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RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Mk63:

While I have yet to read your story, it seems to be progressing rapidly. If you could kindly post in the Library the link to the next chapter it'd be greatly appreciated.

I will read your story soon

-Max Shade IV
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Of course I'll add it now! Thanks for looking and I can't wait to hear what you think!

EDIT: It seems that chapter 7 is already in there.
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Moneyking63 said:
Of course I'll add it now! Thanks for looking and I can't wait to hear what you think!

EDIT: It seems that chapter 7 is already in there.

I meant your next chapter, lol. i've been working on the library all day, I added chapter 7 quite some time ago. But i appreciate your help!
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

What library are you guys talking about?
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

The Canalave Library, its stickied.
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Here I'll just give you a link But its stickied under the section writing corner.
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Hmm hmm... anyways, going back to the chapter. The content is pretty good - nice to see how you handled the evolution there. It's also good to see some new pokes involved, and more characters :)

However... especially compared to some chapters, the grammer and such was lacking. Although I'm not PERFECTLY sure on my grammer with speech, I know that there were a multitude of problems with it here... I don't want to be excessively picky on things (but this might well sound picky), but be careful of these:

Even if it's wrong, at LEAST be consistant with the way you handle speech. For example, you used several different "endings" for speech as I'll show now:

Moneyking63 said:
“Come on guys we just stopped for lunch like an hour ago! It’s only a couple more miles.” Exclaimed Max.

“Hey Max at least let me see the map then” asked Matt. (No gramma used in this example)


“What!Said Matt and Ellen in unison.

“You could have told us this earlier!” exclaimed Ellen

From what I know, you should use a comma at the end of your speech if you say something afterwards, like so:

“Hey Max at least let me see the map then,” asked Matt.


If you aren't going to say something afterwards, but you're going on to an action of sorts, it's best to end the sentence in the speech marks and start a new sentence afterwards. I can't remember seeing an example of this being done (or done incorrectly for that matter) but be wary of it anyhow.


Also, if you say anything after the speech, do NOT capitalize the word afterwards. The last two sentences I quoted showed the inconsistancy here - you did this at times and not at others. You need to be careful to keep the same pattern of grammer within your work - it's hard to read something that's confused by itself.


Final small point just now, which I saw you fixed - take caution with the BB Code if you choose to use it. Make sure that you get it right before you leave the thread, otherwise your chapter looks messy and unprofessional. Although... you need the grammer right (or at least consistant for neatness) for this too.


Do I sense that you rushed this a little too much? This chapter was far more error-laiden than the previous one... I don't feel that you took your time on this one. I know you're trying hard, and I'm not slating the content of the chapter; you're doing well in terms of story progression and such. It's the readibility issue that I'm concerned about. I can understand what you're saying, but that's no reason not to clean up a little. I'm used to poor writing from those around me, so I can understand things a little easier. However... some people can't, and so you need to make sure to keep it smart.


Good luck with the next chapter. If you can take your time a little more with it to clean up the speech, you can make these great in more than just the content.
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Alright I see what you're saying in all of this! By the way you're right I did rush this chapter. But I understand the grammatical standpoint and that consistency is nessacary. Although I'm glad you liked the actual chapter though! I'm still waiting for your next chapter though:p
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Lol, you won't have to wait for long. I'm about to put it up :D
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

I haven't read the new chapter all the way through yet, but it's going good. Both yours and mine are just about as far into the story, atleast they are length wise.

You know, it's annoying lately how not many people comment on fan-fics, no matter how much people urge them to, and then you feel like nobody reads it and then you close it down. That's been happening more and more lately. With all of this happening it's hard to see completed fan-fics except for Max's.

Anyone know what i mean?
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Oh yes... all too much. There's a fair few VIEWS on mine, but none too many ratings etc. Mine has so long to go to complete itself though... if you read through it you'll see that. There's so much to solve in it that it cannot be done for a long time to come. But I DO want to finish it!
 
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we should like start a club so everyone in it reads the other members' fan-fics AND talks about them and all that stuff. And also we could make fan-art for eachothers, too. That way our fan-fics won't die as easily. I could also add ranks so the more of others' fics you read and talk about it, the higher you get. Who's for it?
 
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I like your story alot! Only complant is the non updated TCs. I would like to become a charactor in your story also, I nderstand it will be a very minor role, like you said before.
Board Name: MUCKSTER
Name: Alex (Muck) Muckle
Pokemon that I want: Bulbasaur, Grimer
Favorite Type: Grass and Poisen
Minibio: Played the game sence RYB, always loved the game. Very athletic, played volleyball and soccer back on the normal contenant. Tall, kind and puts others before self
Age: 16

Thanks alot can't wait for the next chapter!
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

Yes and no.

Yes because it keeps them from dying somewhat and could help to maintain motivation. Having someone else do artwork to assist you could also be good.

No because a separate thread for discussing the stories may well prevent (or nullify the point in) posting in the stories themselves, and these story threads are what need to be kept alive the most. Also, not every (AKA me...) can do art, so not everyone could contribute to that side of things. I know this isn't always necessary, but I hate not being able to do what is wanted by the club.
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

The part about the not as much in the fan-fics themselves can be solved fairly easily.
the discussion of them will still be in the fan-fics thread itself, while in the club thread people will post updates on their fan-fics, asking for art (and all stuff of that sort), new things in the club itslef and I'll post when members rank up and stuff like that. The higher the rank the more authority and the more people will pay attention to your threads (maybe).
Now with all these points I've made and the time to think it through I think I will make it. Gamercal, Moneyking63, and Muckster will all be starting members whether you guys like it or not.
 
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lol... guess that's it settled then :p

I DID start reading your fic BTW, but I haven't had the time to read the entire thing you posted. You posted an awful lot at once... not that it's a bad thing, but maybe that put people off a little, who knows how these people work. When I finish reading it, I'll comment. But not until I actually HAVE read ALL of it ;)
 
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Vasoguardx: Instead of a thread in the writing corner how about a clan. A fan fic clan, we still post in the fan fics for comments on new chapters, character applications ect. But do art/major discussion in the clan. Although im a little doubtful it will work its a good idea!

MUCKSTER: O ya i do have to update the trainer cards, i havnt found the time lately but i will do it soon! Ok great thanks for the character application!

Gamercal: Not a whole lot to say:p ughh check your pms:p
 
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Aww I just realised something for my person could I also catch a Lapras? You can choose the rest. Also I dont know how I forogt this but my charactor (Or me lol It pritty much is me, acually it is me) I am very competive, probable my biggest flaw

Thanks alot and great story!
 
RE: Pokemon Journey Through Life, CHAPTER 7 IS HERE! COME CHECK IT OUT AND COMMENT!

As for your pokes ill add it too the list but i havnt figured out your actual pokes yet, so you'll just have to wait and see.

Ok I'll keep that in mind.
 
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