Writing The Mall Murder

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Hello, Ive been writing a story for a while, but wasn't into Pokemon then, so I've replaced the characters with Pokemon, and not many changes have been made. I try to make this as descriptive as possible, if it gets too descriptive, please let me know.

The Mall Murder: Intro

"Wake up, it's time to get up! Wake up, it's time to get up!" the Chatot said in an uncanny voice.

"Ok, ok, I'll get up," said Skitty. Something downstairs smelt good. Skitty was like a piece of metal to a Magneton, and was eager to find out what that heavenly aroma was. She couldn't have taken another guess, as her mother Delcatty was making blueberry catcakes with whipped cream, and a bowl of delicious Cat Flakes on the side.
"So my dear, anything you have planned today?" Delcatty asked.
"No, I think I'm gonna call up Glameow and just relax," Skitty said. She breathed a sigh of relief, being busy with the CATS, the Cat Assessment Tests, and her job as a secret agent of the MEOW Force(Making Evil Our Weapon). After she had finished her scrumptious meal, she walked outside. "Goodbye, my dear!" Delcatty called out. "Goodbye, mom," Skitty responded.

Okay, to clear a few things up, Skitty Kittums is the main character in this story. Her trusted guide Chatot is always by her side. But you may think to yourself, "Why is it called The Mall Murder?" Well, soon you will find out.

Taking a breath of fresh air outside, Skitty waved hello to the gentle Mareep and Marill, and waved to the Hoppip, Skiploom, and Jumpluff floating in the air above her. The Cat Plains were always quiet and pleasant, besides a quite rambunctious mall right down the street, where Skitty usually spends most of her time. The cute Caterpies on the tree branches quietly ate the Oran Berries and leaves.
"Now, you don't eat too many of those, you'll make yourself sick!" Skitty joked. As she walked down the street, she saw Glameow in the distance. "Hello, Glameow!" Skitty called out. However, she quickly became confused as she noticed another cat walking down the street aside Glameow.
Skitty and Glameow had been friends for many years. Since their first years, they seemed to like eachother as friends and are still friends. Now they talk with eachother almmost all the time.
"Hello, Skitty, I would like you to meet my new friend, Meowth," Glameow said. Skitty introduced herself. "Hi, my name's Skitty, it's nice to meet you."
" 'Ello, it's nice to meet you too," Meowth greeted her.
"Meowth just moved in from England, if you noticed his accent," Glameow explained. "Ready to go the mall?" Skitty asked.
"Oh, yes, indeed!" Glameow responded. On the walk over, Meowth explained there was a crop failure in his city, so only the country folks thrived. Also, the people who ran the malls got lots of business, so his parents(Persian and Persian) had to leave him with his grandma, Persian to be able to survive. Meowth explained he had resisted at first, but it was futile. He was taken away from his parents, and nothing could be worse than losing someone you love.
As they approached the mall, someone cried out, "AHHHHHHHH!!!! Why, world, WHY?" They ran over to the scene. An Absol was sobbing. Behind her lay a bloody figure. It was dead.

"What happened?" Skitty asked the Absol.

"Well, see, I was taking a walk with my friend Absol, and I said hi to the people inside the shops, and I had to go buy some things. Then something came over me and I fell to the ground, unconscious. Then I just woke up here, my head throbbing, my teeth aching, and I saw my friend here. Then I knew what had happened."

"That's odd," Skitty said. She found a note on the ground. "What does this mean?"

She read the note. "UNFASHIONISTAS...." She couldn't read the rest.

"I wonder what this means," Skitty asked herself.



The mall murder has more to come, please discuss and give some constructive criticism!
 
Hmm, unique. Bringing death into a Pokemon series. Should be nice, if the first chapter was a bit longer but nicely done indeed.
 
Sorry, I meant to make that the intro. I didn't really want it to be long. Here we go:

The Mall Murder; Chapter 1

"What happened?" Skitty asked.

"I.. I just woke up here... and I saw my friend on the ground.. and then I knew.. it was..."

