Writing The Tale of PokeBeach - Murder All Over

^I noticed that,

He might just D Master smash you for that one... I like it, keep going, it looks great.
 
I can't help but laugh at dmaster being in the closet. This story is turning out well and I will explain my opinions more later.
 
I was bored and decided to read your story because you begged me on Skype a few days ago. =P Pretty good stuff so far. Looks like you're doing a lot of character introduction. I wanna see some action! >:] I find it extremely hard to believe that you have never played Luigi's Mansion. 1) Because of the way you described the foyer. 2) Because it's an awesome game! xP

Afro-G seems to be a man of few words, I like that. I expect him too do something amazing when everyone least expects him to. =P
 
@Afro, yeah, you'll probably do something amazing, Like being the murderer. >:)

The fan-fic looks awesome, my only complaint is that everyone is just there, in the situation. I understand everyone is there to catch the murderer and get a reward, but I think your characters should of had a bit more of a backstory. Just my opinion.
 
Before you read the next chapter, I'd like to say a few things:

@Everyone who said this good: Oh, thanks. That makes me feel almost good.

@Afro: I haven't started action yet, because the first few chapters have been decided to be mainly based on character description. I've seen other stories here that don't focus on it, and later on in the story you forget all about their description. So yeah.

@HL: Don't worry. Later in the story, you'll find the back story of the characters that haven't died yet. A character won't die every episode, so I'll have time to squeeze it in.

The Tale Of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 4

The man stared right at the three bullies, face to face. None of them moved, even though they knew the man was looking at them. Then the man spoke up.

"Whatcha boys doing here, if I may ask myself?" the man asked. None of the boys spoke, and then the man walked toward them. The boys could see him in the light clearly now. He had long black hair under a large straw hat, and he wore blue overalls over a white turtleneck shirt. He also had a pair of blue jeans on, and wore what looked like worn leather shoes. He looked like a cheery person, but lonely at that. As he came closer, the boys saw that he wore glasses.

"Um, just looking around," Sillykyle answered.

"Yeah, we were just looking around for a really big bone," Palkia dialga clash added. The man gave them a sketchy look.

"Well, if that's true. Hope you find what you need," the man doubtfully replied. "I'll be on my way, then," the man started.

"Wait, what's your name?" Chariblaze asked.

"Oh, my name is Dragonexpert," the man replied.

"Oh," Chariblaze replied in shock. "Any significance to the name?"

"No, not really," Dragonexpert said, and looked away. "Goodbye, everyone."

"Bye," Sillykyle waved goodbye.

The truth about Dragonexpert is that he once owned a dragon. The dragon was his best friend, and he explored the world with it. But one day, a man came to him and lured his dragon away. He never saw the dragon again, and he mourned every day for it to came back, but it hadn't come it. He imagined the worst for what could have happened to his dragon, but he didn't like to think about it often. When Chariblaze had asked him about his name, he was just afraid to reveal the true meaning of it.

Each of the bullies had their own story behind them. The truth is that they were all nice boys when they weren't causing trouble. Palkia dialga clash was the first one to be mentioned. He never had a good childhood, because his parents split up, and he lived in a foster home for five years. He never received any special treatment in his foster home, and when he did, it was usually physical abuse, which is why he grew up to be a bully. He had a really nice personality if you got to know him, but nobody ever got to know him. He was still living in his foster home until he ran away and has lived in Chariblaze's house ever since.

Sillykyle has a unique story. Nobody, even him, knew who his real parents were, and he was found lying on a circus floor eating peanuts off the ground. He was transferred to an orphan home, where he lived for his entire life. While he was there, one certain child kept bullying him with mean words and kept making fun of him, which made him grow up to be a rotten child that nobody liked. He finally got into school, where he met Palkia dialga clash and Chariblaze. He befriended them and became part of a trio of bullies.

Chariblaze had a pretty normal life. He was in a middle-class family, went to school like every other kid, and didn't have many problems in school before the video. The video was something Chariblaze got outraged over whenever anyone talked about it. The video was of Chariblaze crying after he fell off a trampoline, and it somehow got onto the Internet. Every kid in his school saw it, and he was constantly tortured about it. He still lurks for the person who videotaped him falling off the trampoline, but for now, he intimidates every kid who made fun of him by cyber bullying him the same way they bullied him.

As Dragonexpert walked farther, Chariblaze ran up to him. "Hey, how would you like to come with us?" Chariblaze asked. "We're just looking around, so it would be fun to have one more with us."

"Hm...." Dragonexpert started. "Sure, I guess."

"Good," Chariblaze replied. "Now let's look around this place and find something of actual use."

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The group of nine walked ahead farther into the hallway. Shadow Arceus stopped.

"Did one of you hear something?" he asked. Snivylover listened.

"No, I don't think so," Snivylover replied. "What did it sound like?"

"I heard it too," Afro-G added. "It was a screechy noise, almost like two floorboards moving together."

Shadow Arceus walked into one of the rooms. This was a library, not a large one, but one that held quite a few books. He picked up one of the books. "Biology? Why is there a book on biology in here?" he thought to himself. He picked up another. "Zoology? What are these sorted by?"

"It looks like these books aren't really separated by genre," Omahanime explained. "These are all crammed into shelves, there isn't really an order to them."

"Or is there?" P0KEVORTEX added. "These books don't even have the authors' names on them." He opened a book. "Hey, these books don't even have anything in them!" he realized.

"That's strange," Safariblade thought. "Why would books be in a library if they don't have anything in them..."

Snivylover looked around. "I think we should split up for a while," she said out of nowhere. Everyone looked at her in surprise. "What? Maybe splitting up could be a good idea. I think it might be faster to find clues here if we go in groups of four."

"That's true," Omahanime stated. "Maybe that's a good idea."

"Why are these things happening to me," Shadow Arceus thought. "I just came here for money-" everyone looked at him as he continued - "and I get eight people running after me. We decide to go together, then split up." He looked at everyone, then sighed. "Ughh, fine."

"Okay," Snivylover replied. "Bippa, Safariblade, and Omahanime can go with Shadow Arceus, and Afro, P0KEVORTEX, PMJ, and Dmaster can go with me."

"That sounds fair," Shadow Arceus replied. "Less people I have to care about," he muttered under his breath. "Let's keep looking in this library. You guys can go back to the foyer and look around there."

