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Copied Yu-Gi-Oh much? The exact same thing happens, where all of the main character's friends are turned into cards. Copying... is not cool. But it was nicely written. Just don't copy again. :p

Zyflair down, but Spoon :F wins partially the battle, forcing you to retreat. Interesting.
 
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Dude, I've never had a frickin prized pluspower. :p

That WAS rather short as you said, but hey, I'm not complaining.
 
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PokeChamp said:
Copied Yu-Gi-Oh much? The exact same thing happens, where all of the main character's friends are turned into cards. Copying... is not cool. But it was nicely written. Just don't copy again. :p

Zyflair down, but Spoon :F wins partially the battle, forcing you to retreat. Interesting.

Thats the point. I have copied FF7, the pokemon TCG, and various other things. The whole point i I make fun of various battle systems. Its all in good fun. Lol. Heavenly Spoon :F WILL go down. Soon.


Zyflair said:
Dude, I've never had a frickin prized pluspower. :p

That WAS rather short as you said, but hey, I'm not complaining.

I told you it was. I didnt want to spend a bunch of time making an enormous chapter bigger, and I didnt want to delay it. So I made it to the point. And I ALWAYS prize them. I prize poketurns, cyrus, and egains whenever I run SPs. ALWAYS.
 
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Chapter 5 said:
"GUYS! THE EPIC MUSIC IS ABOUT TO PLAY! ITS NOW OR NEVER!"

I just laughed at this. I love how you are making fun of all the different games. KIU!
 
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-_- You just can't get enough of the chains, can you Seth?
 
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:p Ha Zig. I got the idea of those from yugioh from that one card that like lowers attack points by like 500, and I cant remember what it was. The battle against Zyflair was making fun of yugioh, so that is where it came from. Glad you like it.
 
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of course i did. i was (finally) involved :p
 
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:D Good chapter. I like the castle my family owns :p.
 
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Sadly, it seems as if I have turned into an arrow-firing robot and no longer a companion. :'(

Good chapter, by the way.
 
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Dont worry, you will still be important. This chapter focused more towards Electimortar/Seth/Ziggoratt999. Dont worry.
 
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Yes I'm finally in! But I have a question... where the heck did I get a salamence X from? Lol jk, but you know I woulda sent you RampChamp a deck that you could never hope to beat
 
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Aww cute Max! Thats adorable, that little phrase you crossed out. Anyways, whenever you DO get Sally X, you OWE me it. And glad ya lieked it.
 
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All right everyone, chapter 7 is on its way, expect it tomorrow. Just working on the finishing touches and proof reading.

bacon: I removed all the excessive exclamation marks and capitals from the title, please keep it neat and tidy in future.
 
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Seth1789110 said:
All right everyone, chapter 7 is on its way, expect it tomorrow. Just working on the finishing touches and proof reading.

bacon: I removed all the excessive exclamation marks and capitals from the title, please keep it neat and tidy in future.

hahaha can you post what he had it as? Oh and loved ch. 6. And ch. 7 tomorrow? Wow you're going a lot faster than you were at first
 
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Here it is! Chappy 7!
~Beginning of Entry Eight~

I stood, waiting. Days had gone by since I had saved Ziggoratt999, and we had spent a good chunk of time together, just us. Tonight was the night of the celebration for me saving her, which I found kind of pointless, except for the fact that I would be able to dance with her. She told me to wait outside her room while she changed. After what seemed like an hour, she walked out.

"So-how do I look?"

I smiled.

"Fantastic."

The white silk dress on her sparkled in the chandelier's light. Her hair dangling down to her neck, a tiara standing proud on her head, demanding attention. Make up illuminated her rosy cheeks.

"Good."

I nodded and took her hand and led her down the hall. We reached the festival, and I was allowed at the head table. The others sat at the table as well. 42 chocolate whispered to me.

"Are you guys dating yet?"

I hit him in the shoulder.

"No. Working on it. That's what this dance is for."

A toast was proposed to me, and after dinner, tables were cleared to reveal a large dance floor. Music began playing and I held out my hand. I was blushing.

"May I have this dance?"

She smiled and took my hand. We walked to the floor and began dancing.

Should I ask her now?

"Seth-there is something I want to show you."

I nodded and let her lead me to the thing she wanted to show me. It was a fountain, and small candles floated in it. One of them started, and the others caught fire, revealing a brilliant display of light.

"Wow...that is pretty cool..."

She smiled and explained its significance to her. We stood there for about 10 minutes before she turned and looked at me. She brushed the hair out of her eyes. She smiled and we slowly brought our heads closer together until our lips almost touched. About a centimeter before they were touching, I heard clapping.

WHO WOULD INTERRUPT ME NOW? HONESTLY?! If its 42, he is DEAD.

I turned to find a mod standing on the fountain clapping.

???: Bravo, what a cute performance.

I stood in front of her, and my sword appeared.

"Right...any particular reason your here, or did you come for an ass whooping?"

He stood and clapped again.

???: Quite the contrary...

He lifted his hand and an incredible bolt of electricity slammed into me. I fell onto my knees in pain.

