Finished Big Brother: Supershiny Time! EspeonROX has won Season 4! Prizes now need to be taken up with Guy! A

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RE: Big Brother: Supershiny Time! Top 5 Telling Stories! Sponsored by AF!

Isn't Guy judging as well?
 
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I thought I was too.
 
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Exactly. We all do it on our own and then add the scores.
 
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Sent a scoring PM to you two.
 
RE: Big Brother: Supershiny Time! Top 5 Telling Stories! Sponsored by AF!

So what did I miss when I was gone?
 
RE: Big Brother: Supershiny Time! Top 5 Telling Stories! Sponsored by AF!

We are scoring the stories for this round. If possible for you, can you do:

Ice Espeon said:
Short Story competition! You will write a story about the 3 friends Jirachi (Joey's favourite Pokémon), Mudkip (Guy's favourite) and Espeon, (guess who's favourite that is :p). We will each give a mark out of 50 for content and 50 for accuracy and grammar.
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RE: Big Brother: Supershiny Time! Top 5 Telling Stories! Sponsored by AF!

How long do the stories need to be?
 
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Post it here.
 
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Welcome back EspeonROX!
 
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Espeon, you will have immunity. The judging needs to go faster. Guy and Ice, please score the stories and send those scores to me and the other judge.
 
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All scores are in except for Ice. I will do things differently this elimination. The winner will pick their two favorite stories, then the two story owners will talk through PM and eliminate someone.
 
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Just marking now.
 
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Did you guys like my story?
I tried to make it more traditional because that is the kind of book I enjoy reading.
 
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I know who won.

Muddy, your seemed like it needed to be longer to me.
 
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The most remarkable story was... 42 chocolate's. It was overall a great story. If I had to see a certain other person stay, it would be Muddy. So, 42C, give your own scores on the stories with thorough explanation. If we had a worst category, Snorchu might be number one, with almost 100 points marked off. Here is the overall PM.
Ice Espeon said:
Guy89 said:
Joeypals!! said:
I have my scores labeled with detail. You two need to also send me and the other judge your scores.
Snorchu:
Content- 25/50 (was not very creative)
Grammer- 50/50
Content- 20/10
Grammer- 50/50
Content- 15/50
Grammar- 50/50

42 chocolate:
Content- 45/50 (lacking a beginning/intro, throws you right in)
Grammer- 50/50
Content- 49/50
Grammer- 50/50
Content- 45/50
Grammar- 50/50

Muddy:
50/50 for both (played it safe, but nice story with no grammer mistakes)
Content 45/50
Grammer 50/50
Content- 30/50 (Cliché with Jirachi)
Grammar- 50/50

Oyeah:
Content: 35/50 (throwns straight in, not much detailing through-out the story)
Grammer: 41/50 (spacing between text and quote errors)
Content- 40/50
Grammer- 40/50
Content- 43/50
Grammar- 40/50
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RE: Big Brother: Supershiny Time! 42C wins with a 289/300 score! Sponsored by AF!

I find it ironic that Joey and Guy both marked off for grammar, yet spelled the word wrong.

Anyways, Joey, good writers draw the reader in by starting in the middle of the story with a hook, then going back and filling in what happened before the hook.
Once you have the reader hooked, you can write whatever you want as you slowly reel them in.

(Anyone who knows what book I quoted that from gets, like, +100 points. Hint: It's what Vincent says.)

I'll be back before Friday with my scores.
 
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