her to make her comply. And, when she learned that they weren’t alive, and when she wouldn’t comply, they’d probably torture her until they further killed her soul and forced her to work. Crystal knew she had a low pain tolerance. She couldn’t stand to be subjected to any Pokemon attack, let alone a human beating. She’d never see the sun as the same girl with the same friends again. She would become another clone, another one of them, and be forced until the end of her existence to work with them. Never to see her worried mother, her caring siblings, her father off on another excavation, their Pokemon, Breeze, Flora, or any of her dreams ever again.

She began to softly allow the pain out, choking on her cries as tears rolled down her cheeks like a fountain. The guard man shifted about on his feet, ignoring her movement. Through her tears she made out the Vileplume hidden in shadows, just waiting for an opportunity to use its powers. She thought of just asking it to overload her with Sleep Powder and Stun Spore, so she could painlessly die, but it probably wouldn’t obey her…

What are you thinking, Crystal?! she furiously questioned, tears still streaming as she breathed in quickly. Breeze is probably still alive, and Flora, too. They wouldn’t kill them off so easily. No, these guys would love to just dangle them in my face to make me work harder. They don’t want me off the hook. I have to be strong for them…have to. And for Mom, Dad, Ryouo, Kira, Wizar, Worki, Sheila…

Sirens started their ominous call around the room. She let loose an instinctive cry, feeling her arm shoot through with pain as she leapt. The two guards sprung into attention, the man no longer relaxed and the Vileplume returning to its feet and appearing ready to spread its pollen. Red flashed through the room as a voice screeched over the intercom.

“BREACH IN SECTOR C OF THE BASE! BREACH IN SECTOR C OF THE BASE! TAKE OFFENSIVE FORMATIONS! PREPARE FOR BATTLE! THIS IS NOT A DRILL! I REPEAT, THIS IS NOT A DRILL! TAKE OFFENSIVE FORMATIONS! THERE IS AT LEAST ONE INTRUDER IN THE BUILDING!”

The orders repeated themselves over the wails of the alarm. Crystal winced, her eardrums pounded as she was unable to clasp her hands over her ears. All of the sounds meshed together in one coagulated cacophony: footsteps, orders, sirens, Pokemon calls…the chaos was more than welcome, though. The gifted girl knew that intruders meant someone against Team Missile, someone potentially on her side. The sirens were almost like a flourish, and her time of rescuing at hand if she was lucky enough to be found. She silently prayed, her tears drying up.

The sounds seemed to meld into the background as the sound of clattering metal was heard overhead. The young trainer neared the edge of the cage and looked up. There was nothing in particular wrong. The grunt and Vileplume, too, glared upwards. Still nothing.

All at once a grating was taken aside as a figure fell from the heavens. The red light silhouetted the intruder as one with a masculine body, short onyx-colored hair, and wearing a silver jacket. Six Pokeballs, some of different varieties, gleamed as the invader drop-kicked the first guard with their entire weight. At once the second grunt rose his lone Missile Ball. Swiftly the new figure latched onto it and threw it up to the vent, out of harm’s way. Left with nothing but his body to defend himself, he threw a sucker punch aimed at the figure’s face. They ducked off to the side, throwing a punch of their own. It connected lightly with the grunt’s ribcage, causing him to back off. As he moved towards his walkie-talkie, the fighter kicked it clean out of his hand before kicking his chest. He fell backwards, the wind knocked from his lungs.

From behind, the Vileplume’s head began to sag, a clear sign that it was going to release its powder soon. Fighting for words, Crystal cried, “W-watch out! The Vileplume…!” The figure spun around, perhaps looking for whom gave the warning, before they made out the creature. Quickly bringing a handkerchief from their pocket to their mouth, the intruder gave an order with a surprising feminine voice.

“Umbree, Psychic!”

Rushing down from the vents to aid its trainer, a fox-like black Pokemon came into view. Golden rings flashed in the intense heat of battle. Gently it landed on all four paws with a short ‘Umb’. Red gleaming eyes locked on the Vileplume. Still caught mid-attack, the Flower Pokemon was helpless to conjure an actual attack in time. Blue aura pulsed out from Umbree’s eyes. The aura encompassed the Vileplume, and it shrieked in pain, coiling wildly as its energy was sapped away. Casually it was tossed aside into a bare section of the wall. It was out.

Crystal turned her attention, with the female intruder, back to the stumbling grunt. Briefly holding his chest, he suddenly charged forward, releasing loose attacks from all angles and trying to hit the enemy however he could. Nimbly she either blocked or dodged all attacks, using her arms and knees to block the brunt of his assaults. She sidled in after he exposed his ribs, latching onto his wrist and pulling him into another quick and painful punch. She released him as he keeled over, avoiding another futile swipe at her.

“Come on! Man up!” she roared in frustration, preparing her punches once again through her light sweat. Stubbornly he rose, and she struck him in the face with a clenched fist of hatred. Nose slightly bleeding, he still got to his feet. Quickly she rolled in, her foot landing on the side of his head. He fell to his knees, barely conscious. Finally she rushed over, clasping her hands together like a makeshift hammer, and slammed it down on a part of his back without waiting to hear his pleas of mercy. He was forcibly shoved down to the cold concrete floor. He was fast unconscious.

After curiously prodding at him with her foot and rolling his body over to make sure he was sleeping, she sighed, running a hand through her messy hair. Curiously, she walked around the room, noticing the flesh within the smallest cage that was Crystal. She bent down, peering into her face. The light barely illuminated her features. The intruder gawked for a moment. The young trainer began to blush from her glare of disbelief.

“Ah, p-please, I-I was…they kidnapped me, and, and my Pokemon are…took everything…and…”

With a quiet movement the skilled trainer moved far away from the bars. Her Pokemon curiously trotted up towards her, giving her a small sniff, before its eyes gleamed blue again. A sudden snap was heard as the cage door swung open. The Umbreon leapt back, giving a satisfied yip. Crystal made some sort of questioning noise.

“Come on,” the intruder ordered. “They’re probably on their way in here now. I can get you somewhere far safer than this, but you have to move now!”

All at once, Crystal yearned to take the chance and tried to force her body outwards. However, the paralysis still gripped her, and she could only inch towards the exit before she was stuck again. She gasped for air from her effort weakly.

“I…I can’t…” she panted heavily, her muscles aching. “They…used Stun Spore…I can barely even…move…”

As the gifted one coughed severely, the experienced female trainer gave a small sigh. “Alright. Well, can you at least grab onto something?”

“Yeah, I-I think so…”

“Arcanum! Help this girl outta here.” In one swift movement she had lifted off a blue ball with two red plates on top of it. A brilliant flash engulfed the room as the ball snapped open. For a brief second Crystal made out the rest of the trainer’s face- she was older than the newbie trainer but still youthful and smooth. Uniform brown eyes locked to the forming figure, slightly squinting from the sudden brightness.

The Pokemon stood tall as it let out a small bark. The dog with red-orange fur striped with black briefly turned its head, huge paws curiously gazing around before its eyes fell onto its trainer. Beige fur surrounding its head, paws and tail ruffled as though caught in a windy day. After the femme nodded off to the small girl, it paced over, sniffing her. Crystal shied away, intimidated by its form. As though to comfort her, it gave a gentle lick to her face before cautiously taking her entire body into its mouth and placing her onto its back in one fell motion. It gave a concerned, feminine bark as to why she hadn’t even flinched during the process.

