Writing Pokemon The Movie 13th The War of the Apocalyptic Arceus

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RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Yah Okay: It'll spoil though...

Ash: Pikachu, Infernape, Gliscor, (Traded Grotle for Magneton) Magnezone (Evolved, duh) Kangashkan, Lucario, Staraptor.

Dawn: Lopunny, Prinplup, Mamoswine, Tyranitar ( Macho Braced Pupitar), Luvdisc, Charmeleon. Pachirisu, too lol.

Brock: Steelix, Chansey, Toxicroak, Froslass, Golem, Jigglypuff
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Ash is an Idiot.... He shouldve kept Grotle sigh...
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Interesting for Dawn... whatever happened to Pachirisu :O?

Interesting for Ash.

Can't wait for the next chapter! You've inspired me to write again XD.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Do you know that this fanfic is probably one of the most read and most well-written in the writing corner? Most commented defenitely.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Really?

Aww, that's nice. But the fanfin is about to get super powerful.

In the wedding part 2....

You will see mah palz from space...
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

If you're planning on sending this to Japan you should put it in script form. I could help you with that, as I'm an independent filmmaker. I don't have too much time on my hands though...

Example of Script Format (Courier 12 Font should be used):

INT. INN - DUSK

Dawn comes down stairs in stunning dress.

ASH
She's so... beautiful...
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Scene The Wedding:

Tonio: We should get going...
Alice (Blushing): Hehhem! Okay, let's go!

The Carriage came up to the Inn, and it was with 2 Togekiss.
They flew off with them, and they got to the church.

Tonio: Well, we're here. I'm going to the groom's room to get ready, and then have a few bites.
Alice: Okay, but don't eat too much shrimp! Hehe!
Ash: WOW! This church is beautiful now that it's done!
Dawn: Yeah it is!
Stranger Girl: Bump!
Dawn: Oww!

Dawn and the stranger fall to the floor.

Stranger: Are you okay?
Dawn: Yeah, watch it next time! Who are you?
Stranger: Me? I'm Alice's sister, Amelia
Dawn: Oh! You're Amelia! Alice told me about you!
Amelia: I hope all good!
Dawn/Amelia: Hahahahahaha!
Dawn: Well we're going inside and having something to eat. We skipped breakfast
Brock: Hormones raging.... Even If I skipped breakfast, I had a heaping helping of LOVE!
Come and be my date to the wedding!
Brock: NO TOXICROAK! Yay!
Ash: Where is Toxicroak?

Toilet Flushes.

Toxicroak: Aaahh... Toxi? CROAK!
Brock: Ow! I spoke...too...soooooon....
Dawn: Shame, Brock.

They walked in the church,and they roamed around. Tonio had 34 shrimp out of anxiety, Dawn found a Prinplup trainer, and Ash found an old friend...

May: Ash?
Ash: May???
May: Why'd you come to my cousin's wedding?
Ash: Your cousin? She's an old friend of ours.
May: ASH!
Ash: May!
They hug. Dawn stares at them and the cup she holds falls to pieces.

May: How've you been since Pokemon School?
Ash: Awesome: I got alot of great Pokemon and I beat all the gyms!
May: Wow!
Ash: Look, the musicians are coming in.

They sit together and hold hands.

Dawn: HEY ASH!
Ash: Hezuhuh? Oh, yeah Dawn?
DAWN: I'M GONNA GO TO BE THE FLOWER GIRL!
Ash:....okay.... go on then.
Dawn: Hmph! Fine!

The musicians start to play a melodious tune from Tchiavosky.

Then when the bride and groom are ready, they play, "Here Comes The Bride" on a Piano, Violin, Flute, and Clarinet.

Tonio starts to walk down the isle.
So does Alice.

Dawn spreaks an array of flowers so angrily, it doesn't look so good.


The windows start to tremble.

Father: We are gathered here at this church on a beautiful occasion in which 2 young people will come together and share a bond. A bond made of trust, love, respect, and equality. On this day, may I hope to marry these two for a life of bliss.