"All right then," Safariblade said as Bippa began to wake up. "Waahhhhh! WAHHHH!!!!" Bippa began to wail. Shadow Arceus covered his ears.

"Get that delinquent out of here!" Shadow Arceus complained. The other group headed down the hallway.

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Zyflair could hear Bippa's screaming down the hallway. "What is that awful noise?" he thought to himself. Darkvoid57 ran back to Zyflair after he had explored the mansion to as much as he could.

"Up!" Darkvoid57 ordered. He grabbed Zyflair's arm and threw him out of the bed with his amazing strength. Zyflair could hold himself up decently with the rest he had gained. Darkvoid57 ran towards the hallway and bashed into Safariblade, which made Bippa cry even louder. "Get that thing to close its annoying little mouth!" Darkvoid commanded.

"Don't talk to my little Bippa like that," Safariblade responded. "He's only frightened." Darkvoid57 folded his arms, while Zyflair rushed over.

"What's the meaning of this?" Zyflair asked. He looked at Darkvoid57. "I told you not to run off."

"I'll do whatever I want, and nothing you tell me to," Darkvoid57 said as he glared into Zyflair's eyes. Zyflair glared back with equal seriousness, which shocked Darkvoid57.

"What are all of you doing here?" Zyflair asked the group.

"We're just going with this until something actually happens here," Afro-G said in boredom. "When is anything going to happen?" Snivylover looked at Afro-G, which got him to stay quiet.

"Wahh! WAHHH!" Bippa kept crying. Darkvoid57 covered.

"Can't you stuff something into that thing's mouth?" Darkvoid57 asked Safariblade.

"Bippa is not a thing," Safariblade answered, and he looked at him with a look of disappointment.

"Humph," Darkvoid57 pouted.

"How about you hold the baby?" Zyflair asked Darkvoid57. He looked at Safariblade. "If that's okay with you, of course," he said to Safariblade.

"That's fine with me," Safariblade said, and he gently placed the baby in Darkvoid57's arms.

"Do I have to?" Darkvoid57 asked.

"It's a good idea," Dmaster added. "It sounds like you two have similar personalities." Darkvoid57 gave him a look.

"Fine," Darkvoid57 sighed. "This thing just better not scream or anything." And like Bippa could read his mind, he started screaming. "This will be fun," he announced in doubt.

That's it for now. Stay tuned and please comment! :)
 
TROLOLOLOL

I swear, you sir, are the most amazing writter evar!

/me loves how amazing his character is

Your humor is just awesome, just awesome

Keep it up!
 
safariblade said:
Bippa is so immature. He's supposed to be 7, but he acts like he is 3.

True tat...

I love your character ideas, even though I am not in it, especially the D Master part, switching his genders was the best thing that has happened yet...
(Has he D master smashed you yet?)
 
This is an awesome story!!

/me loves her character. It's so like her IRL

You're an amazing writer and I can't wait to read more.
 
Bippa's... a 7-year-old that's still a baby?
Oh, and did you mention the fact that DNA was changed to safariblade to us? I must have missed it if you did.
Looking good again! :)
 
/me wonders what he will be doing in the next chapter now that he is revealed.
 
Guys this reminds me of the time when Hyperbeem did somthing similiar to this...the good times. Keep it up Yoshi!! Great Stuff.
 
Oh my goodness. I'm in love with my character, although I think real life me would totally fit DarkVoid57's role.

The choice to make me a 7 year old wouldn't have anything to do with this Skype quote from Tking, would it?

Skype Quote said:
Tyraniking: Bippa isn't 17. Bippa is 7.
 
For everyone's convenience, I'm going to put the first four chapters in spoiler tags, so the people who haven't read this yet can dive right in.

Chapter 1
The Tale of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 1

Shadow Arceus peered into the crack of the open mansion door. The air was still, but even so he could not even hear his own breathing. He grabbed his flashlight and entered the massive foyer. Shadow Arceus looked quite afaid, while his short self took in the place. He wore a pair of expensive eyeglasses, and had a huge belt wrapped around his waist. He sometimes liked to use it as a whip. He shook often, sometimes in fear, and sometimes because he was cold. A huge chandelier hung from the very top of the ceiling, dangling as if it could fall any moment. Two sets of stairs lined the ends of the foyer, and a mirror with a dusty rug over it was trapped in the corner of the room. There was a door that he stared down as he entered, almost like it was covered by a strange forcefield. He tried to open the door, but the door gave him a small shock that forced him to the ground. He explored a bit more, and found 2 more doors, which both led to different places in the mansion, but were locked. Ther were shelves all around the foyer that held peculiar shaped vases. Just then, he heard the huge door behind him begin to open. Shadow Arceus held his breath until he'd realized it was just his friend Omahanime.

"Did I scare you?" Omahanime asked.

"You bet," Shadow Arceus replied . "I almost peed my pants."

Omahanime laughed a big, hearty laugh. Omahanime was quite tall, in fact, he could almost reach the ceiling. He seemed to have put on a bit of weight since Shadow Arceus last saw him, and he had a huge beard that ran down to his waist. His eyes, however, were small, but his voice was deep and funny. His voice even made Shadow Arceus laugh. Shadow Arceus quickly returned to his searching of the foyer for anything important. Omahanime followed him in his search.

"So, what are you looking for?" Omahanime asked.

"I'm not really looking for anything specific; rather, I'm looking for something that may aid me, like.... like, a key that could open one of these enourmous doors," Shadow Arceus answered. "The door on the first floor shocked me, and I was quite surprised, if I say so myself."

"Any way I can help?" Omahanime asked.

"I thought you'd never ask," Shadow Arceus replied.

They examined every bit of ground and ceiling to find a key of some sort that would let them advance in the mansion, but found nothing. Omahanime went over to one of the vases, grabbed it with his extremely beefy hands, and smashed it. Shadow Arceus turned out almost simultaneously.

"What are you doing?" Shadow Arceus asked in a full-body whisper.

"Look," Omahanime replied.

And they saw it: A peculiar-shaped key laying on the ground. Shadow Arceus picked it up and tried it on the first smaller door. It didn't work. Then he tried it on the second, larger door. And ever so slowly, the door quietly opened. Shadow Arceus held his breath and looked inside the room.