"Someone catch her, she's gonna fall!" Glameow cried out. Meowth quickly reacted and grabbed her. Skitty looked at the dead Absol. It began to vibrate.

"..Huh?..." Skitty said to herself. "It must be my eyes playing tricks on me, this isn't really happening," she thought. Just then, reporters started coming in from all directions and asking all sorts of questions. In a few seconds, Skitty and Chatot couldn't find their way out.

"Chatot?" Skitty asked, worried. "What are you doing?"

"QUIIIIIIEEEEEETTTTT!!!!!" Chatot screeched. Everyone fell silent. A few seconds later, the madness began again. Chatot ran off.

"Hey, Chatot, come back," Skitty called out. "Out of my way, loser, out of my way, loser," Chatot kept saying.

"Was that an insult?" one reporter asked someone next to them as they shrugged. A large man walked in. He was wearing a white polo shirt, blue jeans, and had on a tall hat with a enormous beard, and he began to examine the scene.

"Man, that guy must have his neighborhood hobo pick out his clothes every day," a reporter whispered to someone. The man quickly turned around as if he had been slapped in the face by an Ambipom.

"WHAT WAS THAT, MR. REPORTER?" he yelled. "YOU THINK I AM UNFASHIONABLE?" The reporter fled. "Out of my way, loser," Chatot once again cried out. He grabbed the large man's hat.

"Hey, my hat!" he screamed. "Don't let that stupid bird get away!" All of a sudden, the reporters began to chase after Chatot.

"Out of my way, you loser, out of my way, you loser," Chatot kept mimicking.

"Give me back my hat!" the man yelled. "Give me back my hat! Give me back my hat!" Chatot mocked. The rest of the reporters scrambled and chased after Chatot. They were soon out of sight. Skitty returned to the scene. Glameow and Meowth were by the fountain.

"Hey, where is everyone?" Skitty asked. "They just... disappeared," Glameow said in shock.

"Hey, the Absol are gone too!" Skitty noticed. "I wonder what 'appened," Meowth responded. "Let's try to gather some information in the mall," Skitty said.

"This is what my part-time job that pays me $17.50 per crime is all about." "I thought we were going shopping!" Glameow cried out.

"Trust me, when I get this solved, we can explore the entire mall, in every store," Skitty promised. "Fine, but I don't want to go in that nasty perfume shop, it makes me feel queasy," Glameow nautiously specified.

"Okay, come on then!" Skitty encouraged. "Let's go!"


They entered through the large door. As usual, the mall was buzzing with tons of people going around, talking to others with them or on their cellphones. Mini shops were outside selling various things, from candy to cameras to cellphones. As they entered the shop, Meowth asked, "What is that delightful smell?" "That's the popcorn shop," Glameow said. "Let's go and ask people inside about the Absol." They walked inside. "And get some delicious popcorn," Meowth said to himself as he drooled.

They entered. "Come in, come in, it's great to have some lovely customers," the person behind the counter greeted them. Skitty and her friends walked up to the counter.

"My name is Miltank, and it's great to have you here," Miltank said to them.

"Thanks, are there any specials today?" Glameow asked. "Well, just a few days ago, we started selling Moomoo Ice Cream, and it's been a huge hit! Here, have some of it and some popcorn to try," she offered. "Yum," everyone said in harmony.

"Now, how can I help youuuu?" she asked in her southern accent.

"Um, we had a question about if you have seen any Absol running through the mall."

"Well, I haven't left the shop, but my friend Smeargle, the chef, might know about it," Miltank answered. "Smeargle!" The Smeargle came out with a spatula and a bowl in his hands. Miltank told him about the Absol.

"Oh, I believe they ran through here to get some ice packs while my friend Miltank here was gone," Smeargle explained. "But the Absol didn't tell me where they were going."

"Well, thanks anyway," Skitty said.

"But if I see anything else, I will call you up and let you know," Smeargle noted. He gave Skitty his phone number.

"Thanks!" Skitty replied. They exited the shop. "Well, at least we know they have been here," Skitty said. "We will find them." As they walked down the hallway in the mall, Glameow noticed the large man walking behind them.