“Yeah, she’s paralyzed, so go slower than normal, you hear girl?” the intruder commanded, and at that the dog nodded her head intelligently. “Go east of here and you’ll find a room with a weird looking machine that has a door on it. Put her into it and just hit any big green button you find there. It should send her somewhere safe. Flamethrower for long range attacks and Thunder Fang if you have to get into close combat with any Missile Grunts, alright?”

“Ar!” the massive dog cried, glancing at the still barred door and whining at the site of it. Soon the female was back over to the grunt, removing a card key from his waist.

“T-thank you,” Crystal meekly muttered.

“Hey, I was here anyways,” she casually noted as she paced over. “Still have a little bit of business left to attend to, too.” After another glance around the room, she swiped the card key. The door began to pull open. “Ah, might as well. What’s your bag look like, and your Pokemon and their Pokeballs?”

“Ah, er, they’re just normal…Pokeballs,” she lamely announced, clutching tighter onto Arcanum’s mane. “Just started an adventure. I-I had a sassy sort of reddish Pidgey named Breeze…she should have a damaged wing…” As she noted the wound, she herself remembered how she was carried into this entire mess. “…and there should be an Oddish named Flora too.”

“Bag?” she impatiently interrogated. She paused, trying to find a good description in her mind.

“It’s homemade. It’s a sling-over-the shoulder bag that connects to my belt…”

“Alright, it’s different. That makes my life easier…” the elder coolly responded. Arcanum glanced back at her trainer as the doors locked in their open position. She gave a quick nod of her head to the Pokemon, and soon the majestic creature turned to the exit way, starting to walk off. “I’ll see you later.”

Without a further word the dog suddenly broke into a small trot, then a quicker sprint. Her movements were smooth and the ride was anything but bumpy down the vile halls. Papers tore off the walls as they passed. Grunts soon spotted them as they drew near to the main hallway. The dog hesitated, giving a loud, threatening bark that frightened off some and made the others back off. She planted her feet as they tossed out, like projectile weapons, their Missile Balls. Fighting, dark and poison types barred their process. Arcanum did not flinch. Instead, she opened her maw.

The smell of sulfur caught in the air as bright and intense fire shot out of the fire-dog’s mouth. The heat was absorbed back into her body before it could affect Crystal, but the flames eagerly licked and burned away the competitors and their misled trainers. Leaving the Missile Grunts hopping and rolling around in an attempt to put out the fire, Arcanum quickly dashed past them and down the eastern hallway.

The new hall was covered in Grunts, and as soon as one caught sight of the Arcanine all followed in trying to cut it off. Again the fire type gave a powerful, intimidating cry as Pokemon were released left and right. Some shrank back into their orbs in sheer fear as fast as they had been called out. The remaining Pokemon began launching long-distance attacks. With a Flamethrower taken down to the power of an Ember, she countered all attacks. The Arcanine glanced back to Crystal, as though saying ‘hold on!’, before the world suddenly blurred slowly around them.

They soon reappeared, if for a second, standing on four Grunt’s heads. The pressure crumpled them as the dog leapt off to the clear side. The frightened trainer lurched forward and almost was bucked off by the sudden movement; it was only the continuous dash of the fire canine that battled off the inertia. The grunts rallied behind them, shooting all sorts of dangerous things their way, but she turned a corner rapidly and their assaults hit the bare wall.

The new hall was fairly quiet, and the few grunts lingering about were quickly knocked aside by a strong Tackle and Flamethrower. The dog peeked in through windows seconds after she would land next to them, before continuing on to the next room. Finally they reached another security door, and after a quick glance through it she backed away. Once again the Pokemon opened her jaws wide open, but this time Crystal could hear crackling of electricity instead of the crackling of fire. She shot out to the control panel, sinking in her gigantic teeth into it. Sparks blew out as the door malfunctioned and slid open.

Waiting inside were several Grunts, some wearing labcoats. All shrieked as the dog stepped in with her cry. None were intimidated this time. Pokemon flew out at her in the more diverse types- water, electric, and grass Pokemon joined the fray. Barely able to cancel out the barrage of attacks on her, especially the water jet that soaked her fur and chilled her horridly, Arcanum leapt over and above their heads to the cylindrical machine her trainer had told her about. About-turning quickly in a crouch, she slid Crystal off her back and down to the floor before her mighty head pushed her tightly inside. Screams of ‘the girl’s trying to escape!’, ‘the Pokemon is too quick and powerful!’ and ‘don’t let her escape, under any costs!’ bounced around the room. Attacks missed and glanced off the metal door as it swung shut, imprisoning Crystal. She watched flames dance around from the small window of the door. A beep greeted her ears, and the surrounding area swirled away into darkness.

Space. She was floating in space. Everything was black, she couldn’t see anything, but then the light of the world pierced into her eyes. She felt gravity take affect, and soon her hair began to tumble and catch in her face as it arched upwards. The picture became clearer and clearer as she reformed. She was in the night sky, near a densely forested area and above the surface of a lake. Her eyes widening, she attempted to register the need to swim before she hit the water body, but still her legs and arms didn’t respond. She winced, fearing for the worst.

And she broke the surface.

Water soon engulfed her, water cold enough to be artic. The chill seeped deep into her skin, making her twitch violently as she began to sink. The water made her scream in pain from her burn on her arm. Huge bubbles trailed out of her mouth as she was pushed down deeper, unable to keep herself afloat. She couldn’t breath. She couldn’t swim. She was never afraid of water, all those times she so eagerly leapt in at Dawndew Lake and swam like a fish Pokemon, but now she was. Her lungs began to burn as still more air leaked out of her body. Memories began to flood back into her mind as she felt the soft bottom reach her. The creature was in front of her, mercilessly being attacked by the lakeside, and she was the one to rescue it.

Movement below her brought her back to reality for a brief second as she felt something slip under her hand. Her entire body was in pain, yet the memory persisted and offered to soothe her. Something continued to move around her. Everything was too dark and dank to see clearly. It hurt. And hurt. And hurt. She couldn’t take it any longer. With a final exhale, tired, hurt and dying from drowning, her body shut down and took her into the unconscious world.

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I'm done writing Chapter 7- Suppuration, and onto Chapter 8. 'swhy I posted this up. ;D

I've officially decided that I'm sick of having Crystal get KOed all the time, so she'll hopefully be doing less of that here. Suppuration will show that. :3 AND NO THERE WILL NOT BE ANY SILLY WHITED OUT SCENES. THAT'S TOO SILLY FOR THIS. ;D

I dunno. I hope I'll get Crystal right this time around. Last time I felt she was too annoying and strong of a character. I don't want her to be a total crybaby, nor do I want her 100% naive, but I do want to show she has a lot of flaws as a character. Our second heroine has no problem with that, but still, I'm wondering how to proceed with her. Hmm. I guess I'll just let the characters tell their story to me, as always...

After I get Chapter 8-9 done, then we'll be movin' right along. ...whoo boy, this'll definitely be longer than the last one. I gotta try and put my 10-page cap limit back on this story before it gets too out of hand (like it has been for the last few chapters I've written. Hoo...).
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

I like the chapter, yes she finally escapes! It seems you have been working in overdrive just by reading your AN.