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P0KEVORTEX and Snivylover555 huddled in the corner of the changing room. P0KEVORTEX had a confident look on his face, like all men trying to impress their women looked. Snivylover555 hugged P0KEVORTEX close and shivered. P0KEVORTEX was everything a guy needed: Long, brown hair, but not too long: two strong arms that he used to lift many, many things: and a perfectly tanned body. Snivylover555 had two blue eyes that he gazed at P0KEVORTEX with, a brown fedora that she used to keep her ears warm, and two shoes that perfectly matched, even though they weren't the same pair of shoes.

"When can we get out of here?" Snivylover asked.

"As soon as the murderer is out of the mansion for good," P0KEVORTEX replied.

"You can't be that foolish," Snivylover replied. "The Murderer in this mansion has been gone for years."

"I have a hunch he's back, and I'm not letting you go. I can't afford to lose the people I love," P0KEVORTEX replied.

"Awww, you care about me," Snivylover replied in a cute voice. But her voice suddenly turned stern. "We have to get out of here. I can't sit in one place for very long. It makes my bottom hurt."

"We have to stay here, because the Murderer could be anywhere in this house," P0KEVORTEX explained I don't want to take any chances, so let's just play it safe for a while."

"Okay," Snivylover replied. "I just don't want to be in this place for too long." She considered what she had just said. "At least if it's with somebody other than you."

"Too cute," P0KEVORTEX replied. Then P0KEVORTEX heard something rustling in the room next to them. "Did you hear something?"

"No, did you?" Snivylover asked, slightly frightened.

"Let me just take a look in the other room," P0KEVORTEX replied. He walked over to the wooden door and had just noticed that there was nothing else in the room besides the shelf that hung all of the clothes they were hiding behind. He opened the door ever so stealthily, prepared for anything, and all he saw in the darkened room was a small bushlike thing.

"What is it?" Snivylover asked quietly.

"I don't know," P0KEVORTEX said. He walked closer, and suddenly the bushlike thing had popped up, and almost looked like a human. P0KEVORTEX didn't move a muscle.

"Did I scare you?" the person asked.

"Not a bit," P0KEVORTEX replied. "What exactly are you?"

"My name is Afro-G," the person replied. Afro-G had a huge greasy afro that almost covered his entire face. He wore ragged clothes and carried a small boomerang with him for fighting purposes. "Would you like me to turn on a light in here? It's quite dark in here."

"That would be nice," Snivylover replied as she entered the room. I've been in nothing but darkness for a while."

"Good. Now where is that light switch," Afro-G thought to himself. He stumbled around like a blind man until he finally found the switch. He flipped it on, and the room lightened up, almost like the mood of the room had gone from scary to joyful. The room could now be properly described. Afro-G said that this room had been called the Fourth Dining Room, named after the last dining room to be re-done after the three other dining rooms in the mansion. A small chandelier hung from the ceiling, but the room wasn't very large. There were a few vases on shelves, and a large round table where Afro-G had been when P0KEVORTEX found him in the middle of the room, but not much else. "How do you like it?"

"Well, it's small," P0KEVORTEX replied. "But it has a nice, quaint, feeling to it. May I just ask out of curiosity; what were you doing under that table?"

"Hiding from the Murderer in the Mansion, of course," Afro-G replied. P0KEVORTEX gave Snivylover an I-told-you-so look, and Snivylover frowned. "I was silly to keep my doors unlocked, but once I sat I knew I couldn't move, unless I was threatened. I thought you had come as the Murderer, so I prepared myself. I've been here for a few days hiding."

"We just got here today and found out this place even existed. Before we knew it, I heard voices and we were trapped, doors locked and all," P0KEVORTEX replied.

Suddenly there was a push of force on the door. The door opened before anyone could hide. Shadow Arceus looked at the three of them eye to eye, and Omahanime looked shocked at what they had discovered.

Chapter 2
The Tale of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 2

The room was silent as Shadow Arceus' shocked face slowly turned grim.

"What are you all doing here?" Shadow Arceus asked in an interrogating voice.

"Well, I was hiding under this here table, and these two came into this room and encountered me here," Afro-G explained.

"Snivylover and I were trapped in the changing room right there, and we couldn't get out. I've heard rumors of a murderer in this mansion, so I came to take a look," P0KEVORTEX said in his bellowing British voice.

"So you're saying that you knew there was a murderer here, yet you still came to check and see if they existed? They could have murdered you too! It's far too dangerous," Shadow Arceus replied.

"That's exactly what I'm saying, Mom," P0KEVORTEX replied in a sassy tone. Then he flexed his large muscles. "With these guys, I've got nothing to worry about."

Omahanime rolled his eyes. Then he motioned Shadow Arceus into the kitchen. The kitchen was a small room for the most part. The pots and pans hung from the walls, while a huge oven dragged the attention of the room to itself. It had a large "DO NOT TOUCH" sign on the cooker to keep away uneducated folk, and a wallpaper with frilly flowers covered the room. A stange perfume smell emanated through the room. "Maybe we should take them with us," he said to Shadow Arceus.

"Are you crazy! Taking them with us would make us more vulnerable than being in the same room with that psychotic murderer!" Shadow Arceus replied in shock. "I'm not seeing the brilliance in this plan like I usually do."

"Listen," Omahanime replied. "That P0KEVORTEX may be annoying, but he does have quite some large muscles. If we ever come in contact with the murderer, you better be sure we'll be dead unless we take him with us. And what about that girl Snivylover? She's got to have some knowledge in that cranium of hers. She could lead us to the murderer's base of operations. I'm a bit skeptical about that Afro kid, but maybe this could help us out in the long run. Think about it."

"Hmmm...." Shadow Arceus thought. "If I take them with me, maybe they could provide some valuable information that I might need. But then again, their outgoing personality could reveal our existence to the murderer." Shadow Arceus looked at Omahanime. "Fine. They better not screw anything up." Omahamine spilled the news to the them.

"Okay, but what's in it for us?" Afro-G asked.

"If you must know, there's a large sum for catching this murderer. We'll split the profits with you," Shadow Arceus replied, still doubting this plan of Omahanime's.

"I'm in," Snivylover replied.

"Ditto," said Afro-G and P0KEVORTEX.

"Good," Omahanime replied. "Now the first thing we need to do is find the key that opens the second door on the second floor in the foyer. P0KEVORTEX and Snivylover can look in the foyer. Afro-G will take the changing room, I'll take the kitchen, and Shadow Arceus can take this room. Any questions?" Omahanime waited for an answer, but then continued. "Alright then. Let's go!"

