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Submission #1 said:
The seagulls fought against the wind towards a cylindrical building that calls itself a prison. It was every seagulls’ pooping grounds since it was tall, easy to spot, and it was on an island that was surrounded by the sea which stretched for miles. So the seagulls living on the island didn’t really have a choice. By the now, the roof of the prison was flooded with bird droppings. The janitor had stopped caring after the only prisoner that has ever been in the prison became less of a burden. All the guards left too. Well...except for one poor unfortunate guard who was chosen to keep an eye on the prisoner. Now all that’s left in the prison was the guard, the prisoner, and a roof buried in seagull feces.

A five feet long troll lay on the cold stone floor. The green-skinned troll snored loudly while he slept, unaware of the rat that had crawled up his fat belly. The rat scurried to the troll’s pear-shaped head, following the scent of rotten cheese. It was when it got to the monster’s crooked yellow teeth that the rat realized the cheese was already down the troll’s throat. Disappointed, the rat ran back to it’s rat hole at the corner of the prison cell.

Still sleeping, Vobi stopped snoring and started making an irritated face. It was not the rat that bothered him, but it was the mysterious whispers. In his dream, he was in a dark room. Whispers, coming from someone or something, surrounded him. Words were hard to make out since the person or the thing was whispering gibberish. Vobi ran towards the whispers, but the source would always move. The whispers became louder and louder. It was then Vobi started hearing his name. Scared, he crouched down and covered his ears.

“VOBI!”

The shout was loud, clear, and surprising. Whatever it was, it was enough to wake Vobi up.

Vobi jolted up and shouted. “STOP IT!”

He looked around and realized that it was only a nightmare. Vobi was about to lie down again, but the sound of a groan stopped him.

“What’s your problem? I’m trying to sleep here!” An ogre, eight feet high, lazily walked towards the prison bars. “Did the rat bite you?” he joked.

“No...Vobi just had bad dream. Do Butch want to hear story?” Vobi said, excited to tell his tale.

“Go back to sleep, you abomination!” Butch spat. “And don’t wake me up again!”

Vobi almost formed tears. He only wanted to talk. No one ever talked to him. It was always eat and sleep. He didn’t understand why he was in the prison if he’s not even as tall as they say he was. Vobi looked up, seeing nothing but darkness.

Twenty-five feet high they said. Butch doesn’t tell him how he shrunk. He said he doesn’t know, but even though Vobi wasn’t the brightest troll, he knew when Butch lied. He had spent more than a hundred years with him. He doesn’t remember much since his shrinking body also meant a shrinking brain, but there was something in the back of his head that told Vobi that Butch wasn’t always mean.

Vobi lay down again, hoping to go to sleep without another nightmare.

“Vobi...”

The whispers. They were back, but this time, he was awake. Terrified, he stood up, ready to face whatever was coming.

“Don’t be scared...Come here,” the whisperer said.

“You won’t hurt Vobi?” Vobi said as quietly as he can, hoping not to wake up Butch.

“Quite the opposite. I’m here to help you.” The voice became clearer. The person’s or thing’s voice was deep like that of a man’s.

Vobi actually relaxed. The voice didn’t seem so threatening anymore. “Where...where you are?” Vobi asked.

“Just follow my voice.” Vobi did as he was told. The voice started whispering gibberish again, like in his dream. He guessed that the whispers were suppose to guide him, so he continued to walk slowly towards it. The whispers became louder and louder until suddenly, something hit his head and he fell backwards.

“Ouch! Why you hit Vobi?” Vobi got off from the floor and rubbed his head. It was then when he looked up that he had hit himself. He had walked into a wall.

“Hello Vobi,” the voice said. The voice was booming. It was as if the voice was right in front of him.

“Vobi no see you. You behind wall?” Vobi said, putting his ear against the wall to see if he could hear anything.

“No, Vobi. I am the wall.”

Vobi backed away to look at the wall. He saw no mouth. In fact, all he saw was bricks. “Vobi will not fall for tricks! Vobi has brain!”

“A very small one. Do you know why?” the wall asked.

Vobi fell silent, trying to remember anything, but it was just darkness. All he remembers about his life was the dark prison cell. Tears started forming around his eyes.

“It was me Vobi,” the wall said.

Confused, Vobi scratched his head. There were so many questions he wanted to ask. His head started hurting from all the thinking.

“I am an enchanted wall, created by a great wizard. This prison is magical, but not just because it’s a cylinder and the rooms are rectangles. This prison drains energy and strength.”

Not wanting to miss a word, Vobi listened intently. “Why you make Vobi small?”

“Now don’t get me wrong, I don’t like this any more than you do. I can’t stop myself, but I can slow it down. You would have been gone by now if I didn’t sacrifice my-My...My own energy. Yes, my own energy. You used to be a giant that destr-accidentally destroyed houses when you were walk-umm...day dreaming. Yes. That’s why they wanted you smaller. Anyways, I need to tell you something. You need to get out of here. And Butch too.”

“Butch? Why Butch? Butch mean to Vobi. Butch beats Vobi,” Vobi said, starting to cry.

“Do you know how I’m talking?”

Vobi realized that the wall had never talked before. He almost became angry that he’s only starting to talk now.

“Butch’s family found a wishing star in the sky. They wished for Butch to go home. The Wish Witch came to me and told me what I must do. The Wish Witch told me to get you and Butch home.”

“But Butch can just open door, right? Butch can open door for Vobi too. Does Butch not like family?”

“Butch loves his family, but you see, his family is poor. He stood up when they were picking who was going to be left behind because he wanted the money to give to his family.”

“Oh...” Vobi said. “So what wall do? Wall can’t move, and Vobi can’t open door.”

“You don’t have to open the door,” the wall said, who seemed quieter. “Your home is close, but I need you to get Butch home. Or else the Wish Witch will get angry.”