Discuss!
 
MAKE JUMPLUFF A LIL CHARACTERZ lol, anyway, this story is unique cause it deals with death, which is out of the question when Pokemon is played.
 
Chapter 2 may include Jumpluff as a character, but I'm not sure. I won't be taking requests, only if it pertains to the part of the story. If I did add Jumpluff, it would be like Miltank's part.
 
oh dear god, I'm blinded by text walls

Nahh, just kidding. You really need to work on your formatting, however. You need to skip a line when another character begins to speak. Otherwise, it's an eyesore for the reader. For further assistance, I suggest you check out this nifty little guide right hurr.

Also, your installments are too short. Fan-fics and stories aren't something you just breeze through with four-hundred words. You've gotta be checkin' that word count tool on MS Word to make sure you've hit the minimum one-thousand word requirement. If you don't use MS Word or another resource with a word count tool, keep this convenient little website bookmarked so you can keep track of how many words you have.

Good luck :)
 
Thanks, after looking at it, it looks so much better. @SinnohTrainer17: Does each chapter have to be at least 1000 words?

I will be throwing in Chapter 2 soon. Thanks for all the nice comments!
 
Yes, each chapter must be at least 1000 words. Please follow this rule from now on. Thanks!
 
Thanks everyone. Even though it's a rule, it is definitely helpful to make sure that a story someone takes the time to read is actually... good. Chapter 2, with at least 1000 words(complete credit to SinnohTrainer17 for the website link) will be coming sometime soon, probably in about 20 minutes.
 
With the comments on how to make this better, this one should be good.

The Mall Murder-Chapter 3

"Skitty and Meowth, keep walking," Glameow said to them as they walked down the hallway. "I think that big man we saw outside is following us."

"Hmm?" Skitty murmured. "That guy is following us? But why?"

"I think it has something to do with Chatot and his hat," Glameow said. "Maybe he wants to get Chatot back so he can have his hat."

"Or maybe he wants to do something 'orrible to us," Meowth nervously added.

They began to walk faster and faster. "We need to turn into a shop," Skitty told them. "There! Jumpluff's TCG Store!"

They walked into the store. "Hello! Welcome to Jumpluff's TCG shop, where you can buy all of your TCG gaming cards and/or equipment!" Jumpluff greeted. "Hi, I'm Skitty," Skitty introduced. "This is my best friend, Glameow, and my new friend, Meowth."

"Greetings," Meowth said. "It's very nice to meet you. I'm from England."

"Oh, you're from England!" Jumpluff exclaimed, a bit shocked. "I have a sister from England. Her name is Skiploom."

"Oh, maybe I have met her before...." Meowth slyly responded. "I have talked to a lot of Skiploom in England."

"So, Jumpluff," Skitty interrupted, "have you seen any Absol around here?"

"Oh, yes, I saw an Absol running through the mall. She stopped by to grab some cotton and spores. She was carrying something under a paper towel and it had ice packs all over it," Jumpluff explained. Do you know what that was?"

"Oh, yes, but I'd rather not talk about it," Skitty responded. "Thanks for your help!"

"No problem, my dear," Jumpluff said nicely. "Oh, Hoppip, don't eat those!"

As they left the mall, Meowth bumped into someone.

"Oh, I'm terribly sorry, sir," Meowth apologized.

"YOU! Are you looking for trouble?" the person asked intimidatingly.

The person turned around. It was the large man.

"Run!" Skitty whispered to Glameow and Meowth.

They briskly ran to the escalator, and the man rushed behind them, saying, "Hey, wait up! Where are you meddling kids going now?"


MEANWHILE,

"Out of my way, you loser, out of my way, you loser!" Chatot continued to chatter as it flew by the reporters.

"Get that bird and that hat!" one of the reporters screamed. Chatot ran all over town, including past Skitty's house. Delcatty was outside smelling the flowers when she spotted Chatot as it rushed by. "What are you-"

"Out of my way, you loser, out of my way, you loser!" Chatot accidentally mimicked as it swerved left and right through telephone poles and wires.

