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Hey, nice chapter, but through the whole thing, I had a feeling you were missing something. After I was done reading it, I realized what it was: Mapleboy86. :p
 
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Your coming up dude! You are in one of the upcoming chapters, hold your horses. We talked about this, remember? Sheesh. Did you catch any S+G errors?
 
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~Beginning of Entry Three~
PMJ laughed quietly and grasped his shield, which slid onto his arm, with about 7 (should be the word) inches of it sticking out from beyond his hand. He smiled and lifted it into the air, creating a large ice berg (<-- one word) from behind him. He jumped on top of it.

Battle music started to play as he lifted his finger, sending ice bergs (<-- again) shooting towards us. We barely dodged, and 42 chocolate unleashed a barrage of arrows at PMJ, who blocked them all effortlessly. He lifted his hands again, making large ice pillars appear out of the ground, moving towards us. I ran at them, jumping and using them to get closer to him, and I jumped into the air and tried to bring my sword down, but he swatted me away easily, making me drop my sword into the ice. He continued to send pillar after pillar towards 42 chocolate, who jumped(,) and dodged(,) and tried firing arrows.

42 chocolate took the opportunity to tie a sack of gun powder to an arrow, light a small fuse and fire the arrow at the main ice berg, which exploded when it hit, shaking me and PMJ (switch "me" and "PMJ" off.

I skidded to a stop and tried to stand, but was too weak.

I spit (<-- change to spat) on the ground in front of him and 42 chocolate stood farther back. He yelled to PMJ.

"...no..."

I tried to grab my sword and slash, but he dodged and hit me in the back, making me fall over onto all fours, panting. 42 chocolate fired a barrage of arrows to cover me, but PMJ blocked them.

"What makes him so darn good?"

"Duh-idiot-its his shield. It is protected with the power of ice-which is controlled (add: in the) form a crystal in his shield, but that is covered in layers of steel.

I stood, shook myself (add: off,) and grabbed my sword and held it tightly.


"You-you won(')t defeat us! You have no idea what will be unleashed upon you! You cannot defeat the mods!"

I tossed 42 chocolate my sword and ran towards PMJ, and jumped as 42 fired the arrow sword, managing to get behind PMJ midair and grabbed the sword as it passed through his body and use the force to spin it, slashing him painfully multiple times, before performing an uber combo on him cause I rok (<-- maybe pwn? I don't know) n00bs. He fell onto the ground, slowly disappearing.


"Nope. Sorry. Let(')s get to town.

"Probably someone who is unimportant. Someone who is liek (<-- Don't know if you actually meant to spell like like that) never on."

"Why- (<-- REMOVE: the dash) are we here again 42?"

"Cause we need a larger team, more supplies, (ADD: and) I am sick of the open fields."

"Right. Well- (<-- REMOVE: the dash, REPLACE: with a comma)I guess we will be here a while then(,) huh."

Oh and I was joking about not being in this chapter
 
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Ha ha, great story! I liked the evil laugh! ...kekekekee...!

Overall I did not see any mistakes, other than the ones Mapleboy86 pointed out.
 
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Wow Mapleboy, thanks for those revisions and stuff. Will edit when I have time. In any case, w/out further ado, CHAPTER 3!!!!


~Beginning of Entry Four~

Previously on Ban Wars:

The war soon reached its peak, leading to a massive battle. Jack Bauer was brought back for yet another season of a dying terrorist show, and Seth discovered the true meaning of his destiny.
*epic music begins playing quietly*
"Seth, what the hell happened?"

"I don't know man-I just don't know!"
*Seth is seen driving a car at high speeds through a city with multiple camera angles focusing on the car, he is being chased and shot at.

"Seth-if we don't stop them then it means the end-the end of-"
*epic music gets louder, 42 chocolate is seen in the courtyard of a building hiding behind a row of bushes sitting atop a metal box, firing at a group of thugs who are trying to enter the building. A mysterious man is seen somewhere else, standing in front of a glowing blue energy core*

"Its finally mine...the energy core to power my ultimate weapon and destroy the city for good...
*Seth is seen running and jumping off a building and grabbing onto the small hatch on a helicopter taking off, and he shoots the back propeller, causing an explosion, sending him flying down. 42 chocolate is seen elsewhere with a pair of scissors and a ticking time bomb in front of him*

"What do you mean cut the blue wire? Their all blue wires!"
*epic music is now intensely loud, making you want to see the thrilling conclusion, Seth is seen running down the hall way of a building holding a super hot chick while a large explosion follows behind him down the hallway at incredible speeds, and he pulls a gun out and shoots the window and jumps through in slow motion, the explosion shooting out above him and papers fly everywhere, and he falls right to the camera when the music goes Buh Buh Buh Buh BUUH! And ends*

And now, the thrilling conclusion of: Ban Wars! Or not, if you want more chapters, which I bet you do.