The volume of the wall’s voice was diminishing with each word. “What Vobi do? And why your voice going bye bye? And-”

“I don’t have much time. Now listen!” the wall interrupted, speaking as loud as it could.


The ogre grumbled as he was woken up by Vobi yet again. Vobi’s voice annoyed him so much that he was ready to kill him. Butch has been stuck with the stupid troll for one hundred years. It was enough to drive even the nicest fairy mad. The only thing holding his anger back was his family. Before he went to scream at Vobi, he looked at the painting of his family. It reminded him why he was putting up with the green idiot.

He heard whispering. Butch wondered what Vobi was doing or saying. It was not like him to just stay up and whisper to himself. Maybe exposure to the magical walls had made him crazy.

Butch looked into the prison cell, but he saw nothing but darkness. He tried to hear Vobi’s whispers clearly but to no avail. He gave up.

“Vobi, come over here now!” Butch barked.

“Vobi already here,” Vobi replied.

Butch jumped back when he saw Vobi standing behind him. Vobi just stood there, looking at him with his small eyes.

“How...How did you get out?” Butch asked, surprised.

“Family needs you. Go home.” Vobi said.

Butch thought about knocking him out and throwing him back into the cage, but him mentioning his family stopped him.

“You know nothing about my family. You’re too dumb, and I never even talked to you about them. Now tell me how you got out before I break all of your teeth!” Butch threatened him.

“Your daughter. Relly misses daddy. Go home now Butch.”

Butch’s eyes began moisten. How did Vobi, of all the creatures in the kingdom, know his daughter? Then he shook off the tears, grabbed Vobi’s arms, and threw him at the bars. Then sadness took over again.

“How do you know this? Who told you?” Butch cried.

“Wall says not to tell you. Oh...No. Vobi did not say that.”

“The wall...He actually talked,” Butch muttered to himself.

“Butch say something?” Vobi asked

“It was nothing,” Butch quickly replied. “It doesn’t make a difference. I need this job Vobi. If I lose this job, there won’t be a home to go to!”

“But home is not house. Home is family.”

Butch didn’t notice the tears that were running down his cheeks. “Did the wall tell you that?”

“No.”

“You’re hiding something in that brain,” Butch joked. He soon did something he hadn’t done for over a hundred years. He laughed.

“Not brain. Vobi has heart,” Vobi said, smiling.


Vobi was outside for the first time in a century, and it amazed him. The stars and the moon were so pretty and bright, and the sea was so big. He wanted to explore the world, but first he had to find his home. He walked to the boat where Butch got ready to set sail.

“Wall said Butch knows Vobi’s home.”

Butch sighed. He was sorry for Vobi. Sorry for the times he had beaten him, sorry for the times he had shouted at him, and sorry for all that time he had not told him the truth.

“Vobi...I don’t know how to say this but...You’re home is the prison.”

“Vobi not understand,” Vobi said, his excited smile fading away.

“When we...when they were capturing you...They captured your dad too, but they captured you guys too early. The prison walls wasn’t completed yet. They still needed to be enchanted. Your dad knew what would come if he let them finish the enchantment. So he escaped broke his chains and sacrificed himself to fuse with the enchantment. He became part of the wall.”

Vobi started crying.

“His last words were, ‘I will be back, and my son will escape on the day the walls will talk.’”


Butch sailed back home, as happy as he can be. He couldn’t contain his excitement, and he rowed his little boat until his arms were completely tired. It didn’t take long for him to reach the shore, and it didn’t take him long to see little Relly who had been waiting for her dad.

Submission #2 said:
We had finally finished unpacking our boxes. My wife, Eve, and I had saved up for a year to fund buying and fixing up the place. The mansion just a couple miles outside of Eterna had been far cheaper than expected, even in the condition it was in. It was nice to be back in the house where I grew up in.
“Ander,” Eve called from the bathroom. I walked in to find her finishing organizing medications. She was looking beautiful as always, even after the long day’s work. She had a curvy figure, long wavy blond hair that flowed past her shoulders like a waterfall, and verdant eyes. The beauty wasn’t only skin deep, she was a math whiz, deep, a very kind person, and every day I wonder why she’s with me. Out of all the bad luck in my life, she made up for it.
I suppose bad luck is a bit of an understatement. My father had died when I was nine. I had been framed for murder in middle school, which surprisingly I was found innocent of. And then there was this one time at band camp…you get the picture.
“It’s getting pretty late. As soon as I finish up here I’m going to bed. Do you still have to work on that project for work?”
“I’m way too much of a procrastinator to ever get anything done early. Good thing I have tomorrow off. I’ll get started on it, though,” I answered.
“Just because you don’t have to go to work tomorrow and stay late doesn’t mean you have rub my face in it. Good night, my love,” she said and kissed me.
“Good night,” I responded and got to work.
It definitely wasn’t a good night.
It was after 1:00 in the morning when I made my way to bed. I stripped off my clothes and lay down next to Eve. I lay there, on my back, staring up at the ceiling, waiting for sleep to come.
A couple of times I thought I saw something move in the shadows, but passed it off as my weary eyes playing tricks on me in the dark. That is, until the noise started.
Faint, hushed murmurs began to mutter to each other in vague whispers. At first I was unsure of what I was hearing. Have you ever walked into a party and heard people talking, but it wasn’t distinctive enough to make out what anybody was saying? That’s what it sounded like, but much at a much softer pitch. It sounded like the murmuring was surrounding me, coming from all directions, from the walls themselves.
I was really spooked. My heart was racing, the hairs on the back of my neck were standing up, shivers ran up and down my spine, and my addled mind grasped for a reason for these disembodied voices to no avail.
My eyes darted around the room, chasing after the movement in the corners of my eyes that might not have been there like a dog chasing its tail. The voices began to grow louder until finally I heard one sentence that would terrify the sleep right out of me, spoken in a low-pitched, scratchy voice.
“Leave, before it’s too late.”
I jolted out of bed, surprisingly not waking Eve, and the whispering stopped. Still in denial I decided that it might have been illusions of my drowsy mind and to not worry Eve about it unless it happened again. Needless to say I didn’t get any sleep that night.
The next morning I went out and bought a Spell Tag, hoping it would protect me. The day was uneventful, but I did finish my project. That night I crawled into bed, comforted by the Spell Tag, but still anxious about sleeping. Eventually I passed out from exhaustion.
I found myself in a classroom, sitting in a desk, while all the children were talking amongst themselves, seemingly unaware of my presence. I caught sight of a boy standing in the corner with his back turned. Something compelled me to walk up to him. He was muttering something to himself and didn’t stop until I put my hand on his shoulder. He spun around and glared at me menacingly with his large, slanted, scarlet eyes. He wore a sinister grin on his face that stretched from ear to ear.
“It’s too late. She knows you’re back by now. It would still be in your best interest to leave.” He said in the same deep scratchy voice I had heard the night before.
“What do you want from me? Who knows I’m here?” I asked.
“I’ll give you a hint,” came a high pitched nasally voice from behind me,” You two are old friends and she’s been waiting for you to return. “

