Writing Rose Quartz and Onyx

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She gets a new pokemon and her first gym badge.
 
That Oddish is perhaps the funniest poke I've seen in a long time.

I've read it all through so far, and I must say.. barring a couple of odd typos that are effortlessly missed in a story as large as this, it's fantastic. I see why you were adamant about this one being "better" than your new fic, as everything about it just seems to WORK somehow. You've gone to great lengths to make sure that this is as interesting a read as possible, and it really shows. The fact that you have the "gift" in the story only serves to improve it by giving the added depth of showing the pokemon's personalities and characteristics.

I'm really not sure how you'd improve on this atm; it's far beyond anything I've done myself, that's for sure, and everything just seems to FIT. You have it all linked together so well.. a seamless addition of another region into the world of pokemon. Brilliant.
 
Dead_Center: Not tradegy, irony. Irony you can laugh at. Tradegy...far less so.

gamercal: I've actually had people not like Flora before. It's odd, but they don't. I guess it's a split community concerning that...XD

Yeah, everything sorta somehow correlates to the next. It was kinda freaky, to be honest, how later things work out. I can't even put my words on how it happened...every character seemed to be alive on its own and act things out weirdly. It's so weeeeeeeeeeeiiiiiiiiiiiiird. Really, I had no intention on making it an interesting read- to me, the beginning is bland and dull, so I'm surprised at your notes. ^_^ Thanks, all the same.

BTW, can I ask one important epic moment from thus far, and one terrible awful joke that you died from?
 
Sign me up as one of the people who don't like the way Flora talks. -_-

Really, cal said anything I could have, and probably more eloquently, too. I had no idea there were so many different chapters already posted in the few days since I've been gone... however, I'm up to speed on everything and I'll be waiting for the next one! :D
 
Dead_Center: You tell ME what part of the story was the most epic, in YOUR opinion. -.-'

PMJ: Haha! Another divided member. Ah well. Gotta have some sort of bridled hate towards someone, I suppose. *shrug* I actually did a mass update of the chapters back to back, so I'm not surprised you missed them. ^_^ But, while I'm letting the chapters sink in, can I ask for you to choose one important, epic scene that really sticks out so far in the story, and one 'OMGLAWL' or 'that joke was so pathetic it makes me wanna upchuck' moment?
 
I finally caught up. You have done an excellent job! I kind of like the way Flora talks. It's funny! Well I can't think of an 'important epic moment' since most of it is awesome.
 
'that joke was so pathetic it makes me wanna upchuck' moment - "between an Onix and a hard place"

Not a big fan of Pokemon-ized stuff like that, although "Thank Arceus" is forgivable.

Not sure on the others.
 
Pimpwalkin' Mateo Johnson said:
'that joke was so pathetic it makes me wanna upchuck' moment - "between an Onix and a hard place"

Not a big fan of Pokemon-ized stuff like that, although "Thank Arceus" is forgivable.

Not sure on the others.
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Yeah. Most of those parts are kind of corny.
 
Onix and a hard place, eh? I was actually looking for more dialogue than a saying, but I'll keep that in mind for a comical shot of sorts. |D And hey, I was totally younger when I wrote this. I thought corny was good. :/
 
Yeah, it get's kinda mediocre, in my opinion, after Poison Point. Like I said, I definitely have to write it all over again- it's too awful otherwise. :X

Anyways, should I create a PM list? It seems like people'd like to have one...or something.
 
Pimpwalkin' Mateo Johnson said:
The last time I checked this thread, there was nothing here. :O

It was a very enjoyable read. Can't wait to read more! ^_^ But perhaps (and I suggest this for your other fic as well) you could edit the title so people know a new chapter is up? I know it certainly would help me.
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Wouldn't that be easier?
 
Like I said to PMJ, I like my story titles to be clear and not cluttered with chapter updates. I'd prefer the PM system to that.
 
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