"Well, I guess the Copycat has spoken!" Delcatty said. She then continued to smell the flowers.

"Gotta keep moving! Gotta keep moving!" Chatot said to itself. But, both Chatot and all of the interviewers/reporters were finding it hard to keep running, so the group decided to try to corner Chatot. But it would be no easy task, as Chatot flew through the air so fast that it stripped dandelions of everything they had as it passed by. Chatot knew it was faster than the people, but began to worry as she saw nobody behind her. And then....



"Just keep running!" Skitty yelled to Meowth and Glameow. "Just keep going until you do not see him!"

"Maybe... uggh... maybe we should... maybe we... split... up..." Glameow gasped in a few heavy breaths.

"That might... do us some good..." Meowth agreed while struggling to take in oxygen.

"Ok," Skitty agreed. "Ready? 1..2..3...go!" Skitty screamed. The three went in completely different directions.


"Huff-puff,huff-puff, I think I'm good for now," Glameow gasped. She sat down on a bench to rest. "I wonder where they are?"

"Glameow, is that you?" a voice asked out of nowhere.

"Who IS that? That couldn't be... Purugly?" Glameow thought to herself. "Is it you, Purugly?"

"Oh, my dear, it's so nice to see you!" Purugly reminisced. "How are you?"

"I'm... great, how.... was your trip?" Glameow responded.

"It was great, I loved the National Catstone Park!" Purugly answered. "But may I ask why you are breathing so heavily?"

Glameow began breathing normally again. "Well, you see...."



"Skitty? Glameow?" Meowth called out. "Darn, I don't know my way around this place. This is going to be quite difficile."

"Meowth? What are you doing here?" another voice called out.

"Grandma?" Meowth asked. "Is that you?" "What are you doing here?"

"I came to get some groceries in this mall. Geez, you can never get good prices on quality cat food these days..." his grandma Persian responded.

"Oh, are you lost too?" Meowth asked.

"Well...." she pondered. "A little. See, once I got the groceries, there was a man outside who offered to help me with my groceries. He was large with a beard and had a white polo shirt on."

"The scary man," Meowth said to himself.

"What?" Grandma Persian asked.

"Oh, nothing," Meowth replied. "So can you tell me more about this man and what happened to your groceries?"

"Slow down honey," his grandma said to him. Let's sit down and talk."


"Glameow? Meowth? Where are you guys?" Skitty yelled. "Hmm, maybe they are in the movie theater."

The movie theater was quite large to Skitty as she entered. There were more chandeliers than you could count above her, and the theater appeared as if it could seat about five hundred people. The seats up in the higher rows were a bit bigger, and the walls were painted a crimson red. The film room was in the back, and the massive stage was one to behold. The two enormous green curtains were draped as if they fit together like puzzle pieces. She walked closer and noticed a note on the ground.

"Hmm, I wonder what it says," Skitty thought to herself. She opened the note.

"UNFASHIONISTAS RUIN OUR WORLD. THEY MUST PERISH UNDER OUR GOOD WILL."

"What does 'unfashionistas' mean?" Skitty asked herself. She walked closer to the curtains and saw another note.

"Another note?" Skitty said. She opened the note.

"YOU'RE TOO LATE. LOOK BEHIND THE CURTAIN."

Skitty dreaded to look, but as curious as she is, she looked. And what she saw made her regret waking up that day.

Discuss what you think was behind the curtains! (1020 words w/ Word Count Tool w/ out my added parts)
 
Okay, time for Chapter 3!

The Mall Murder-Chapter 3

"...What?....What...happened?" Skitty asked herself in complete shock. "How did this even happen? Who.... did this?"

And there, as Skitty saw it, a dead Absol was being hung by chains and it's large "scythe" on the top of its head was chopped off. And on her right, another dead Absol lay on the ground with a hammer stuck in its throat and a note on its left foot. The room itself was almost pitch-black, and the hardwood floors felt cold on Skitty's feet, but the cold air wasn't gving her the goosebumps. The room was as silent as a dull Electrode, not moving at all, even the props set up on the stage were still and mute, making no noise.