I slowly turned around to find the source of the voice. A feminine, plum-colored, ghost-like Pokémon had materialized behind me. She had a tuft on her head that looked like a witch’s hat with the extremities being a lighter mauve color. She had three scarlet orbs around her long neck. She had a ragged body that gave her the appearance of wearing a cloak and red eyes. I recognized her as a Mismagius.
I wondered why these two were haunting my dreams even though I wore my Spell Tag.
“Simple,” she said, reading my mind,” We aren’t evil spirits.”
“What do you mean? What do you want from me?” I begged.
This time the boy spoke again, “We wanted you to leave for your own good. You’re in danger.”
“From who?”
“You’ll find out soon enough.” answered the Mismagius.
The boy’s eyes glowed bright and a dark violet fog escaped from his mouth and eyes. The haze reformed into a Gengar. The boy’s body now lay completely hollowed out on the floor. The gruesome carcass slowly evaporated away.
My alarm went off. All the unanswered questions swam through my mind all day. I bought a Lunar Wing after work, hoping that it might keep my dreams peaceful. I felt quite haggard when I returned home. Eve always got home before me, but she wasn’t home when I got back. I was far too fatigued to think anything of it. I plopped down on the couch and tried to sleep. I had a nagging feeling that something wasn’t right.
It wasn’t.
I felt like I was being watched which set off a new wave of goose bumps. I turned around to find the Mismagius and Gengar there, as I’d expected.
“She has your wife,” the Gengar informed me “we warned you to leave. Now it’s too late.”
“Who has Eve?” I demanded.
“We’ll try to help you get her back.” The Mismagius told me.
They seemed to avoid answering my question for some reason. She entered my mind and I suddenly knew where to go. She shared my body with me while the Gengar followed me from a distance. I raced through the moonlit forest with a sense of foreboding. As I ran deeper and deeper into the woods I noticed an eerie quiet. There was no sound from the woodland Pokémon. No Kricketots, no Hoothoots, nothing. All I could hear was the sound of my running, breath, and heart racing. I kept running until I found a clearing and knew this was it.
It was unnaturally circular. The ground was littered with hundreds of dead Pokémon bodies. Bidoof, Buneary, Murkrow, Slakoth, and many other dead carcasses lay strewn across the ground and hung from trees, all with brutal wounds. In the center of the clearing was a single moss-covered rock.
I scanned the clearing, hoping to find Eve. I heard a stifled scream coming from somewhere in front of me. I found Eve tied to a tree by large vines, restraining her arms, legs, and torso to the trunk and a vine wrapped around her mouth. I ran to her, carefully avoiding the bodies and tried untying her to no avail.
Bloodcurdling laughter broke the unnatural silence. I spun around and saw a feminine figure standing on the moss-covered stone. She had medium-length viridian hair, scarlet eyes, long slender arms, crimson crests on her torso, and mask-like spikes on the side of her head. She appeared to be wearing a long, flowing gown. I felt like I knew this Gardevoir.
“It’s been too long, Ander. I’ve been waiting for you. I knew you would return to me.” she said.
Old long forgotten memories of my childhood flooded my mind. I remembered where I knew her from.
“Janet?” I asked.
She nodded.
“Why are you here? Why are you doing this?” I begged.
“Why am I here? Why are you here? I never left this place, you did.” she answered.
“My father told me that you were sick and had to go somewhere else. Then he died and all the workers had to move.”
She flinched at the mention of my father. “Your mother never did tell you what he really did for a living, did she? She might not have even known herself. Your father was one of the top scientists for a group of people known as Team Galactic. He and his colleagues experimented on innocent Pokémon here. I was one of them. They performed many painful tests and surgeries on me to try to find out how I ticked. You remember when you were little and I was a Kirlia? That was the only break from the loneliness, the pain, the suffering caused by your father and his workers. Then you left me.”
“My father would never work with those criminals. Why did you kidnap Eve?” I demanded.
“I needed to get your attention somehow.” She said with a sadistic grin. “Tell me, do you like what I’ve done with the place?” She cackled psychotically.
“No, all those innocent Pokémon, this is horrible.”
“Your father hurt innocent Pokémon; this was my way of showing you how horrible he really was. I was really hurt once you left me. I was so lonely. I had nobody to talk to, nobody to play with. I spent years here alone. I tried many times to just die, but I couldn’t. You can’t imagine what it’s like, to try to die, but you can’t. All I could do was faint, I could never be free of my misery.” she said with tears in her eyes.
“I’m so sorry. My mother made us move. I thought you left. What else could I do?”
“LIES!” she roared and shot a powerful blast of psychic energy at me, throwing me against a tree. “You forgot about me, too. Because of her.”
The Gengar appeared and shot balls of dark energy at Janet. The two engaged in a fierce battle while the Mismagius helped me free Eve and run.
Clutching Eve’s hand, the three of us ran to our car and left, never looking back.
Epilogue
We got a friend of ours to sell the house and our things for us. We told our friends we had to move because I got a job elsewhere. We bought a nice, cozy place in Canalave, but it didn’t last too long. Eve thought she saw Janet. We weren’t sure but decided it was safer to leave. Mismagius has been protecting us. She says she felt it was her duty. Sometimes I wonder if this is Janet’s revenge for me leaving her, having us paranoid out of her minds, on the run. I knew how powerful she was. There was no fighting her, only running. We moved to Veilstone sense then and haven’t seen her in months. Maybe it’s the meteors. Maybe she just gave up. Maybe Gengar defeated her. As much as I’d like for these things to be true, I can’t fool myself into believing it. If you’re ever near Eterna, stay away from the Old Chateau of Eterna Forest.