~NZ
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Wow! You were not kidding about changing the chapters. My only question is *Spoiler for those who did not read the original story* will Crystal still catch Sergeant Pup?
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

NZ: Hahah, yeah. Been goin' crazy with stuff. :B

eevee: No I wasn't. Lots had to be changed. ;D There's like an extra two chapters now lolololol but a lot's gonna get axed later so it really shouldn't matter too badly? As for your question, I dunoooooo. I guess you'll have to read, huh?

ANYWAYS! CHAPTER 3! BECAUSE I AM JUST THAT CRAZY LADY WITHOUT A LIFE! Page 100 broken \m/

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Chapter 3: Recovery

“Oh, goodness! What an absolute doll! How unfortunate that this happened! I do wish I knew what happened to the poor thing!”

The indistinct roused Crystal from her sleep. Groggily she shifted. Her body responded. The reaction made the girl question things to herself: Was that all…a bad, horrible dream? Is that you, Worki? Am I still home…?

Soon, though, terrible doubt covered up the hope that it was just a nightmare; as Crystal shifted her hand, she felt something sticking into her. The feeling caused her to shiver. She became aware that she was buried under piles and piles of fleece blankets. What felt like a paper nightgown made her body itch wildly all over. The bedspreads didn’t help, either. Giving a soft groan of displeasure, blue eyes slowly opened to take in the surroundings.

Even with her blurry vision, it was clear that a creature running around was a Blissey. Seafoam green and pearl white walls closed down in on the new trainer, threatening to swallow her up in the hospital atmosphere. An IV was directly next to her, pumping clear fluids into her. Again the young one shuddered; she had always had a fear of needles. She daren’t look at her hand piercing.

Soon, the frenzied happiness Pokemon caught sight of her slow movement. Her eyes widened for a moment, before she ran to the door, hollering, ‘Bliss-ey! Bliiiiiss-EY!” It wasn’t a minute later that a brunette entered into the room, followed by the pink Pokemon.

“Miss? Miss, are you awake?”

Crystal only offered a groan in response. It seemed to satisfy the nurse.

“Can you talk? Can you open your eyes? There are a few things I need to discuss with you…”

Lethargically, the young girl attempted to wake up further. The plain brown eyes of the nurse were locked on her as she gazed emptily back. She also attempted to push herself upwards.

“Where…am I?” Crystal questioned, appeasing the doctor further.

“You’re in Twilitsong’s Pokemon Center. We brought you in-”

But Crystal had heard well enough. Her eyes widened, even though they were heavy, and held a frantic sense about her. “T-Twilitsong?! How did I end up here?!”

“I was about to ask you the same thing. We found you in the arms of our Gym Leader’s Dragonite, Ananku, soaked to the bone and with a fever. We also had to administer anti-Stun Spore medication. What do you remember happening?”

At that, the blonde hesitated. The realization that all of that hadn’t been a dream began to sink in, and horribly fast at that. “I…” She felt reluctant to respond to the question.

“Excuse me, sir…” a hushed voice caught her attention from outside the room.

“Sir, you can’t go in there!” responded an authoritative man.

“Hey, don’t you know the Gym Leader when you see ‘em? I’m hurt! I’m just curious to see…”

“She needs her rest, though!”

“Aw, come on…!”

“What’s going on out there?!” the nurse furiously demanded in a firm voice. The door swung in gently. A man of very average height for someone in their prime was endlessly smirking as though this was all a game. His body, kept fit and hidden under very plain clothing and a beat-up jacket, spoke of fun and games. He even laughed as he rubbed his short brown hair when the other nurse chided him further, before turning to his superior.

“I’m sorry, Doctor Theresa, I couldn’t stop him…”

“What is the meaning of this, Michael? Unless you have suddenly been shot at or are suffering from a terrible burn, then I have to ask you to leave.”

“Aw, c’mon Doc,” Michael pleaded. “What kinda soulless git would you think me of if I didn’t even bother to check in on the girl my Dragonite found?”

“You could have waited until we said she was well enough to take visitors!”

Crystal slowly stared at the new figure. Sensing eyes upon him, the Gym Leader gazed over with natural golden eyes. “Hey, kid, how’re you handling?”

“I’m going to call security.”

“Like you’d really try that on Beghta’s seventh, and currently most powerful I may add, Gym Leader!”

“The wonders of Thunderwave and what they can do to a person,” the head doctor offered.

“Come on, give a guy a break! Just wanna know if the crazy girl that wanted to go for a late-night swim was okay or not. Jeez.”

“Michael, if you’re not out of here within the next minute, I will have Joseph call security,” the woman continued. In the mean time, she fiddled with a waxy plastic cone and trying to slip it onto an ear thermometer. Soon the hollow sounds of a makeshift ocean flooded Crystal’s left ear as the instrument entered her ear canal.

“Extremespeed! Michael is such a, such a…lame name. But, seriously, girl, what were you thinking? Were you after that little serpent kid of my Dragonite?”

“What do you mean?” Crystal offered as she listened to the beeping of the thermometer. Theresa seemed relatively pleased by the result, though she offered a glare of ice to the blathering man.

“No? Ah well. I’m sure that you’ll take the time to thank me later for your rescue, still. Swing by my gym anytime. I’m sure you’ll get a kick out of it. You are a trainer, right?"

“SECURITY!”

“Ah, ah, time to make a strategic and hasty retreat!” he roared, smile plastered over his face. “Extremespeed leaves at the speed of sound!” Within seconds, he was gamboling off. Joseph, in disbelief, shook his head and quietly exited the room.

“…sorry about that, miss. What a jerk! He thinks he owns the town just because he’s the Gym Leader. The nerve!” she howled, pouring pure glistening water into a Dixy cup. “…here, miss. I’ll need your trainer ID soon for insurance purposes…”

As she took her cup, Crystal frowned. She had never made it to Sunrise. She hadn’t made it to a Pokemon Center to register for her identification card. Now, she was left without a starter Pokemon, left without her bag, and was stranded far away from home. She paused emptily at the cup, the horrifying images of the past day replaying in her mind.

“Miss?”

Her hands quivered. “I, uh…I don’t have a trainer’s ID yet…I just started, but I was separated from my Pokemon completely, I guess, yesterday. We were hit with a Teleport…” The harmful truth stayed behind her lips. It was bad enough to tell the lie, but it was worse to relive the experience again and again.

“Oh… I see. Is there anyway to get in touch with a parent of yours?”

“No,” she rapidly answered. “…no. There isn’t a way.”

The doctor hesitated at the odd response, but shook her head. “Alright, very well…just continue resting for now. I’ll be back to discuss some things with you, miss…”

“Crystal,” she weakly responded.

“Alright, I will be back soon, Crystal.” Eagerly, the blonde watched as she painstakingly opened the door, hovered in the entryway for a moment, and then closed it.

At once the paper cup fell from her hands, clattering onto the floor with a small splash. The wetness of the floor reflected her face as she covered it quickly, in fear someone would see her tears. Her breaths quickly choked her like the water had. She felt her airways constrict as she continued to sob wildly. The pain of feeling so violated, so hurt was too much to bear.

“…Buh-Breeze…oh, oh God, puh-please…let her be alive…let h-her and Flora still be alive…why? Why did this happen? D-did I do something wrong? Why, God? Please…let them be alive…”

“By the Legendaries, need a tissue, kid?”