"E-"

That's how he left it. He stood and left. Why? I couldn't tell-but he seemed like he wanted me to follow. Naturally, I followed, but as I walked out after him, he was gone. I ran down the street looking for him, but could not find him.

"Where are you?!"

No answer. I ran to a small shop, with strange charms.

"Did you see a man-with a cloak run past?"

The shopkeeper shook his head.

"Sorry Seth."

I tilted my head.

"Seth? How do you know my name?"

He laughed.

"Well duh-my name is CCloud."

I smiled, as I had talked to CCloud before on the forums. He was, after all, the one who approved my team, TEAM EXPLOSION which you should all join.

"Heyyy...good to-talk to you again?"

He laughed and nodded.

"Check the stadium-there is a tournament going on there-a fighting tournament."

I nodded and thanked him, and turned and started to walk down the street. 42 chocolate walked up next to me.

"Hey. There is a large bazaar selling unique weapons down there-and I think I am going to get one. So-catch you later?"

"Yeah. There is a tournament at the stadium-I am going to enter."

He nodded and left, and I ran down the street, sword in its slouch on my back, cool wind in my hair. Warm smell of colitas, rising up through the air. Up ahead in the distance, I saw a shimmering light. I knew it was the stadium. I walked inside, and went to the registration counter. I signed up, and after sitting and waiting, the rounds were posted. I was in the first round, and I walked to the stadium arena, and found it to be just a large ring with sand covering the floor. My opponent was a rather large man, with a large battle ax. He puffed his chest and yelled in a booming voice.

"I AM THE POWER OF THREE! PREPARE TO BE ANHILILATED!"

I slowly pulled the sword out of its holster and pointed it at him. He yelled again and charged at me, and I jumped into the air, landing on the ax he tried to bring down on me. I swung the sword at his head, but he lifted the ax, throwing me off. I landed in an awkward position, and he swung his ax at me, and I tried to block, but even so, the force launched me across the floor to the wall. I slowly stood and spoke to myself.

"Cant let him hit me again like that-I have to hit him fast-"

I looked around, noticing two large pillars.

If I can knock those down-he will try to keep them from crushing him, giving me the opportunity to strike!

I ran towards one of the pillars, jumping to avoid his ax, and I hit it multiple times, causing it to crack. I ran and did the same to the adjacent pillar, and they were both cracked. I called him over, trying to bait him into swinging to the side. He took the bait, swinging his ax, destroying the left pillar's support, causing it to fall. He looked with a worried expression as it fell on him, yet his incredible stature allowed him to hold it up. I ran and slashed the other pillars base, causing it to fall, totally pressing down on TPo3. I ran at him, and I hit him with incredible force from my sword, sending him flying into the wall. A cloud of dust appeared, and when it cleared, he was laying in a pile of rubble, a little bit of drool hanging from his lips and moving spiral eyes. I laughed and clapped my hands together and left the stadium, waiting for round 2 to start.

"Well that was-anticlimactic."

The rounds continued, and contestants were eliminated. Finally, it was down to a man in a cloak and myself.

"This is rather cliche, is it not?"

I spun around to find the man standing behind me.

"Sure-but who are you?"

"Defeat me and you will find out."

The horns blew and I walked into the stadium, but saw a massive pillar, with hundreds of various traps and obstacles, with a glowing orb at the top.

"WELCOME ALL FANS! THIS IS THE CAPTURE THE ORB FINAL ROUND! CONTESTANTS, MAKE YOUR WAY TO THE TOP FIRST AND GRAB THE ORB, MAKE YOUR WAY DOWN AND YOU WIN! BEWARE-EVERYTHING IS LEGAL GAME! BEGIN!!"

Startled, I started to run towards the pillar, and entered, and began climbing the stairs. My opponent was no where in site, but as I passed a window, I saw him flying towards the top, with a jet of flame behind him.

"Son of a bitch!"

I started to run faster, and slowly, I began catching up to him. A large window soon came into my view, I shattered the glass and jumped up on it, and began grabbing objects that stuck out of the facade of the building, climbing as fast as I could.

"God damn it how is he so fast?"