Submission #3 said:
Steaming tears dripped from her eyes as Elise began to storm down the hall. Father was especially rough that day. He came home with the foul breath, the slur in his voice. Elise was playing, and Father grew mad. Slapped her face, he did. Elise was scared.
Tight in her grip was Henry, a teddy bear. His soft fur drug across the floor as Elise reached her room and opened the door.

She jumped face first on the bed, throwing Henry with her.

“What gives him the right?” She whispered to the furry animal. “What gives him the right to make me hurt?”

Her soft voice quivers as she hears no answer from the animal. She never did, and used to not care. But that day, that was all she needed. An answer. And Henry couldn’t give it. She threw Henry against the wall and cried. All she did is cry. She cries until she goes to sleep, and this is when her brother comes in.

He sneaks in quietly, Sam was never known to be loud. He walked like and Indian, one foot right in front of the other. He pulled the covers above his small, six year old sister, and looks down to the bear. He stares at it, thinking of how it would never give an answer. One day, Elise would discard the animal for good. Sam tried to shake the thought.

She was his beautiful sister. She would have to grow up into this cruel world. She would with only a few happy memories from her parents. She would, she would, she would. Sam realizes that there is one more memory he could add. That possibly, he could create a memory for her. The idea for the memory comes quickly, and Sam rushes off.

He walks back into the hallway, and enters a room right besides Elise’s. There, Sam kneels himself by the wall that borders his sister’s room. He waits. He waits until he hears his sister wake again, in the middle of the night. He hears her pick up Henry again, whispering to him “Sorry” and going back onto the bed. When the shuffling stops, he begins his mission.

“Elise!” He whispers, in an adult voice. He hears his sister sit up, and look for the sound.

“Elise!” He repeats. He hears her walk around her room, looking for the sound.

“Where are you, Noise?” She asks in a whisper.
“I am the wall, the empty one on the left side of your room.” He answers. He hears his sister kneel by the wall.

Curious, Elise asks “Who are you, Wall? Why did you only talk to me now?”

Sam thinks for a moment, and comes with a name.

“I am the Great Wall, and I can only talk on special nights, when children are in deep need of help.”

Curiously, Elise knocks on the wall.

“Ow! Stop that! I need that spot healed!” He says cautiously, trying not to intimidate his sister.

Elise giggles, but rubs the spot where she hit it. “I need help because Daddy doesn’t understand.”

Sam pauses. He knows all too well what his sister was talking about. “What does he not understand?”

“He thinks that me and Sam hate him. He thinks that Mommy hated him too.”

The sick reality of the situation is that Sam really does hate his father. How he would always discriminate, never learning both sides. The fact that Sam knew all too well that his father would much rather have had no children at all. He already tried to get rid of them once.

“Is he wrong?” Sam asks.

“Yes. Mommy loved Daddy before she left. I love Daddy. Sam loves Daddy.”

Sam thought for a moment. She has to assume that her brother loves her dad, right? All young children assume that.

“Did he tell you that?”

“No…” Elise says defensively, then continues, saying “but I know he loves him, or else we wouldn’t be here right now. Sam takes care of Daddy. By yelling at each other, they make themselves stronger. Daddy loves us too. Or else he wouldn’t be here.”

“He wouldn’t be here…” Sam thinks out loud, before returning to the Great Wall. “If your father were not here, who would take care of you?”

“Sam.” Elise immediately answers. He smiles. Sam was overjoyed with her dependence.

“I see. Is there anything that you ever want to tell your father, but never do?” The question slips out. Sam almost yells in his stupidity.

Elise takes a long time to answer. Sam is ready to leave when Elise speaks again.

“I would say “I love you.”. I would say it super loud. Then I would hug him. And Sam would join us.”

It’s Sam turn to take a long silence now. “What would you say to Sam?”

Elise says “I would say that he should forgive Daddy. Even though he made Mommy go away. Daddy didn’t mean to. He loved Mommy. And he loves Sam too.”

Sam can’t help it. Silent tears run down his face. He manages a quivered “Good night” before going back to his room again. He woke the next morning and saw his dad watching the television. He was sitting on the couch, almost stone still. With one arm gripping the couch and another on the room, Sam’s father continued to click through the channels. Finally, Sam had to stop him to say something important. To say something he had not said in years.

“I love you, Dad.”

Submission #4 said:
Fifteen Years Ago:

February 18, 1995​
Dear Diary,
Today I, Gregory P. Dergam, have completed my animation potion. I hope I’ll be able to wreak havoc with it, or better yet make myself a wife from one of those delicious female mannequins. This accomplishment….

Gregory lifted up his pen, quietly considering what to write down next. He had done it! His joyfulness could not be concealed, no matter how hard he tried. Diabolical laughs kept escaping from his lips.

“Gregory, come down here! Dinner is ready,” yelled a strong man-like female voice from below him. “Don’t you make me angry, Mister.”

