Seven Days of Terror (now with an epilogue)
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RE: Seven Days of Terror
Hey, this thing is still going?
I actually read the Prologue before, but when I went into Chapter One, I was like "Hydro Pump lolwut" and I forgot all about it. Maybe I should try to read again. ;o
Zilla, fanfics are menial chat stuff.
EDIT: Gah I didn't realise I posted in a dead thread. ._.
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Hey, this thing is still going?
I actually read the Prologue before, but when I went into Chapter One, I was like "Hydro Pump lolwut" and I forgot all about it. Maybe I should try to read again. ;o
Zilla, fanfics are menial chat stuff.
EDIT: Gah I didn't realise I posted in a dead thread. ._.
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To answer Noobnerd's question for everyone, yes this story is still going. No matter how long it takes for me to finish, this story will not die. I like this fic way too much to just give up. The only way I will be content to let this fic fade into obscurity is if it's been finished.
"BUT PMJ WHY HAVEN'T YOU UPDATED YOUR FIC IT'S BEEN THREE MONTHS????"
(note: in looking to see just how long it's been so I could ask that theoretical question, wow. it's been three months???
/me sees forty Sonics spam their down taunt)
Well, the reason for that is... I'm kinda stuck. Most of you would call that writer's block, but not me! I'd call it... I'd call it... okay fine I'd call it writer's block too. Every time I sit down to write I either end up doing something else entirely, (like I just did while making this post, it's been like 20 minutes and I'm still mid-sentence - wtg me) or I'd just plain not know what to write. It happens without fail every time.
I already gave you guys a little tidbit of chapter 10, or else I'd give you one right now; thing is, I haven't written much past that. Word count as of this writing stands at 1,950, give or take 20 or so "words" that TextPad calls the formatting I write in the chapter so I can just copy the chapter, paste, and hit Post Reply (I've said this before, I'm sure of it). Nearly two thousand words might seem like a lot to you, but those of you who have read everything (WHICH REALLY NEEDS TO BE EVERYONE - TELL YOUR FRIENDS AND ESPECIALLY KRONAR), you'll know that two thousand words ain't nothing to me. My earlier chapters may have sucked more than the first place winner of a sucking contest, but that's changing. This is another reason why I haven't done much - I don't want my fic to just be awesome. I want it to be freakin' amazing. I want people to read my fic and have it inspire them to write their own freakin' amazing stories (which I hope I've done on this forum), and that's why I don't have much done. Everything has to be perfect.
I've taken zilla's suggestion to cut down on the dialogue to heart. I don't know if he was talking about chapter 2 in particular, but he was right that the dialogue is a bit excessive; in fact, it's almost all dialogue. I know more than anyone how much dialogue is present in my story. I rely on it way too much to move the story along because I'm not that great at being descriptive. When I wrote it, I thought it was needed to convey everything properly. However...
PMJ's fic writing pro tip #1: It's not bad to let the reader figure out some things for himself.
I know I probably could have done without a lot of the dialogue that was present in chapter two. When you're writing a story, it's stupid to spoon-feed the reader all the information. It's insulting to the reader's intelligence. Let the reader put together the pieces of the puzzle himself.
A good example of this is found in chapter nine. It's never explicitly said who attacked May, but by the chapter's end, the identity of her attacker becomes glaringly obvious. If I had come right out and said whodunit (off-topic: Firefox says "whodunit" is a word. lol), that would have been stupid. Of course you know whodunit. You don't need me to tell you.
With that said: I am trying to cut down on the excessive dialogue in chapter ten. That's not to say there won't be a lot, since some major stuff just went down. But hopefully it won't feel like you're reading a play or something (quick protip #2, a play script is not a fic, see that attack of the Arceus movie by that banned dude for a shining example of what NOT to do).
Well, there you have it. I'll re-open this thread because I consider this a valid update and I hope you guys don't have any objections to my doing so. Chapter ten likely will not be finished for a long time, but you guys know I'll keep you posted. Feel free to speculate what you think will happen next! By the time you're done reading chapter 10, Misty's not going to be very lonely, if you catch my drift.
