Writing Team Pokepals (Chapter 2 - The journey to lake Valor)

llucario

Aspiring Trainer
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I think the story is sutible for all ages but if you dont like it just tell me and I also got my nanna to go though the chapter to see if it is all correct and she said yes so don't accuse me please and I made this because I was bored and I think I'll carry it on I dont know depends if you guys like it ok :D(its not very long sorry :()(also thanks to Lectymortaz/Electimortar for updateing the mistakes)

Team Poképals

Chapter 1 - What Happend ?

The bright blue sea rushed past my feet. I felt a calm feeling .I can’t remember what had exactly happened. Everything was a strange blur. A strange friendly voice slowly came towards me. The strange voice said "WHAT?!" in a startled tone then shortly after that the strange voice said "Are you ok?"

I thought I was going crazy but it looked like a Pokémon was talking to me. But I wasn't going crazy! As I stood up it turned out I too was pokémon, I was light blue, I had two light blue diamond shapes at the end on both sides of my face, and I had a long tail similar to the things on the side of my head. Also with a daimond sort of shape on too.
I slowly struggled to my feet. The pokémon standing right at the side of me was a Buneary with a bag around his neck. There was also a Glaceon. "My name is Bela" replied the Glaceon "My name is Bun-Bun, but you know parents they give you the strangest names ."said the Bunneary bashfully."Come with me I'll take you to get all rested up, and you must be starving."So Bun-Bun took Bela to his house to get all rested up and to have a little snack as it was not long till dinner time .Bela felt happy for some reason, and when Bun-Bun fell over and gripped the blanket that Bela was clutching onto, she had a strange warm feeling. She then blacked out according to Bun-Bun and his mum but yet as she lay there unconscious she remembered a little bit from the past. She saw a human stand in front of a dark looking pokémon shielding a different Pokémon. The pokemon looked like a Galade what she was trying to protect.

I awoke dripping with ice cold water, at that moment I thought it was that what caused the hallucination but I personally think it was the water. That night I found it hard to get to sleep due to a new environment than what I am used to. Bun-Bun doesn't know that I am really human, not a Pokémon. I eventually got some sleep but it wasn't much. I felt lucky when I awoke to have a sort of in a way family.
"QUICK, HURRY BEFORE WE MISS THEM!"screamed a fan of some sort. Bun-Bun quickly woke up "OH NO, HURRY!" Bun-Bun and I ran towards the town centre. I was following Bun-Bun not knowing where we were going. "I hope we’re not too late" There was a huge crowd in the town centre like something big was going to happen so we scurried to the front of the crowd. a light smog filled the stage, then an overwhelming feeling of excitement and joy came over my body as not two but four strange figures came on the stage. When the smog cleared there was as a Lucario, Absol, Salamence and Weavile slowly entered upon the stage. The Lucario came up to the microphone and gave a short speech
saying "Hello, welcome, my fellow friends, I and my team promise you all that we will: protect you, help you with lost items, wanted criminals like Swampert and his meadily crew, We also have some spaces left to start your own rescue team if you want to start your own rescue team like me, Absol, Salamence and Weavile. Feel free to go to the guild straight after this service. In case you don't know the Gulid is at lake Valor, I and Team Aura, and our leader, the guild master, milotic will be looking forward to seeing you at the Guild! Have a nice day!" Lucario knew how to give a convincing speech. I was and I think everyone else was literally stuck into the speech. "Hey, who's that Bela?" asked Bun-Bun as a strange figure came towards us. "Hi, are you thinking of signing up for a rescue team?!"The voice asked
us. "I don't know it depends if Bun-Bun wants too" I replied to the voice. As the figure came nearer and nearer it turned out to be a Pichu. "So, what’s your answer?" Pichu asked Bun-Bun. "Yes, we'll do it!” Pichu's face lit up like it was her birthday."Umm… may I join?" trembled the Pichu. "Sure you can, all for one and one for all! "All of their faces brightened. Bun-Bun then asked a sensible question "What shall we be called?"

As they couldn't think of a name they went to Pokébeach, to try and think of a name,I had several but I didn't wan't to say my suggestions just in case they didn't like them. Something like super-palz. Bun-Bun asked Pichu "Hey whats your name anyway?" "My name is Bolt,I think it’s a radical name. "We sat by the sea for at least an hour, and finally Bun-Bun popped up and said "How about Team Poképals?" "YEAH!!" me and Bolt shouted at the same time.

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Chapter 2 – The journey to lake Valor

