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RE: When The Goings Get Tough
I mean the paragraphs Oliv. you take things to literal.
I mean the paragraphs Oliv. you take things to literal.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Good story. I wonder how this whole Andrew thing will be resolved.....suspensful!
And yeah, you gotta lighten up on the crying. It seems every time Andrew appears you instantly burst into tears. Then again, Davis is 10, so it's doubtful he is fully mature....anyway, please continue!
Good story. I wonder how this whole Andrew thing will be resolved.....suspensful!
And yeah, you gotta lighten up on the crying. It seems every time Andrew appears you instantly burst into tears. Then again, Davis is 10, so it's doubtful he is fully mature....anyway, please continue!
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Oh no he's 12 he is just sensative since he didn't meet Andrew for so long. Shadow,Andrew, and Davis were like soul brothers if you didn't pick that up already.
Oh heres the next chapter!
Chapter 7
Andrew was ready for battle at the very second and sent out his Metagross. Andrew put a smirk on his face like he was sure to win, but the last time I checked when Andrew came back from his journey he could never beat Shadow once.
“Hmm you seem confident.” Shadow said.
“Oh why yes you’re right I am.” Andrew smirked.
“Oh but I beaten you in battle since you came back from your Pokemon journey.” Shadow pointed out.
“Yea I know, but I bet I can beat you now.”
“Oh really?” Shadow asked sarcastically.
“I will!” Andrew argued.
“Hey shouldn’t we stop them?” Pro.Rowan asked.
“Don’t bother.” I replied.
“Why?” Rowan asked.
“Those grunts over there they would stop us even if we tried to stop those two from battling.” I pointed out.
“Good point.”
I had a good eye on those grunts and when I started to pay attention there arms were moving like a pendulum would. That hit me, they were going to send out there Pokemon!
“Mathew back me up.” I said.
“Why do you want him as back up?” Rowan asked.
“See what the Grunts are doing with their arms?” I asked.
“Yeah there swinging them like a pendulum would.” Pro.Rowan replied.
“Con-artist do that so they can make a surprise attack on their opponents.” I pointed out.
Soon enough I was right! The grunts sent their Pokemon out! They had 4 Pokemon straight in a row. They probably had one Pokemon since they had no other Pokemon attached to there belts.
“Hey Mathew ready?” I asked.
“Yeah!” Mathew replied.
“Go Riolu and Budew!”
The grunts seemed to have only dark types and they were Poocheyana so it would’ve been easy to destroy them since Riolu was a fighting type, but I wasn’t so sure when It was 4vs.2.
“You can’t win!” One of the grunts shouted.
“Oh yes we can!”
“How?”
“Like this!” Mathew and I began in unison, “Aura sphere and Bullet Seed!”
The Poocheyanas were knocked out one by one leaving their masters left to blow up for good. Andrew and Shadow was almost done with their battle anyway and Shadow was winning so I guess it was ok to destroy the grunts.
“Riolu one Ultra Aura Sphere!” I commanded.
“Budew Solar Beam!”
The grunts soon exploded leaving blood on the floor, but they were still alive at least. Shadow then won the battle sticking his tongue out at Andrew while he escaped in shame.
“Well what’ll I be!”
“What?” I asked.
“You 2 are really talented.” Rowan complimented.
“Thanks.” We said.
“Oh and can you stop by Sandgem Town in 2 days?” Rowan asked.
“Sure!” We replied happily.
Oh no he's 12 he is just sensative since he didn't meet Andrew for so long. Shadow,Andrew, and Davis were like soul brothers if you didn't pick that up already.
Oh heres the next chapter!
Chapter 7
Andrew was ready for battle at the very second and sent out his Metagross. Andrew put a smirk on his face like he was sure to win, but the last time I checked when Andrew came back from his journey he could never beat Shadow once.
“Hmm you seem confident.” Shadow said.
“Oh why yes you’re right I am.” Andrew smirked.
“Oh but I beaten you in battle since you came back from your Pokemon journey.” Shadow pointed out.
“Yea I know, but I bet I can beat you now.”
“Oh really?” Shadow asked sarcastically.
“I will!” Andrew argued.
“Hey shouldn’t we stop them?” Pro.Rowan asked.
“Don’t bother.” I replied.
“Why?” Rowan asked.
