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RE: Writer's Lounge
It's "me". You have it in a preposition and "me" is the objective form of the noun.
Also, what sugar coating?
It's "me". You have it in a preposition and "me" is the objective form of the noun.
You must have a terrible AP teacher.The Fallen One said:
I like straight to the point. Straight to the point means to silly filler.MrGatr said:
Also, what sugar coating?
RE: Writer's Lounge
I did have a horrible AP teacher. Nobody has ever liked that class. It was the one class I actually failed in my high school careered because it sucked so much. Plus I came in late so while some people got an entire summer to read and do really tedious analyzation of TKAM and Huck Finn, I had very little time and couldn't bring myself to put out that much effort to do something so painstaking and boring.
I did have a horrible AP teacher. Nobody has ever liked that class. It was the one class I actually failed in my high school careered because it sucked so much. Plus I came in late so while some people got an entire summer to read and do really tedious analyzation of TKAM and Huck Finn, I had very little time and couldn't bring myself to put out that much effort to do something so painstaking and boring.
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RE: Writer's Lounge
The second is correct. The first is wrong because you misplaced the apostrophe after "Pictures," which should have been before the "s" in the word to make it a contraction of "picture" and "is" instead of the possessive "pictures'."
Darkvoid57 said:
The second is correct. The first is wrong because you misplaced the apostrophe after "Pictures," which should have been before the "s" in the word to make it a contraction of "picture" and "is" instead of the possessive "pictures'."
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RE: Writer's Lounge
I forgot to close the tag so that everything would appear in the lovely pink (or plum) font I love using all the time. You should start using it to. It's fun, not to mention you can drive a lot of people nuts with it(especially if you're a guy, because it's only the manliest color ever! ;p).
I forgot to close the tag so that everything would appear in the lovely pink (or plum) font I love using all the time. You should start using it to. It's fun, not to mention you can drive a lot of people nuts with it
RE: Writer's Lounge
You mean you can drive ramsey nuts with it
You mean you can drive ramsey nuts with it
RE: Writer's Lounge
Pop Quiz! Subject - Passive Style and Nominalization
First off, this is totally optional and no one really needs to do this (I'd like you to though, and that includes you, Apollo ;3). This is simply for me to see how well you guys can fix weak passive sentences and remove unnecessary nominalizations (verbs in forms of nouns). I'll run through the concept so you would get it first:
Passive Sentences
A passive sentence starts with the person/object receiving some action, rather than the person/object doing it. For example: "Captain Kirk was beamed up by Scotty" is passive because we start the sentence with Kirk, which receives the action of getting "beamed up". To remove weak passives, simply rotate the sentence around: "Scotty beamed up Captain Kirk." This active sentence sounds a bit livelier and uses less words than the passive one to same the same thing.
Nominalization
Example: "My expectation was to get the avatar project to be successful."
The word "expectation" is a noun form of "expect". This is a nominalization, which is really bad because you're sacking a good verb in place of the new verb "was" (yuck!). Just use the verb as is:"I expect to get the avatar project to succeed." If you look again, "successful" is also a noun form of a verb ("succeed"), and I thus replaced that one as well in the improved sentence. These nasty buggers don't happen as often as passive sentences so English teachers tend to overlook these, but they take up alot of space and sound way too weak.
One more example:
- "Poor decision-making was shown by the manager when he attacked his critics."
First things first, this is a passive sentence (the manager is doing the action), so let's get that cleaned up first:
- "The manager showed poor decision-making when he attacked his critics."
Ehhh... still doesn't sound good enough. "Making" is the noun form of "make," so we can pull that one out and replace that weaker "show":
- "The manager made poor decisions when he attacked his critics."
Wait! "Decisions" is also the noun form of "decide," which is definitely stronger than "made":
- "The manager decided poorly when he attacked his critics."
We reduced a 13-word sentence to an 8-word sentence and made it much less fluffy in terms of fillers. The new sentence is direct and cuts across with who just did what. So that's the lesson! I've got the question (just one) written right below, so feel free to give the answer on this thread (spoiler it not to ruin it for others please), or pm it to me if you don't feel confident enough! First to improve the sentence completely gets a cookie!
Pop Quiz! Subject - Passive Style and Nominalization
First off, this is totally optional and no one really needs to do this (I'd like you to though, and that includes you, Apollo ;3). This is simply for me to see how well you guys can fix weak passive sentences and remove unnecessary nominalizations (verbs in forms of nouns). I'll run through the concept so you would get it first:
Passive Sentences
A passive sentence starts with the person/object receiving some action, rather than the person/object doing it. For example: "Captain Kirk was beamed up by Scotty" is passive because we start the sentence with Kirk, which receives the action of getting "beamed up". To remove weak passives, simply rotate the sentence around: "Scotty beamed up Captain Kirk." This active sentence sounds a bit livelier and uses less words than the passive one to same the same thing.
Nominalization
Example: "My expectation was to get the avatar project to be successful."
The word "expectation" is a noun form of "expect". This is a nominalization, which is really bad because you're sacking a good verb in place of the new verb "was" (yuck!). Just use the verb as is:"I expect to get the avatar project to succeed." If you look again, "successful" is also a noun form of a verb ("succeed"), and I thus replaced that one as well in the improved sentence. These nasty buggers don't happen as often as passive sentences so English teachers tend to overlook these, but they take up alot of space and sound way too weak.
One more example:
- "Poor decision-making was shown by the manager when he attacked his critics."
First things first, this is a passive sentence (the manager is doing the action), so let's get that cleaned up first:
- "The manager showed poor decision-making when he attacked his critics."
Ehhh... still doesn't sound good enough. "Making" is the noun form of "make," so we can pull that one out and replace that weaker "show":
- "The manager made poor decisions when he attacked his critics."
Wait! "Decisions" is also the noun form of "decide," which is definitely stronger than "made":
- "The manager decided poorly when he attacked his critics."
We reduced a 13-word sentence to an 8-word sentence and made it much less fluffy in terms of fillers. The new sentence is direct and cuts across with who just did what. So that's the lesson! I've got the question (just one) written right below, so feel free to give the answer on this thread (spoiler it not to ruin it for others please), or pm it to me if you don't feel confident enough! First to improve the sentence completely gets a cookie!
Improve the following sentence by changing passive form to active and nominalizations to verb forms:
RE: Writer's Lounge
Let's see if this helps:
A passive sentence starts with someone/something is taking some sort of action: "The ball was given to me."
Here, we start with the ball, which is taking the action of giving.
An active sentence starts with someone/something doing the action: "Someone gave the ball to me."
In this sentence, it starts with the noun that does the action. This sentence is preferred over the passive normally because our mind tends to think in terms of "who's doing what?". An active sentence does just that, but a passive sentence instead says "this was done by what?".
Let's see if this helps:
A passive sentence starts with someone/something is taking some sort of action: "The ball was given to me."
Here, we start with the ball, which is taking the action of giving.
An active sentence starts with someone/something doing the action: "Someone gave the ball to me."
In this sentence, it starts with the noun that does the action. This sentence is preferred over the passive normally because our mind tends to think in terms of "who's doing what?". An active sentence does just that, but a passive sentence instead says "this was done by what?".
RE: Writer's Lounge
Which explains why I don't know how to do this stuff. I skipped middle school.
Which explains why I don't know how to do this stuff. I skipped middle school.