“Ugh…. What a simpleton mother I have,” he thought to himself. “Twenty-two years old, a graduate from Cambridge, a major contributor to many fundraisers, and this is the respect I get, stuck with a freak that won’t let me move out unless I pay her one-million dollars. I’d sooner starve to death than have a peaceful meal with that beast,” he spat. “Thankfully, that’ll soon be over. My serum will make sure of that. Till then, I’ll just have to ignore that fool.”

Pretending to be unaware of his mother, Gregory continued to write about the serum, which lied on the same table as his diary. As soon as he heard stomping coming from the stairs, he became even more absorbed in his work, hoping the creep would abandon trying to get him to eat dinner with her or, according to Gregory, more like it.

Much to Gregory’s dismay, the woman burst into the room full of anger, almost breaking off the hinges of the door. She must have been the most masculine ugly female to have ever walked the Earth or anywhere beyond it. She was even more hideous than a mutated Muk.

“Gregory!” she screamed. “What gives you the right to disobey your mother? Do you not want to be fed? Do you wish to starve to death? You foolish little man. You dare ignore me? Answer me already!”

“But mother, I didn’t hear you,” he lied. “I was too busy working on my animation serum!”

“Here’s what I think of your stupid…. Whatever that thing is,” she madly said as she picked up the glass bottle of serum and smashed it against the hard brick wall. “What did you think, I was talking to the wall?”

With a clever idea for revenge forming in Gregory’s mind, he responded in a calm tone, “Actually, yes I did. Why don’t you give it its punishment?”

Surprised at such a strange comment, she sarcastically said, “Sure. Let’s give the “wall” its punishment.” After her words, she gave the wall a powerful kick, causing a huge gaping hole in the direct center of the wall. “Now as for you Gregory”, she started but got interrupted by a strange whispering sound from behind her.

The noise, at first, was quiet and incomprehensible. Over time, it kept getting louder and easier to make out. Eventually, it echoed so loudly that it was obvious it meant to say, “She hurt us. Let her suffer. She hurt us. Let her suffer.” It kept saying those words over and over.

The woman got extremely frightened, almost to the point of heart attack. She backed up against the wall, but then it happened. The wall started to absorb her, rip her to shreds. Then she disappeared. The whispering died down.

“Serves her right,” Gregory started to think. “Of course, now my genius got wasted on a stupid wall, but I could always make another. Thankfully, that monstrosity is out of my life for good.”

Suddenly, the whispering started up again. This time, it started off loud. It said, “He told her to do it. Let him suffer. He told her to do it. Let him suffer.” Again, it repeated itself continuously, angrily.

Knowing what was going to happen, Gregory tensed up. Without a moment’s hesitation, he charged out the window, dropping to his yard three stories below him. He broke a few bones, but ultimately escaping from a devastating doom.

Present Day:

“Dad, do we really have to move into this dump of a house?”

“Yes we do, Tasha. We’ve been over this. I’ve gotten an unexpected job proposal here, and this happens to be the cheapest house I could get on such short notice. We have no other options.”

“Fine, but I won’t like it,” Tasha moaned as she gloomily stared out of the broken window of her new room.

“Nor do I, young one, nor do I,” her dad replied in an equally gloomy tone. “Now I know this is hard for you, moving away from your friends and all, but we can make this work. Why don’t you make your way to the park down the street? I’m sure you’ll meet some other girls your age there.”

“Sure. I guess. Whatever,” Tasha grumbled while she started moving toward the door.

“Wait,” her dad suddenly shouted. “While your out, can you pick up the can of quick-dry cement I ordered? We’ll need it to patch up the hole in your room. You can find the shop I ordered it from, Builder’s Mayhem, right across the road from that park I told you about.”

“Yeah, sure,” Tasha replied as her spirits started to perk up, realizing she could get out of the hideous house. “I’ll be back in a bit.” Without even waiting for a response, she rushed down the stairs and out of the door as fast as she could.

When Tasha arrived at the park, it appeared to be deserted. Noticing monkey bars in the far corner, she thought, “No one’s here? Might as well go on those bars over there. I don’t want to waste the trip."

Tasha hustled over to the monkey bars, screaming when something dropped from behind her. “Ha, ha,” said a feminine voice, coming from the figure that had dropped. “I scared you, didn’t I?”

“Yes, I guess you did,” Tasha remarked, trying to make herself seem less foolish. “I’m Tasha, I just moved here. Who are you?”

“It’s nice to meet you. My name’s Jessie, but everyone calls me Jay. Wait a minute, what do you mean you just moved here? I thought all the houses were sold? Well, all except for old Dawollives, but that doesn’t count.”

Curiously wondering if that was where she now resided, Tasha asked, “What’s Dawollives? Why isn’t it occupied? Did something horrible happen there?”

“Pft, you can say that all right.” Jay remarked. “Word on the street is the house’s owners mysteriously vanished without a trace fifteen years ago, leaving only a broken window and a fist-sized hole in the wall. On that day, a shouting voice could be heard saying something like, “Dawollives” over and over again, hence the name “Dawollives.”

“Oh my Arceus,” Tasha exclaimed. “That must be where I moved to! I’ve got a broken window and a dent in my wall! Do you know where I could more information about it?”

“Great! You like Pokemon,” Jay exclaimed. “Anyways, my boyfriend, Noah, seems to know a lot about it. Maybe he could tell you more about it.”

“Sure, where can I find him?”

“How about I bring him here tomorrow to meet you at around…. Let’s say about five before noon.” Noticing that the sun was dropping quickly, Jay said, “It’s getting kind of late. See you tomorrow? Well if you survive the night that is,” joked Jay.

“See you tomorrow,” Tasha confirmed, while Jay dashed off to the distance. “Well, better go get that cement,” she thought.

“Dad, I got the cement,” Tasha yelled into the empty house. “Dad? Dad, where are you?” Getting increasingly worried that something had gone horribly wrong, Tasha bounded up the stairs with surprising speed.

