Writing Mewtwo's Revenge (Update: Chapter 9)

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I would have done this yesterday, but I was extremely busy. Wordcount for this chapter is 2,811!

Chapter III

Darkness filled the room; silence all around him. Though everything was still and solid, it pulsed with energy.

Why do you resist? When all others have failed you, your power draining, why not submit now and end this pointless game?

Thoughts. All of it. But this was no ordinary train of thought; it was a conversation that had lasted for years.

Never.

This response was angering.

Then you have sealed your own fate. I will exact my revenge upon you soon enough. I am patient.

Soon…

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When Emma had said ‘Try to keep up’, Red thought that she was kidding. As it turned out, Emma was a fast walker and he had to be at a slow jog to actually keep up most of the time. Charmander had made a point to be carried by Red, as he was exhausted from running for so long and didn’t have long to rest.

The dusty trails were a pale gray, but the sun, peeking its way out from the hulking shape of Mount Moon, lit it rather well and made it look a pleasing orange. But the shadow of the Mountain was like a dark cloud hovering above them, darkening Red’s thoughts and darkening Charmander’s mood. Emma, though, did not seem fazed by the enormous mountain. This mountain would not be as disturbing to Red if it did not have such a dark past. The mountain had a string of unfortunate tales and crazed Pokemon attacks ever since the mountain was discovered in the early years.

Emma turned a corner, her short pink hair twirling as if a skirt on her head. Red followed her and stopped short; they had reached the entrance of Mount Moon. Red stepped forward to the entrance, a hollow whistle coming from the opening. But there was a problem.

“How are we going to fit through that tiny hole?” Red asked the obvious question, placing Charmander at his feet.

“Isn’t it obvious? Rock Smash destroys more than Rock Pokemon, you know.” Emma stated rather condescendingly, gesturing towards Charmander.

“Well, I thought that…” Red said, rubbing the back of his head idly.

“… That you had to get some badge that granted you the ability to use it outside of battle? Please.” Emma finished Red’s thought for him with a stern look.

Red said nothing, but looked between the small opening and Charmander.

“Fine.” Red said, silently admitting that what he said sounded childish.

Charmander walked to the small opening and planted his feet into the ground, readying himself for the recoil of the powerful blows he was about to unleash.

“Charmander, make an entrance!” Red commanded his Pokemon with a point of his first digit.

Charmander squinted at the small opening in the wall and readied his fist. He let out a howl and struck out at the rock with all of his might. Shards of stone shot from the spiteful wall as Charmander continued his relentless assault on the wall until, finally, where once stood a wall that impeded their progress now stood a gaping hole.

Charmander stepped back and crossed his arms with a triumphant smirk. He looked to a grinning Red with a “what-would-you-do-without-me” look, and then turned away from Red and back to the pitch black entrance of Mount Moon.

“Sweet! I am beginning to like that move.” Red said with an approving nod.

“Yeah, well, we need to move forward.” Emma stated, staring at the cave entrance with a disapproving glare.

Emma beckoned Charmander into the cave, the flame at the tip of his tail lighting the way. Saying nothing to Red, she entered the dark cave.

“Is there something wrong?” Red asked, catching up with Emma.

“I’d prefer we get through here as fast as possible. And just as quiet, too.” Emma said, peering to her left and to her right for any signs of life.

“Why?” Red asked.

Emma grabbed his arm and head and pointed it towards the ceiling of the cave. With the flickering of the flame at the end of Charmander’s tail, Red saw small amounts of detail. Among the gray stalactites, the ceiling seemed to move with every sound and every light flicker of Charmander’s tail. As if it was… Alive. Red realized what they were, they were purple-blue bats known as Zubats.

“Are those…?” Red asked, panic setting in.

“Zubat; they are the bane of trainers all around the world. So be quiet!” Emma whispered, guiding Red slowly through the cave.

Red looked to his right and saw a large cavity in the ground, leading into darkness. But when Red stepped nearer to Emma to gain a bit of ground between him and the ledge, he felt unstable. Suddenly, the ground beneath him gave way. He called out as he fell through the floor, feeling the wind in his face and seeing nothing. But then, he felt support in his back and noticed that his speed was slowing. His denim pants were wearing out and his shirt pulled up due to friction, leaving his back to scrape against the wall.

Finally, Red fell from the slowed decline a short ways to his knees, his back seething with pain. Red touched his back with his left hand and hissed with pain. He didn’t feel any grievous wounds, but it was painful.

I… Just have to press on… Maybe find a way up… Red thought, trying his best to stand up, though not succeeding.

Emma was trying to do just the opposite. The collapse of the floor beneath Red was shocking to her and Charmander, and Emma wanted to help. But the collapse of the floor startled the Zubat as well, leading the colony to spin around the room in disarray, lashing out at anything within sight. This was, unfortunately, Emma and Charmander. Bites covered Emma’s arms and shoulders; Charmander’s scales had protected him well, but the sharp teeth of the Zubat bit through the orange scales. Charmander tried scratching at them and Emma tried batting them away, but there were simply too many of them. Emma had to make a “leap of faith”.

