Writing Tetris Revolution

Who's your favorite character so far?

  • Violet

    Votes: 2 22.2%
  • Tommy

    Votes: 1 11.1%
  • The blocks

    Votes: 6 66.7%

  • Total voters
    9

Shining Suicune

Aspiring Trainer
Member
This is a story about Tetris, and M'. So, let it begin, the:Tetris Revolution Chapter 1: Mr. Block was on his way to work, a normal day just like any other. He worked in the corporate game chain known as Tetris. He didn't design the games, but instead was in them. He, along with many other blocks, were continously stacked upon each other, until the "screen", as the humans called it, filled up, and the human got a "Game over", whatever that was. However, one of the humans was legendary amongst the blocks, her name... Violet H. Yugi. She never lost a "game", and her mother had always had to drag her away from the "machine" each time. Little did she know, 13-year old Violet's talent was one that would be needed in the future... Meanwhile, a young boy named Tommy C. Harzard was playing his Pokemon Red Version in the same arcade as Violet...



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Chapter 2: Tommy was a handsome, cool, kid at school, despite his enjoyment of Pokemon. People didn't care what he liked, they just liked him. Violet was no exception. "ohmygod..." she whispered when she saw him. She then noticed the,...um, awkward puddle she had left on the floor. She quickly dug a cup out of the trash to make it look like she had spilled her water. "Need help cleaning that up, Goddess?" Tommy had walked right over there, and she hadn't even noticed. "My name's Tommy. And whom do I have the pleasure of addressing?" "My names Violet. Violet Yugi.",She replied. "Violet, time to go, sweetie!" Violet's mom had called. "See ya around, Vy." Said Tommy, slickly. Tommy had just found something more interesting than Pokemon, without even realizing it.



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Chapter 3: Violet stirred in bed, unable to sleep. "I wonder if he likes me?"
She thought, not wanting to go to sleep quite yet. She peered at the digital clock on her dresser. "Hmm. Twelve-twenty seven. Better get some sleep." She yawned as she driftily fell asleep. Meanwhile, back in a dark alleyway, Tommy was walking, playing his Pokemon Red, when something happened. He was on the edge of an island in the game known as Cinnabar Island, and in his game, instead of the usual wild water Pokemon, he found a big mess of pixels. The game merely called it... 'M. This was something Tommy had heard about. It was a glitch that could destroy everything and everyone if you caught it. But he had panicked, and instead of making his Moltres attack,he threw the Master Ball...



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Chapter 4: Tommy instantly went spastic. His entire game, the one he had worked months on... was doomed. "All that time wasted EV training, capturing the right Fire types... GONE! ALL GONE!" He shouted in a blind rage. Violet, meanwhile was asleep, having good dreams of Tommy. She would be standing on a rocky cliff, overlooking a beach, when Tommy would ride up to her on horseback, and utter four words: "Kiss me, my love." She smiled in her sleep whenever she had this dream, which was every five minutes or so. " BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- "Stupid alarm. Wait a minute... Seven-thirty five? I overslept!"
"Good morning, Violet." Her mom had greeted her. "NOTIMETOTALKGOTTAGETTOSCHOOL" Violet replied in two seconds flat. "Sweetie, it's Saturday today. There is no school."Violet's mom said. "BYEMO-Wait, no school?" Instantly, a large grin the size of a Tetris machine spread across Violet's face. "BYEMOMGOINGTOSEETOMMY" She said, as she rushed off. "Tommy? Oh, well." Said Violet's mom to herself. However, Tommy didn't feel like visitors today...



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Chapter 5: "Dinnggg-dong." Violet gently pushed the button on the doorbell to Tommy's house. "Hello, young lady. How may I help you?" Tommy's mom had had answered the door. "I'm looking for Tommy, please. Is he here?" Violet replied.
"Yes, just a minute, please. Thomas! You've got a visitor!" Tommy's mom shouted. "Oh. Hello there, Violet. What do you need?" The fourteen-year old
boy came down the steps, looking as good as ever. "I was wondering if... you would like to hang out today?" Violet replied. "Oh, sure, just gimme a sec." Tommy ran up the steps and retrieved his Gameboy, and they were on their way. "Where should we go first, Vy?" Tommy asked. "Oh, how about the mall?" His "girlfriend" replied. "Let's go, then." Out of nowhere, his Gameboy began shaking violently. "What the-?!" All of a sudden, something from inside the Gameboy began to laugh...