After a while on the stairs, she began to hear a strange perplexing moaning sound. The words slipped past the standard of Tasha’s comprehension limit. Although it was hard to catch a grasp on the specific characters of the words, it sounded similar to what Jay had called this place. “Dawollives, Dawollives.”

Immediately checking her room, she got a nasty surprise. Indented in the wall was the outline of her father’s face. The shape of his lips started to move as his voice enveloped through the room. “Taaakkshhaaaaa!! Roooouuuun!! Dawollives!!” The walls started shimmering, as if a major heat wave flowed through the room. Then the indentation evaporated into thin air.

Tasha then let out a large screech, about fifteen times louder than the one she let slip earlier at the monkey bars. “She hurt our ears. Let her suffer.” Scared out of her wits, Tasha threw the bucket of cement onto the floor and charged out of the already damaged window, unhurt but slipping out of consciousness the moment she hit the ground.

“Are you all right, Tasha,” came a familiar voice. As Tasha’s senses started to perk up, she noticed Jay and a nicely dressed boy kneeling over her.

“Stop pestering her, Jay,” said the soothing voice of the boy. “She’ll wake up when she’s ready.”

“Oh, shut up, Noah. Why do you think a little coaxing won’t hurt?”

“Ugh….” Tasha groaned. “I think the wall lives….”

“What about Dawollives,” the boy known as Noah quickly jumped in.

“I don’t think she said “Dawollives,” Noah. It sounded more like “the wall lives” to me.”

“Wait you don’t think….” Noah and Jay exclaimed at the same time.

“Yes, that’s what Dawollives meant. It’s a warning,” Tasha interrupted as she lifted herself off the ground. “So you’re Noah, I presume?”

“Why yes, Noah R. Dergam at your service. Me and Jay were um…”

“I already told her we were going out, Noah. And for such a sophisticated boy, you used improper grammar? Jeez.”

“Hey! Well in that case, we were out dating and we heard a scream. We came rushing to where it came from. What happened?”

Tasha then described to the couple exactly what had happened. She got lots of gasps from Jay, but Noah remained silent.

“So my dad was right,” he muttered. “Jay, go get my dad and bring him here. Tasha, come upstairs with me to investigate. I want to see your room first hand.”

“Do you really want to do it, Noah? According to Tasha, it could be dangerous,” Jay worried.

“Just go get him,” he yelled. Hurt, Jay ran into the distance. “What are you waiting for, Tasha? Let’s go!”

The room was just as Tasha left it. The cement lied on the floor next to an odd diary. “What’s this book on the ground? It wasn’t here before,” Tasha observed.

“Let me see,” Noah ordered as he grabbed it out of her hands. “Oh god, this is my dad’s!”

“You called for me,” his dad said as he walked into the room.

At that moment, the whispering started up again. “He’s back. Let him suffer.” Everyone in the room tensed up.

Tasha got frightened the most. Out of fear, she screamed and chucked the cement at the wall. It hit the wall precisely at the dent, completely healing its brokenness. “Thank you,” came the whisper, finally at peace.

Then two figures fell from the ceiling. One was Tasha’s father landing gracefully onto the floor. The other one was an obese lady that lande right on top of Gregory, Noah’s father. “And that, Noah, is why you never disobey your Grandma.”

Submission #5 said:
Vergil Lisieux. A man who had barely begun to dash upon the ribbon of life, who had not quite twenty-one years under his belt – was about to die. What method of death, the criminal was uncertain. Whether it be asphyxiation as he was lynched from the gallows or the swift descent of the guillotine – it would be a harrowing end. Vergil envisioned his life as a delicate strand of gold fibre, the ethereal thread stretched between the emaciated fingertips of fate. In four hours, his heartbeat would abandon its rhythmic pulse before the condemning crow of the cockerel. Vergil lifelessly slumped against his shackles, wrought iron jaws snaring his wrists in a wintry sheath. His immoral behaviour had bequeathed this punishment upon his merit, and while the prisoner expected nothing less than a gruesome execution, he harboured a glint of prospect. Mercy was strewn amongst brethren, was it not? 'Perhaps an emotional plea will cater to their sympathetic nature...' Vergil inwardly surmised, a devious smirk gracing his lips.

Dignified footsteps marched upon the cobblestones with a hollow clack, each stride creating an austere symphony which lingered in the stygian dungeon. A taciturn guard ventured down the dismal avenue, arriving at the last set of steel dowels in the prison. The sentry clutched a tattered tome with a black leather cover, his quill tip poised on the parchment like a diligent solider. His reticent stare pierced through the chamber like two bronze bullets, observing the silent prisoner. Nary a thing could be done to attract his attention, certainly nothing subtle; clearing his throat elicited nothing more than stoic lassitude. The guard reluctantly decided to speak, much to his chagrin.

“Vergil Lisieux.” The sentry possessed a grandiose voice, his pompous timbre like an irritating nettle inside the ear. Vergil vehemently glared at his new cohort, connotations of fatigue painted amidst his swarthy glower. The watchman had a cavalier grin underneath his ebony mustache. “Ah, excellent! You do not appear to be dead, after all.” He jeeringly chided, scratching indecipherable scrawl inside his book. “State your crime for the record.”

“None of your business.” Vergil hissed seethingly, his cobalt glare as frigid as an arctic gale. “Do your records need to have the worthless words of a man who no longer owns his own life? Get lost, salaud.” Vergil emphasized his last word, crassly spitting at the ground. The guard despondently clicked his tongue, writing down a postscript regarding the convict and his rather churlish vernacular.

“Quite the colourful tongue...” The sentry whispered, his inaudible breath dissolving into oblivion. “I advise that you start repenting before your untimely death, Monsieur Lisieux. Retribution may be your only hope.”

«I don't believe in retribution.» Vergil snidely quipped, his native tongue accentuating his condescending demeanour. A cumbersome hush engulfed the dungeon, luminescent torchlight cascading over the guard. Citrine resplendence sprightly flickered in his eyes, his pensive stare irking the prisoner. The sentry suddenly slapped his book shut, shattering the silence with a terse thunderclap.