The sudden voice made the girl self-consciously leap. She quickly wiped away at her tears as she noticed the same teenage girl from the headquarters.

“Oh, it’s y-you,” she still blubbered, though fought for her weak breath. “Th-thank you for getting me out of there…”

“Like I said, no worry.”

“H-how did you get in here?”

“You probably wouldn’t have heard me sneak in from all your crying, but I slipped in through the window.”

“Ah…” Crystal offered a cough from her aching lungs as she allowed her eyes to really trail over the one who saved her. The teen stood at around five-foot-five, give or take an inch. Once again the most prominent thing about her was her messy, boy-short hair and plain brown eyes. A silver windbreaker covered over a solid black tee that rested over an underlying white shirt. Around her neck was a small gold chain that disappeared behind her clothes. Two tight straps on her shoulders held up a humongous backpack. Strapped to the left cuff of her windbreaker was a rather expensive looking Pokemon Gear. Her jeans were weathered, like her primary-colored sneakers, by the elements. A certain look of professionalism shone in her eyes.

“Darn, what ended up happening to you? They got you on IV. Land on a Sandslash or something?” she jeered, prodding at the tube. At once the younger of the two winced back painfully and gripped her hand reassuringly.

“I got transported to the lake near here.”

“To the lake?”

“Ah, in the lake.”

“Oh. …well that sucks. Sorry. Arcanum is smart, but I don’t think even she could have known to change the teleporter, ah ha. …oh, right.” She hesitated, swinging the large bag on her back around dangerously to her front. Soon enough one of the smaller pockets were opened. With a swift motion the tomboy withdrew the blonde’s bag and unfolded it to its normal capacity. “Found your bag. I don’t know what stuff you had in it though. It was empty.”

“Ah, it was pretty empty,” she muttered back embarassedly.

“How far into your journey were you?”

“I’d just started that day…”

“…just yesterday?” the woman rose an eyebrow curiously. Before she could question such further, she was cut off by an eager Crystal.

“Oh, did you find my Pokemon?!”

The black-haired trainer hesitated. Clinging to hope that she was a joking type, she continued to look into those muddy eyes until she looked away.

“Sorry, kid. I looked all over and even ‘asked’ some grunts if they had any sort of idea where I could find them, but I got nothing.”

Tears dangerously welded up again, and soon she exploded into a series of sobs, hiccups and coughing fits. At once the figure snapped her head over, alarmed. “Ah, god! Hey, stop that! Cut it out! If they didn’t know anything, then I think they mighta escaped, I’m sure of it!”

“B-but Breeze had a b-broken wiiiing!” Crystal cried wildly. “Th-that’s lethal for most birds! She, she, she probably is, probably is…!” The rest of her words fell into complete disarray. The elder trainer was stunned into silence.

“And people call me a pessimist…” she muttered. However, she shuffled around in her bag, removing a slightly yellowed handkerchief. “Come on, clean up. If you give up now, then you’ll never get anywhere. There were a lot of Pokemon that escaped yesterday- I made sure of it. Pokemon are good creatures. They see another Pokemon, and they want to help it. I’m sure that there’s a little buddy out there that helped out your Pokemon. Just…stop crying. Sorry, I can’t stand crybabies…”

Eagerly Crystal took the handkerchief, blowing heavily into it with the sound of a trumpet. The elder gave a small laugh at that.

“What? Wh-what’s so funny?” the new trainer hiccuped.

“Haha, you just have an explosive nose-blowing technique for someone so tiny, that’s all…a little unexpected.” Crystal frowned at that, still caught in her wheezing though her tears were finally dry. “…you alright, kid? You’re coughing a lot…”

“Just asthma…” she spoke in a frog-like voice in between hacks. “Doctors don’t call it real asthma though…”

“Uh huh. So…what’s your name anyway, kid?”

“Crystal. Crystal Hikara,” she finally managed to quiet her voice to speak normally.

“I see. And what’s up with your weird sense of style here, huh? I’m surprised your parents would let you dye your bangs pink and give you contacts. You trying to look like a freak?”

“I’m not a freak!” Crystal hollered weakly, giving a small cough. “They’re both natural!” Of course, the figure could only snicker at that. “I’m serious!”

“Ha, wow. You’re a defiant little one. Also a bad liar.”

“I’m not lying!” Wincing as she did so, the younger touched her bare eyeball on the iris and moved her finger to the side. Such a motion, she knew, would typically reveal colored contacts when they slid out of place. Most definitely her savior knew, as well, and she stopped laughing at that.

“Oh, you’re serious about your eyes, then…wow, they’re really bright. They’re almost not natural…”

“My hair, too,” she muttered, but again the teen brushed her off. Deciding to drop it, she insisted on learning more about this heroine. “…so, you never told me your name.”

“Eh, unimportant,” the woman swatted her hand.

“What?! But I told you my name!”

“Fine, call me Eru for the time being.”

“Eru? Is that your first name?”

“It’s more of a nickname. I generally don’t give out my name to people that aren’t close to me. Don’t take any offense from it, though; I just have a bad past I’d rather keep in my past. I know of people who would leap in a heartbeat at a chance to get their hands around my throat.”

Soon ‘Eru’ fell silent and distant. Her eyes trailed around the room, as though even giving Crystal that much information was taboo. Her hands folded in on each other thoughtfully. The pose she took nearly appeared like one that she took when fighting the grunt. It was obvious that she was well seasoned in the competitive field of battling, as well.

“So…are you a trainer?”

“Hmm?” she rose from her meditative stance for a moment. “Ah, yeah.”

“What kinda Pokemon do you have?”

“Too many,” she groaned.

“…but you only have six, don’t you?”

At that, Eru glanced over. One eyebrow dipped down curiously as the other rose, as though she couldn’t believe she had heard her say that. “I have many more.”

“But you only can have six with you. How can you have more?”

“Wow, did you, like, grow up as an alien to Beghta or something? Do you know nothing about the PSS?”

“PSS?”

“I guess so. By the legendaries, it’s a wonder why Team Missile even wanted you in the first place.” The pause allowed Crystal’s heart to twinge in sorrow once more. Breeze…Flora…and the people I caused harm to so selfishly…please, I hope you’re all okay… “Er…why do you think they wanted you?”

“I have no idea…” the blonde lied again. She knew all too well why they wanted her, why so many people tried to pretend to be her friend, just so they could use her…

“I think you do know. …maybe it was for this little thing? Though they’d be really dumb to not have gotten that off of you…”

Crystal gazed over as Eru lifted a small necklace charm off the nightstand. She examined it closely. The little charm of a pink Pokeball was kept tight in place by silver swirl clamps. Little amethysts were embedded in the silver. Eagerly Crystal held out her hand for it. My necklace! I feel so naked without it… Sensing her urgency, she handed it over. With great care, she clipped it together in the back. A feeling of calming warmth soothed her.

“You treat that thing like some people worship their coffee,” Eru teased.

“My father gave this to me on my seventh birthday. It is very important to me. I haven’t heard or seen from him since that day…”

“Ah. Is that a real Pokeball?”

“If it is, then I don’t know why it’s lodged so tightly into the amulet. It’s too tiny to be a Pokeball, too.”