I soon got a good foot hold and tried to jump up, and it started to work in my favor, and soon I was able to catch up to him. I continued to jump up, and he was flying. He sped up, and reached the top first, and was going to grab the orb, but I jumped high enough to bring my sword down in front of him, throwing him off. He pointed his fist at me and a bolt of electricity shot out, slamming into my sword. I tried to push it back, but the electricity kept me from moving for a brief moment.

Fire AND Electricity? I think I know who this guy is!

I managed to gain my footing and ran at him, and I swung my sword in an upper cut motion, but he blocked it with a wall of fire. We continued to launch attacks at each other, with the other countering. I was now getting tired, as was he. I tried for one last swing, with all my power. He combined his to shoot both electricity and fire at me, but I broke through it and hit him, sending him crashing into the ground below. Panting, I soon lost my balance as the tower began crumbling. I turned and tried to grab the orb which was rolling down. I stabbed my sword into the surface and hung on, grabbing the orb. The structure soon fell, and I managed to jump off in the nick of time. The man had gotten away. A massive plume of dust shot into the air, and after it settled, I stood, panting, with the orb in one hand, sword in the other. The man was also panting, still covered by his hood.

"Games up-Electimortar!"

The man was motionless before throwing off his hood, revealing his face.

"Congrats Seth. You figured it out. Props."

I smiled weakly, exhausted. I held up the orb, and for the next few hours, life was a blur. A party was thrown, and I managed to find Electimortar in the crowd. I ran to him.

"Hey-your a really good fighter. I could use someone like that in my group-would you-care to join me in fighting the mods?"

"Fighting the mods eh? Hell-I got nothing better to do in this dump. Lets go."

I nodded and walked out, back to the tavern. 42 chocolate stood there, holding a large box. I ran to him.

"42 chocolate, meet the newest member of our team, Electimortar."

The two shook hands, and 42 chocolate set down the box.

"Whats inside?"

He smiled and opened it, revealing a large quiver that was shaped like a box, with a large cord strapped to one side. Two crossbows, about 7 inches long each sat in holsters. He took them out, revealing a rotating barrel clip for arrows, which were considerably smaller than the ones he previously used. He fired them off, with speed and precision. He then spun them, clicked a switch, and combined them together in a flash, revealing a larger cross bow, with double barrel clips, shooting two arrows at a time. He fired again, with incredible power and precision. He took the box, strapped it onto his back, connected the cord to his rife, flip another switch and pulled the trigger, firing hundreds of arrows a minute, as if it was a primitive mini gun.

"AWESOME!!11one1!!1"

He nodded and smiled.

"This-is my weapon now."

Electimortar smiled with approval, and I turned to look down the road.

"Guess-we should head out then. We got what we came for. Lets go."

They nodded and followed, and I was happy, as now we were even stronger against the mods.

~Elsewhere~
"ELECTIMORTAR? HE JOINED THEM?"

"Kekeke..."

"All right all right. I will send him."

The whiny man turned and walked to another man, covered in a black cloak. He patted his shoulder, and the man smiled, and something large and silver started to appear in his hands.

"As you wish."

~End of Entry Four~
 
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Thanks. I got the inspiration for your character when looking at your banner in your sig, the Yellow then Red just screamed a magic based person.
 
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Haha loved the chapter. No boring descriptions, just violence and drama. Yay
 
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Nice chapter! Still can't wait for more ^-^
 
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You realize that this could be turned into an epic movie, but probably won't due to copyright.

Awesome story overall and I think has a lot of potential.

Good luck in writing the next chapter.
 
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Does anyone want me to continue this story? Cause Chapter 4 is- ish percent done. Its like 47% done. Anyone actually reading it?
 
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I'm still reading ;o;. Lol, you still have tons of fans!
 
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*shrugs* I just wish others would post. I want to know if my writing has errors, it bothers me that I have almost 500 views, but like 53 posts, and a few of them from me. So idk I just got discouraged. Itll be up within this week, by friday at 12:00 midwest time. At the latest. Promise.
 
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I like it, and I would point out mistakes, etc., but others beat me to it.
 
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...no one else has pointed out any but mapleboy that I can think of. Zyflair as well. Thats 2 people. If you find an error, TELL MEH!
 
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I must ask, have you ever typed it into a word document to check for mistakes then post it? It wouldn't get rid of all the mistakes but it would get rid of most of them.

Other people who read can later tell you if there was a mistake or two that the word document didn't catch, you thought sounded right, or if you didn't give enough info.