“Those grunts over there they would stop us even if we tried to stop those two from battling.” I pointed out.
“Good point.”
I had a good eye on those grunts and when I started to pay attention there arms were moving like a pendulum would. That hit me, they were going to send out there Pokemon!
“Mathew back me up.” I said.
“Why do you want him as back up?” Rowan asked.
“See what the Grunts are doing with their arms?” I asked.
“Yeah there swinging them like a pendulum would.” Pro.Rowan replied.
“Con-artist do that so they can make a surprise attack on their opponents.” I pointed out.
Soon enough I was right! The grunts sent their Pokemon out! They had 4 Pokemon straight in a row. They probably had one Pokemon since they had no other Pokemon attached to there belts.
“Hey Mathew ready?” I asked.
“Yeah!” Mathew replied.
“Go Riolu and Budew!”
The grunts seemed to have only dark types and they were Poocheyana so it would’ve been easy to destroy them since Riolu was a fighting type, but I wasn’t so sure when It was 4vs.2.
“You can’t win!” One of the grunts shouted.
“Oh yes we can!”
“How?”
“Like this!” Mathew and I began in unison, “Aura sphere and Bullet Seed!”
The Poocheyanas were knocked out one by one leaving their masters left to blow up for good. Andrew and Shadow was almost done with their battle anyway and Shadow was winning so I guess it was ok to destroy the grunts.
“Riolu one Ultra Aura Sphere!” I commanded.
“Budew Solar Beam!”
The grunts soon exploded leaving blood on the floor, but they were still alive at least. Shadow then won the battle sticking his tongue out at Andrew while he escaped in shame.
“Well what’ll I be!”
“What?” I asked.
“You 2 are really talented.” Rowan complimented.
“Thanks.” We said.
“Oh and can you stop by Sandgem Town in 2 days?” Rowan asked.
“Sure!” We replied happily.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Next chapter might take awhile guys =)
Next chapter might take awhile guys =)
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
thaks for the advise PokeLen. Next chapter is comming tomorrow if possible.
thaks for the advise PokeLen. Next chapter is comming tomorrow if possible.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Chapter 8
It was 5:00 in the morning and I was up bright and early. I ran down stairs and ate some chocolate chip pancakes, I put on my shoes and I was about to be off until…
“Hey Davis wait up!”
I turned around and there was Shadow in his pajamas and he held a box in his hands.
“What now!?” I asked.
“Oh Mom and Dad wanted me to give you this when you graduated.” He answered.
“OH.”
“Open the box!” Shadow shouted.
“Oh fine!” I replied.
I opened the box and there was a Poke Ball inside. I didn’t know what I was supposed to do, but a glare at Shadow told me that I had to open the Poke Ball. I threw the Poke Ball right in the air, which hit Shadow’s head and a Torchic was they’re sleeping on his head
“Hey is it that Torchic?” I asked.
“Yeah it’s the one you nursed back to health.” Shadow replied.
“But how?” I asked using my surprised face.
“Talk later now go!”
“FINE!”
I put Torchic in its Poke Ball this time awake and ran out the door. I came back 2 mins later and took my bag then left, but came back again drank milk then finally left.
~ On route 201 ~
It was 5:04 and I was on Route 201. I did visit Mathew’s place, but he wasn’t there. His Mom told me he was in town, but everywhere I looked there was no sign of Mathew. I felt a little alone with out Mathew, but I called my Pokemon out when ever I felt really lonesome.
“Wonder where Mathew is?”
“Ri Ri!” Riolu cried.
“Tor Tor.” Torchic cried as well.
“Help Me!”
“Huh?” I said.
I tuned around and there was Mathew being chased by an angry mob with a Ponyta my his side running for there lives, which was pretty stupid.
“Hey Mathew!” I shouted.
“Hi Davis and Help Me!”
“Why!?” I asked.
“Just do it!”
“Give us back our Pokemon you stupid Ponyta!” The mob chanted.
“Why are they chasing you!?”
“Because they think this Ponyta I caught is the Pokemon who has been Poke napping their childern’s Pokemon!” Mathew answered.
I soon stopped the angry mob by giving them free meat, which was extra stuff just incase we needed it. The mob seemed to like meat, but then after they ate it their skin came falling off, there mouth turned into a snout, grew 2 more eyes, and they grew 2 more arms!