“Suit yourself.” His sombre pitch harboured a warning, a sinister stitch sewn in the tapestry of his words. The guard concluded his midnight sojourn, meandering down the corridor and vanishing into the abyss. Vergil grumbled incoherently, scrutinizing his surroundings. Everything about this dungeon was eerie; the guards, the chamber...but most of all – the numbers. Vergil had observed their presence the minute he was thrown in jail, and the bizarre insignias incessantly caught his attention. Three numbers were shallowly engraved in the limestone, a strike mark lacerating the numeral shapes of the one and the two. The number three remained untouched. Vergil visibly shivered – it was like an unspoken record of executed prisoners who had been condemned to this very chamber, the skeletal hand of death claiming their final breath. Vergil couldn't help but stare at the three, realizing who it was meant for.

«Zut...» Vergil snarled, an acrid queasiness churning in his stomach. “The guards probably carved these numbers to scare me. Y-Yeah.” Vergil shakily reassured, his quivering body clinking the chains together in a hysterical symphony. “These numbers mean nothing. I can't be frightened so easily - ”

〈 Vergil...〉

Vergil froze.

“W-Who's there?!” Vergil shrieked.

〈 VERGIL...〉 A ghostly wail ricocheted against the stone, every blazing torch whisked away in a single breath. Cryptic moans summoned a phantom eclipse, everything blanketed in a curtain of obsidian despair. Vergil hastily glimpsed around, but to no avail – not an ounce of light was to be found. A scintillating white glow kindled upon the stone, its spectral light producing perfect letters with the fluidity of a calligrapher. A bone-chilling message wrote itself on the wall.

「Follow me...」

“...Oh God.” Vergil squeaked. The white cursive melted away, the milky ink trickling in the labyrinth of the masonry. A new message chiseled itself over the old text, the edges licked by a ghostly mist.

「Do you want retribution?」 A soft click chimed against the darkness, his cuffs plummeting to the cobblestones with a thundering clang. Vergil glanced to his unbound wrists, his arms trembling something fierce.

“Impossible...!” Vergil gasped, whipping his head toward the steel barricade as the unbelievable happened. Sapphire embers explosively surged into a scorching pyre, its hot white core devouring the iron rods like sticks of brittle candy. An asphyxiating heat swaddled his body, prickling sensitivity crawling along his skin like a plague of insects. Vergil scrambled up and stumbled forward, the lethal flame slowly narrowing its course.

“What the...? I can't pass through this – it's a solid stone wall!” Vergil tenaciously pawed the limestone, his fingertips scraping the porous surface. “Please, let me in! I'll do anything!” Vergil nervously watched the fire prowl closer, its fiery fangs ravaging everything in its path until nothing was left except ashen grit. “ANSWER ME!” Vergil howled, assailing the wall with a furled fist. An ivory inscription seeped out of the rock, answering the prisoner's plea with a final question.

「Do you want retribution and be free of this place?」

“YES!!” Vergil sobbed, brackish droplets dribbling down his gaunt cheekbones.

〈 Good. 〉 A complacent voice cooed, its malignant tone dripping with a venomous hiss. Vergil sensed a soft thunder rumble within the wall, its magnitude strong enough to vibrate his fingers. Jagged stones flaked away like dead pieces of skin, crawling over his arm like worms. Vergil released a whimpering snivel, the rocks squirming together until they fabricated a stony sleeve. Vergil was fiercely yanked inside the wall, the flame just barely licking his backside as he was thrust into darkness.

Black; it was the only colour Vergil was able to decipher. 'Where am I? Is this part of the prison?' he inwardly enquired, contemplatively scrutinizing the murky cavern. Vergil inhaled the stagnant air, the fetid stench of mildew festering in every particle. It smelt like decaying flesh and decomposing bones – like a catacomb.

〈 Beware...Beware the wolf in sheep's clothing...! 〉 A ghostly choir of whispers permeated beyond the rock, their ghoulish moans riddled by a warning. Everything hinted to some type of witchcraft, though such devilry was the babbling tongue of an old wives' tale – or was it? Vergil incessantly pinched his skin, the hairs sewn in the surface delivering a terse sting. Was he trapped in a lucid daydream, or was he on the precipice of a nightmarish realm? The stone suddenly writhed beneath his fingertips, the surface vibrating with a slight pulse. Vergil shivered – this thing was...alive.

Two turquoise flames burst inside brass basins, their phantasmal glow illuminating the cave. Vergil shielded his eyes, the blinding radiance revealing a stalagmite which intersected two diverging passageways. It fashioned a crossroads in the cavern, though neither pathway appeared promising. Vergil observed a mirror standing in front of the right path, intricate designs embroidered in its frame. A gaunt reflection stared back at him, reminding him just how unkempt and emaciated he was. Vergil squinted at the smoke covering the left path, a dangling silhouette becoming crisper as the residue dissolved. A destitute man was savagely hung by his wrists, his body hovering over an abysmal chasm. Vergil was shocked.

“Impossible...” Vergil whispered, his face blanched of colour. “I...I murdered you!” Vergil caught a soft glow out of the corner of his eye, cyan ink burning through the earthen spire as it revealed the most important decision of his life.

「Choose.」 A dazzling emerald fire swirled in his hand, the cool flame sifting through his fingers like silt. A piece of paper nestled in his palm, its smooth texture pressed against his calloused fingertips.

“What is this?” Vergil grumbled, leering at the ornately stamped wax emblem.

「It is a document absolving a criminal of their wrongdoing.」

“A pardon?” Vergil exclaimed, his lips prying into a bright smile. “You mean...I could be free?”