She grabbed Charmander and held the Pokemon in her arms as she then leaped into the same hole that Red fell into. She felt support on her back through her backpack, and she knew that there was hope of her survival.

Though her pack was torn and her jeans now worn on the ankles, she made it to the bottom without injury. She looked up to find Red, struggling to stand on his own smiling at her.

“Welcome to the party.” Red said as his smile faded for a direr look as he turned to his right.

They were both surrounded by creatures, barely defined by the light from Charmander’s tail. They looked insect-like in nature, almost hermit crabs with no shell. Mushrooms grew from their backs and powdered spores littered the area around them, making their normal orange shells look rather pale green on the top. Their high-pitched squeaks and whistles echoed throughout the chamber.

Red had been trying to talk them down – Though he knew that they were probably not going to listen – and until Emma followed him, they were calm. Now they were in a crazed confusion. Some backed away, others stepped forward with defiant growls, and others simply looked at their allies on what to do.

“What are these things?” Red asked, backing up closer to Emma and Charmander.

“They’re Paras; usually cave-dwelling bugs that have mushrooms growing on them. They’re a bunch of Fun-gis, huh?” Emma joked, standing from her seated position and placing down Charmander.

“How can you make a pun in a time like this?!” Red asked through a chuckle, but yelped when one of the Paras swiped at his leg with its claws.

Suddenly, it dawned upon Red: Bug types are weak to fire, and they have a fire type with them!

“Charmander, use Ember!” Red commanded, motioning towards the Paras closing in upon them.

Charmander leaped from Emma’s arms and breathed deep for a moment, then spewed a mix between smoke and flame from his mouth towards the Paras. Sensing the danger, the Paras tried to avoid the Embers, but it was too late. One of them was engulfed with the Embers and its mushrooms caught aflame. It ran screaming out of the chamber, smoke billowing from its precious mushrooms.

Emma noticeably winced at the sight.

Seeing that their ally was routed, they backed away, trying not to suffer the same fate as their ally. Red watched as the Paras backed out of the room until all but a handful remained, trying to budge their way out of the chamber. Red couldn’t help but to grin at the sight. It was his Pokemon that did that; that saved them from the possibly lethal Paras attack.

“Awesome!” Red held out his hand to Charmander for a high-five, but the Pokemon turned away.

Red groaned; he hated that Charmander was so self-centered. Now they needed a way out of the chamber, and they had no idea where one was. The only exit Red and Emma knew of was the entrance to the chamber, some fifty feet above the ground and far out of their reach.

“Are you alright?” Red asked as he turned toward Emma.

“I’m fine; my backpack took the brunt of the scraping for me. What about you?” Emma asked, peering at his worn out clothing.

“Don’t worry about me. We need to get out of here.” Red quickly diffused the question to the best of his abilities; he then made a point to pull down his shirt a bit further, not knowing if his back had any skin at all.

An electrified sound reverberated through the chamber, then the cries and whistles of the Paras. Light flashed through a now visible doorway at the far edge of the chamber, showing flashes of fleeing Paras and figures brandishing a weapon of some sort. The trio jogged across the room and found a small stone wall, then they ducked behind it to watch what was about to unfold.

The Paras galloped into the room, running from their unknown attackers. But, even though these attackers were unknown to the Paras, they were very much known to Red and Emma: Team Rocket. The weapons that they brandished held flashlights on them, and whatever Paras found themselves in the light were soon fired upon. But no bullets left the barrels of the weapons; instead, electrified metal netting shot from the barrels of the weapons, wrapped themselves around the Paras, and then electrocuted them. They were incapacitated within seconds.

Red held his chin to the right and bit down upon his upper lip, trying his best not to run out and take on the Rockets. Emma bit her tongue tightly in an attempt not to call out insults at the Rockets and expose their location. But there was nothing that could have been done. The Rocket’s captured the rest of the Paras and began collecting their catches. They began to tread across the room, gathering the Paras, until there was a sharp crunch and a yelp of a Paras.

“You clumsy idiot, you’ve gone and crushed its claw! It’s no good to us now!” One of them pointed a flashlight at the other man’s foot, revealing that the man’s foot was crushing the right claw of a captured Paras.

“Lay off, will ‘ya? There are plenty more to capture!” The other said, pulling his foot off the now crushed shell of the Paras.

And with that, they marched out of the room, leaving the whimpering Paras behind for dead. Emma and Red rose up and marched over to the Paras, Charmander close behind. It didn’t look good; the right claw was cracked and crushed, leaving the fleshy interior exposed. Red and Emma pitied the poor Pokemon, while Charmander simply stared in disbelief.

“Do we have anything to heal it?” Red asked, trying to undo the now non-electrified netting.

“Just a few bandages and medical concoctions that might not even work.” Emma replied, searching her bag for anything that could help.