Example: She shot three at him.

Correction: She shot three icicles, from the iceberg, at him.

Unless you have a sentence before that describes what he shot, this would be a bad example.

Hope this helps and keep on writing, or typing, whatever it is that you do. (Seriously, you got me hanging at the edge of my seat waiting for the next chapter!!:D)
 
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Yeah I try that, and it says its complete so...anyways, after a much waited ado, here it is, CHAPTER 4!!!!! All comments are welcome. Thanks so much guys.



~Beginning of Entry Five~
We stood on the plain, surrounded by members. The members were not friendly however, instead wanting to kill them. It was a dead silence, with no wind. The members charged, and the group unleashed attack after attack, bringing down more and more members. Soon, few remained, but they held their ground. A noise was heard from over the largest hill in the plain, and soon, a wave of soldiers poured over the hill, ready to aid the few remaining members. Already tired, we lifted our weapons again. A large rock moved behind the members, and they moved back, to stand next to it. A mod stood atop the rock, staring at us. I moaned.

"Not...another...mod...so...soon..."

The mod smiled. He lifted his arms, and jagged rocks popped up everywhere. The sky began to turn black as well, and thunder ripped through the clouds. Another mod slowly appeared floating down from the clouds, but he hung just below them, electricity surging around him. Another noise was heard, as behind us, another army appeared, this one of members who fought against the mods, led by none other than Dragon Rider of Pokebeach. He rode next to me and stopped his army.

"Well Seth, looks like you have gotten yourself a little crew. Your not very smart though, taking on the mods by yourself. You need help."

He pulled a rather large broadsword from its holster on his back and held it in the air one handed, pointed towards the other army. The members behind him lifted their weapons, various shields, swords, spears and bows, and all made a "Huh!" grunt noise, as if programmed to do so. The mod in the clouds just stared and watched, and the mod on the rock lifted his hand, and something silver began to appear in his hand. It soon began to materialize into something very noticeable.

"That-that is-a-spoon?"

The mod lunged into the air and slammed into the ground with the ladle of the spoon, sending rocks rippling through the earth towards us. We dodged, but barely.

"Guys! Its Heavenly Spoon :F!"

I was about to charge, but noticed the mod hovering above the clouds. Dragon Rider held his sword firm.

"MEMBERS! CHARGE!"

All the surrounding members charged at each other, engaging in battle. I struck some down, making my way out. Heavenly Spoon :F fought Electimortar and 42 chocolate, and I made it to an open part of the plain. I pointed my sword at the mod.

"Listen mod! I will defeat you! Every last one of you!"

The mod was silent, and pointed his hand at me, firing a large bolt of electricity at me. With fear in my eyes, I reacted in slow motion, stabbing my sword into the ground and holding onto it, trying to direct the electricity down into the earth. While some of it went in, a good chunk stayed in my body, shocking me intensely. I panted heavily, trying to stand. I almost stood, but collapsed onto my knees, panting again. The mod lifted his hand again, and fired another bolt. I stared at it as it shot towards me, and turned and closed my eyes before it hit me. It never did. I opened my eyes, to find a man with a rather large weapon which looked like an ax fused with a giant sludge hammer. The lightning surged on the end of the mallet, and he swung it around, firing the electricity back at the mod, who merely slapped it away. The man turned and picked me up and set me down, and tossed a small bag of leaves over my head, essentially healing me. I smiled and picked up my sword with newfound strength, and stood next to the man. He was massive in stature, with large muscles, and I paled in comparison.

"Names Seth. Seth1789110. What about you?"

He laughed and smiled.

"Hey Seth. Its Galefail."

I beamed with joy.

"Galefail? For realz?"

He nodded and laughed again.

"Yeah. 42 chocolate asked me to come and help ya. So I did. And looks like you needed it."

I nodded.

"Well-we have to deal with that mod first."

I lifted my sword, and the mod slowly floated down. He hovered above the ground, waiting. I got ready to charge, but Galefail stood there. He smiled and split his large hammer apart, revealing two smaller hammers. He held one in each hand, and pointed one towards the mod, and by pressing a special button that was hidden, he fired the large mallet part of the hammer, and the steel block like box shot at the mod, attached to a chain. Caught off guard, the chain wrapped around him, and Galefail combined the hammers together, and he swung it behind his head, throwing the mod. The mod soon regained his cool, and fired a bolt of electricity down the chain, shocking Galefail, who released the chain. The mod landed on thin air and flew towards us, with electricity covering his fists. He landed a punch on Galefail, filling his body with 1000 volts. The mod repeated the punches, and I charged at him, swinging my sword, but to no avail. The mod disappeared behind me and threw me up into the air and delivered multiple electric blows, before throwing me into the ground. I hit the ground and slowly got to my feet, smoke wisping off my shoulders.