Speaking of the wonderful world of speculation, here's one to get the hamster running: If you all recall, Misty made a deal with the agent of death. Forgive Tracey - and mean it - before she dies, and Vaporeon will be at peace. Don't, and she suffers for eternity. Misty said she forgave Tracey, but supposedly her heart wasn't in it. Now she gets killed before she can come to terms with the voice in her head, despite claiming over and over that Tracey really was forgiven.
What happens now? ;o
Oh yeah, and bonus fun fact: Ash still doesn't know Misty tried to kill herself! \o/ She was going to tell him herself later, but OOPS SHE'S DEAD LOL
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To answer Noobnerd's question for everyone, yes this story is still going. No matter how long it takes for me to finish, this story will not die. I like this fic way too much to just give up. The only way I will be content to let this fic fade into obscurity is if it's been finished.
"BUT PMJ WHY HAVEN'T YOU UPDATED YOUR FIC IT'S BEEN THREE MONTHS????"
(note: in looking to see just how long it's been so I could ask that theoretical question, wow. it's been three months???
/me sees forty Sonics spam their down taunt)
Well, the reason for that is... I'm kinda stuck. Most of you would call that writer's block, but not me! I'd call it... I'd call it... okay fine I'd call it writer's block too. Every time I sit down to write I either end up doing something else entirely, (like I just did while making this post, it's been like 20 minutes and I'm still mid-sentence - wtg me) or I'd just plain not know what to write. It happens without fail every time.
I already gave you guys a little tidbit of chapter 10, or else I'd give you one right now; thing is, I haven't written much past that. Word count as of this writing stands at 1,950, give or take 20 or so "words" that TextPad calls the formatting I write in the chapter so I can just copy the chapter, paste, and hit Post Reply (I've said this before, I'm sure of it). Nearly two thousand words might seem like a lot to you, but those of you who have read everything (WHICH REALLY NEEDS TO BE EVERYONE - TELL YOUR FRIENDS AND ESPECIALLY KRONAR), you'll know that two thousand words ain't nothing to me. My earlier chapters may have sucked more than the first place winner of a sucking contest, but that's changing. This is another reason why I haven't done much - I don't want my fic to just be awesome. I want it to be freakin' amazing. I want people to read my fic and have it inspire them to write their own freakin' amazing stories (which I hope I've done on this forum), and that's why I don't have much done. Everything has to be perfect.
I've taken zilla's suggestion to cut down on the dialogue to heart. I don't know if he was talking about chapter 2 in particular, but he was right that the dialogue is a bit excessive; in fact, it's almost all dialogue. I know more than anyone how much dialogue is present in my story. I rely on it way too much to move the story along because I'm not that great at being descriptive. When I wrote it, I thought it was needed to convey everything properly. However...
PMJ's fic writing pro tip #1: It's not bad to let the reader figure out some things for himself.
I know I probably could have done without a lot of the dialogue that was present in chapter two. When you're writing a story, it's stupid to spoon-feed the reader all the information. It's insulting to the reader's intelligence. Let the reader put together the pieces of the puzzle himself.
A good example of this is found in chapter nine. It's never explicitly said who attacked May, but by the chapter's end, the identity of her attacker becomes glaringly obvious. If I had come right out and said whodunit (off-topic: Firefox says "whodunit" is a word. lol), that would have been stupid. Of course you know whodunit. You don't need me to tell you.
With that said: I am trying to cut down on the excessive dialogue in chapter ten. That's not to say there won't be a lot, since some major stuff just went down. But hopefully it won't feel like you're reading a play or something (quick protip #2, a play script is not a fic, see that attack of the Arceus movie by that banned dude for a shining example of what NOT to do).
Well, there you have it. I'll re-open this thread because I consider this a valid update and I hope you guys don't have any objections to my doing so. Chapter ten likely will not be finished for a long time, but you guys know I'll keep you posted. Feel free to speculate what you think will happen next! By the time you're done reading chapter 10, Misty's not going to be very lonely, if you catch my drift.
Speaking of the wonderful world of speculation, here's one to get the hamster running: If you all recall, Misty made a deal with the agent of death. Forgive Tracey - and mean it - before she dies, and Vaporeon will be at peace. Don't, and she suffers for eternity. Misty said she forgave Tracey, but supposedly her heart wasn't in it. Now she gets killed before she can come to terms with the voice in her head, despite claiming over and over that Tracey really was forgiven.