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Two people walked along a beaten path in order to find the haunted mansion where the supposed murderer lived. Their names were Safariblade and Bippa201. Safariblade was a middle-aged man with a very stylish looking pair of sunglasses. He was often lost in thought, and always overthought things. He wore a shirt that said "Not now, I'm busy," and wore an expensive pair of jeans. His dark brown hair flowed in one direction like perfect harmony, and his teeth were tinted a nice white. Bippa201 was what anyone would expect out of a spoiled 7 year old: noisy, annoying, and obnoxious. He had a light tint of red in his hair, and he loved wearing white polos that were a little too big for his body, but he insisted on wearing them anyway. His shoes were quite ragged, probably from playing all day with them on. His brown eyes were misleading, but in all honesty his father thought he hadn't grown up since his mother died, and he had turned into a ferocious, spoiled brat.

"But dad!" Bippa complained.

"I already said no, son," Safariblade replied.

"But I really want it!" Bippa said.

"Not now, son. I'm trying to concentrate," Safariblade replied. He kept walking down the path, Bippa still grabbing onto his leg, pleading for what he wanted.

"Why can't I have it?" Bippa asked again.

"Because I don't have the money to get you it," Safariblade replied.

"But everyone has one!" Bippa pleaded.

"I said no. Maybe once I catch this murderer, I'll have enough money to get you it," Safariblade explained. "Now where is this mansion they speak of..."

"Ahhh!" Bippa screamed, and he ran past an oddly-shaped tree, and Safariblade spotted the spooky mansion spoken of in rumors.

"Sometimes this kid helps me in ways even he wouldn't understand," Safariblade said to himself. Safariblade ran after toward Bippa until he entered the massive foyer Shadow Arceus once entered. "Hmm...a big room, at that. I wonder if, maybe...." But Safariblade was interrupted by Bippa's whining.

"I'm going to run away forever if I don't get it!" Bippa threatened. But Safariblade was too fast for Bippa. Safariblade grabbed him and picked up. Bippa kicked and screamed, struggling to escape from Safariblade's grasp, but it was no use. He slowly calmed down. Safariblade kept walking until he noticed P0KEVORTEX and Snivylover555 looking down at them.

"Hello there! How do you do?" Safariblade asked the two shocked people. "Sorry if my son's whining disturbed you."

"I don't mind," Snivylover replied. Bippa looked immediately at Snivylover's hat, and immediately cried out, "I want it! I want it!"

Snivylover looked at her hat and pointed at it. "This?" she asked. "Sure, it's all yours."

"Wait, you don't have to do that-" Safariblade started.

"If it'll get that kid to stop screaming, then do it," P0KEVORTEX murmured, and Snivylover gave him a look. "I don't mind, really." She walked down the stairs elegantly and handed Bippa the hat. Bippa smiled and began chewing on the hat.

Safariblade looked her in the eye for a few moments. "You're absolutely sure?"

"Really, it's fine. There's plenty more of these in the Changing Room," Snivylover replied. Afro-G, Omahanime, and Shadow Arceus walked over to the scene. Shadow Arceus quickly frowned.

"Hello, everyone. How are you all doing?" Safariblade asked the three men.

"I'm doing fine, thanks," Afro-G replied.

"What exactly are you doing here?" Shadow Arceus replied. "If you're looking for the murderer, we were here first. So back off."

"Oh, lighten up, Shadow Arceus," Omahanime inputted. "Sorry for my friend's agression. He can be quite greedy."

"It's fine," Safariblade replied. "My son took off after he threw a fit, and I came chasing after him until he came in this here mansion. I'm sorry if I disturbed what you were currently doing."

"You should be," Shadow Arceus muttered.

"Anyway, how would you like to join in our search?" Omahanime asked. There was a moment of silence. Shadow Arceus gave him a look.

"We- I, would be honored to help. Don't mind Bippa here. He'll be asleep soon enough," Safariblade answered.

"Fine," Shadow Arceus said. "Right now we're looking for a key to open the locked door on the second floor. Can you help?"

"Of course I can," Safariblade replied. "You'll help too, right, Bippa?" But Bippa had fallen asleep over all of the commotion. Safariblade smiled. "Let's get to work." They searched the entire unlocked part of the mansion to find the key, but came up with nothing. Bippa slowly woke up an found himself on the ground. He crawled over to the mirror in the corner and began pulling on the cape covering it. Safariblade noticed this and scolded him. "Bippa! No!" But Safariblade then realized what he was doing. Safariblade pulled off the cape and lying there was a peculiar-shaped key. "Hey, everyone! Look what I found!" The group rushed over.

"Give me that," Shadow Arceus grabbed the key out of Safariblade's hands. He tried it on the door, and it worked. The door opened. "Come on, everyone. Nobody gets to slack off now. Even the kid."

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"And one, and two, and three!" someone cheered.

"And four, and five, and six!" another voice cheered.

"Go Beachers, Go Beachers! Woooooo!" a third voice cheered.

Their names were PMJ, Dmaster, and Water Pokemon Master. They were cheerleaders, yes. They were a dedicated team that worked hard every day to prepare for their National competition. PMJ had long dirty blonde hair and two pink earrings that sparkled in the light. She wore short shorts like her friend Dmaster, and a bright blue shirt that glittered like a blue lava lamp. PMJ had a quirky but joyful personality, and was someone you would want to hang around. Dmaster was dressed the same as PMJ, but had long brown hair and loopy blue earrings that dangled whenever she moved quite actively. Dmaster had a little less of a cheery personality than PMJ, but she rather had a dedicated and confident personality that the team relied on. Water Pokemon Master was the leader of the group, and wore small emeralds in her ears, and dressed a bit different than the others. Her shirt was pink, and she wore regular shorts dressed in colorful glitter. Her personality was loud and proud, and sh never gave up even when the going was tough, like a normal leader would.

"Okay team, time to recite our performance," Water Pokemon Master said.

"Okay!" PMJ and Dmaster said in girly harmony.

"The Beachers keep going when the rough gets rougher,
and never give in to the mounds of pressure!
Even when we talk, we give lots of cheer,
and always make our fans never show any fear!
They cheer us on every second of the day,
And always know when our team will stay!
Gooooooooooo, Beachers!"