"What happened?" Skitty asked herself again. "A note?"

Skitty took the note off of the dead Absol's foot, and read it to herself.

"The silent breeze pounces up like a ghost,
taking all who enter its course,
and we ask ourselves,
Why must the good die young?

Its partner, the light,
blinds the ones who stare at it,
and we ask ourselves,
Why must the good die young?

The ones who are too late,
they must go too,
and we ask ourselves,
Why must the good die young?

Now it is time,
for all of your kind,
and we ask ourselves,
Why must the good die young?"

"I wonder what this even means," Skitty said quietly. "But what am I going to do with these Absol?"

Just then, she heard the door open ever so loudly. "CREEEEEEEEEEECCCCHH!"
the noise the door made as it opened, the rust of the hinges wearing from being used so many years. Smoke began to gradually fill the room, and a strange noise began to emanate from the floor.

"I have to get out of here!" Skitty said to herself. "But I can't panic. What am I going to do with these Absol?"

Skitty quickly improvised and threw a bunch of stage props and clothing all over the Absol, and tried to make it as unnoticeable as possible. She then grabbed the note and dashed to the nearest exit.

"Follow the cat. I'll take care of these rather petty Absols," a voice commanded to something else in the room.

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"So, you got to see many different kinds of Pokemon on your trip?" Glameow
asked Purugly.

"I did," Purugly answered. "Some Snorunt, a Glalie, some Teddiursa, and I infuriated an Ursaring by accident, and it charged wildly at me! But my favorite was a beautiful creature named Froslass. It sang the most heavenly songs."

"I see," Glameow responded. "I'd love to see a picture of Froslass."

"Well, I hope you understand I couldn't take a picture, because if people saw it, they would probably put it in the zoo," Purugly explained. "But I can give you a description of it, if you'd like."

"I would love that!" Glameow responded.

So Purugly began to describe Froslass as a marvelous Ice-type Pokemon. It had two pieces of hard crystal ice on its head, and its breath was so freezing that every Ursaring that charged at it had to be thawed out at 100 degrees Fahrenheit for three days at the least. She explained how it levitated for an unknown reason to scientists, and the most amazing thing was that its body was hollow, which shocked Glameow.

"Hollow? How is that even possible?" Glameow asked.

"I'm not sure," Purugly answered. "But maybe one of the extremely intelligent and curious scientists would know."

"That's so cool," Glameow said in admiration. "I want to be like that someday! Of course, shopping is my favorite hobby right now."

Purugly laughed. "Well, I guess it's time for you to get back together with Skitty."

"Ok, thanks Purugly," Glameow thanked her.

Glameow got up and started walking toward the entrance when she spotted Meowth.

"Meowth! What happened?" Glameow asked a very confused Meowth.

Meowth was covered in mud and water, and was sneezing every thrity seconds.

"A-TCHOOO!" Meowth sneezed.

"Are you okay? What happened?" Glameow asked Meowth.

"I don't .. know. Some guy came up to me and said, 'Get lost!,' and few seconds later, I blacked out. I don't know what happened after that, but next thing I know, I'm covered in... this! A-TCHOO!" Meowth explained and sneezed again.

"Oh, you poor thing," Glameow sympathized. "I'll take you to Purugly. She'll get you all cleaned up."

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Meanwhile,

"Ahh! Get off of me, you obnoxious bird!" an interviewer yelled.

"No way, no way!" Chatot said as it tied the interviewer up.

In a pile close to Chatot, about twenty-five reporters and interviewers were tied up, mouths and feet and hands disabling their overall movement.

"MMMMMMMMMMMMM! MMMMMMMMMMMMMMMMM!" one of the people mumbled very loudly.

"Never! Never!" Chatot chattered.

Then, Chatot felt a shadow on her back, and turned around.

"I've had enough of you and this madness. It's time to end this, once and for all!"

