Ivy

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    Snivylover555, now you will have a badge of honor.....before they fix it, that is.
    Now hurry up, I'm waiting for you!
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    Your post count is the lowest of anyone on this forum right now.
    It says "-1,341"...a negative number.
    How do you DO it?
    Afro-G
    *Afro-G pokes again* Oh really? That's great to hear. Cool, I bet that's going to be a lot of fun! =D Haha, you're going as a pony? That's pretty cool I guess. Let me know how it goes. ^.^
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    This will be interesting at the end of the RPG...you like your characters you made to be dead right? How about Fluttershy's? I like killing things :p. Btw I'm not killing Fluttershy...I saw the tear start coming down :p
    Ivy
    The Lion King report and a few other things:

    Well the Lion King was amazing! All the actors were awesome, especially Zazu. The songs were spectacular and it was halrious! If I could I would see it over and over and over again.

    My chat names:

    Well, just cuz I have a few more.

    Snivy ～ Used most of the time ～ From Pokemon
    Ivy ～ Used ??? ～ A nickname from BrOkenICE
    Zazu ～ Used ??? ～ From Lion King
    Daisy ～ Used ??? ～ From Mario, Princess Daisy; Oh yeah I won!

    So that's it! :3
    It helps stuff look more professional if nothing else. You don't have to go through and replace every period that needs to be a comma within the dialogue. Just remember it in the future, though.
    A small editing suggestion I should make, since I don't think anyone else caught it. In dialogue, you have to pay attention to your period versus comma use when ending a statement that a character says. This is a small, but very common mistake that new writers make a lot I've noticed (and it's pretty consistent in your fic too).

    Generic Example (sorry said:
    "I want that toy. ," said the child to his mother.
    Click to expand...

    Having a period right before the ending quotation marks is always wrong when you follow up with a description of how he/she said what he/she did. You always need to have a comma to show that the spoken sentence itself ends but there's still a transition in order to make it what comes afterwards part of the complete sentence. Any other punctuation mark can stand on its own in these cases, it's just periods that need to be replaced unless the full sentence ends within the quotation.

    Hope that's clear... Sometimes people just don't get that that is part of good grammar use, no matter how much I try to explain it...
    Usually, regulating chapter length hasn't been as huge of deal lately because people have been keeping theirs up to about the minimum requirement. So long as it at least looks like there's effort being put into them, I've been giving people the benefit of the doubt and letting things slide. All I ask is just to at least try not to come up so short again in later chapters, otherwise I have to close your story. Even so, don't go thinking you're in trouble; it's difficult to with me unless your deliberately breaking the WC rules.
    Decmaster
    At first, I was like, "Eh, that's cool."
    Then, I was like, "OMG IT MOVES!!<3"
    Suddenly, I decided, "Avatar time!"
    But suddenly, a wild "This image is too big" message appeared!
    Manly tears were then shed.
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    Snivylover555, Hmmm I think it was that I didn't want to look again because well...there is some weird stuff on google images xD
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    Snivylover555, :3 that is amazing. For my Pony avys and sigs starting in November I will be having bronys find them if they want :p. Lilmissbcksunshine found my Fluttershy avy that I'm using first week in November, the sig you may ask...oh I found something I just couldn't pass up because it was just so...um...confusing and entertaining.
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