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Ash's Adventure Chapter 2

Lets Go!

Gliscor, Floatzel, Ambipom, and Mamoswine spiraled out of the sky and landed in the middle of the four Legendaries. Mamoswine used Earthquake as soon it hit the ground, causing a huge earthquake ; regular power + fall impact + Fissure + slow motion=owwie ;It instantly Ko'ed Dialga, almost Ko'ed Palkia, Barely touched Kyogre, and normal hit Groudon. Dialga flew through the dimensional rip and the time sped up again. Ash Jumped down from the time tower, while Dawn jumped down from the Space Tower. I noticed Mom and Dad and wondered, " What are Mom and Dad doing here?"
 
(I'm going from second-person when I write)

He looked up and saw his mom and his dad jump down from the two towers
"Mom, Dad? What are you doing here?" he asked
"We're here to help you, dear!" Dawn said, looking at her son, smiling. He took a quick look at his parents. His mom had long, flowing blue hair that was still pinned by the three yellow hair clips. She still wore a mini-skirt, although it was longer than the one she wore when she was younger. His father has spiky black hair that was tamed by a cap. He still had Pikachu, although it was a bit slower after spending all these years with him. But he knew Pikachu was the strongest Pokemon Ash owned. It could even take down an Arcues if Ash tried
"Gliscor, use Poison Fang! And Floatzel use Hydro Pump!" Ash ordered. Gliscors' fangs shown with a purple light. It swooped it and chomped Kyogre. Kyogre furiously shook, trying to knock Gliscor off. But instead, the trashing caused Gliscor's fangs to dive in deeper, seeping out it's poison. It then pulled out it's fangs and flew back to Ash. But then Kyogre launched a Hydro Pump at Gliscor
"Mamoswine, use Ice Beam to freeze the water!" Dawn ordered, Her Mamoswine launched an Ice Beam that froze the Water. Meanwhile, Floatzel blasted Water at Groudon. Then Kyogre launched a Hydro Pump of it's own
"They're evenly matched!" Ash said, shocked. Just then, Pikachu, undetected, climbed on top of Kyogre
"Ash! Look!" Dawn shouted, pointing to Pikachu
"Pikachu, use Thunder!" Ash ordered. Pikachu launched a Thunder that instantly KO'ed Kyogre. Because Kyogre got Knocked Out, Floatzel's Hydro Pump hit Groudon. It fell to the ground and it too was Knocked Out
"Wow!" Little Ash said, impressed at his parents. Just then, Dawn pulled out a Poke Ball
"Here this is for you" Dawn said, "Consider it a late birthday present". He opened the Poke Ball and a shiny Pikachu appeared
"We caught it for you to start your journey just like your father did!" Dawn replied, latching an arm around Ash's and looked at him
"Thanks!" he said and ran off to the next town
 
Ash's Adventure Chapter 3

"Go, Pikachu!" Ash said.

An orange-tinted yellow mouse resemblense pokemon came out. "Pi-ka-chuuu!" The happy Pikachu exclaimed.

"What should I call you? Hmmm."
"Pi-Pika-Chu." The Pikachu said.
"I guess your still Pikachu, then."
"Pi-ka-chu."
"Hey, Pikachu, lets go see Mom and Dad before leaving.

Ash and Pikachu headed out to Twinleaf Town to their house and found 2 strangers. Ash ran up to the strangers . One Stranger was wearing a bandana similar to Dad's and white gloves with blue fingertips. The other one was wearing a yellow shirt with Jean Shorts as overalls with a Togekiss by her side. I ran to Dad and asked him, "Dad,who are these ladies?" Before Dad could reply, One stranger said, "Dad?Inner May,"Dang,I should have asked him on that date after the contest"".Dad replied, "Yea,my son Ash. He just started his adventure." I said,"Are these friends of yours Dad?"
 
Ash said, "Yes. These are the girls I traveled with before I met and fell in love with your mother". She picked up Dawn and she giggled and squealed with joy. Seeing this, the two young ladies left, obiviously mad at Ash...

Ash and Dawn's son reached Sandgem Town. There he met Lucas and Clint...
 
Sweet Dawn said:
Ash said, "Yes. These are the girls I traveled with before I met and fell in love with your mother". She picked up Dawn and she giggled and squealed with joy. Seeing this, the two young ladies left, obiviously mad at Ash...

Ash and Dawn's son reached Sandgem Town. There he met Lucas and Clint...
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you mean He picked up dawn.Who is Clint?
 
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