The thing ripped off a piece of the fence with their bare hands.

"Time to go bye-bye!" they yelled in a menacing voice.

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"I wonder what I'm going to do with those Absol," Skitty thought. "I can't just leave them there. Maybe I shoud check out the department store."

Skitty walked throughout the mall with the note in her pocket, and asked a few people where it was. The mall itself was huge, so she knew she couldn't rely on finding Meowth and Glameow. Then, she approached Dunsparce's Department Store.

"Excuse me? Can you help me out?" Skitty asked the person behind the sales counter.

The Pokemon turned around. It was Dunsparce, but no ordinary Dunsparce, as it could float in the air, when most Dunsparces can only fly for a little while.

"Sure, what are you looking for?" Dunparce asked.

"Umm, do you have anything that can cut chains and remove hammers from people's throats?" Skitty asked.

"Oh, no problem, to remove the hammer, you will just need a really big pair of tweezers. He showed Skitty the large pair of tweezers. Skitty laughed.

"I think that will do the trick," Skitty said to Dunsparce.

"Okay, and here is a industrial flamethrower to break the chains," Dunsparce told Skitty.

"Thanks, but may I ask why you carry these supplies?" Skitty asked.

"Well, just incase a customer like you had an order like this, we wouldn't hve to turn them down," Dunsparce explained. "And just return those when you are done!"

"Thanks!" Skitty replied as she ran toward the movie theater. "Ok, I just hav to get those Absol out of those chains and hammers in the other's mouth, and then I'll play it by ear from there."

As Skitty approached the movie theater, she heard talking inside of the theater.

"What do you expect me to do?" a voice asked something else in the room

Skitty thought she had recognized the voice, but couldn't confirm it because of the strange noise she had heard earlier.

"Just get rid of it. Ship it to Mexico or something," the other voice said.

"The boss isn't going to like this!" the first voice panicked.

"Just do what I say and the boss won't be mad at anyone," the other voice commanded.

"Fine," the other voice sighed.

Skitty rushed to the back end of the movie theater.

"Oh no!" she whispered.

The Absol were gone.


Discuss! (1224 words to my count w/ out title or my add-ins)
 
Updated organization by adding multiple dash marks to show a different scene. I pray this doesn't get locked and people actually enjoy it...
 
Here we go! Chapter 4!

The Mall Murder-Chapter 4

"Where did they go?" Skitty asked herself.

The curtains had been slightly tilted, as if they had been ripped in the corners, but Skitty could not confirm it. Everything, the Absol, the chains, even the props- were gone. It was just a big, empty room. No lights were on, but Skitty could feintly see across the room. Nothing was there. Then Skitty heard a voice behind her.

"There it is!" a voice called out. "Get it!"

Skitty turned around and ran for her life. She took the curtains draped on the ground and threw them behind her. Then she looked in the distance. She saw-a bag of marbles.

"Ooh! I can use those to make them fall!" Skitty said to herself.

She grabbed the bag and spilled them all over the floor. The voices behind her were running as fast as they could behind her, but tripped on the marbles.

"Whoooaaahhh! Aahhhhh!!" one of the voices screamed.

Skitty ran for the nearest exit. But as she ran, the other voice called out.

"Get up, you clumsy little thing!" the voice commanded.

As Skitty walked out, she heard one of the voices.

"I didn't mean to. That cat is tricky. We will find a way to catch her- then she will give us-"

Skitty heard nothing more as she ran for her life. She figured that the two voices would be chasing after her, so she took a turn and headed toward the northern area of the mall.

The northern area of the mall was quite overcrowded. This was the part where everyone rushed for all of the sales and where everyone kept bumping into eachother, and for some, people they knew. The escalators going up and down were crowded with people who needed a quick form of transportation for them and their heavy bags, stuffed with thngs they had bought. People behind the counters tried to keep up with the customers that just wanted to go home. And the parents kept yelling at their children for jumping on the mattresses, but they continued when the parents went away. Skitty wandered through the shops, looking for Glameow and Meowth.