They cheered in harmony and jumped up and down.

"This place is great! It's a nice place to practice our awesome skills!" PMJ cheered in a frilly voice. The room was almost like an infantry, with pink wallpaper and baby toys. There was a small chandelier on the ceiling, and a rocking horse in the corner. There was a bunk bed with clean blue blankets, and the shelves were filled with stuffed animals. The place itself was cheery enough, however, for three cheerleaders to practice in.

"Yeah, totally, I'd never leave! Except for Nationals, of course!" Dmaster encouraged.

"Well, I don't know about that. Haven't you girls heard the rumors?" Water Pokemon Master warned. "Maybe we should go back to the high school. I'm starting to get creeped out."

"No way," PMJ disagreed. "If I go back there, Miss King will smack me like a house cat."

"Maybe we should go, just for our safety," Dmaster said. "Better safe than sorry."

"Okay," PMJ agreed. "But I am not going back to that demon school."

As Water Pokemon Master went to open the door, the lights went out. The door would not open, and the chandelier began to spin.

"What's going on?" Dmaster screamed in fear.

"Only one explanation," Water Pokemon Master. "It's the murderer."

Chapter 3
The Tale Of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 3

"What's happening?" PMJ screeched as she grabbed dmaster tightly.

"I'm not sure, just stay calm," Dmaster said in comfort. The chandelier spun faster and faster until it fell and smashed on the ground. PMJ ran to the door and kicked it.

"Get me out of here!!!!!!" PMJ screamed. Water Pokemon Master was looking around the room for something to smash the door down. She opened up one of the closets, and a hand suddenly reached out and grabbed her by the arm. Water Pokemon Master did not scream or anything, and the door to the closet closed. All motion in the room stopped, and the lights turned back on. PMJ turned around in fear and opened the closet doors. Nothing was left in the closet.

"Where is she?" Dmaster asked.

"She.....she's....not..." PMJ broke down and started to cry. "I wanna get out of here!" she yelled.

"We'll find a way out of here soon enough," Dmaster said in hopefulness. "Maybe we should look around for something that could help us."

"Totally," PMJ said in a girly voice. They searched high and low, but nothing was of use. Dmaster spotted the rocking horse, and tore off its base.

"Um, what are you doing?" PMJ asked in a frilly voice. Dmaster ran to the door with full force and it crashed down. "Oh," PMJ realized. They heard footsteps coming down the hallway. "Hide!" PMJ whispered.

"But there's nowhere to hide!" Dmaster responded.

"In the closet!" PMJ pointed to the closet.

"But-" Dmaster started.

"Just go!" PMJ urged, and they jumped into the creepy closet where their good friend Water Pokemon Master had disappeared.

Shadow Arceus and the group headed down the hall, and Shadow Arceus motioned the group to stay silent. He walked into the room PMJ and Dmaster were in and said, "Anybody here?"

PMJ walked out of the closet without using common sense before Dmaster could stop her, and showed herself. Shadow Arceus jumped back a little.

"What are you doing here?" Shadow Arceus asked as Dmaster walked out of the closet, and Shadow Arceus jumped back a bit more. "Two of you?" he asked.

"Well, there was three of us, but...." PMJ started.

"Our friend Water Pokemon Master was grabbed by the arm and fell into the closet, and then he just disappeared," Dmaster explained.

"Sounds like a murderer to me," P0KEVORTEX jumped in. Shadow Arceus shot him a look.

"Did you see anything suspicious in the closet after he disappeared?" Shadow Arceus asked.

"Nope, nothing is there," PMJ replied.

"They seem to cover up their tracks...." Omahanime muttered, and Shadow Arceus mumbled something under his breath.

"Can we come with you?" Dmaster asked. "I don't feel like being the murderer's lunch."

"No, absolutely not, I've got a bunch of other people with me right now, and I don't want any more," Shadow Arceus said.

"Pleassseeeee?" PMJ asked, and smiled at him in a girly way.

Shadow Arceus blushed, and then looked at Omahanime, who nodded in approval. "Fine," he grumbled. "Now everyone, let's get to work and find this murderer. That money shouldn't go to waste -" The group looked at him. "What?" he asked with a greedy look on his face.

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A person clapped their hands. "Over here, now!" they ordered. Their name was Darkvoid57, and they ordered their assistant, Zyflair, around like a mutt to fresh steak. Darkvoid57 was a snobby rich kid who got whatever he wanted whenever he wanted it. He was dressed in quite a fancy suit, with two white buttons lining the entire suit. He wore expensive jeans and polished shoes that sparkled under the light, and he had short, black hair. People would drool over his richness in the town. Sometimes he would throw money into the street for people to fight over, which he enjoyed to no end. Zyflair was a desperate butler that put up with Darkvoid57 longer than any other butler he'd ever had. Zyflair had 3 kids at home he needed to support, and was often depressed from not being able to see them for so long. Zyflair was your average butler; dressed properly, but hunched over in a strange way that most butlers were from working for so long, and sleeping on an uncomfortable matress. His hair had a gray tint, and his face was was wrinkled from his old age. He often mourned to return to his wife and children someday.

"Get on the ground and do some push-ups!" Darkvoid57 ordered.

"Yes, sir," Zyflair said and sighed. He could only do a few push-ups before he fell to the ground in pain.

"Up!" Darkvoid57 ordered, but Zyflair would not get up, until Darkvoid57 kicked him up on his feet. Zyflair ached.

"Keep walking!" Darkvoid57 said in an imperative tone. Zyflair could hardly walk on the beaten path, but he trudged forward. Darkvoid57 ran ahead until he spotted the mansion Shadow Arceus was in. "Ooh, a mansion!" Darkvoid57 exclaimed. He turned around and screamed at Zyflair, "Move yourself! You're such a brat! Get over here NOW!"

"Yes, sir," Zyflair said weakly. They opened the mansion door, and Darkvoid57 noticed the electric door. "Touch it!" Darkvoid57 ordered.

"Yes, sir," Zyflair repeated in the same tone and touched the door. The door shocked him and he fell to the ground. He groaned due to exhaustion.

"Up the stairs! Now!" Darkvoid57 ordered. Darkvoid57 ran up the stairs, waiting for his butler to follow. Zyflair struggled to get up the stairs. He fell a few times before he could get himself back up.

"I need to lie down somewehere," Zyflair forced his voice to say.