Charmander stepped forward and crossed his arms. The flickering light from the flame at the tip of Charmander’s tail was a warm and welcome one as Red needed light to untie the Paras from the net. Charmander nudged Red out of the way with an irritated glare, and then began to gnaw on the metal netting.

Finally, Charmander bit through the metal netting, revealing the wounded Paras. The Paras did not try to flee, for it was too weak to do anything but breathe. Red looked at the wound; it wouldn’t heal under any normal standards, and if the Paras would make its way back to its colony, it would probably be beaten or worse due to its injuries.

Emma nudged Red in the back to get through, and took some supplies to Paras. Red watched as Emma sprayed the wound with the Potion that she had gotten from the Pokemon Market, and bound the wound with bandages from the same place. The Paras whistled hollowly, as if groaning. Emma was careful not to touch the fungus growing on the Paras’ back, as she didn’t know if it was poisonous or simply numbing.

“Where’d you learn how to do that?” Red asked, watching carefully as Emma finished with the bandages.

“I taught myself.” Emma stated, placing the extra supplies in her bag.

Red began to look in Emma’s bag.

“What are you looking for?” Emma asked as she moved her bag away from Red.

“Sorry,” Red’s face grew red, “I was just looking for some Poke Balls.”

Emma was silent for a moment as she scanned Red’s face for any signs of humor.

“So… After we save this poor Paras from death, you want to enslave it?” Emma asked, raising her voice.

“Listen, you and I both know that he-“ Red began, trying to diffuse her anger.

“She.“ Emma interjected.

“That she will have no life in the colony she will return to! I mean, she is going to be bullied, or worse. She has no chance in the wild; infection will overcome her within days. She’ll likely starve, as she won’t be able to chase any prey at all!” Red explained, gesturing with his hands.

Emma sighed at this remark. Emma knew he spoke the truth; that the Paras would soon perish if she would be released. But this did not detract from the fact that whoever was captured within a Poke Ball, they were essentially enslaved. But all Pokemon can be released from Poke Balls; it just counts on the human wielding it to make that decision.

“Alright, fine. Here; I took the liberty of pulling these from the shelves earlier.” Emma said as she dispersed six spheres from her pocket.

They were small, glossy and spherical. One side had cherry red coloring, the other side was pure white. Both sides were conjoined by a black seam across the middle and a button at a point along the line. Red grabbed them with a silent “Thank-You” and walked to the Paras.

“This is the only way.” Red whispered.

It did not respond.

Red pressed the button with his thumb and tossed the sphere at the Paras. Once it hit the Paras, the Poke Ball opened, releasing jolts of light across the room and surrounding the Paras. Then, once surrounded in light, the Paras disappeared and the light faded, only leaving the crimson-colored ball closed with light seeping through the seam. Then, after a moment, sparks flew from the edges and the light faded. The Paras was caught.

Red jogged over and plucked the sphere from the ground and deposited it in his pocket. He walked back to Emma and smiled.

“Thank you for letting me catch her. Now we need to find a way out.” Red said, tracing the edges of the Poke Ball in his pocket.

“Isn’t it obvious?” Emma replied with a girlish smile.

“To you, it is.” Red grinned.

“We simply follow the Rocket’s tracks, and then we get out of the cave through where they entered.” Emma replied, wasting no time in following the tracks.

Red couldn’t help but to follow after her, Charmander included. Together, they weaved through the hallways (Quietly, to avoid the Zubats), following the footprints of the Rockets. It was an uncountable time later when they found the exit, light pouring in.

“Boy am I glad to see the light.” Red said as he shielded his eyes until they adjusted.

“And civilization!” Emma sounded exasperated.

Charmander growled in joy when he, too, saw the beautiful and pristine city of Cerulean. Finally, the trio can have some peace!
 
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Kecleon-X said:
Why do you resist? When all others has failed you, your power draining, why not submit now and end this pointless game?

Gotta mistake there, it should be "have" I think. And once again I am amazed at the story you have created. Your description is awesome.
Great job once again.
 
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pikhu2000 said:
Gotta mistake there, it should be "have" I think. And once again I am amazed at the story you have created. Your description is awesome.
Great job once again.

Fix'd.

I really cannot thank you guys (And gals) enough for all of this wonderful feedback. It is truly wonderful!
 
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Mostly great, as far as I can see. No mistakes. Your writing style is unique. :)

I like how the Charmander has a attitude.
 
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Lucky Fire said:
Mostly great, as far as I can see. No mistakes. Your writing style is unique. :)

I like how the Charmander has an attitude.

Thank you very much for your fantastic feedback!
 
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So do you know when we can expect chapter 4?
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

I usually release chapters on a monthly basis. I try to shoot for the fifteenth or otherwise middle of the month.

Should it be bimonthly?
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

If you have a schedule, then you should probably stick to it. I would rather wait, than have a chapter that was just Ok.
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

Sorry for not getting my Chapter up. I was AFK for the longest time, and now I have become ill. I will recover as fast as I can. :)
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

I could've never guessed why I haven't read this weeks earlier. I mean, everyone has their own pathetic excuses of how they’re busy here and there and those blah blah blah nonsense, but let’s save the ranting part for another time. Welp, time to attend to a few overdue things.