"I wonder where they are," Skitty thought to herself. "Maybe they-"

"Someone help!" a voice called out.

Skitty ran over. "What's going on?" she asked.

"My name is Girafarig. Someone came up to me and pushed me down. Then they said some very bad words. They kicked me into a wall and I 'went to sleep.' Then I woke up here, and all of my things were gone!" she explained.

"By 'went to sleep,' you mean you were unconscious?" Skitty asked.

"I guess, all I know was that I woke up here and my stuff was gone!" Girafarig responded.

"Okay, I'll try to get this solved for you," Skitty told Girafarig. She wrote it in her notepad. "NEW MYSTERY: THE STOLEN ITEMS AND THE MYSTERY ROBBER."

"Oh, thank you so much, I really appreciate it," Girafarig thanked Skitty.

"No problem, it's my job," Skitty responded.

She ran through the shop, looking for any clues that would help her figure out the mystery. She noticed some mysterious lumps of cat hair on the sofas.

"This is weird," Skitty thought to herself. She took a few of the samples and headed out of the shop.

"Let's see, I might to be able to identify these hairs if I use my good microscope," Skitty thought.

And so she began to identify the hairs, looking at all of the possibilities.

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"You look a lot better," Purugly said to Meowth.

Meowth had looked much better, his whiskers cleaned, his claws polished, and his body washed.

"Thank you, madame," Meowth thanked Purugly.

"Oh, you are French?" Purugly asked.

"Oh, no, I just knew what madame meant, and I thought it as proper," Meowth said politely.

"Well, I have to get going," Purugly said. "I need to pack for my trip to the Cat Highlands."

"Bye!" Glameow said.

Purugly left the mall, and Meowth said, "Why don't we look for Skitty?"

"That would be smart," Glameow responded. "I just hope she isn't in some crowded place. I hate crowded places.

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Speaking of crowded places, Skitty tried to make her way through the mall to somewhere she could contact Meowth and Glameow. It would be correct to say many of the people in the mall felt like they were between a rock and a hard place.

"Excuse me, please, I need to get over there, excuse me!" Skitty said as she moved with the crowd.

Up ahead, though, Skitty saw some familiar clothing. She gasped quietly. It was the "voices" she had seen earlier. She hoped they would not turn around and see her, so she moved with the crowd and stayed as quiet as possible. Then one of them turned around, but did not see Skitty. It was the face of a Persian.

"Uh-oh," Skitty said to herself. She began to run away.

"Hey, is that who I think it is?" someone said out loud. "Skitty?"

Skitty turned around. "Glameow?"

"Oh, there you are!" Glameow exclaimed.

All of a sudden, the crowd grew ultimately quiet.

"What did you just say?" the Persian asked.

The crowd grew into a wild frenzy for no particular reason. Everyone began to start running away as people got into random fights, and the Persian charged toward the group.

"Get back here!" the Persian yelled as he ran through the crowd.

Everyone was screaming or running away as Skitty and her friends tried to get themselves out of the situation. Skitty noticed the large man with the beard was running toward them as well.

"We got trouble!" Skitty panicked as they ran faster.

Then, out of the blue, Chatot appeared and spilled a bag of marbles in the Persian's tracks. The Persian and the large man tripped.

"Ahhhhhhhhh! Not again!" the Persian screamed. They struggled to get up as the group ran down the hallway.

"What did they mean by 'again?' " Glameow asked.

"I'll explain later," Skitty responded. Just keep running!"

They ran and ran, until Skitty found a safe place beyond the northern area.

"This is the center of the mall," Skitty said while breathing heavily. "Ugghh. Let's sit down and talk. It is dangerous to stay here, however... as all of the areas lead here."

So the three chatted until Chatot came rushing toward them.

"Heeeellllllooooooooooo!" Chatot said as it came up to Skitty.

"Thanks a lot, Chatot," Skitty thanked Chatot. "Without you, they would have caught us."

So now that the four had gathered, they talked about the Absol, the muddy Meowth, and the Girafarig.

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