"Ughh, why are you such a pain?" Darkvoid57 complained. Zyflair spotted what looked like a bed in the Kitchen, and plopped himself onto it. It was indeed a bed, dressed in what looked like comfortable sheets, and the bed was hung up by springs.

"Just leave me here to rest by broken soul..." Zyflair mumbled. Darkvoid57 ran off far into the mansion.

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"Yeah, he was all 'Don't hurt me!!', but I hurt him right in the gut," someone said in a beefy voice. What seemed like two other people laughed in unison.

"I saw him run off crying," one of the others said. "Dude, you're like, a legend now. You've picked on every kid in the school!"

"All you gotta do is trick the teacher into leaving the room, and we'll be golden!" the third person exclaimed.

They were school bullies. Their names were Palkia dialga clash, Sillykyle, and Chariblaze. They picked on every kid in the school by themselves, and even the teachers were intimidated by them. They liked to think of themselves as one person, but they had extremely different personalites. Palkia dialga clash was your average physical bully: he dealt punches to anyone in his way, and his beefy body intimidated even others around him, afraid he may attack at any moment. Sillykyle liked to make comments and spread rumors and make people feel bad, and he may say comments right to peoples' faces. Chariblaze was the cyber bully; he was similar to Sillykyle!, but he was mean over the computer. Chariblaze had a goal to make every single kid in the school cry right in front of his face like Palkis dialga clash (excluding his buddy-buddy bullies, of course), and had almost achieved it. They were already in the mansion, specifically in the graveyard, one of the creepiest parts of the mansion, and they began to talk.

"We should really do something out of the ordinary, you know something that would make them really remember us; something like..." Palkia dialga clash started.

"...a huge prank on the whole school!" Chariblaze added.

"Or a mean note that everyone would go crazy over!" Sillykyle exclaimed with excitement.

"Something that would put our names and faces in that yearbook forever," Palkia dialga clash dreamed.

"The problem would be actually achieving that," Chariblaze thought.

"Yeah, we'd be in the Yearbook of Infamy," Sillykyle said, and they laughed. They continued to walk through the graveyard when Palkia dialga clash had a thought.

"Maybe we could tell them the story of this mansion," Palkia dialga clash said in a quiet voice.

"Yeah, they'd be all 'Oh no! Someone catch that murderer!', " Sillykyle exclaimed, and he imitated the scared kids and teachers. "Then have us go and 'catch' the murderer, and they'll be all 'You guys are our saviors!' ," and he laughed at this.

"That would be so cool if it worked," Chariblaze added. "Sure wouldn't put us in the Yearbook of Infamy. But wouldn't you guys want to do something bad?" The group nodded in approval.

"We should start planning it, like, now," Palkia dialga clash proposed. But as soon as he said this, he saw a man looking down at them from the porch of the mansion. The group of bullies froze.

Chapter 4
The Tale Of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 4

The man stared right at the three bullies, face to face. None of them moved, even though they knew the man was looking at them. Then the man spoke up.

"Whatcha boys doing here, if I may ask myself?" the man asked. None of the boys spoke, and then the man walked toward them. The boys could see him in the light clearly now. He had long black hair under a large straw hat, and he wore blue overalls over a white turtleneck shirt. He also had a pair of blue jeans on, and wore what looked like worn leather shoes. He looked like a cheery person, but lonely at that. As he came closer, the boys saw that he wore glasses.

"Um, just looking around," Sillykyle answered.

"Yeah, we were just looking around for a really big bone," Palkia dialga clash added. The man gave them a sketchy look.

"Well, if that's true. Hope you find what you need," the man doubtfully replied. "I'll be on my way, then," the man started.

"Wait, what's your name?" Chariblaze asked.

"Oh, my name is Dragonexpert," the man replied.

"Oh," Chariblaze replied in shock. "Any significance to the name?"

"No, not really," Dragonexpert said, and looked away. "Goodbye, everyone."

"Bye," Sillykyle waved goodbye.

The truth about Dragonexpert is that he once owned a dragon. The dragon was his best friend, and he explored the world with it. But one day, a man came to him and lured his dragon away. He never saw the dragon again, and he mourned every day for it to came back, but it hadn't come it. He imagined the worst for what could have happened to his dragon, but he didn't like to think about it often. When Chariblaze had asked him about his name, he was just afraid to reveal the true meaning of it.

Each of the bullies had their own story behind them. The truth is that they were all nice boys when they weren't causing trouble. Palkia dialga clash was the first one to be mentioned. He never had a good childhood, because his parents split up, and he lived in a foster home for five years. He never recieved any special treatment in his foster home, and when he did, it was usually physical abuse, which is why he grew up to be a bully. He had a really nice personality if you got to know him, but nobody ever got to know him. He was still living in his foster home until he ran away and has lived in Chariblaze's house ever since.

Sillykyle has a unique story. Nobody, even him, knew who his real parents were, and he was found lying on a circus floor eating peanuts off the ground. He was transferred to an orphan home, where he lived for his entire life. While he was there, one certain child kept bullying him with mean words and kept making fun of him, which made him grow up to be a rotten child that nobody liked. He finally got into school, where he met Palkia dialga clash and Chariblaze. He befriended them and became part of a trio of bullies.

Chariblaze had a pretty normal life. He was in a middle-class family, went to school like every other kid, and didn't have many problems in school before the video. The video was something Chariblaze got outraged over whenever anyone talked about it. The video was of Chariblaze crying after he fell off a trampoline, and it somehow got onto the Internet. Every kid in his school saw it, and he was constantly tortured about it. He still lurks for the person who videotaped him falling off the trampoline, but for now, he intimidates every kid who made fun of him by cyberbullying him the same way they bullied him.

As Dragonexpert walked farther, Chariblaze ran up to him. "Hey, how would you like to come with us?" Chariblaze asked. "We're just looking around, so it would be fun to have one more with us."

"Hm...." Dragonexpert started. "Sure, I guess."

"Good," Chariblaze replied. "Now let's look around this place and find something of actual use."

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The group of nine walked ahead farther into the hallway. Shadow Arceus stopped.

"Did one of you hear something?" he asked. Snivylover listened.

"No, I don't think so," Snivylover replied. "What did it sound like?"

"I heard it too," Afro-G added. "It was a screechy noise, almost like two floorboards moving together."