“What the heck are these things!”
“I don’t know!” I replied.
“Well run!” Mathew shouted.
“Fine!”
“Give us your Pokemon.” The 4-eyed monster began, “We want to eat them!”
~ End of Chapter ~
Chapter 8
It was 5:00 in the morning and I was up bright and early. I ran down stairs and ate some chocolate chip pancakes, I put on my shoes and I was about to be off until…
“Hey Davis wait up!”
I turned around and there was Shadow in his pajamas and he held a box in his hands.
“What now!?” I asked.
“Oh Mom and Dad wanted me to give you this when you graduated.” He answered.
“OH.”
“Open the box!” Shadow shouted.
“Oh fine!” I replied.
I opened the box and there was a Poke Ball inside. I didn’t know what I was supposed to do, but a glare at Shadow told me that I had to open the Poke Ball. I threw the Poke Ball right in the air, which hit Shadow’s head and a Torchic was they’re sleeping on his head
“Hey is it that Torchic?” I asked.
“Yeah it’s the one you nursed back to health.” Shadow replied.
“But how?” I asked using my surprised face.
“Talk later now go!”
“FINE!”
I put Torchic in its Poke Ball this time awake and ran out the door. I came back 2 mins later and took my bag then left, but came back again drank milk then finally left.
~ On route 201 ~
It was 5:04 and I was on Route 201. I did visit Mathew’s place, but he wasn’t there. His Mom told me he was in town, but everywhere I looked there was no sign of Mathew. I felt a little alone with out Mathew, but I called my Pokemon out when ever I felt really lonesome.
“Wonder where Mathew is?”
“Ri Ri!” Riolu cried.
“Tor Tor.” Torchic cried as well.
“Help Me!”
“Huh?” I said.
I tuned around and there was Mathew being chased by an angry mob with a Ponyta my his side running for there lives, which was pretty stupid.
“Hey Mathew!” I shouted.
“Hi Davis and Help Me!”
“Why!?” I asked.
“Just do it!”
“Give us back our Pokemon you stupid Ponyta!” The mob chanted.
“Why are they chasing you!?”
“Because they think this Ponyta I caught is the Pokemon who has been Poke napping their childern’s Pokemon!” Mathew answered.
I soon stopped the angry mob by giving them free meat, which was extra stuff just incase we needed it. The mob seemed to like meat, but then after they ate it their skin came falling off, there mouth turned into a snout, grew 2 more eyes, and they grew 2 more arms!
“What the heck are these things!”
“I don’t know!” I replied.
“Well run!” Mathew shouted.
“Fine!”
“Give us your Pokemon.” The 4-eyed monster began, “We want to eat them!”
~ End of Chapter ~
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Chapters 8&9 aren't the best chapters becuase they are mostly fillers.
Oh that reminds me!
Chapter 9
“Aura Sphere!”
“Bullet Seed!”
The monsters were knocked out one by one, but they kept coming back to life. Mathew and I tried to stop them, but they kept coming back to life and chasing us.
“And you had to make them mad!” I shouted.
“Not my fault!”
“Yes it is Mathew!”
“Oh lets stop fighting and run!”
“Ok after this is over I’m blaming you.” I said.
“For what?”
“For getting us nearly killed!”
We ran and ran, well mostly in circles, trying to get away from the Pokemon Eating Monsters. Soon the monsters grew wings and flew up in the air! They almost caught us until we used one of the monsters as a shield.
“Well 2 down” Mathew said.
“But the rest of the army to go.” I said.
“Hey why not attack their eyes!”
“Why?” Mathew asked.
“Because they have 4 eyes right?”
“Yeah.” Mathew replied.
“So if we attack the eyes the monsters will be powerless!” I shouted.
“Well that’s a great plan!” Mathew complimented.
“Ok Riolu aim for the eyes and use Aura Sphere.” I commanded.
“Oh and Torchic watch Riolu OK?”
“Tor Tor!” Torchic replied proudly.
“Ok Budew use Bullet Seed on the monsters eye!” Mathew commanded.
Riolu and Budew knocked those monsters one by one, but as we knocked them down I felt like I’ve seen these monsters before, but my memory was a bit foggy. There were 2 of them left so we decided to let Torchic and Ponyta have a try.
“Hey Torchic Ember!” I commanded.
“Flame thrower!” Mathew commanded.
