Luckyfire

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Idk.I havent felt well lately so yeah.how are you?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Lol.That makes since.
I feel weird.I randomly feel sick all of a sudden

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Lol.But its past Halloween......

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Lol.So whatcha doing?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

why doesnt it have wings?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Lol.what is that?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

If it was for Febuary where are the hearts?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Cool.I like your new avatar.

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Yeah.Do you plan on doing anything exciting for thanksgiving?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Maybe people are too tired to post or dont know what to post.

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

Whats the theme of your January avatar?

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

I love your story

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  evil_elf

• Nov 6, 2011

How are you this morning?

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  Ivy

• Nov 6, 2011

Thanks.

• Nov 6, 2011

I saw it. I'll try and give you a thorough proofreading soon, but I may not get to it until midweek since I'm a little pressed for Internet time. Overall it's not bad, but some things you may want to work on are punctuation use in dialogue. For instance, when transitioning from the actual spoken part to a following description of how the person said it, you're always supposed to use a comma in place of a period.

example said:

"I had fun at the park." the boy said.

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^There were a couple times I noticed you wrote stuff similar to that.

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"I had fun at the park," the boy said.

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^This is the correct way. It's a common mistake, though, so don't feel bad. Any other punctuation marks are fine to leave, it's just periods that have to be replaced by commas in these cases.

Otherwise your story seems fine. But I've only had a chance to skim it at this point.

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  Luckyfire

• Nov 6, 2011

Finally, I've finished my first chapter of 'A Dragon Adventure'.

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  DNA

• Nov 5, 2011

LuckyPokeGirl, if you want to, then sure. I didn't mean to get on your nerves, and I apologize.

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  evil_elf

• Nov 5, 2011

Is it valentines day themed?

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  Fragile Memories

• Nov 5, 2011

LuckyPokeGirl, Haha thanks!

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  evil_elf

• Nov 5, 2011

Im guesing each is themed by the month