The story’s content is solid as usual. What can I say, the structure of the plot and the sequence of the events are coming along nicely and it overall gives off the impression that you have laid out your ideas in a neat fashion. Me, being the writer I have been for a short while still encounter issues with plot structure and alignment. So for now, I think it is safe for me to stay that you are progressing steadily and it should not be long before you catch up to the prominent writers around here, although I am hardly what you can call a 'proficient writer'. xD

Anywho, with plot alignment off the list, it’s time to take a look at a few other things: dialogue, description and characterization.

The style you use for description building, no doubt has potential. I can already sense you are improving with each installment, and for that, we can be grateful. The transitioning of words and the use of conjunctions and commas are excellent, overall creating a nice flow of what's occurring in the story. A small note I have to make though; I've observed that you somehow have a tendency to mainly focus on the visuals and auditory portions rather than incorporating the majority of the senses to your story. Personally, I would often count a novel I've read as something 'exceptional' when the author him/herself tries to build the world's description through the five-senses, followed by excellent characterization. From my perspective at least, it is imperative to build on a little at the world's description before proceeding to the other things. Don't get me wrong; the style of your description is already solid enough and you are far more advanced than the rest of the newer writers here. The only, and probably the one and only, method everyone will suggest is this: write and read as much and as often as you can. Seems redundant, I know, and I got it all the time from the people that have criticized my works at various sites, but it's the only thing I can rattle off from the top of my head as of the moment. In due time though, something in your brain should 'click' and you will instantly know what we are talking about.

As for the dialogue and the characterization of your story, personally I think it’s best if you flesh out Emma and Red a little more. I really don’t know how I should get around to explain this, but try experimenting with the characters a little more and you might just see what I mean.

Now with that away, there really isn't much to advice on now that I have gotten to the nitty-gritty of this post. But, do pay close attention to the repetitiveness that occurs when you use Red's name each time for the next installment. Glancing from afar, I could already notice how it constantly repeats itself on almost every single line and paragraph. Try substituting it with alternative names and pronouns instead of the actual name. You'll find it will gradually improve the quality of your chapters further and polish up your skills.

However, I am liking this story thus far and don't put down the pen! Improvement comes only through constant practice and analysis.

And on a side note, Happy Halloween! =3

- D-G
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

Thanks so much for the critiques!

I believe you are right on the accounts of perhaps using the five senses to describe more, so I will work some more on that.

I agree completely on the fact that I need to flesh out the characters some more, but all in due time, as you can imagine. The sad part is that I was preparing to give Red some backstory in the next chapter I was writing. And then Bronchitis hit. :sadface: But I think I am at the tail-end of it, so maybe I could post soon.

I am also sad that I couldn't get the creepiest chapter out for Halloween, but alas! Timing bites.
 
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I think I am at the end of what cold this is. I've been told that it is Bronchitis, but I don't know. Anyway, I should be able to write the next chapter shortly.
 
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Sorry for the wait! Wordcount for the chapter is: 4,176!

Chapter IV

Cerulean City’s buildings gleamed in the light of the sun as the trio began their approach. Red’s back stung and ached, making the trip all the more painful for him. Walking slower than usual, Emma eyed him curiously. Red let this go on for some time, until he was feeling like her eyes were burning holes in his side.

“What?” Red asked, irritated slightly about the silent staring.

“Show me your back.” Emma gave him a look that forced him to comply: it was of worry.

Red lifted his shirt in his back, revealing the scratches and scrapes the wall gave him earlier. Emma drew in a sharp breath, and then let out a long sigh, as if she was caught off guard by what she saw.

“How bad is it?” Red asked rather painfully, as the cold air was making his wound burn.

“Not good. I have to use something that I’d rather keep for Paras, but… We’re out of options. Sit.” Emma said from behind him.

“Keep it for Paras. I’m fi-!“ Red began to say, but a familiar flame-tipped tail slapped the back of his knees, causing him to buckle onto them.

Charmander looked at Red with a “Do-What-She-Says” glare, then turned back and planted himself beneath a shady tree where small cherry-like berries were growing. Charmander was very careful not to put his tail near the tree, so it lay lazily by his left leg, scorching the ground.

“This was originally made for a Pokémon’s health; not a human’s,” Emma began slowly. Red heard the shaking of a bottle from behind him, “So this may hurt.”

Red felt her kneel down behind him and begin to spray whatever potion or concoction she had with her. It was a cold, wet feeling at first. Whatever liquid was inside the bottle began to drip slowly down his back and into his wounds. It was then when he began to feel the pain. The liquid began to froth and foam, filling up his cuts and gashes painfully. Red’s brow began to sweat, and he hissed with pain out of his clenched jaw. The searing pain he was feeling was nigh unbearable. He considered calling out until he felt Emma’s hand upon his side, holding something in place.

“Hold this to your chest.” Emma said, handing Red a strip of a bandage.