The windows trembled more.

Father: Alice Kimani Birch, do you take Tonio, as your husband, in sickness and in health, in rich and poor, in the worst of times and the worst of times?

Alice: I do.

Father: And Tonio Placid Guillem Godi,

The windows trembled furiously

do you take Alice,

The windows started to crack

Father: as your wife, in sickness and in health, in rich and poor, in the worst of times and the worst of times?

Tonio: I...

The windows were blasted apart.

Audience: Gasp!

A deafening roar shook the church.

Dust flew in as Palkia was blasted in by a hyper beam.


The food tables were crushed and the ground burst.

Palkia: Hyyyyyyyaaaaawowowowwooo!

Rayquaza flew in through the Church and destroyed the front wall.

Palkia used Spacial Rend on Rayquaza and he crashed through the wall and the church came down. Everyone ran out in time to see the building crumble. Rayquaza arose from the rubble and used Outrage on Palkia. Entei, Suicune, and Raikou, came in. They attacked the crowd but hit Palkia. Palkia used Draco Meteor on the entire landscape.

The crowd flocked around in terror.

And every single legendary Pokemon came up past the horizon towards the rubbled church.

The sky got dark. A large gol lake floated in the air above.

Ash: What the..?

The symbol of the Three Lakes came into view. One by one, the 3 Lake Guardians appeared as illusions in the sky. They came together and turnded into the Celestic Door. The Door flashed. Light circled the Door, and opened.

A long, diamond stairway made of stars and galaxy images. Pearls shined around the entrance. Arceus came down the stairs.

The legendary Pokemon bowed to him.

Arceus: I have come to reclaim my world!
Everyone: Your world?
Arceus: I am the King of the Universe, the mighty, feared, God of Pokemon, ARCEUS
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

one thing , Please make your chapters longer.
Nice fan-fic Idea though.

just please make your chapters longer.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

They.
Aren't.
Chapters.
They.
Are.
Scenes.
In.
A.
Movie.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

don't
spread
your
words
out
like
this.

It's sloppy and is hard to read,
Ok sorry , Please make your scenes longer.

also you use dialogue wrong.
dialogue
Randy : isn't like this,
this is one of the correct ways

"dialogue isn't like this."
randy said.

Don't take my suggestions as stupid help , I want to help you Improve on your writing skills.
Even if it is a movie , make it look nice and come alive.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Okay. I will try. But do you like the movie so far???

Cause I don't care about if it is wrong dialouge, but DO YOU LIKE IT?
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

IDK , Its seems ok.

you should care , if your writing is nice ,neat and has good detail, you will get more people reading it.
But if it is sloppy it won't get many ppl.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Ok???!??!??
Ok!??!?!?

Well, show me how a scene should be (DON'T TALK SIZE!)
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

I don't need to , if you listened to my help it should be obivous.
but fine

blah blah scene stuff blah blah

"blah blah"
said ash
more scene stuff blah blah.

there.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

That's a story format. Like a book. Or a regular fan fic.


This is like a script.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

well this is a movie fan-fic , make it seem like the movie is playing in the threaters or w/e.
It makes it look and sound better.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Okay, I will. :O

But you won't handle the awesomemess.
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

You said it was updated!
 
RE: Pokemon The Movie 13th The Wrath of the Universal King, ARCEUS

Dud, it was.
Then what the bleep is this?

Scene The Wedding:

Tonio: We should get going...
Alice (Blushing): Hehhem! Okay, let's go!

The Carriage came up to the Inn, and it was with 2 Togekiss.
They flew off with them, and they got to the church.

Tonio: Well, we're here. I'm going to the groom's room to get ready, and then have a few bites.
Alice: Okay, but don't eat too much shrimp! Hehe!
Ash: WOW! This church is beautiful now that it's done!
Dawn: Yeah it is!
Stranger Girl: Bump!
Dawn: Oww!