“So, obviously Team Missile wouldn’t want something so dinky and tacky.”

“It’s not tacky!”

“So dramatic!” Eru sneered with a short laugh. After her smile faded, she gazed back to the small girl. “So…why did they get you? They have nothing to gain from literally newbie trainers. Why you? Do you have a brother or sister that they have something against?”

“Nothing like that…I really don’t know…unless it could be for my…my gift.”

“Your gift?”

“It’s…I…”

Footsteps soon approached the door from outside the room. Eru froze, before throwing her backpack on again and nearly silently flying to the window. Crystal’s eyes widened as she climbed up on the ledge.

“W-wait, what’re you…?!”

“Catcha later, Crystal…” she whispered with a smirk and a half-moon wave of her hand before disappearing quickly from sight. The doorknob turned and the doorway soon showed the doctor once again. She held a bowl of steaming chicken noodle soup on a tray, but her eyes darted to the window. The curtains billowed, as though a pleasant breeze blew into the room.

“Are you chilly?”

“No,” the young trainer muttered nearly to herself as she continued to gaze off to the window. Eru…thank you for what you’ve done for me. But I don’t think there’ll be anything you can help me with again… “No, just enjoying the fresh air…”

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Needs moar comments :<
 
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Crystal Hikara said:
Darn, what ended up happening to you? They got you on IV. Land on a Sandslash or something?” she jeered, prodding at the tube. At once the younger of the two winced back painfully and gripped her hand reassuringly.
Do my eyes deceive me or do I see a capitalization error? Here I thought you never made a mistake, Crystal Hirara. My dream broken as Breeze's wing. JK. I really like the changes you made here. If it is not too much of a bother for you, can I see a picture of Eru? I am just having a little trouble of seeing what she looks like. Can not wait to read the next chapter.
 
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No, that's Pokebeach's fault. >_> This is why it's going up on a separate account later... *goes to fix it*

But yeah I'll have pics soon. She is a little hard to imagine. |D
 
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Chapter three is great! Really I suck at finding errors because I am biased. I find the gym leader really cocky and annoying though.

~NZ
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Read ch 3, ch! :] Oh man Sergeant Pup I REMEMBER HIM :D

Makes me wanna writeeeee

I am glad you started over. :>
 
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NZ: Hahaha, bias ain't a bad thing necessarily. It just means it'll hurt harder when Kiyo/Zy take a crack at this. |3 And yes he's supposed to be annoying. It's in his description SRS. ...I also JUST realized he's kinda based off my bro so WHOO!

PMJ: Yeah Serge is teh Pup. :3 He was really fun to write even though he wasn't even supposed to be in the story. and you should rite lotz dude srs and I'm glad I started over too :3


Wha-SURPRISE DINOSAUR CHAPTER!!!!!

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Chapter 4: Gift, Curse

Sunlight poured down endlessly on the bright, though somewhat chilly city of Twilitsong. The sound of glass doors shutting on each other with a metal and rubber lock system caused Crystal to sigh. Being bedridden for a solid handful of days with no one to keep her company except her fresh memories of Team Missile wasn’t exactly pleasing. She gazed up into the near cloudless sky, annoyed by its glamorous appearance. Just four days ago the sky had been only a little more fickle than it was now, and the weather was so beautiful it did not foreshadow her to the nefarious organization’s ambush. With her mind made up, she felt that once again, the sky was lying to her. She couldn’t go back home to her mother empty-handed to dishonor the family. She couldn’t just return back to her journey, either. And, even if the possibility was slim, Breeze and Flora still could have escaped, or still be imprisoned…

“Hey! Hey, Missy!”

The somewhat familiar voice of ‘Extremespeed’ caught her attention. Squinting her eyes from the direct sunlight of the morning, she made out his form dashing headlong towards her. A frown came to her face; the newbie had hoped that she would have left the city without any interference from him or Eru. There was nothing in her power that she could do or say to escape conversation with him as he stumbled very slightly to a stop in front of her.

“Ah, hi,” she nervously began twiddling with a stray strand of hair.

“You all better, kid? No needles or anything stickin’ into ya? They finally give you release?” Unconsciously annoyed at his rather redundant questions, she gave a small nod before fidgeting with her shoulder sack. She prayed that the clear signs of disinterest would make him go on his merry way. Her movements were too subtle for him, though; “Ah, that’s good to hear. Say, what’s your name? Just come through Nagushi Cave? Where’re you from?”

“Ah, Crystal. Crystal Hikara, from Dawndew,” she shortly replied. “And, uh-”

As she spoke, the Gym Leader picked up on her body language. He glanced her over, but his eyes glued themselves to her belt. “Heeeey, I thought you said that you were a trainer, though! No Pokemon, no training to do, thus you’re not a trainer!”

“Ah, if you’ll excuse me, I have to be going out of town towards, uh-”

“You don’t even know, do you? That path leads out to Beghta’s jungle area! You must really know nothing, kid! You have amnesia, or something?”

“Please, just leave me alone, will you?” she begged.

“Going that way is certain death! As a Gym Leader, I have to forbid you from going that way!”

And then he grabbed onto her arm. Painful memories of Team Missile came speeding back to her as her breath became fast and panicked.

“No, let me go!”

“I’m not going to let you hurt yourself like that. Come on, back to the Center for you where we can find your family and have them pick you…-”

His words were rapidly cut short as his neck snapped to the right side. His expression spoke of pain as droplets of red flew from his holed facial organs. His hand was torn from Crystal’s wrist from the momentum as he tumbled over. Soon his eyes were rolled upwards. He was fast unconscious. Fearing whomever had the backbone to strike down a Gym Leader, the girl nervously turned her head to the side.

Eru now moved to step on his body. “Tch, you’re just a bad man magnet or something. Wonder who this sack of dirt is…”

“Ah, Eru?!” Again, blonde hair circled around her finger in anxiety.

“You should be lucky I was in the area…”

“But, he’s not…necessarily a bad guy.”

“Oh, don’t you dare try that. Come on, there are tons of people out there that don’t wear their Missile garb every day!”

“But, but he’s the Gym Leader of Twilitsong.”

At that, the elder hesitated. She yanked his face up out of the dirt and peered into the bloody mess that it was. “…holy crap, you’re right. Oops. Uh…you didn’t see anything!” she bashfully broke into a huge smile with a sarcastic laugh. “This is where we ditch the fuzz and get out of here. Come on.”

“Wait, what do you mean?”

“Well, we gotta get you back home, don’t we?”

“I can’t go back home…”

“Don’t start a lie with me that you don’t have parents, kid. I know very well you have a mom that’s probably going crazy in worry for you right now-”

“But I can’t go home before I find out about Breeze and Flora…and I can’t go back home. They’d just try and get me there…”

Eru paused at that. “If you think it’s that much of a deal, just tell Ryouo or Kira to haul ass down to your house from whatever high-battling seat they’re sitting on to protect their god-damned sister. It’s not that hard.”

“How do you know about Kira and Ryouo?” Crystal gaped.

“Internet, duh. One quick search on the name ‘Crystal Hikara’ on all the local databases, and poof! You get three-thousand-plus results. Oh, the wonders of the computer. That’s probably how they found out where to ambush you, kid.”