“Gee, thanks. What I’ve always wanted!” Red replied sarcastically as he held the bandage to his chest, voice hoarse from clenching so hard.

Red heard a quiet snicker, then a slap against the back of his head.

“Ow!” Red yelped with a laugh, taking another strip that Emma was wrapping him with.

Emma continued for a while silently, wrapping him slowly.

“So,” She broke the silence, “What are you doing out here?”

“What do you mean?” Red asked rather defensively.

“I mean, come on. A thirteen-“ Emma began.

“Fifteen.” Red corrected proudly.

“A Fifteen year old doing out here alone and not a single mode of transportation other than his feet?” Emma interrogated, tying a knot in the bandages so they wouldn’t fall.

“I don’t like talking about it.” Red said blatantly, tone darkening.

“What? Is it that you don’t trust me?” Interrogated Emma, and he could tell from her voice that she was very unhappy.

“It isn’t that… I just don’t like talking about it. Can we leave it at that for now? For my sake?” Red got up from his seated position.

Emma decided that she could respect that, and she got up too. The two of them began to walk towards Cerulean. Red remembered something, though. He walked over to Charmander who was fast asleep under a tree and tapped the top of his Pokemon’s head with his first digit. Charmander looked up at him, rather groggily.

“Time to go.” Red said as he helped Charmander stand.

Red turned away from Charmander and led him on before he could see the bits of orange scales left on the ground.

For a while, none of them spoke. The only sounds were the occasional crackle of Charmander’s flame and the sound of their feet against the dirt and stone, until a voice came from their left.

“Boy, do I have a deal just for you! I have a very rare, very powerful Pokemon – Magikarp – for the extremely low price of just five-hundred dollars!” The man said, stepping forward and gesturing toward a Pokeball in his hand.

Emma leaned toward Red’s ear and whispered, “Magikarp is the weakest Pokemon on the face of the planet. It evolves into Gyarados, but it takes quite a lot. He’s trying to con you.”

Red took a moment to consider the Gyarados, but then he thought of Magikarp and scoffed. It was simply not worth the training. There was absolutely no way there would be a Magikarp on his team.

“Good luck with that, buddy.” Red said condescendingly to the salesman, then turned away and continued down the path.

“Your loss!” The man called out rather desperately, matching Red’s tone.

It was some time before they reached the city gate of Cerulean: The home of the Central Kanto Police Department, also known as CKPD. The trek was long, but thankfully they had something to talk about other than the awkward subjects: the pitiful con-artist.

Once in the city, Red’s eyes immediately began scanning the area for a CKPD Officer, looking from person to person. Through the crowds of people going about their business, he saw a glimmer of a badge. Wasting no time, Red rushed forward into the crowd, calling out to the Officer. The Officer turned to the trainer, looking down upon him with an irritated look.

“I need to talk to your Chief! It is urgent!” Red cried out to the Officer over the cacophony of the crowd.

“Son, if I brought every two-bit kid who thought they could have a chat with the Chief, I wouldn’t have a job.” He explained, taking a long breath.

“It’s Pewter; it’s gone! Destroyed! Is that ‘urgent’ enough for you!?” Red planted his foot down, angry.

The Officer looked at his face for a moment, scanning for any signs of a joke, and then motioned for the trainer to follow him. Red walked with him, and motioned Emma and Charmander to follow suit.

The Officer led the trio through the winding corners of the City, until he stopped in front of a small, square building. The characters “CKPD” was written above and on the door, signaling the fact that this building is the Central Kanto Police Department; the very place Red came for.

They were led inside, where they were greeted by several rows of desks with officers seated at each doing various things.

“Oi! Chief! This kid needs to talk to you! Says its urgent!” The Officer called out, and in response, a shadowy figure got up from his desk at the back of the room.

A clean-shaven man with a broad smile greeted them. He wore a blue suit shirt and black suit pants, with Blackjack at his side and golden badge upon his chest. His ink-black hair was cut short, coming to about an inch above his eyebrows.

“Hey, guys! My name is Chief Striker; you can call me Harry. C’mere, sit.” Chief Striker was very warm and welcoming, so they were compelled to sit at an empty desk. Charmander, still groggy, wouldn’t stop staring at him.

Striker sat down at the other side of the table, pulling a flask out of his pocket and placing it on the table alongside a paper cup.

“So, a little Pidgey told me you wanted to talk to me.” Harry said with a smile.

“It’s Pewter; some guys called Team Rocket attacked it! It’s all destroyed!” Red explained to the amiable Chief.

Harry squinted hard at the trainer, and then nodded his head in a disappointed manner.

“Destroyed, eh?” The Chief replied, then turned to the Officer and said, “Bring up the feeds from Pewter, would you?”

After a few swift strokes of the keyboard, the man turned the screen towards them. Red was astonished of what he saw: Six screens of camera footage, and not even one of them showing destruction. It just showed people going about their business in the perfectly clean and pristine city; no flames, no rubble, nothing abnormal.

