Aoki

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  Zyflair

• Aug 17, 2012

Well, why don't we look at the section as a whole, rather than just the sentence itself?

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  Zyflair

• Aug 17, 2012

Well, that looked like the safest edit.

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  Zyflair

• Aug 17, 2012

Suddenly, he felt the unnerving atmosphere that settled down on him lift tremendously off of him.

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  Blah

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Not bad! I just got back from California, where I was visiting relatives. I'm finally back at home with some time to relax

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Wanna look over all of it??

It's 1,128 words (Told ya it'd be short)

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, That's where I'm stumped. I'll think of it later. The first chapter is super short though :/ only gonna be like 1000 words.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Could you think of a title??

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Sweet. Thanks I'm gonna try to post it today if not tomarrow.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, well, while waiting I fixed more, I shall PM you roughly 300 words

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, No, I mean i guess if you consider historical fiction something that COULD happen.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

I can give you the first 200 words... It does say hell a few times though, but thats it.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, A militian army in Africa fighting for freedom from the British. So far, I've gotten most of it up, until the convoy gets attacked, and Jarrod (The main character) has to run.

It will be good, and I will finish it

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, No, I'm working out some things on it, and getting the story line in order.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Thanks...

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, No problem... Maybe later today you can look over my preview

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  Vulpix Yolk

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, What exactly do you mean by transferring it to something else? It's fine if you want to drop your reservation.

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  MrGatr

• Aug 17, 2012

Dark Giratina, Gotcha will do it today...

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  Reshiwott

• Aug 17, 2012

y u change avvy?

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  DNA

• Aug 16, 2012

You know you're going to have mood swings but you don't know what causes them?
...I get this odd feeling you know more than you are letting on...
...Is something frustrating going on in your life?

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  DNA

• Aug 16, 2012

...wouldn't you know for sure if you were having mood swings or not?