Not THIS guy...

I stood, panting. I grabbed my sword and ran at him, and smashed his electrical bolts into the ground. I jumped into the air but was blown back by more electricity.

To much...

He started to walk towards her, but I jumped and slashed at him, but he disappeared and reappeared behind me and grabbed me, and electricity surged through my body. I fell to the ground in pain. I stood once again, and swung at him, and he disappeared again. I stood in front of Ziggoratt999. He appeared on the fountain and began charging. I stabbed my sword into the ground and waited. He fired the blast, and I pushed her out of the way and held my sword as the thousands of volts slammed into my. As if moving in slow motion, I lifted my sword and pointed it at him weakly, firing it back at him. He easily grabbed it, spun his hand and fired it back at me. My eyes widened.

No...

The beam smashed me into a building, and I fell to the ground, defeated. I tried to stand but could not. He walked over and grabbed Ziggoratt999, who tried to break free, but could not. He opened a portal of darkness and pushed her through it and walked through.

"NO!"

42 chocolate and the others arrived seconds later to find me defeated on the ground. Galefail ran next to me.

"Seth! What happened?"

I used him for support and stood.

"A mod! He came! He attacked me! He was to powerful and he-"

I looked away, tears of rage and sorrow falling.

"He took her!"

They were shocked.

"Where?"

"I DON'T KNOW!"

"Well why didn't you come get us?! We could have helped!"

I spun around, enraged. I refused to answer and walked past, nearly collapsing. The king and queen soon arrived. The king stopped me.

"What happened?"

I looked at him, anger burning in my eyes. I shoved his arm out of the way and walked away. They watched me walk away, knowing they could do nothing. I walked into my room and fell onto the bed, and fell asleep. I relived the event over and over, each time not being able to do a thing. I awoke the next morning and found the group eating breakfast.

"Pack up. We are going. Now."

"But-"

"NOW!"

Within five minutes we were leaving. We journeyed across the plains until we decided to set up a camp. I sat around the fire, depressed. 42 chocolate sat next to me.

"Seth-don't worry. We will rescue her."

I said nothing, only stared at the fire. After a long pause, I sighed.

"We-we were alone-at a fountain-and we almost kissed-our lips were so close-and he came-and he-he knew every attack I tried-he outsmarted me-and-it cost me to lose her-"

He patted my back.

"Hey cheer-"

I hit his hand away.

"Do you have any idea-what its like? To knowingly watch the girl you love-just-get ripped away from you-without you being able to do a thing?"

~Elsewhere~

Ziggoratt999 was thrown onto the old cement floor in front of the man, who after staring at her, stood. He walked in front of her.

Well hello-princess...kekeke...

"Lemme go! What are you going to do to me?"

She thought for a moment.

"Or-what are you going to do to Seth?"

Nothing dear...I will do nothing. You will.

He put his hand on her shoulder and a strong wave of darkness flowed from it into her. She struggled to resist, but was unable to. A final tear fell from her eye.

I'm sorry Seth...

She stood, a certain dark color in her eyes.

Welcome kekeke...your first mission-is to kill Seth1789110 and his friends. Take the army with you-and destroy the entire castle! Kekeke...

She nodded and turned and left. She took a cloak and put it on and left, to order the army to charge, and to head for the castle. Days passed, and as we journeyed, a young member ran up to us.

"Are you Seth1789110?"

He was panting.

"Yeah-why?"

"This-this is for you-"

I took it and read it.

"What? They cant be striking!"

I turned.

"The mods sent their army and a single mod to attack the castle! We have to hurry back!"

We turned and started back, going at a fast speed. We reached the castle in half the days, and as we stood on the hill, we saw a strange sight. The army that sided with us stood in front of the castle, organized and ready to fight.

"What-how did they-"

We quickly joined them. Two mods hovered above their army. One of them lifted his hand Lightning started to swirl. I felt a burning determination.

"Guys-that one-hes mine..."

I ran towards him. The armies charged at each other, beginning a large and bloody battle. I made it to a clear opening between the armies. It was just me and the mod. He snapped his fingers and an electrical forcefield surrounded us. He threw off his hood.

"Seth! Your persistence is over-NOW!"

I stared at the mod.

"No way..."

He lifted both hands and electricity violently surrounded them.

"PREPARE TO GET RIPPED!"

Its Shining Raikou! No wonder he was so powerful!

He pointed his hands at me and electricity shot at me. A voice came into my head as a large button with a triangle glowing appeared in front of me.

Use Reaction Commands to make the battle easier!

I hit the "triangle" button and dodged his attacked. I ran around him, trying to confuse him, but he continued to track me, firing the powerful bolts.

REACTION

I hit triangle again and dodged. This repeated multiple times until I managed to use a command to hit him directly. He fell to the ground a large scythe appeared.

"ENOUGH!"

He started to run towards me, swinging his scythe into the ground with every step. Rings of electricity shot out.

Holy crap he is pissed!

He jumped into the air and swung his scythe, and I tried to block it, but it launched me into the wall. A crack in the wall allowed 42 chocolate to jump through, firing arrows to cover me before he could strike again. The wall closed.