“Looks pretty unbroken to me.” Striker said rather condescendingly.

Red paused for a moment, thinking about what just happened. He then remembered the spy shows he always used to watch when he was younger.

“It could be on a looped feed!” Red exclaimed, determined.

Striker shrugged, placed his hands on the table and intertwined the fingers.

“The guard was dead. You can check by calling him.” Emma spoke up, calm and serene.

Red looked over to Emma, surprised. He was sure that the guard died merely moments before he arrived… But then again, he did meet Emma after his arrival to Pewter, and she could have seen the body after him. Red made a mental note to ask about it later.

“The guy in the booth? Steve?” Striker seemed rather surprised by this notion of the guard’s death, “Hand me that phone.”

The man sitting in the desk behind Striker lifted his phone and handed it to Striker. Taking the phone, the Chief began to press a series of numbers, then the speaker phone. It rang for a second or two, then, to both Emma and Red’s surprise (Even Charmander looked rather puzzled), it was answered.

“Hello?” The voice on the other end said, sounding very much alive.

Striker looked at Red with a grin, then back at the phone.

“Heya, Steve! I’ve got two kids over here with the idea that you are dead and the city of Pewter is destroyed. Can you give me some confirmation that you actually have a pulse?” Striker said with a chuckle.

Laughter responded to his question, “Yeah, I’m alive. Pewter’s fine, too.”

“All I needed to know; thank you.” And with that, Striker hung up the phone.

Red couldn’t believe it. All he had seen, all he had known… Was fiction? It couldn’t have been; he saw the buildings burn; he smelled the smoke; he felt the broken road crunch beneath his feet like gravel. And these people were just going to tell him that what he experienced was simply not true!?

“Look, son, I am not saying you do not know what you saw… But I know what I’m seeing,” Striker unscrewed the top of the flask he sat on the table and began to pour the liquid into the paper cup, “Drink this. It’ll clear your head; make you think clearly.”

The Chief picked up the cup and handed it to Red. He peered into the cup, revealing a foul smelling transparent liquid. Swirling the cocktail, he sniffed it again, making sure that the smell was no fluke. He sat it down and pushed it back toward the Chief.

“I’m already thinking clearly.” Red stated.

“Of course you are. Drink this and we’ll talk.” Replied the Chief, who was resuming his usual smile.

He pushed the drink along the table to him once more. Red promptly pushed the drink back to the Chief, but pushed it too hard, for it spilled on the table, splashing the Chief and spilling on his lap. The Chief let out a yelp as he stood up; he began to swipe the fluid off him as if the liquid was actually a swarm of insects.

Red watched in curious awe at the spectacle: Striker was panicking that the liquid touched him. Obviously, Red made the right decision in not taking a sip.

During the frantic actions of Striker, something happened that shocked all three of them: His hand flew off his wrist and slapped against the wall, sticking. Then, instead of falling, it began to change from a solid hand, to pinkish goo. Clearly, things were not as they seemed with Striker.

“Uh… Can you get that?” The amiable Chief said through drooping lips and tongue.

Striker's face began to slide downward, and when he blinked, his eyes turned into beady, black eyes like that of a doll.

“Uh… I think we’re gonna leave now…” Emma said as she began to stand up from her seat.

“Vait!” Cried the Chief in an effort to say “Wait”, noticing his drooping face, he had begun to stretch the sagging skin in an effort to make it stay in one place.

Red stood up and made for the door, only to find it blocked by another Officer. Emma had just stood up as well, only to have the Chief’s one good hand shoving the flask of liquid toward her. One whiff of the liquid made the identity obvious to her: Drainage Cleaner. She slapped the bottom of his hand, sending the flask soaring above their heads and onto another Officer. This time, the entire contents of the flask dumped onto him.

The Officer began to smoke, and to the trio’s surprise, he began to literally melt away! He was a pinkish puddle on the ground with two black, marble-like eyes. Instead of seeping into the floor like any normal liquid, the puddle actually stood up and, through the dribbling mess, a mouth was formed. It let out a gurgling noise that sounded like it was trying to complain about something.

“Red; they’re a Pokemon! They are all Ditto!” Information given, Emma then punched the astonished, and now melting, form of “Chief Striker”.

Finding this new information reason for attacking the officer blocking him in, he called out to Charmander, “Rock Smash!”

In an instant, Charmander leaped into the air and slammed the Ditto-Officer into the wall with his fist, causing the clone to splash against the wall in its original form. Looking back, Red gestured to Emma to follow him through the door. Through his peripheral vision, he noticed the Officers changing shape not into Ditto, but into Charmander!

Emma rushed past him through the now opened door, closely followed by Charmander and Red. The trio ran out into the city street, narrowly avoiding cars and trucks alike. Reaching the other side of the road, Red turned to Charmander and motioned toward his Pokeball. Charmander nodded for he knew why he was being put in, and with a flash of plasma, Charmander was transferred into his Pokeball.

“Jaywalking is a crime, you know!” Came the now very much disturbing voice of Chief Striker.