Crystal bit her lip at that. Sorrow came back to her eyes again. “B-but…I just can’t leave Breeze or Flora out there to die if Team Missile still has them, or if they got hurt…I couldn’t live with that…”

Tears fell from her eyes like a fountain spouted up from its source. Once again the tomboy was left trying to reassure her, yet failed in the matter. Those brown eyes fell on Michael, and she grasped her temple.

“Okay, kid…Crystal…shut it. What do you plan to do to save them? Huh?” The sudden agitation in her voice caused the moping girl to glance up silently for a moment. “Go off into the forest, looking to be captured again? I hate to break it to you, kid, but this is serious. Team Missile is a deadly organization. They kill people with little to no remorse. They think that torturing a living creature is just use for making empathetic others bend to their will. Whatever they have planned for you, I’m sure they’d just love it to have you walk right back into their clutches. No matter how hard you try and get past them, they will find you. And going without any Pokemon makes this entire façade you’re trying to convince yourself with is the icing on the moronic cake.”

Crystal’s tears halted. Her breath was trapped within her chest. She daren’t breathe from the blunt words the teen was preaching.

“…so, lemme just say this, short and sweet. Getting yourself captured isn’t going to do you any good, and I’m not breaking you out again. I doubt there is anyone that will be dropping by their warehouse again anytime soon either. So, give it up.”

Fury suddenly bubbled up in the younger. Within seconds she had grabbed ahold of Eru’s jacket as she shook her angrily. “…how can you say such cruel things?! What if it was your Pokemon, sitting out somewhere, dying? What if they were so new to the battling scene that they couldn’t defend themselves in unknown territory? What if one of those Pokemon was your closest and only friend throughout most of your childhood, and you had to watch her literally nearly get ripped to shreds like she was some sort of living chewtoy? I dare you to tell me that you would give up on them! I dare you to! I d-dare you to…” Her grip loosened as she crumbled to her knees, shaking.

Once again the teenager was left without words. Guiltily she glanced down to the crying Hikara child. Her plain eyes once again landed on Michael. “…hey, come on. Let’s just get to a better place to have this discussion. I saw a joint down the road I heard is good. You like Chinese food? I bet you’re starving after having Center food for a few days.”

Crystal opened her mouth to gasp for air and to attempt to form a response. However, her stomach cut her off with a loud grumble. She closed her mouth, shooting her blue eyes to the ground embarassedly. “…I’m not very fond of Chinese,” she finally managed softly.

“Food is food, and you don’t turn it down when someone else is paying for it. Let’s go.”



Psychic types floated this way and that within the restaurant known as The Wise Kadabra. Eru sat across from Crystal. Neither one was tearing their order to pieces in famine. To ease the awkwardness, the elder started.

“I know…that my words and advice may be harsh. I wouldn’t just give up on a Pokemon, like you said. I wouldn’t forgive myself for that. But…well, there’s a solid line between knowing you can do something about it and jumping in foolishly to save them. There’s a difference between courage and stupidity…”

The younger simply watched on as Eru chewed on a dumpling thoughtfully. She still had nothing to say to her.

“…still…” The strong trainer paused only to swallow her food before continuing, “…I mean, if you’re going to be stupid, at least have something on your belt before you do it. Unless you have a chaperone in this day and age, or you go flying, you can’t get anywhere without Pokemon popping up and attacking. Oh, and Team Missile, need we forget.”

“What are you…suggesting?”

“At least get a make-shift starter and train it before you try to gallivant off in search for your missing two. And by make-shift starter, I don’t mean a Caterpie or Wurmple, obviously. Get something that will be decent at battling without evolution. Like, uh…a Mareep or a Horsea. I’ve seen some around these parts. They’d do nicely for you I think. They also are already at a decent level. With some small changes I think that they’d make a great partner.”

“I see…” Crystal continued staring down at the table. The elder paused, before sighing.

“God dammit, if you freakin’ start bawling all over again here and now, I’ll-”

“No, no, I’m not going to…”

“Good, because I can’t take that kind of embarrassment. What’s on your mind?”

“Things,” the blonde muttered. Her mind fell back to Twilitsong and Dawndew Lake, as she recalled the cold waters of each.

“Like what?”

“Just…I wonder how I was saved from Twilitsong Lake. I don’t remember anything, just hitting the water, but…I do remember something or someone helping me.”

“Probably a friendly Pokemon. Pokemon, in their natural habitat, are like we are when we’re young. If we do something wrong, we don’t see it as wrong. We want to be good to others somewhere down inside of us. I’ve heard of wild Pokemon both attacking and helping trainers. You probably got the lucky end of that stick. Be glad you weren’t considered luncheon by any Gyarados in the area.” Weakly at that, Crystal offered a smile. The thought that there were pure creatures out there, and it was just their trainers that tainted them, was slightly reassuring in the sense that she wouldn’t relive Team Missile’s antics from the wild all over the place. Eru, too, smirked at her last sentence. “Ah, a smile. That’s a start. Ah, but anyways…you need to eat. I know you’re hungry.”

“Yeah…”

“How do you expect to try and rescue your two Pokemon if you are malnourished? There’s a lot of energy that goes into journeying. Take it from someone who knows.

“By the way,” the black-haired trainer mused for a moment, piquing the younger’s attention, “You never did finish what you were going to tell me back at the hospital.”

“Huh? Oh. Ah ha, I’m surprised you remember.”

“It sounds pretty interesting. Of course I wouldn’t forget something that juicy. To know what this gift is, too, also helps us look at why they may be so desperate to have you in their organization.”

“I see…”

“So, spill it.”

Crystal nervously glanced around, twirling her fork in her hand. A self-conscious blush crawled over her cheeks. Eru quickly picked up on her fidgety motions. “…is it really that bad?” she questioned. “You didn’t, like, steal from them or anything?”

“No, no! Nothing like that!” the young girl quickly dismissed that belief, shaking her hands a little in the air. “No, nothing like that…”

“Well, then, tell me.” The teen gave a grunt as she plopped her head on her hand as though in boredom. “One thing you’ll learn quickly about me is that I’m impatient.”

“Ah, well…” Another small silence ensued. Thoughts crossed her mind vaguely. Should I really tell her? I know she pulled me out of Team Missile, but what if she’s just one of their agents, and I’ll just be working for her without knowing it? That wouldn’t make much sense…I do think she is a good person, just from hearing from her. I dunno…maybe I should lie…maybe she won’t believe me. “…are you sure you’ll believe me?”

“Kid, I’ve heard some really crazy stuff in my day. I don’t think you can surprise me. Now, talk.” Crystal gave one last pause of doubt before sighing.

“…that’s just it.”

“What is?”

“Talking.”

“Everyone can do that.”

“No, not the way I can talk.”

“What do you mean? Out with it! Be blunt!”

“…fine. I…I can talk…to Pokemon,” she finished in a dead whisper.

Eru simply stared. Her chopsticks hovered, open, over one of the few last dumplings. A slow look of ‘you’ve gotta be kidding’ spread across her face, before she cracked a smile.

“Ha, haha, hahaha! That’s a good one. You almost had me going there for a minute, Crystal, the way you looked so pale.” At once, she snatched the piece of food up and vaguely motioned to the blonde with it. “No, but serious. I like to think this is a serious matter. No more joking, alright?” As she brought the food to her mouth, Crystal muttered once more.