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Chapter 6: "I am 'M!" A voice echoed, seemingly out of the Gameboy. " 'M?! But... but,but... you're a friggin' computer program!" Tommy shouted at 'M.
"HOW DARE YOU DEFY ME, FLESH BAG!!!!! I AM SUPERIOR TO YOU!!!" 'M then phased out of the Gameboy and into the real world, almost unnaturally. "Hmmm... I like it here... however, that is not the matter..." 'M quickly zipped off in a mess of pixels, going to an unknown place... "Where did he go?!" Shouted Violet, at Tommy. "I don't know, but let's search!" Tommy replied back. Meanwhile, many screams were coming from the arcade, all the way across the mall...




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Chapter 7: "Help!" The Tetrads were screaming in the arcade. "Wait, stop... Vy, I hear something!" Tommy said to Violet. "Queen Violet!" This was the Tetrads name for Violet, of course. "Help us!" They were screaming even louder now. "BE QUIET!" Screamed 'M at the Tetrads. "That's it..." 'M then started glowing. "We made it, Tommy! Look, 'M's attacking them!" Violet said. "Oh no!" Tommy replied. "What?, he's just glowing." "No, there's more. He using-" "SKY ATTACK!" 'M shouted as he charged towards the Tetrads. "Help, Queen Violet!" The Tetrads shouted, before sucking Violet and Tommy into the Tetris machine. "Thank you, savior." A voice told her. "Do you know why you're here?" "No, I'm not sure who you are, either." Violet replied. "I... am, no, was... the ruler of this land... Then 'M came along... My name is Lady Tetra. You have been summoned here as you are one of the most powerful knights in the land, as are you, Thomas. Now, if I may, let me introduce you to your fellow warriors... Mario." The plumber was instantly recognized by Tommy, as was the next. "Link, Samus, and finally, Kirby...."
 
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Chapter 2: Tommy was a handsome, cool, kid at school, despite his enjoyment of Pokemon. People didn't care what he liked, they just liked him. Violet was no exception. "ohmygod..." she whispered when she saw him. She then noticed the,...um, awkward puddle she had left on the floor. She quickly dug a cup out of the trash to make it look like she had spilled her water. "Need help cleaning that up, Goddess?" Tommy had walked right over there, and she hadn't even noticed. "My name's Tommy. And whom do I have the pleasure of addressing?" "My names Violet. Violet Yugi.",She replied. "Violet, time to go, sweetie!" Violet's mom had called. "See ya around, Vy." Said Tommy, slickly. Tommy had just found something more interesting than Pokemon, without even realizing it.
 
RE: Tetris Revolution: I Made Number 2! (witty pun)

cool i like it
but awkward puddle?
 
RE: Tetris Revolution: I Made Number 2! (witty pun)

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Chapter 3: Violet stirred in bed, unable to sleep. "I wonder if he likes me?"
She thought, not wanting to go to sleep quite yet. She peered at the digital clock on her dresser. "Hmm. Twelve-twenty seven. Better get some sleep." She yawned as she driftily fell asleep. Meanwhile, back in a dark alleyway, Tommy was walking, playing his Pokemon Red, when something happened. He was on the edge of an island in the game known as Cinnabar Island, and in his game, instead of the usual wild water Pokemon, he found a big mess of pixels. The game merely called it... 'M. This was something Tommy had heard about. It was a glitch that could destroy everything and everyone if you caught it. But he had panicked, and instead of making his Moltres attack,he threw the Master Ball...
 
Your overall plot line and dialogue balance is remarkable, but you need to work on chapter length. I'd personally recommend combing a few of your chapters to beef up length. In fact, if you combined the first three chapters here into one whole chapter, it would look a lot better.
 
I really like the story. It's serious, but humorous. And to top it all off, this is a Pokemon website. Missingno. and M' are one of the most famous (not in a good way) Pokemon glitches ever. So I estimate about 95% of people reading your story know what your talking about. Plus I LOVE the plot. :)
 
Thanks, I like writing, but this is the first chaptered one that I'm gonna finish.

PokeChamp said:
Your overall plot line and dialogue balance is remarkable, but you need to work on chapter length. I'd personally recommend combing a few of your chapters to beef up length. In fact, if you combined the first three chapters here into one whole chapter, it would look a lot better.
Yeah, that's why they're so short, because my ideas go halfway and die, so I space things out in storys, and this is my first completed chapter, or it will be.
 