Red and Emma turned in horror to watch the Chief cross the road without stopping. About half way through, a large truck couldn’t stop in time, slamming the Ditto straight on and stopping a few feet away. Red cringed at first, but then the impossible happened: Striker’s squished form stood up again.

“That hurt.” Striker declared, grin still present on his face, and then continued to walk after them.

Letting out a sound of disgust, Red began to run in the opposite direction, followed closely by Emma. The two of them ran through the city, pausing every now and again to see how far away “Striker” was.

“I think I know of a way to defeat Striker!” Red exclaimed, taking another corner around a building.

“How? Ditto transform into their opponents; whatever you bring to fight them, they are just going to use it against you!” Emma explained, still following Red.

“Exactly; but you are not going to like how we do it.” Red said as he skid to a stop; he had just seen their way out.

There was a familiar con-artist slinking along the sidewalk outside the alley they were in, more specifically, the Magikarp Salesman.

“You’re right; I don’t like it, but it will work.” Emma said as she grabbed the man by his shoulder and jerked him into the alley.

“Not the face!” The man cried, blocking his face with his arms.

“I really never thought I would say this, but,” Red began, drawing a long breath, “I need a Magikarp.”

Almost instantly, the man lowered his arms and regained his businessman composure. He put on a smile and was about to say something along the lines of “I told you so”, but Emma quickly interrupted the con-artist.

“We need it free of charge, or we’ll tell everyone that you are a fraud, trying to scam people into buying a fake ‘powerful’ Pokemon for way too much!” Emma had fire in her eyes; she balled her fists and gritted her teeth, leaving her in a very intimidating posture.

The man resumed his cowering and began to plead with Emma, “Please! Don’t do that! Take one, please! Just don’t tell anyone!”

He tossed a Pokeball at Emma, and then used the opportunity to flee. Emma tossed the Pokeball to Red with a “What-would-you-do-without-me” look and a wink. Red wanted to say something about the intimidation, but he decided against it. She was doing it for him, and he didn't want to argue with that. Nor the fact that the man was a criminal, and needless to say he deserved it.

“Gentlemen?” The startling voice of Striker was heard further down the alley.

Through the darkness, Red could make out the shape of Striker approaching them with his arms flailing about as if they didn’t have any bones in them. The face of Striker looked like a plastic doll, frozen in a disturbing grin. The trainer acted fast as he tossed the Pokeball of his new (and somewhat begrudgingly) found team member onto the field: Magikarp.

Magikarp was simply an orange scaled fish flopping about, as a failed attempt of trying to find water. The fish had two yellow whiskers drooping lazily off the sides of the face of Magikarp as if a mustache, sometimes lapping against his pectoral fins, which mimicked the same manner of flopping about as the rest of his body. His triple-tipped dorsal fin and his pelvic fins were both yellow and stiff, barely wilting outside of the water. The Magikarp's tail fin had an orange lining about the edges, but the rest was white.

Seeing the newfound opponent, the Ditto immediately changed shape from Chief Striker to the flopping shape of a Magikarp. Calling the fish back into its Pokeball in a flash of plasma, Red quickly sent out Charmander to replace him.

“Rock Smash!” Red ordered, jabbing his finger at the flopping shape of Ditto-Magikarp.

Charmander groggily moved to Ditto’s location and slammed his fist into the face of the shape-shifter, causing it to splatter back into its normal puddle shape. The flame at the end of Charmander’s tail burned dimly, and his walking slowed.

“Charmander, are you okay?” Red knelt down and said to his friend.

Suddenly, Charmander fell to one knee and cried out. His orange scales split around his body, revealing large, red ones. Charmander’s face became more angulated and a protruding horn buried by red Scales pushed its way through the back of his head. His arms grew longer and the claws along with them, causing the scales in the way to chip off and fall to the ground. At the same time, his legs grew longer and thicker, followed closely by his tail which grew longer as well. The ground was littered with orange scales.

“What is happening to him!?” Red cried, trying to grab Charmander so he may try to help.

“Stop; he’s Evolving!” Emma placed her hand on Red’s shoulder, keeping him away from Charmander.

“What does that mean!?” Red demanded.

“When a Pokemon has trained hard enough, it releases a sort of an energy that makes its body undergo physical change. That process is climaxing now, and he is changing into a Charmeleon!” Emma explained, continuing to hold Red back so he didn’t interrupt Charmander.

Unknown to the trio, they were being observed. One of the Ditto inside of the CKPD that had transformed into Charmander was approaching. Leaping into the air, Ditto prepared to use its own Rock Smash on Charmander. Suddenly, Charmander’s eyes opened and the flame at the end of his tail roared to life. The process was complete.

The newly formed Charmeleon acted fast and snatched the smaller Ditto out of the air and tossed it back, snarling. The Ditto responded with a hiss of its own.

“Charman- uh, Charmeleon! Use Ember!” Red ordered to his newly evolved Pokemon, and in an instant the Pokemon obeyed, sending a spew of smoke and embers at the copy of his former self.