“I wasn’t joking.”

The teenager hesitated again, this time her smile turning into a frown. “Oh, come on. Really. Everyone knows that Pokemon and humans were born to communicate with their feelings and not their voices. It’s always been that way.”

“I’m serious, Eru. I can…talk to Pokemon. I understand their every whisper as though it’s English. And they understand me when I talk back to them.”

The dumpling and chopsticks fell awkwardly to the plate as the onyx-haired trainer leaned over. “Listen, I don’t know where you come from or why, but this lie? It’s not funny anymore. I’m starting to get ticked off.”

“I’m not lying!” Crystal pouted. “Team Missile probably wanted me because I can talk. They had me working with an Alakazam before. The Alakazam could see more than what the human supervisor could alone, but he couldn’t really say anything. I had to send those hard-working, badly treated humans and Pokemon away by his words. I had no choice, otherwise they’d take Breeze and…and…”

“Don’t. You. Dare. Cry.”

“I, I’m sorry…” the blonde weakly pushed the tears away from her sky blue eyes as Eru rolled her eyes. “I just…Breeze was really my only friend growing up. None of the kids of Dawndew would want to play with me, so Breeze is really special…”

The mysterious tomboy shook her head. “You’re…‘serious’ about this ability.”

“Yes.”

“Prove it to me, then.”

‘Prove it.’ It was a simple enough statement, yet it was always the one the gifted girl despised. She felt like she was really being used when they wanted to hear her say something, anything to a Pokemon. They wanted to see her and use her for her gift, even abuse her. And it irritated her. With a small sigh, she reluctantly replied, “How do you want me to prove it?”

“You’ll…talk to two of my Pokemon,” the trainer skeptically pushed. “…but after lunch, near the jungle path. No-one goes that way. If this is real…you have to keep this secret from everyone.”

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The cool wind once again combed through golden hair, though it also flowed through short ebony strands as well. Hidden among deciduous trees, Crystal awaited the moment when she would speak to Eru’s Pokemon. “…well?” she muttered, self-consciously gazing around. No-one was around, as the elder predicted.

Eru’s hand glided around her full belt of colorful orbs. Only three of the stereotypical red-and-white capsules were fastened to her waist. One Great Ball, a teal ball with black netting over it, and another bizarre green ball with dashes and dots on its top rested beside their other three companions. “…let’s see…trying to think of who the best one for this would be.” Her hand wrapped around the green ball. As though presenting it, she held it out. “I’m sure you’ll be able to figure out what his problem is soon enough…Skai, come on out!”

A flick of her wrist towards the heavens sent the ball skyward. Melding with the sun the capsule opened brilliantly. For a moment, nothing appeared to have released from the mechanical device. Soon enough, a shining metal feather floated down to the ground. The Pokemon wasn’t too far behind. Skai was a bird of five-foot even blessed with beautifully smooth aluminum feathers. Sharp formations of the metallic down formed breast, neck and leg plates as though protecting the creature. Curiously his golden eyes fell upon Crystal, and he fluffed his wings with a pleasant chiming sound. Red showed on the underside of his wings as he did so. His eyes then fell onto Eru.

“…Hiiiiiii!” he immediately sung, and he dashed over to his trainer’s side as best he could. At once he forced his head into Eru’s hands, clicking his beak happily. He pressed his body against her own like an overly affectionate dog. “Oh, I miiiiiissed you! My trainer! My awesome trainer!”

“Ack, Skai!” the poor trainer hissed, stumbling for her balance. “Off! Off! Gah!”

Crystal couldn’t help to smile. To see such a pure-hearted Pokemon feel so affectionate for his trainer was surely a good sign towards her personality.

“Hey, stop smirking, you! Skai, off now or I’ll put you back in your Friend Ball!”

At once the metal bird backed away, his beak shutting at once. Sorrow spread into his eyes. “…sorry…”

“Ugh. Sometimes this thing is more than I can handle. Shoulda stuck to Great Balls and Fast Balls.”

“What…is he?” Crystal queried, taking a small step forward.

“That’s right, Beghta doesn’t have any Skarmory in the region. But yeah, he’s a Skarmory. And an overly affectionate one at that. …He’s not gonna bite you. You can pet him, just don’t expect to stop petting any time soon.”

The blonde’s hand curiously reached out to the bird. He quickly waddled over, gazed at her hand, and proceeded to bury his head into the appendage. The feathers were sleek and warm, far from their cold appearance. “Yay, I get a new friend? I hope? Are you coming with us now? Will you be my friend?”

“I need you to tell me why he’s so freakin' friendly, and to tell him to tone it down a bit,” the elder offered.

“Kay…” Once again the girl turned to the Skarmory. True, he wasn’t Breeze, but the feeling of feathers and his faint avian scent reminded her enough of her.

“New friend, new friend! Ah, scratch behind my head, buddy! Please? It always hits the spot! Ohhh, yeah that’s it!” Skai happily babbled as she rubbed underneath his feathers. A surprisingly fleshy skin greeted her touch. She was forced to clutch another part of his neck as he nearly tumbled her over. “Mmm, you’re a really good head scratcher, you know that? Oh yes!”

“Ah, thanks…”

His eyes shot open as he emitted a loud screech. Abruptly he wormed out of Crystal’s grasp, feathers falling from him in shock as he tumbled over himself in an attempt to get away. Soon he was cowering behind Eru.

“Ack! No! What did you just say?! What did you just do?! I’m going crazy! It can’t be! Help me, Eru! Help me! She just like…agh help!”

“What…did you just do?!” the teen gasped as she fought to fend off the scared Skarmory.

“I just thanked him…”

“For what?!”

“She’s scary! Eru, she’s scary!” the Pokemon continued whimpering.

“Just for complimenting me on neck scratching-” Crystal spoke, but her words were not of human tongue.

“SHE SPEAKS AGAIN!” he howled, crying wildly. The piercing call made the blonde’s eardrums throb. Even the teen had to clamp her ears shut.

“Skai, that’s enough! What did you tell him?!”

“Help, help!”

“Well?!”

“Recall him for a second!” Crystal finally managed in English. Eagerly the Pokemon leapt back into his orb. A brief moment of silence after the chaos ensued.

“…okay. What…on Earth…was that?” Eru panted gently.

“…He just said that I was as good a head scratcher as you were, so I thanked him, and then he freaked out because I responded to him. And then when I tried to explain to you what happened, I accidentally switched back over to the Pokemon language and explained it to him, which made him freak out more.”

“Accidentally my behind! You were trying to get him to suffocate me, weren’t you?!”

“No, honestly! …there are some drawbacks to my ability to talk with Pokemon. I have a hard time speaking English if a Pokemon is talking, and I have problems talking with Pokemon if humans are talking to me. There are a few other problems, but yeah…”

Eru stared dumbfounded, lifting the orb once again. “Skai?” The green Pokeball shook with fright. “…I guess that’s the end of that for a while, then… well, best call out someone a little more mellow, in that case. This should be easier this time…” As she spoke, she switched around the capsules. This time the freshest-looking red-and-white Pokeball came into hand. “Freya, come on out.”

With a toss that mirrored the first, though to the ground this time, the device exploded with light. In the blink of an eye the light took a form. Red-orange fur covered most of the fox-like creature. A cream mane, crest and tail shimmered in the warm sun. Heat passed off its body like heat from a car on a hot day. Brown eyes gazed up to its trainer and then to Crystal without a word.