Shadow Arceus walked into one of the rooms. This was a library, not a large one, but one that held quite a few books. He picked up one of the books. "Biology? Why is there a book on biology in here?" he thought to himself. He picked up another. "Zoology? What are these sorted by?"

"It looks like these books aren't really separated by genre," Omahanime explained. "These are all crammed into shelves, there isn't really an order to them."

"Or is there?" P0KEVORTEX added. "These books don't even have the authors' names on them." He opened a book. "Hey, these books don't even have anything in them!" he realized.

"That's strange," Safariblade thought. "Why would books be in a library if they don't have anything in them..."

Snivylover looked around. "I think we should split up for a while," she said out of nowhere. Everyone looked at her in surprise. "What? Maybe splitting up could be a good idea. I think it might be faster to find clues here if we go in groups of four."

"That's true," Omahanime stated. "Maybe that's a good idea."

"Why are these things happening to me," Shadow Arceus thought. "I just came here for money-" everyone looked at him as he continued - "and I get eight people running after me. We decide to go together, then split up." He looked at everyone, then sighed. "Ughh, fine."

"Okay," Snivylover replied. "Bippa, Safariblade, and Omahanime can go with Shadow Arceus, and Afro, P0KEVORTEX, PMJ, and Dmaster can go with me."

"That sounds fair," Shadow Arceus replied. "Less people I have to care about," he muttered under his breath. "Let's keep looking in this library. You guys can go back to the foyer and look around there."

"All right then," Safariblade said as Bippa began to wake up. "Waahhhhh! WAHHHH!!!!" Bippa began to wail. Shadow Arceus covered his ears.

"Get that delinquent out of here!" Shadow Arceus complained. The other group headed down the hallway.

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Zyflair could hear Bippa's screaming down the hallway. "What is that awful noise?" he thought to himself. Darkvoid57 ran back to Zyflair after he had explored the mansion to as much as he could.

"Up!" Darkvoid57 ordered. He grabbed Zyflair's arm and threw him out of the bed with his amazing strength. Zyflair could hold himself up decently with the rest he had gained. Darkvoid57 ran towards the hallway and bashed into Safariblade, which made Bippa cry even louder. "Get that thing to close its annoying little mouth!" Darkvoid commanded.

"Don't talk to my little Bippa like that," Safariblade responded. "He's only frightened." Darkvoid57 folded his arms, while Zyflair rushed over.

"What's the meaning of this?" Zyflair asked. He looked at Darkvoid57. "I told you not to run off."

"I'll do whatever I want, and nothing you tell me to," Darkvoid57 said as he glared into Zyflair's eyes. Zyflair glared back with equal seriousness, which shocked Darkvoid57.

"What are all of you doing here?" Zyflair asked the group.

"We're just going with this until something actually happens here," Afro-G said in boredom. "When is anything going to happen?" Snivylover looked at Afro-G, which got him to stay quiet.

"Wahh! WAHHH!" Bippa kept crying. Darkvoid57 covered.

"Can't you stuff something into that thing's mouth?" Darkvoid57 asked Safariblade.

"Bippa is not a thing," Safariblade answered, and he looked at him with a look of disappointment.

"Humph," Darkvoid57 pouted.

"How about you hold the baby?" Zyflair asked Darkvoid57. He looked at Safariblade. "If that's okay with you, of course," he said to Safariblade.

"That's fine with me," Safariblade said, and he gently placed the baby in Darkvoid57's arms.

"Do I have to?" Darkvoid57 asked.

"It's a good idea," Dmaster added. "It sounds like you two have similar personalities." Darkvoid57 gave him a look.

"Fine," Darkvoid57 sighed. "This thing just better not scream or anything." And like Bippa could read his mind, he started screaming. "This will be fun," he announced in doubt.

So, without further ado, here's Chapter 5. :)

The Tale of Pokebeach - Murder All Over - Chapter 5

As fast as he had started screaming, Bippa suddenly calmed down in Darkvoid57's arms. Everyone sighed in relief.

"Finally, that little brat is quiet," Shadow Arceus mumbled. Safariblade shot him an "I don't appreciate that" look, and Shadow Arceus turned his back to him. "All right guys, we need to search this place for something. I don't know what kind of person would lock every door in this ominous place," he continued.

"Maybe they just wanted this place to remain unharmed," Zyflair explained.

"I don't need your explanations," Shadow Arceus replied in a sassy tone.

"But-" Zyflair started.

"Shush!" Shadow Arceus silenced him.

"Now I have to put up with 2 annoying people," Zyflair thought to himself.

"Hey, Shadow Arceus, don't you remember that oven in the kitchen?" Omahanime asked. You know, the one with the 'DO NOT TOUCH' sign on it? Maybe...."

"Oh!" Shadow Arceus exclaimed as he hit himself in the face, as if he was punishing himself for not thinking of it. "Maybe we should go check it out," he insisted. But Darkvoid57 dropped Bippa to the mansion floor and bolted for the oven faster than Shadow Arceus could react. Bippa began to wail, and Safariblade picked him up.

"Why, why...." Safariblade said to himself. "Well, I guess this is the stress of being an only parent." He walked towards the kitchen with Omahanime. Zyflair followed.

"There's got to be something good in here!" Darkvoid57 exclaimed greedily. He propped open the oven right before Shadow Arceus ran into the room, and when Shadow Arceus looked at the stove, nothing was there. Darkvoid57 was gone, and a note hung from the inside of the oven. It said, 'I WARNED YOU.' Shadow Arceus gasped as the others rushed into the room.

"What happened?" Zyflair asked in a worried voice, looking as if he might faint. "Where is he? What are this child's parents going to think of me, letting a child into a mansion like this! They'll...." Zyflair shuddered.

"I don't care for your personal issues, thank you very much...." Shadow Arceus began.

"I don't care for you and your attitude, mister!" Zyflair yelled, and he grew red with anger. "That boy is my responsibility, and he's gone, thanks to this mess he put himself in! I can't believe this....Gah!" Zyflair stormed off, and Safariblade ran after him.

"Maybe Darkvoid57 is gone, but you have us," Safariblade said to him in compassion. Zyflair continued to storm out of the mansion. "Please don't go! You have great knowledge, and I need another person to put up with this child! I can't trust those other two! Omahanime could crush him with his beefy hands, for all I know, and Shadow Arceus has no compassion for anything! Please!" he yelled out in desperation. Zyflair turned around and looked at him, then walked over to him and took Bippa out of his arms. Bippa grabbed Zyflair's finger and pulled on it.