The other 2 were soon knocked out and when they did time stopped. The only ones moving were Mathew and I until we disappeared into thin air.
~ End of Chapter ~
Chapters 8&9 aren't the best chapters becuase they are mostly fillers.
Oh that reminds me!
Chapter 9
“Aura Sphere!”
“Bullet Seed!”
The monsters were knocked out one by one, but they kept coming back to life. Mathew and I tried to stop them, but they kept coming back to life and chasing us.
“And you had to make them mad!” I shouted.
“Not my fault!”
“Yes it is Mathew!”
“Oh lets stop fighting and run!”
“Ok after this is over I’m blaming you.” I said.
“For what?”
“For getting us nearly killed!”
We ran and ran, well mostly in circles, trying to get away from the Pokemon Eating Monsters. Soon the monsters grew wings and flew up in the air! They almost caught us until we used one of the monsters as a shield.
“Well 2 down” Mathew said.
“But the rest of the army to go.” I said.
“Hey why not attack their eyes!”
“Why?” Mathew asked.
“Because they have 4 eyes right?”
“Yeah.” Mathew replied.
“So if we attack the eyes the monsters will be powerless!” I shouted.
“Well that’s a great plan!” Mathew complimented.
“Ok Riolu aim for the eyes and use Aura Sphere.” I commanded.
“Oh and Torchic watch Riolu OK?”
“Tor Tor!” Torchic replied proudly.
“Ok Budew use Bullet Seed on the monsters eye!” Mathew commanded.
Riolu and Budew knocked those monsters one by one, but as we knocked them down I felt like I’ve seen these monsters before, but my memory was a bit foggy. There were 2 of them left so we decided to let Torchic and Ponyta have a try.
“Hey Torchic Ember!” I commanded.
“Flame thrower!” Mathew commanded.
The other 2 were soon knocked out and when they did time stopped. The only ones moving were Mathew and I until we disappeared into thin air.
~ End of Chapter ~
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
=) Here is the wrap up.
Chapter 10
I woke up a few mins later (or so I thought) and I found myself in front of a palace in the sky! Mathew was curled into a ball snoring right beside me.
“Wake Up!”
No, answer. I stood up on my legs and tried punching him in the gut, but still nothing. So I tried kicking him.
“OW!” Mathew shouted.
“Hi Mathew.”
“What did you do that for?” Mathew asked.
“You wouldn’t wake up.” I replied.
“Oh what ever!” Mathew shouted.
2 lights then appeared before us circling each other and soon appeared 2 dragon Pokemon. One had a diamond on its chest while the other had a pearl. It soon hit me! They were Dialga the Pokemon of Time and Palkia the Pokemon of Space.
“Hey Mathew recognize them?” I asked.
“Nope not at all.”
“Were you paying attention in history class!” I shouted.
“Nope.”
“How did you get Silver Honor Roll then?” I asked.
“I take the History book home to review.”
“Then you should know who these Pokemon are!” I shouted.
Mathew took a closer look, but I seemed he was half-asleep and half-awake, which was pretty stupid.
“They are Palkia and Dialga?” Mathew guessed.
“Yes you idiot!” I replied.
“Well you know who we are at least.” Dialga said in relief.
“Well Entei’s coming.” Palkia told Dialga.
Then A red light appeared circling around a pillar and soon appeared the firedog Entei and my cousin, Lance the Elite 4 champion.
“Where’s the other Johto guardians?” Dialga asked.
“Oh they’re coming.” Entei replied.
“Good.” Palkia said coldly.
“Hey Lance!” I greeted.
“Hey Davis!” Lance shouted.
Lance and me hugged a while, but soon interrupted by Mathew.
“ Who’s he?” Mathew asked.
“My cousin.” I replied.
4 more lights started to appear and they circled each other like a dance and soon appeared Moltres, Zapdos, Articuno, Mew, and 4 more trainers.
“So the rest are coming?” Dialga asked.
“Yes.” Moltres replied.
“Good we need the rest of the guardians.” Palkia said.
“Where’s Giratina?” Mew asked.
“He said he's having trouble finding his guardians.” Palkia replied.
Then 8 more lights soon appeared followed by 7 more guardians except one. Giratina appeared out of it’s light, but looked a bit down while the rest had faces like the other legendary Pokemon. I could have sworn I saw Shadow in the 7 crowds of trainers.