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Chapter 4: Tommy instantly went spastic. His entire game, the one he had worked months on... was doomed. "All that time wasted EV training, capturing the right Fire types... GONE! ALL GONE!" He shouted in a blind rage. Violet, meanwhile was asleep, having good dreams of Tommy. She would be standing on a rocky cliff, overlooking a beach, when Tommy would ride up to her on horseback, and utter four words: "Kiss me, my love." She smiled in her sleep whenever she had this dream, which was every five minutes or so. " BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- "Stupid alarm. Wait a minute... Seven-thirty five? I overslept!"
"Good morning, Violet." Her mom had greeted her. "NOTIMETOTALKGOTTAGETTOSCHOOL" Violet replied in two seconds flat. "Sweetie, it's Saturday today. There is no school."Violet's mom said. "BYEMO-Wait, no school?" Instantly, a large grin the size of a Tetris machine spread across Violet's face. "BYEMOMGOINGTOSEETOMMY" She said, as she rushed off. "Tommy? Oh, well." Said Violet's mom to herself. However, Tommy didn't feel like visitors today...
 
Tetris Revolution Chapter 5:
"Dinnggg-dong." Violet gently pushed the button on the doorbell to Tommy's house. "Hello, young lady. How may I help you?" Tommy's mom had had answered the door. "I'm looking for Tommy, please. Is he here?" Violet replied.
"Yes, just a minute, please. Thomas! You've got a visitor!" Tommy's mom shouted. "Oh. Hello there, Violet. What do you need?" The fourteen-year old
boy came down the steps, looking as good as ever. "I was wondering if... you would like to hang out today?" Violet replied. "Oh, sure, just gimme a sec." Tommy ran up the steps and retrieved his Gameboy, and they were on their way. "Where should we go first, Vy?" Tommy asked. "Oh, how about the mall?" His "girlfriend" replied. "Let's go, then." Out of nowhere, his Gameboy began shaking violently. "What the-?!" All of a sudden, something from inside the Gameboy began to laugh...
 
Excellent story! I especially like "BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- "Stupid alarm. Wait a minute... Seven-thirty five? I overslept!"
"Good morning, Violet." Her mom had greeted her. "NOTIMETOTALKGOTTAGETTOSCHOOL" Violet replied in two seconds flat. "Sweetie, it's Saturday today. There is no school."Violet's mom said. "BYEMO-Wait, no school?" Instantly, a large grin the size of a Tetris machine spread across Violet's face. "BYEMOMGOINGTOSEETOMMY" She said, as she rushed off."

I'll PM you as soon as I can. Keep up the good work! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
 
GoRockQuadsGiratina said:
Excellent story! I especially like "BEEP BEEP BEEP BEE- "Stupid alarm. Wait a minute... Seven-thirty five? I overslept!"
"Good morning, Violet." Her mom had greeted her. "NOTIMETOTALKGOTTAGETTOSCHOOL" Violet replied in two seconds flat. "Sweetie, it's Saturday today. There is no school."Violet's mom said. "BYEMO-Wait, no school?" Instantly, a large grin the size of a Tetris machine spread across Violet's face. "BYEMOMGOINGTOSEETOMMY" She said, as she rushed off."

I'll PM you as soon as I can. Keep up the good work! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D
LOL, Violet's in love, you know it's love when you pee in your pants.:D
Thankfully, that never happened to me, and I've been in love 7 or 8 times.
 
Ah, I've been in love. (I didn't pee my pants, it was more of a crush.) But it turned out that he was a great, big jerk. :.(
 
GoRockQuadsGiratina said:
Ah, I've been in love. (I didn't pee my pants, it was more of a crush.) But it turned out that he was a great, big jerk. :.(
Isn't love great? Yet, it can hurt, and usually, it will... I'm going to a day camp this week, and this girl from my school asked me if I think one of her friends is cute, so I think her friend likes me... too bad I'm taken! But my GF's lives in Colorado, so we just text... It would suck if you peed your pants! P.S. Got a cell phone? If so, we could trade numbers through PM.
 
It would stink, literaly. I think it mostly depends on how confident you are. I was confident. :3 But he told my best friend something very bad and rude. For a girl, I think you should stick up for your friend. And I did. (This all happened in 5th grade, so we had recess and stuff like that.) At recess, I stomped on his foot,... real hard. I admit it was childish, but funny.
And that shall remain one of my favorite last-day-of-school memories. But it will never outrank my favorite last-day-of-school memory. *has a flashback* Good times, good times. d:
 
GoRockQuadsGiratina said:
It would stink, literaly. I think it mostly depends on how confident you are. I was confident. :3 But he told my best friend something very bad and rude. For a girl, I think you should stick up for your friend. And I did. (This all happened in 5th grade, so we had recess and stuff like that.) At recess, I stomped on his foot,... real hard. I admit it was childish, but funny.
And that shall remain one of my favorite last-day-of-school memories. But it will never outrank my favorite last-day-of-school memory. *has a flashback* Good times, good times. d:
I'm a guy, so I wouldn't know.:p What grade are you in now?
 
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