"...ouch..."

I was breathing heavily, in pain. Galefail stood, panting as well, holding his hammer. I saw the members fighting for the mods prevailing over the members siding with me, and I turned to see Electimortar and 42 chocolate struggling to defeat Heavenly Spoon :F. I felt my heart pounding in my ears, and I slowly stood and turned to Galefail.

"GALEFAIL!"

I could not here myself, so I yelled as loud as I could.

"WE HAVE TO GO-NOW! AS IN-RETREAT!!"

I turned and started to run, but a wall of fire shot in front of me, making me fall onto my back. A mod jumped in front of me, with fire covering his fists. I could not make him out either, as all the mods wore long black cloaks. I stood, scrambling for my sword. Electimortar, Galefail and 42 chocolate ran next to me, and Heavenly Spoon :F, and the other two mods surrounded us. Panting, I thought of what to do.

The members on our side are loosing. We are losing. Us four cant take on three mods alone, not right now anyways. Do we-run? Do we-fight?

The mods lifted into the air, and they turned to their members, who had now just about defeated the last of the resistance members. Heavenly Spoon :F yelled to them.

"MEMBERS! DESTROY THIS RESISTANCE-AND THESE WARRIORS HERE!"

With that, the mods flew off, leaving us with the members. Without thinking, I ran towards our remaining members, trying to save them. I swung my sword with skill and speed, taking down enemy after enemy, before I reached the five remaining members on my side. I stood before them.

"Want to kill these guys? Your gonna have to go through me."

One member smiled and started to run at me, but an arrow that soon lodged itself deep in his brain decided otherwise. The next one tried, only to meet a powerful sludge hammer to the face. The next followed, only to be burned to death in front of them. We surrounded these members, and slowly killed them off, painfully. After killing the last one, I turned to the members, who were grateful.

"Don't worry, your safe with us."

They nodded but turned, and pointed to Dragon Rider, who was on the ground, in pain, with blood dripping down his chest. I ran to him.

"Dragon Rider no! This-this cant be happening! You cant die! You cant!"

He coughed up blood and looked at me.

"Seth-your-your a good-"

He coughed up more blood.

"I know you can do it. You just need-training-to learn your true-skills."

"But where-where am I going to find someone to teach me those skills?"

He coughed up more blood and sighed.

"Deep-deep within-the forbidden lands-of the Pokebeach VG-Kevin Garrett resides-he is old and wise-with many posts-he-can train you-"

I nodded and watched as Dragon Rider passed on. I stood and turned to the others.

"Listen. Everyone. Including you members. We are going-to a forbidden place."

42 chocolate stepped forward.

"The forbidden lands? The video game part of the forums? How do you expect us to get their?"

"We can just scroll down the pa-"

I looked at the ground, realizing it wouldn't be that easy to just scroll down the page.

"We-walk-through-those."

I pointed to a large mountain chain off in the distance.

"We go tomorrow. First-"

I bit my lip, a little disgusted at what I was going to say.

"We have to check every body-for anything valuable-money-weapons-information-anything. Both sides. Weapons as well. We carry back everything to that city, sell it ALL off at the coliseum. Then, we use it to buy supplies. Understand? We will get a hotel room, and stay the night in the city, and leave tomorrow at dawn. Understood?"

Everyone nodded and started to work, and I did the same. After grueling hours, we finally arrived at the coliseum, carrying hundreds of dollars in weapons. We sold it all off, and went to buy weapons for the members, armor, food, clothing ammunition, explosives, and new horses and things to carry it all in. We found an inn, and stayed the night. In the morning, I was the first up. I got up and walked outside, looking into the cold dark sky, thinking.

Dragon Rider-your death-is not in vain. We will defeat these mods, and restore peace to Pokebeach.

I went and woke the others up, and after eating, we rode out of the town. We traveled for days, until we reached the mountains. It was cold on the mountains, and every village we passed was poor and run down, many which had members who were unaware of the conflict. They continued to ask us when the leader of all the villages, PMJ, would return, but every time it was asked, I ignored them, knowing I had killed PMJ. I thought hard about the mods that I killed, wondering if that was the right course of action. We climbed higher into the mountains where it grew very cold. We passed a rather large cave which appeared vacant, and we decided to stay inside, setting up a fire. We heard a loud grumble noise, and heard a walking noise, not from a human, but from what sounded like a lizard. We grabbed our horses and ran out, and a large dragon flew out, and it roared, breathing a magnificent blue fire, and it turned and hovered before us.