What happens now? ;o
Oh yeah, and bonus fun fact: Ash still doesn't know Misty tried to kill herself! \o/ She was going to tell him herself later, but OOPS SHE'S DEAD LOL
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YOU JUST NOW STARTED READING IT???? *shock horror amazement*
Oh well. Everyone's gotta start sometime. Glad to see you're aboard!
Now just don't wuss out like Kronar did and we'll be good.
YOU JUST NOW STARTED READING IT???? *shock horror amazement*
Oh well. Everyone's gotta start sometime. Glad to see you're aboard!
Now just don't wuss out like Kronar did and we'll be good.
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Ash is not a pimp, lol.
The battles are my favorite parts to write, and I do actually base it off the anime, hence the addition of the whole "dodge it!" mechanic which I can see working in the Pokemon world (although battles tend to be "Pokemon, use X!" "Dodge it and use Y!", but that's another story).
Do you really think the battles are drawn out? There aren't that many, and I think that the amount of detail is necessary. Battles are exciting to write. I can't get enough.
Also, regarding Ash agreeing to go to the mansion: he is very, very suspicious of Giovanni and suspects that he has ulterior motives. The only reason he agrees to it is because his family and friends convinced him that should Giovanni pull a fast one, they'll be able to nail him for it. Even after agreeing to go, he remains suspicious despite Misty's wishes, and he will continue to do so throughout his stay.
Let me know what you think about the next two chapters.
Ash is not a pimp, lol.
The battles are my favorite parts to write, and I do actually base it off the anime, hence the addition of the whole "dodge it!" mechanic which I can see working in the Pokemon world (although battles tend to be "Pokemon, use X!" "Dodge it and use Y!", but that's another story).
Do you really think the battles are drawn out? There aren't that many, and I think that the amount of detail is necessary. Battles are exciting to write. I can't get enough.
Also, regarding Ash agreeing to go to the mansion: he is very, very suspicious of Giovanni and suspects that he has ulterior motives. The only reason he agrees to it is because his family and friends convinced him that should Giovanni pull a fast one, they'll be able to nail him for it. Even after agreeing to go, he remains suspicious despite Misty's wishes, and he will continue to do so throughout his stay.
Let me know what you think about the next two chapters.
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Oh no, please, scrutinize all the details you like; it helps me get better
The reason a huge deal wasn't made out of it is made clear in the next chapter.
...or at least it will be now that you've brought it up. ;o
See? You help ;o
Oh no, please, scrutinize all the details you like; it helps me get better
The reason a huge deal wasn't made out of it is made clear in the next chapter.
...or at least it will be now that you've brought it up. ;o
See? You help ;o
RE: Seven Days of Terror
Maybe she means when you opened this up PMJ because it doesn't look like the next chapter is coming very soon.
After completely reading the story and all additional posts, I feel I must say something on a personal level. I think this is an absolutely amazing written fan-fic, one of the best on PokeBeach. I think you are a great writer, despite your doubts. In fact, that's one of the reasons you are a good writer is because you can point to your own faults. I think I have learned a wealth of information from your own writing (as I'm trying to become a better one myself), and I thank you for it. If and when you get off this 3+ month writer's block, I'll be here as soon as I see the title say "Seven Days of Terror (ch 10 mega pwn up)" or something along those lines.
dmaster out.
Maybe she means when you opened this up PMJ because it doesn't look like the next chapter is coming very soon.
After completely reading the story and all additional posts, I feel I must say something on a personal level. I think this is an absolutely amazing written fan-fic, one of the best on PokeBeach. I think you are a great writer, despite your doubts. In fact, that's one of the reasons you are a good writer is because you can point to your own faults. I think I have learned a wealth of information from your own writing (as I'm trying to become a better one myself), and I thank you for it. If and when you get off this 3+ month writer's block, I'll be here as soon as I see the title say "Seven Days of Terror (ch 10 mega pwn up)" or something along those lines.
dmaster out.