"Bad," Zyflair said gently, and Bippa stopped, instead of crying or screaming. As they walked back into the mansion, Zyflair asked Safariblade, "Why does this child still scream and cry? He's seven years old. Isn't he over that kind of behavior?"

"There's something else I don't talk about often, and it is probably why my son cries all the time." Safariblade sat on the steps. "When Bippa was young, the disease known as cancer took the life of my beloved wife, Bellomence. I still think about her every day, and Bippa cries because he still mourns her death, though he doesn't know it. I'm not sure if he'll ever accept her death." Safariblade wiped a tear from his eye.

"I see." Zyflair responded, and he tickled Bippa's little stomach. Bippa laughed and wiggled around in his arms.

"He hasn't done that in a while," Safariblade added, and they both laughed.

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Afro-G looked around the library, and he eventually found a book stuffed in a desk in the library. "Ooh! This book has something in it!" he announced. Everyone huddled around.

"It's a journal!" Snivylover555 exclaimed. "Can I have it? Please, please, please?" she pleaded. P0KEVORTEX snatched the book out of Afro-G's hands, and skimmed through it.

"Doesn't look interesting to me. There isn't any pictures," he concluded. He gave the book to Snivylover555. "For you," he said sweetly.

"Awwww!" Snivylover555 replied. Dmaster rolled his eyes, and Afro-G frowned. Suddenly, a crash was heard from the other room. PMJ was on the ground, the door to the room on top of her.

"A little help here?" she asked loudly. Dmaster rushed over and helped her up.

"What happened?" Dmaster asked in a shocked girly tone.

"The door was open, so I just came in," PMJ started. "It's just a storage room, but it's interesting. There's so much stuff!" The group looked around the room as she continued. "Then I think a hinge bolted loose, and the door fell on me!"

"Guess she's blond for a reason," P0KEVORTEX said to himself under his breath. Luckily, nobody heard him. Afro-G found a large bottle of hair conditioner, and he stuffed it in his pocket. Snivylover saw a dead rat in the corner, and she gasped quietly. Dmaster saw an old blue pom-pom in the corner.

"Ooh! These match my sparkly blue earrings!" she exclaimed. P0KEVORTEX noticed something hanging from a string in the corner.

"A key?" he thought. And he walked closer, he realized it was indeed a key. "Guys, it's a key!" he exclaimed. "I wonder what this unlocks," he thought.

"Hey, maybe this works on the door downstairs!" Snivylover exclaimed. "You know, the one Shadow Arceus was talking about? The one with the electrical barrier?"

"Let's try it!" Afro-G exclaimed in joy.

"Well, let's look around here and see if anything else interesting shows up," Dmaster added.

"That sounds fine to me," P0KEVORTEX agreed. "Okay team, go to work!" he ordered.

"When did you become the team leader?" PMJ asked.

"I made myself the leader, you know, with my muscles included," P0KEVORTEX gloated. Afro-G clenched his teeth.

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The group of bullies and Dragonexpert kept walking through the graveyard.

"You boys know anything about gardening and farming?" Dragonexpert asked the boys.

"Um, no, we don't," Palkia dialga clash answered. He looked at Dragonexpert. "Why do you ask?"

"I'm just wondering, I thought you boys would be willing to help me with a little project," Dragonexpert replied.

"What kind of project?" Sillykyle asked.

"You see, I've been trying to make this place a better enjoyment for those young fellers out there," Dragonexpert started. "So I thought, 'Why not make a place that kids like ya'll can come to see fresh grown crops growing in action, and animals growing on their own and with family? So this mansion was the first thing I've been thinking about. This place could get some lights to light up this eerie place, and this unused graveyard could be the farm, where the kids get to come pick their own food. The animals would be here, all in one place, where kids like yourselves could come and feed them. What do ya'll think?" he asked.

"It sounds like an interesting idea, but it could take a while," Chariblaze commented.

"So?" Dragonexpert asked. "All we need to do is hire some workers besides yourselves and I-" he started.

"Woah, woah, woah," Palkia dialga clash interrupted. "Who said we're helping you? I have better things to do than spend my spare time building a farm."

"We'll help," Chariblaze and Sillykyle said together. Palkia dialga clash looked at them. "Really, you two? I thought we were bullies, you know, I thought we did things as a group."

"Exactly," Chariblaze responded. "We're helping him as a group." Dragonexpert smiled. Palkia dialga clash thought about it, then smiled back.

"I guess if it's for a good cause, then I'll join in," Palkia dialga clash finally gave in. "But what about school and stuff?" he asked Dragonexpert.

"You don't need school to live, my boys," Dragonexpert replied. "I went without school, yet I'm a thriving farmer. I think you boys can manage without school." The boys grinned together, and Dragonexpert continued. "But I don't want any bullying, you hear?" he asked the boys.

The boys thought about it, then agreed. "Fine," they said in unison.

"Good! Now let's get to work! I've already got the seeds for plowing, the animals wil be ordered to the new barn, and-" Dragonexpert started.

"Please, slow down," Palkia dialga clash interrupted again. "After all, we used to be bullies. Don't make me turn into one again." They all laughed.

Okay, that's it for Chapter 5. Stay tuned! :D
 
Looking great! I love the characters after they've become in-depth!
However, I've noticed my own character using bad grammar. D:
 
Just a tip: It's easier to post links to each post that has a new chapter in it instead of linking them directly. If your story gets long enough, the word count monster will start eating your story.
 
PMJ said:
Just a tip: It's easier to post links to each post that has a new chapter in it instead of linking them directly. If your story gets long enough, the word count monster will start eating your story.

Additionally, after some provoked second thinking thanks to DNA, it's sometimes wiser to use spoiler tags to separate really lengthy chapters from your own commentaries. Case in-point: I do this for both my Feral Twilight and Biohazard fanfics since their chapters' lengths can range from a few pages well into the 'teens or longer. It's your choice, though. But keeping chapters in separate posts is definitely the better option as PMJ said.
 
Oh. So you're saying that I should only give the other chapters when I hit a new page? I'm confused. >.<

@PMJ: Thanks for the pro-tip.
 
Well, look how lowly this former moderator fell. All the way to a desperate butler. ._.
 
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