"Thanks 42! Its time to beat this guy just like we did PMJ!"

He lifted into the air again and two cyclone cells of electricity formed from the sky, swirling into both hands. He fired beams towards us, and we had to run to dodge them. As soon as a triangle appeared, I hit triangle.

REACTION COMMAND

I hit it, and it caused me to jump forward. I hit it again, and 42 chocolate did the same. I hit it multiple times, jumping through the air, dodging his attacks before I had to rapidly hit triangle, hitting Shining Raikou into the ground. He hit the ground and I hit the finishing triangle attack. He stood.

SR: Think THATS ENOUGH?

"Not even close!"

I ran towards him. 42 chocolate fired more arrows, and SR tried to attack him with the beams, but I jumped in the way and smashed it down. I dropped to my knees and 42 chocolate unloaded about 1000 arrows in a matter of seconds. SR was pushed back into the wall.

"GRRRAAHHH!"

He floated towards us and disappeared, and reappeared, scythe in hand. He through it at the ground, and a ring of electricity shot out. He ran on around, firing more of them. He threw his scythe again, leaving a copy of it. I ran and grabbed it. I tossed my sword to 42 chocolate, who fired it into the air. I jumped, and slashed him in the back with his scythe. I grabbed my sword by the handle as it flew passed and delivered a score of slashes with both the scythe and the sword, hitting triangle whenever the opportunity arose. I hit him towards the ground. When he landed, he blasted electricity around to prevent himself from falling.

"NOT TODAY SETH! PREPARE TO GET-"

He lifted into the air and started to collect massive amounts of electricity.

"FRIED!"

He fired the bolt at me, but I was ready. I stabbed my sword into the ground and held tight, the electricity charging into my sword. Once he finished, I tossed the sword to 42 chocolate, who fired. Aided with the electricity, it shot at light speed at SR, who was unable to dodge. The sword penetrated his chest, and he floated in the air like that, holding his hand to his chest. I ran at him and he held out his hand weakly, firing weak bolts at me. I continued to hit triangle, moving towards him, moving and jumping in mid air.

REACTION COMMAND: Reversal-reversal-reversal-rev-rev-re-re-reversal-reversal-reversal-

After countless reversals, I reached him. I drove my sword into him, and pulled it out, spun, and smashed him into the ground.

"Yeah!"

42 chocolate fired arrows at him with incredible precision as he fell. He hit the ground, and struggled to his knees.

"SETH! You do not know what will befall you! I may have fallen-but the others will destroy you! End your pitiful quest now and serve us!"

"No way! If I do-then you mods will just kill everyone!"

He was disappearing.

"So be it!"

He vanished, as did the wall. I turned to 42 chocolate and gave him a high five..

"Nice! Thanks for the help dude!"

He nodded and we turned and stared at the other mod, who attacked by firing red lasers. The exploded as they hit the ground, and the mod floated with a magical like power, avoiding all attacks thrown at her. Another mod had joined, this one using fire attacks and close combat moves. Electimortar fought the fire mod, so 42 and I charged at the other mod.

Three down, who knows how many more to go...

~End of Entry Eight~
 
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I suggest some improvements:
She wore a white silk dress, and let her hair down. She wore a tiara of sorts. She had put on a blush sort of make up, and she smiled.
You fall under the same trap many do in description: your verb choice is bland while doing so; I see "wore," "let," "wore," and "had." I dare you to come tell me those aren't boring verbs. Regardless, they are in relation to the vast choice of vocabulary out there. So why didn't you choose interesting verbs? The most likely answer: your subject (Zig) can only do so much besides wearing objects. Instead of having the sentences focus on Zig, watch what happens with I move the spotlight to the other nouns (Note: I thought of this on the run, so don't expect something perfect):

The white silk dress on her sparkled in the chandelier's light. Her hair dangling down to her neck, a tiara standing proud on her head, demanding attention. Make up illuminated her rosy cheeks.

Isn't that something you can visualize more? Having different subjects mean a better verb selection to choose from.

Watch yourself and make sure not to fall under that so often; it destroys the beauty of writing
 
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Kk. Do you mind if I use your description? Cause its kinda good. Lol. And thanks. Did you liek the chapter?
 
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No problem.

Two issues: You're rushing, and becuase you're rushing, you're making a cliché plot. Am I supposed to elaborate on that?
 
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No haha. I have ideas for certain things, but others I don't, so I don't want to take forever thinking of individual ideas for like EVERYTHING, so I just kinda use cliche plots, its kinda easier to read I guess. But there are some individual stuff coming up, something you would NEVER expect. Anyways, I don't think this is cliche at all. I mean how many plots(besides the stories that pop up like every day on this website banking off my idea) do you find that involve a pokemon forum that becomes like a video game sorta? Lol. And thanks. More to come. Gonna be about a week-1.5 weeks-2 weeks, need a bit of a break.
 
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I have a question, when you hit the electric wall, does that make the crack or is there just a random crack?
Great story by the way. I think your right. Everyone needs a break eventually. Good luck writing the next chapter!!
 
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