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I read some of this again, and it's a real shame you are taking so long to post the next chapter. I'm seriously considering restarting one of my own fics just to give you some competition, which would hopefully spur you on.
Don't make me bring Apple back!
I read some of this again, and it's a real shame you are taking so long to post the next chapter. I'm seriously considering restarting one of my own fics just to give you some competition, which would hopefully spur you on.
Don't make me bring Apple back!
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Yeah, it sucks, and I swear to you guys I'm working on it little by little.
Word count as of right now: ~4,271
d master - when I post chapter 10, that's exactly what it's going to say. :]
bacon - Bring Apple back. She (she? The only Apple I know is a she) is more than welcome to grace PB with her (her?) presence. Any fic (or random bunch of words, whatever you like better) by you is most certainly welcome.
Yeah, it sucks, and I swear to you guys I'm working on it little by little.
Word count as of right now: ~4,271
d master - when I post chapter 10, that's exactly what it's going to say. :]
bacon - Bring Apple back. She (she? The only Apple I know is a she) is more than welcome to grace PB with her (her?) presence. Any fic (or random bunch of words, whatever you like better) by you is most certainly welcome.
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You and about a dozen other people.
To be perfectly honest, I'd actually planned on leaving Misty's fate up to the reader to guess, and whatever they thought, that'd be the right one. However, I decided instead to make it clear exactly what happens to that girl, and I'm glad for it. It's added a couple thousand words to the ol' chapteroonie.
Word count as of right now: ~5,349
You and about a dozen other people.
To be perfectly honest, I'd actually planned on leaving Misty's fate up to the reader to guess, and whatever they thought, that'd be the right one. However, I decided instead to make it clear exactly what happens to that girl, and I'm glad for it. It's added a couple thousand words to the ol' chapteroonie.
Word count as of right now: ~5,349
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I really should just leave the chat and write more often. Look what happens when I do! It's hard to put up something without giving something away, but... this little bit ain't spoiling nothing important. It's not much, but you understand. Enjoy!
Ash was on her in no time at all, delivering a hard backhand across the redhead's face. "How dare you!" Jessie made no move to assist for fear of getting hit as well. James lunged over the table and struggled to pry the teenager off, who was laying blow after blow on a flailing Shelly. Tracey got up to help, and together the two older guys were able to restrain the young man from Pallet Town.
Shelly seemed to shrug off the damage. "Huh. Second time since I've been here that a man hit me while I'm off guard. How unsportsmanlike you Kanto men are."
Ash cursed at her. "I don't care what your opinion of me is." He struggled in the tight grip of Tracey and James. "Let me go!" He took a deep breath and slowly let it out. "I'm cool. I'm all right." He relaxed his muscles in an effort to show he was sincere, and he was released. "I'm going home," he said, marching upstairs without another word to anyone else.
I've also decided on who dies in this chapter (I don't know if I told you guys this, but someone is dying in chapter 10. Expect this from here on out).
Word count as of right this very second: ~7,796
I can't wait until this is finished! ^_^
I really should just leave the chat and write more often. Look what happens when I do! It's hard to put up something without giving something away, but... this little bit ain't spoiling nothing important. It's not much, but you understand. Enjoy!
Ash was on her in no time at all, delivering a hard backhand across the redhead's face. "How dare you!" Jessie made no move to assist for fear of getting hit as well. James lunged over the table and struggled to pry the teenager off, who was laying blow after blow on a flailing Shelly. Tracey got up to help, and together the two older guys were able to restrain the young man from Pallet Town.
Shelly seemed to shrug off the damage. "Huh. Second time since I've been here that a man hit me while I'm off guard. How unsportsmanlike you Kanto men are."
Ash cursed at her. "I don't care what your opinion of me is." He struggled in the tight grip of Tracey and James. "Let me go!" He took a deep breath and slowly let it out. "I'm cool. I'm all right." He relaxed his muscles in an effort to show he was sincere, and he was released. "I'm going home," he said, marching upstairs without another word to anyone else.
I've also decided on who dies in this chapter (I don't know if I told you guys this, but someone is dying in chapter 10. Expect this from here on out).
Word count as of right this very second: ~7,796
I can't wait until this is finished! ^_^
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