Bolt, Bun-Bun and Bela woke up early the following morning 4AM to be exact, “When should we set off then?”Whispered Bolt “As soon as possible don’t you agree Bela?” “Yes then we most likely won’t run in to trouble.”We set off towards town to collect some supplies we have: 3 Oran berries, 1 escape rope, 4 pure seeds, 1 blast seed,1 sleep seed and a bag to put it all in. It was sunny with a slight bit of mist but we were expecting the worst weather of the year at this time as it was winter. The shortest way to lake Valor was to go through a forest so the humans don’t see or hear us, it was the only safest way. As we set off we came across a river on the way to the forest, I tripped over a root of a small growing tree and I fell unconscious again and I saw the bridge for the river snap and the log looked more stable. I woke up with a horrible headache. Bun-Bun started to cross the unstable bridge “NOOO DON’T CROSS THE BRIDGE!” at that moment the ropes of the bridge snapped, I ran as fast as my legs could carry me I made it just in time to save Bun-Bun if it was about three seconds later he would have been a goner to have fallen in the furiously flowing river, we managed to pull him up, we crossed the log and survived.
Eventually we got to the forest the most dangerous part of our trip no one knows if we will run into trouble here or not but we were going to expect it not to be easy so we never got our hopes too high.”What are you doing here ?!” Demanding a unfamiliar voice “We are on our way to lake Valor to start a rescue team. Got a problem with that?!” Bolt said angrily. The shadow of a figure came forwards he was a darker blue than what I was, several feet taller, had a orange sort of colour cheeks and like a frill sort of thing on top of his head. “IT’S SWAMPERT AND HIS GANG, RUN!!” we ran as fast as we could trying not to fall too far behind, Bun-Bun used ice beam on Swampert trying to stop him from catching up too us it seemed it was working, slowing them down as we where around every twist and turn we could find till we lost them it was about an hour later we lost them so now it was about 6:34AM if we are not there by 8AM we will miss the service to introduce us to Gulid Master Milotic.
It was 7AM we thought we wouldn’t make it. We found the exit eventually but there was a slight hold up Swampert managed to trick us that we lost him he was standing there , waiting for us, pretending to be asleep he knew he wasn’t everyone knows Swamperts snore badly when they are sleeping we took no choices and threw the sleep seed at Swampert we waited for about five minutes to make sure he was fully asleep. It wasn’t long after we came to lake valor but there was a secret entrance so the humans don’t know about us so its easier to keep a secret from imposter pokemon such as Swampert and his crew. It is now 7:56AM we only have 4 minutes left till Lucario, Absol, Salamence and Weavile came to let us in for the begging of the service it seemed like we were waiting for hours but it was only 8:32AM. ”Where are they? They should have been here by now.” Four strange figures came forward similar to what they have seen before “Is it, it can’t be, it is” Pichu quivered with excitement. ”Have you found the entrance yet?” “No, it’s no where to be seen.” I replied to Lucario. Lucario and the rest showed us the entrance to the Gulid. It turns out it was behind a bush well, it must be a good spot if we couldn’t find it.
The service began with loads of soothing music. Then Lucario and the rest gave a very short speech: “Welcome, I know you all want to be a rescue team but before you do we need to do several tests the tests will include: Power, Strength, Aim, and speed. I will now present you to Gulid Master Milotic” The Guild Master was in water next to where the service was being held. Gulid Master Milotic started his service with a pleasant noise it was unbelievable it felt like I was care free and all the wounds I had in battle healed and it worked better than a Oran berry apparently, because I have only seen a Oran berry when we first set off to lake Valor. As the Gulid Master gave the speech it turn black, pitch black, I was worrying, I couldn’t see, not even my hand in front of my face, it was like a solar eclipse only worse it was completely dark I turned to where I heard a noise I saw two bright yellow glowing eyes staring at me I span around like I was going dizzy and I could see no one just them eyes staring at me then it felt like I was falling I have never witnessed anything like this in my whole life as a human and as a pokemon. Then I realised It was me and that thing I don’t know if it is a pokemon or not. I woke on a warm bed of hay will a nasty headache at the side of the bed of hay was a bowl of water and a letter, it said:”Dear miss Bela, You were taken from the from the service on account you fell unconscious we yet don’t know why but if you stay with us for a bit you will be automatically be a rescue team with your two friends Bun-Bun and Bolt thank you for your cooperation and get yourself better soon with love from all the rescue teams and The Gulid Master Milotic .” Then it said all the signatures of all the famous rescue teams even Lucario’s and The Gulid Master’s. As the next couple of days past I gradually got better and was stable on my own feet now I had a lot of visitors during them days but no matter what like good friends did Bun-Bun and Bolt lay beside me all of this time I was really grateful for that.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Nice one, a rookie writing a story, cool! It's me Dark Marc. This is very good for a PMD story, normally I hnate them -_- but this one is fab. Carry on writing this but you kinda spelt crazy wrong -_-;. Nice going, hope you write more!.

Credit +1 to Nanna.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Ll....the grammar got worse. The story is nice and you took my advice :D.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Thank you Electimortar for correcting my chapter :p.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Interesting, but could be longer.

Are people taking my ideas of PMD now....?
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Taking your ideas? This stuff's been happening for ages. :S
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

~Magma King~ said:
Taking your ideas? This stuff's been happening for ages. :S

It has? I've barely seen any.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Gliscor said:
Interesting, but could be longer.

Are people taking my ideas of PMD now....?

Like I said I was bored and Fridge wanted me to post it or he wont read it :s and I haven't finished it yet :rolleyes:
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Are youy blind Gliscor, there are loads in the cornor : S
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

1. I'm not blind. Why do you think I have good spelling/grammar?
2. I don't see any but this one and mine!!!
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Gliscor, if you would, leave her alone. PMD stories have been written everywhere, so no problem, right?
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

No problem. I'm just saying that.... well.... fine.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Just make new paragraphs when a someone is talking and space them out a bit more so it is easy to read. Everything, but that your doing great. I see some great plot potential. I'd give this an 8/10.

~NZ
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Gliscor it was a joke?

Also GaleFail's
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Dark Marc said:
Gliscor it was a joke?

Also GaleFail's



Um...no. Galefail's story is not a Pokemon Mystery Dungeon story. If you would have actually read it, you would know.

llucario, its ok. I don't find it gripping, nor do I really want to keep reading. Sure, its not TOO bad. I'll keep an eye out for it =D
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Why do you get so lary, sorry I though tit was.
 
RE: Team Poképals - What Happend? (chapter 1)

Gliscor said:
1. I'm not blind. Why do you think I have good spelling/grammar?
2. I don't see any but this one and mine!
What spelling and grammar? :p
 
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