"WHO DARE ENTER MY HOME?"

I stepped forward.

"It-it was us-uh-dragon-sir-"

"THAT IS NOT MY NAME!"

He blew more blue flames of rage, and stared at us.

"Well then-what-what is your name?"

"I AM THE WISE LOU CYPHER!"

I tilted my head.

I portrayed him as a dragon? What was I thinking? He isn't a dragon! O shoot! I wont have time to edit this out-so I should change this thought into a thought that I as a character would have instead. *Ahem* Lou Cypher is a dragon? He is wise-so I guess it fits...still feels weird though...

"Nice-to meet you-Lou Cypher. I-am Seth1789110. This is 42 chocolate, Electimortar and Galefail. And these are members traveling with us."

He calmed himself, and he landed himself on a large rocky platform in front of us, talking in a much gentler voice.

"Ah-Seth1789110. I see you are carrying weapons. Have the mods finally decided to strike?"

I nodded.

"Yes. They have killed many members in a rage. We are fighting them-but they are very powerful. They have a strong well trained army of their own, consisting of red coats-err members loyal to the mods. We just fought them-along with three mods. One was Heavenly Spoon :F, and the other didn't reveal themselves. One controlled fire-while the other controlled electricity. We are now looking for Kevin Garrett, so he can help us train."

Lou Cypher nodded and closed his eyes, and a small blue orb began to float in front of me. I grabbed it.

"Lou-what is this?"

"If you are ever in danger, use the power of that orb to summon me to help."

I nodded and thanked Lou Cypher. He offered to fly us and our horses out of the mountains to the other side, which we happily agreed to. Upon reaching the other side, another mod stood in the field. He snapped his finger and three other mods joined him. He lifted his arm and fired a blast of energy at Lou Cypher, who roared in pain. Lou Cypher began to turn black and dark blue, and he roared again and lifted into the air, hovering above the mods.

"God damn it GOD DAMN IT! They just don't make this easy!"

I grabbed my sword. Galefail ran at the mod behind the front mod, and the others ran at a different mod, leaving me and the front mod. The members attacked Lou Cypher.

"Who are you now?"

No response. I held my sword forward.

"ANSWER ME!"

I grew angry, and I charged at him. He tilted his head to easily avoid the slash. I continued, but he easily dodged every one of them. I was exhausted, and fell to my knees, consumed by rage. He put his hand on my shoulder, and I felt dark thoughts enter my mind.

You are full of anger...release it...let it consume you and you will hold unimaginable power. Trust me. Let me show you.

I looked at the ground, and a tear fell to the ground. I grabbed my sword and swung up with all the force I could muster, and I slashed through the man. A cloud of roses flew into the air. I knew it was just a fake. As were the other mods. I turned to Lou Cypher, grabbed the orb, held it tightly, and put it on the edge of my sword, and fired a light blue beam, hitting Lou, pushing the darkness out of him. He held the orb close, and called Lou to go away. He nodded and flew off. I waved to him.

"Thanks Lou!"

I turned, and saw the other mods were also illusions. We all gathered ourselves, and we walked up the last hill. Thinking we were done, we soon saw a massive forest stood in front of us, with the canopy three stories high. I sank to the ground.

"No way..."

Galefail picked me up by the shirt and set me down.

"Listen. Complaining will only get us farther."

I could tell the sarcasm in his voice, but I chose to ignore it. I stood, put the sword in its holster in my back and started to walk towards it.

"Well guys, we better start heading in if we are going to find Kevin Garrett..."

With that, we started in, knowing there was no turning back once we got inside. We would be safe from the mods at least, giving us some time to rest.

~Elsewhere~

Kekeke...they got away?

"Uh-yes sir. We were unable to stop them."

Kekeke chase them down-into the swamp.

"No."

Kekeke you disobey me?

"No, you just keep doing that damn Kekeke thing. It bothers me. SO MUCH."

Kekeke...Kekeke...Go.

"Yes sir."

~End of Entry Five~
 
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Good chapter, but I think you are overusing the hyphens (-). They are good to use but cut down on them and use more commas.
 
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Mmmk, will do for the upcoming chapters. There is just a lot of stuttering, cause the characters are deep in thought so...
 
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