「I do not know, for you must choose who shall receive this pardon. Will it be this petty thief? Or will it be you, the man who claimed his life? Choose wisely...」

Vergil irately clenched his jaw. 'This is a trick, it has to be! No one would forgive a thief who victimized their pocket. This swindler is selfish, just like every thief!' Vergil flinched as the ethereal blue glow answered his bitter introspection, its voiceless words carrying a hint of righteousness.

「You are wrong. This man stole your gold to support his impoverished family. If your beloved wife were barely clinging to life, would you not do everything in your power to help her? If your children were crying of hunger, would you not ensure they received nutrition? Never judge a book by its cover.」 Vergil contemplatively glanced to the letter, its precious contents beckoning his conscience to do the right thing. 'If I don't do this, it's going to haunt me forever...' Vergil gingerly bit his lip, delivering one last yearning glance to the reprieve before hurling it to the earth.

“You deserve this. My wrath brought you here, but this letter will bring you to the heavens. May you protect your family in peace. Adieu va.” Vergil's heartfelt mea culpa finalized his decision, the pardoned man disintegrating into granules of golden light. Grudges and choler were eschewed to the shadows, the sacrifice cleansing his soul with a rejuvenating vigour. Vergil became lax, sighing in relief.

Suddenly, the empty chains snapped at his wrists like vicious cobras, iron knots twisting his skin like bundled cloth. Vergil thrashed like a hooked fish as he was hoisted up, blood trickling down his arms like sanguine rivers. A ghostly presence materialized through the wall, its malicious smile the quintessential betrayal.

“You...!” Vergil was horrified – it was the guard. Demonic fangs were protruding out of his mouth, his incandescent sclerae piercing the twilight gloom. Vergil became terrified and livid, his screams lingering in the cavern. “Deceitful swine! You tricked me into believing your pious prattle! Where is my retribution?!”

“Oh, this is your retribution.” The sentry chuckled, his low timbre as slick as his mauve tongue. A lithe tail deftly coiled around a crank handle, a quarter turn slowly unlocking the mechanism. “Did you not read the fine print? You have chosen to take his place.”

“No!” Vergil passionately cried, “I was promised freedom!”

“Oh, you won't need freedom...not where you're going.” A sinister laugh roared in the cavern, the demon curling his tongue over a lustrous fang. Vergil suppressed a lamenting cry, his throat constricting in remorse. It couldn't end this way, not like this.

“Please, have mercy!”

“Did you think you could cater to my sympathetic nature? Foolish human...” The demon taunted, his speared tail unfurling to release the wheel. “Have fun in Abaddon – I'll see you there.”

Vergil's last memory was the icy breath of the chasm as he was relinquished to the abyss, his bloodcurdling scream a bittersweet stalemate in his quest for something that he could never truly come to possess.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

I'm just curious, when do you think the judging will be over?

Also, I just realized we all have 3/5 chance of at least placing. =D

Also, good luck to all.
 
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#Twig said:
Also, I just realized we all have 3/5 chance of at least placing. =D
That'll just make the two of us that don't place sadder. :(
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

THESE ARE AMAZING. I know i shouldn't be saying this, but from the one that I read, I could've never came up with anything as amazing as these. I wish you all luck, you deserve it.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Personally I was hoping for a larger turn out, but this forum only gets so much activity to begin with. Good luck to those of you who did get their entries in on time. This won't be your last opportunity for those of you who didn't, or at least it shouldn't be.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Judging is taking place now, guys. And like Apollo said, for those of you that were unable to get your entries in on time, there will be more opportunities to compete, so don't worry. One last thing- due to the small turnout, there will be a first place winner and a runner-up. No third place.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Just got through all of them. I have to say, all of these are pretty excellent, can't wait to see what the judges decide. Good luck everyone who entered!
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

These are all amazing. I think I'm going to lose. But now I had more experience, I think I'm ready for the next one.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

^That's the ticket! What doesn't hurt you only makes you stronger!
...wait, I think I messed up the idiom somewhere.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Well, these all look good, but my entry seems to have at least somewhat of a chance.

Good luck to us all...
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

I'm pretty sure I know who'll win(not me). Also, ST17, how dare you not post my title?
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

I'm pretty sure he didn't post the titles to any of them, just in case it might give a hint to who posted what. Honestly, I wasn't even paying attention to who entered this contest, so I have no idea who belongs to what in the first place, or even who to match them up with.
 
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I think we could add a no-titles rule to the next contest, whenever we have it just to keep things completely unbiased as far as juding goes. I mean, some of my stuff would be dead obvious that way since it usually deals in the religious or borderline macabre. Likewise, anyone who might be doing distinctly themed work would stick out that way too.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

@Shadow Arceus: How dare you forget to capitalize a single word of the title? I had no clue that it was a title, especially considering you left a little side note after your "title" before the story.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

^Take this up in PM, you two! If I see any flame wars, you'll both be warned.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Why aren't the results posted, we've long since judged them
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Yeah, it took us like a day to judge and that's only because I was lazy and didn't read them for a while.
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Apollo said:
^Take this up in PM, you two! If I see any flame wars, you'll both be warned.

No worries- I was only joking.
And sorry guys, I've been really busy the past few days. The results will be posted tonight.

Edit: Or I can post them now...
Sorry about the delay, guys. Thankfully, the judges were able to quickly come to a decision.

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The Results...

We've seen some pretty good submissions, but a specific two just so happened to stand out amongst the five authors. In second place, a big 'round of applause to Submission #5- Unique Username!

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Next up, we have another fantastic story that just happened to rise above and beyond the expectations of this contest. Congratulations to the first 2011 PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition, Submission #3- aggiegwyn!

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Thanks to all who participated! We are planning on giving more opportunities to write competitively, especially for those who missed the deadline!
 
RE: The Official PokéBeach Writer's Corner Competition 2011- The submissions have been posted!

Keep it to a minimum then! From my experience, sarcasm and other lighthearted stuff doesn't always translate well online (unless you actually note that it is such).

Also, just get the results up soon. People's patience is starting to wear very thin, or at least mine is...
 
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