Dawn and the stranger fall to the floor.

Stranger: Are you okay?
Dawn: Yeah, watch it next time! Who are you?
Stranger: Me? I'm Alice's sister, Amelia
Dawn: Oh! You're Amelia! Alice told me about you!
Amelia: I hope all good!
Dawn/Amelia: Hahahahahaha!
Dawn: Well we're going inside and having something to eat. We skipped breakfast
Brock: Hormones raging.... Even If I skipped breakfast, I had a heaping helping of LOVE!
Come and be my date to the wedding!
Brock: NO TOXICROAK! Yay!
Ash: Where is Toxicroak?

Toilet Flushes.

Toxicroak: Aaahh... Toxi? CROAK!
Brock: Ow! I spoke...too...soooooon....
Dawn: Shame, Brock.

They walked in the church,and they roamed around. Tonio had 34 shrimp out of anxiety, Dawn found a Prinplup trainer, and Ash found an old friend...

May: Ash?
Ash: May???
May: Why'd you come to my cousin's wedding?
Ash: Your cousin? She's an old friend of ours.
May: ASH!
Ash: May!
They hug. Dawn stares at them and the cup she holds falls to pieces.

May: How've you been since Pokemon School?
Ash: Awesome: I got alot of great Pokemon and I beat all the gyms!
May: Wow!
Ash: Look, the musicians are coming in.

They sit together and hold hands.

Dawn: HEY ASH!
Ash: Hezuhuh? Oh, yeah Dawn?
DAWN: I'M GONNA GO TO BE THE FLOWER GIRL!
Ash:....okay.... go on then.
Dawn: Hmph! Fine!

The musicians start to play a melodious tune from Tchiavosky.

Then when the bride and groom are ready, they play, "Here Comes The Bride" on a Piano, Violin, Flute, and Clarinet.

Tonio starts to walk down the isle.
So does Alice.

Dawn spreaks an array of flowers so angrily, it doesn't look so good.


The windows start to tremble.

Father: We are gathered here at this church on a beautiful occasion in which 2 young people will come together and share a bond. A bond made of trust, love, respect, and equality. On this day, may I hope to marry these two for a life of bliss.

The windows trembled more.

Father: Alice Kimani Birch, do you take Tonio, as your husband, in sickness and in health, in rich and poor, in the worst of times and the worst of times?

Alice: I do.

Father: And Tonio Placid Guillem Godi,

The windows trembled furiously

do you take Alice,

The windows started to crack

Father: as your wife, in sickness and in health, in rich and poor, in the worst of times and the worst of times?

Tonio: I...

The windows were blasted apart.

Audience: Gasp!

A deafening roar shook the church.

Dust flew in as Palkia was blasted in by a hyper beam.


The food tables were crushed and the ground burst.

Palkia: Hyyyyyyyaaaaawowowowwooo!

Rayquaza flew in through the Church and destroyed the front wall.

Palkia used Spacial Rend on Rayquaza and he crashed through the wall and the church came down. Everyone ran out in time to see the building crumble. Rayquaza arose from the rubble and used Outrage on Palkia. Entei, Suicune, and Raikou, came in. They attacked the crowd but hit Palkia. Palkia used Draco Meteor on the entire landscape.

The crowd flocked around in terror.

And every single legendary Pokemon came up past the horizon towards the rubbled church.

The sky got dark. A large gol lake floated in the air above.

Ash: What the..?

The symbol of the Three Lakes came into view. One by one, the 3 Lake Guardians appeared as illusions in the sky. They came together and turnded into the Celestic Door. The Door flashed. Light circled the Door, and opened.

A long, diamond stairway made of stars and galaxy images. Pearls shined around the entrance. Arceus came down the stairs.

The legendary Pokemon bowed to him.

Arceus: I have come to reclaim my world!
Everyone: Your world?
Arceus: I am the King of the Universe, the mighty, feared, God of Pokemon, ARCEUS
 
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