~ End of Chapter ~
=) Here is the wrap up.
Chapter 10
I woke up a few mins later (or so I thought) and I found myself in front of a palace in the sky! Mathew was curled into a ball snoring right beside me.
“Wake Up!”
No, answer. I stood up on my legs and tried punching him in the gut, but still nothing. So I tried kicking him.
“OW!” Mathew shouted.
“Hi Mathew.”
“What did you do that for?” Mathew asked.
“You wouldn’t wake up.” I replied.
“Oh what ever!” Mathew shouted.
2 lights then appeared before us circling each other and soon appeared 2 dragon Pokemon. One had a diamond on its chest while the other had a pearl. It soon hit me! They were Dialga the Pokemon of Time and Palkia the Pokemon of Space.
“Hey Mathew recognize them?” I asked.
“Nope not at all.”
“Were you paying attention in history class!” I shouted.
“Nope.”
“How did you get Silver Honor Roll then?” I asked.
“I take the History book home to review.”
“Then you should know who these Pokemon are!” I shouted.
Mathew took a closer look, but I seemed he was half-asleep and half-awake, which was pretty stupid.
“They are Palkia and Dialga?” Mathew guessed.
“Yes you idiot!” I replied.
“Well you know who we are at least.” Dialga said in relief.
“Well Entei’s coming.” Palkia told Dialga.
Then A red light appeared circling around a pillar and soon appeared the firedog Entei and my cousin, Lance the Elite 4 champion.
“Where’s the other Johto guardians?” Dialga asked.
“Oh they’re coming.” Entei replied.
“Good.” Palkia said coldly.
“Hey Lance!” I greeted.
“Hey Davis!” Lance shouted.
Lance and me hugged a while, but soon interrupted by Mathew.
“ Who’s he?” Mathew asked.
“My cousin.” I replied.
4 more lights started to appear and they circled each other like a dance and soon appeared Moltres, Zapdos, Articuno, Mew, and 4 more trainers.
“So the rest are coming?” Dialga asked.
“Yes.” Moltres replied.
“Good we need the rest of the guardians.” Palkia said.
“Where’s Giratina?” Mew asked.
“He said he's having trouble finding his guardians.” Palkia replied.
Then 8 more lights soon appeared followed by 7 more guardians except one. Giratina appeared out of it’s light, but looked a bit down while the rest had faces like the other legendary Pokemon. I could have sworn I saw Shadow in the 7 crowds of trainers.
~ End of Chapter ~
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
This is where the real story begins, I can see. Well, I liked this chapter. And you really gave me a vivid image when you said "Then 8 more lights soon appeared followed by 7 more guardians except one." and "4 more lights started to appear and they circled each other like a dance and soon appeared Moltres, Zapdos, Articuno, Mew, and 4 more trainers."
Those were really descriptivish...I was trying to say that the light stuff, I could imagine that well.
This is where the real story begins, I can see. Well, I liked this chapter. And you really gave me a vivid image when you said "Then 8 more lights soon appeared followed by 7 more guardians except one." and "4 more lights started to appear and they circled each other like a dance and soon appeared Moltres, Zapdos, Articuno, Mew, and 4 more trainers."
Those were really descriptivish...I was trying to say that the light stuff, I could imagine that well.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
=) At least some people like it. I plan to finish this for good!
Oh and your almost the only person who reads this so I'm pretty lonley.
=) At least some people like it. I plan to finish this for good!
Oh and your almost the only person who reads this so I'm pretty lonley.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Hey, I'm lonely too in my fanfic. I see all those mods and Dawnfanboy getting so much attention. I envy them
I only have like 3-4 readers the last time I checked. You have me and Oliv17...I think that is his name...?
Just be happy you have fans. Some people I see so lonely and getting no posts, I just have to post to raise their spirits.
Hey, I'm lonely too in my fanfic. I see all those mods and Dawnfanboy getting so much attention. I envy them
I only have like 3-4 readers the last time I checked. You have me and Oliv17...I think that is his name...?
Just be happy you have fans. Some people I see so lonely and getting no posts, I just have to post to raise their spirits.
RE: When The Goings Get Tough
Good point PokeLen you really cheer me up when I'm blue.
Good point PokeLen you really cheer me up when I'm blue.