“What are you doing? That barely affects Pokemon of the same type!” Emma exclaimed, putting her hands to her short, pink hair.

“Watch.” Red said, confidently as the Ditto was covered with the embers.

Suddenly, the ditto burst aflame. Panicking, the Ditto tried to scratch Charmeleon with its claws. Fortunately for Charmeleon, the flames were sapping the strength of the Ditto, not to mention burning him to a crisp. The claws of Ditto barely scratched Charmeleon’s scales, and Charmeleon pushed the Ditto back and looked to Red.

“You know what to do.” Red said to Charmander in a confident tone.

Charmeleon replied with a smirk, then charged forward to the staggering Ditto and slammed his fist into his doppelganger, causing it to soar into a nearby dumpster, splattering like water against it, then slowly pooling into the pink liquid.

“Dude, that was sweet.” Red held out his fist, and Charmeleon bumped it with his own.

Emma peered out of the alley, trying to get an idea of their options for escape. She didn’t like what she saw: The gate to the City of Saffron was completely blocked off by two men with a crimson “R” on their black attire, obviously Team Rocket. They had nothing to go back to in Mount Moon and Pewter… But there was something amiss in the fact that there was no one guarding the gate to Rock Tunnel and Lavender Town…

“What do we have?” Red asked, walking up to her from behind.

“Something that screams ‘trap’. You see, two gates are either guarded or there is nothing to go to, but only one is left unguarded.” She explained to the trainer, gesturing at each exit.

“Which gate is unguarded?” Asked Red quietly, for he didn’t want another Ditto to find them.

“The one that leads to Lavender Town.” Emma replied, already taking in a breath for her next answer to the next question Red was about to speak.

“Is that the same Lavender Town as-“ Red began, but was interrupted by Emma.

“It is the same Lavender Town as the one with the graveyard, yes.” She interjected with a smirk.

Red groaned; he didn’t want to go to that place. It was creepy to simply talk about it. He had been afraid that there was going to be a cold, white hand on his shoulder when he spoke about Lavender Town.

“Ready to go?” Emma asked him, suddenly.

Red wasn’t sure what to say. First she had told him about a possible trap in that direction, and now she wanted to go in that direction? If it weren’t for Emma’s caring for him, he would have confronted her about all of the odd things that she had done since they met.

“Wait… I thought you said that it was a trap?” Red asked, taken aback by her sudden want to go straight into a trap.

“Probably is. The question is, though, do we want to go somewhere where we may have a chance against them, or do we want to stay and face a nearly endless amount of Ditto and those Rockets over there?” Emma explained her reasoning.

Red shrugged and nodded in approval. It was true; either way, they were going to have to fight through something. He would prefer a couple of Rockets over an unlimited amount of Ditto any day.

“As much as I don’t like going to Lavender Town, I’ll go.” Red said confidently.

He returned Charmeleon to his Pokeball to prevent the Ditto from changing into him, and then sent out his newest (and weakest) team member. He then took the flopping Magikarp into his arms.

“Last one to the city gate is broken Exeggcute!” Red called out with a nudge to Emma, and began to run along the road yelling nonstop.

The Ditto whose attention he gained from his yelling automatically transformed into the Magikarp he was carrying. Red yelled and laughed at the same time, it was actually pretty hilarious to watch hundreds of Magikarp flop weakly.

But, the Ditto’s attention wasn’t the only attention he had drawn. The Team Rocket guarding the gate to Saffron had also noticed Red and Emma rushing through the city, but oddly enough, they did not act upon it. They simply watched.

Rushing through the city, and occasionally treading over a Ditto or two, Red, Emma and Magikarp made their way out of the city, through the city gate and into the road between Cerulean and Rock Tunnel. But Emma and Red didn’t stop running, nor laughing. They ran until they were out of breath, leaving little to laugh or speak.

Suddenly, Red was whacked with something that felt like a stick or a club on the side of his head. Red drew a sharp breath out of pain, and then fell to the ground. He then rolled onto his back and looked up, trying to get a look at his attacker. He didn’t see much of his attacker from the glare of the sun, but he felt something under his chin. From the looks of it, it was a bone.
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter III up!)

Wow, Chapter Five is just as impressive as ever. I noticed a few grammar mistakes here and there, but you should be all right.

I look forward to Chapter Six. :)
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

Thanks! I had a lot of fun writing this one. ;)

I forgot to write a description for Magikarp, so I just put one in. <Scratches back of head idly>
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

Awesome! II have to agree with Lucky Fire. Your an excellent writer. Keep it that way! (a.k.a. Keep being awesome!)
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

Thank you very much!! :D It means so much to be getting such positive feedback!
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

So I will be getting up a chapter here pretty soon, and I am sooo excited about it! W00t!
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

Can't do it tomorrow, I have a tournament to go to, so maybe sometime next week.
 
RE: Mewtwo's Revenge (Chapter IV up!)

Christmas Break! I am probably going to have more time to get this chapter out there. Sorry for the inactivity.
 
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