“Freya was my starter. I’ve had her since she was a baby Eevee,” the teen explained. “She knows the most about me, probably more than any of my other Pokemon. And she’s level-headed enough to not freak out like Skai did. So, I want you to ask her what other Pokemon I have and commonly use in my party. It should be easy enough. Go on…”

Whilst listening to the onyx-haired femme, the blonde watched as the Flareon continued to look her over. “…hmmm. No Pokemon…kind of suspicious. Wonder what she’s up to…”

“…uh…hi?” Crystal bashfully offered.

The response wasn’t as violent as before, but it was still a response. At once Freya reared up, flames spewing gently from her mouth. Her large ears flattened against her head as her eyes were wide.

“What the hell are you trying to pull?!”

“Hey, hey, calm down! Eru just wanted me to talk to you, that’s all!” Crystal quickly rose her hands defensively. Still the feisty fire type stood offensively. Eru remained as stoic as possible, closely monitoring the situation.

“Eru? Wanted you to talk to me? About what?”

“Just…what other Pokemon does she typically use and carry with her?”

The Eeveelution hesitated at that. Though her muscles were still tense, she returned to more of a standing position. “…There’s me, Umbree, Blaze, Midori, Jormungand, Arcanum, Skai, Elda and Terro. She switches between all of us.”

There was a moment of silence, before slowly the young girl responded.

“Freya, Umbree, Blaze, Midori, Jormundgand? …Arcanum, Skai, Elda and Terro. That’s what she said.”

Eru turned sheet white.

“Tell her to hug me,” she croaked.

“What? Why-”

“Do it!”

“…she wants me to ask you to hug her.”

Curiously the Flareon looked over to her trainer. “…answer me these questions first, though. Who are you, and what do you do?”

“I’m Crystal…and I was to be a trainer. My Pokemon were stolen from me by Team Missile though…”

“…a newbie, huh…? Okay.” With that, she walked over to her trainer’s side. In one smooth motion she leapt up onto Eru’s shoulder, but only to swing her large paw onto the elder’s head. She was back on the ground a second later, appearing triumphant.

Eru shook her head, first glaring at her Pokemon, then at Crystal. “…I don’t know how you got this gift. I won’t ask why. It’s not my business. But, it seems that…you, so unlikely of a person to have this gift, are the real thing. Even human psychics can’t compare to this…you can talk to any Pokemon?”

“Just about. There are a few exceptions. I have trouble talking to Pokemon from far-away regions like Hoenn…”

“But you can communicate with them without any sort of tool or technology.”

“Yes.”

“That’s why Team Missile wanted you.”

“Yeah…”

“This is very serious…I’ll have to take you back home. We’ll have you move somewhere where Team Missile won’t be able to get you.”

“What?! But why?!” Crystal immediately retorted.

“Because Team Missile is not something to laugh about! They kill people to get what they want, got it?! If they got a hold of you, and used you for your gift, there’s no telling what they could do! They could very easily achieve world domination with this gift.”

“They…could?”

“It’s something every trainer wants- the ability to understand their Pokemon. I myself…have wondered what my Pokemon want and how we could become closer to be better battlers. If they brainwashed you and gave you the right Pokemon, you could easily destroy most of their opposition. The ability to communicate would be an overwhelming advantage in the heat of battle for anyone. There’s also the matter of the legendaries. One legendary, in your, no, their hands, and the power is out of balance. And I don’t know if there’s a damned thing the entire region’s Pokemon League could do about it…”

The words hit hard. Behind blue eyes the younger could nearly see the infernos of chaos and destruction sweep the land. All by my hands… “…this is a curse, not a gift…” she whispered to herself. Both Eru and Freya gazed on as tears began forming again. “…but, what if they find us again? What about B-Breeze and Flora?”

The silence continued.

“…can’t I…can’t I stay by your side for a while and draw Team Missile away from my family?”

“With me?” The tone in the elder’s voice spoke of deep surprise, as though she had suggested something taboo.

“You’re strong. I mean, you went and you took on Team Missile’s base and you survived without a scratch! I don’t have a lot of knowledge on Pokemon, either. My mom didn’t want me to go out journeying, saying it was too dangerous. I don’t want her to be right. I wanna find…I wanna find Breeze and Flora, too, if they’re out there. I want to be able to protect my family from Team Missile. I hate feeling so weak and helpless, like I can’t even control my fate. So…please? Let me stay with you?”

The experienced trainer brought her hand to her head, scratching it lightly before rubbing her chin. Those muddy brown eyes shone in deep thought. Her body gently swayed from side to side as she shifted her weight onto her left then right leg and back again. Her eyes rested on some ambiguous organic feature in the grass. At last, she released a sigh.

“I’ll travel with you…under two conditions.”

“Name them,” Crystal almost too eagerly responded.

“One. If at any time I think that things are going to get so dangerous that even I can’t deal with Team Missile, you, me and your family are moving to another region and that is that.”

“…fine.”

“Two. I’m looking for a…certain Pokemon.”

“A certain Pokemon…?”

“It’s one that I’ve heard could possibly exist. There’s not a lot of data on it. Some say it can’t even exist. I…I have a selfish desire, no, need…to meet this Pokemon. In exchange for travelling with you, I want to be able to count on your power to search for this Pokemon. After all, Pokemon know the most about others of their own kind…

“Given these terms and you agreeing to them, we’d immediately start our journey up to Twilitsong Lake where I would catch you and loan you a makeshift starter Pokemon. We’d have to leave immediately thereafter, where we would start back over at Dawndew. If we’re quick, we’ll make Team Missile unsure of where we are, and their numbers will be fewer after us. …so…is it a deal?”

Eru outstretched her hand. Crystal gazed at it for a moment. The second condition made her feel as though she was serving Team Missile after all, even though it was for Eru’s own selfish reasons. The thought of returning to Dawndew did not sound pleasant, either, but it was either Train or Bust. Regret pushed out of her mind and resolve taking its place, the blonde meekly took her hand. The elder had a firm grasp, but it wasn’t like Chris’s in the way it didn’t threaten her.

“It’s a deal.”

“Excellent. To Twilitsong Lake, then, my little student!” Eru beamed with a small sarcastic laugh.

“Student?” Crystal questioned.

“Yep. From now on, you can call me Sensei, teacher, mentor, slavedriver…hahaha. We’re gonna have a lot of fun teaching you the ways of the Pokemon. Well, I will. And there’s nothing you’re going to do to change this fact.”

“I…I didn’t sign up for this…”


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Yeah forgive me if there's a naughty word or something that I skipped this story is PG-15 for a reason :B
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

=) I really liked how the Skarmory acted to Crystal, I thought it was a funny reaction.I still hate the gym leader person, and I thought Crystal was crying a bit too much, but it's OK. I can't wait until the next chapter!

~NZ
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

Aww no dinosaur? OMG I remember pup too...

Also loved the Skarmory reaction. And the gym leader isn't that bad, I like him! I am looking forward for more.

Also, HI NZ!!!!!!! :D
 
RE: Rose Quartz And Onyx- The Revival

hehehe

Too bad I'm on the wii, this'd be longer~

Just remind me next time you see me to give you my thoughts
 
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