RE: Seven Days of Terror
yeah those things are pretty freakin ugly
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yeah those things are pretty freakin ugly
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RE: Seven Days of Terror
Attention one and all:
James was up early, as usual, writing in his diary about yesterday's occurrences. He stopped for a moment to give his writing hand a rest. He looked out his window and admired the sun coming up over the horizon, coloring the ocean red-orange. "It's pretty," he commented to himself. "Sunrises usually are..." He continued writing, stealing glances outside on occasion to see if he might see Shelly again. "Don't know what I'm so worked up about," he thought, putting his focus back on his writing. "After what happened, I don't think she's dumb enough to risk getting hurt."
Satisfied with his entry, James put the pencil back in the notebook's binding and let out a yawn. "Maybe I'll get a little more shut-eye," he wondered, looking over at his still-snoozing Pokemon partner. Placing his notebook underneath his pillow, James turned off the nearby lamp and, with another yawn, closed his eyes.
Seconds later, a bloodcurdling scream was heard not too far down the hallway...
It has begun :]
Attention one and all:
James was up early, as usual, writing in his diary about yesterday's occurrences. He stopped for a moment to give his writing hand a rest. He looked out his window and admired the sun coming up over the horizon, coloring the ocean red-orange. "It's pretty," he commented to himself. "Sunrises usually are..." He continued writing, stealing glances outside on occasion to see if he might see Shelly again. "Don't know what I'm so worked up about," he thought, putting his focus back on his writing. "After what happened, I don't think she's dumb enough to risk getting hurt."
Satisfied with his entry, James put the pencil back in the notebook's binding and let out a yawn. "Maybe I'll get a little more shut-eye," he wondered, looking over at his still-snoozing Pokemon partner. Placing his notebook underneath his pillow, James turned off the nearby lamp and, with another yawn, closed his eyes.
Seconds later, a bloodcurdling scream was heard not too far down the hallway...
It has begun :]
RE: Seven Days of Terror
the scream is probably from whoever found misty's stabbed body
the scream is probably from whoever found misty's stabbed body
RE: Seven Days of Terror
They didn't think that, because at the end of chapter 9, it says that she used the last of her breath to say that she forgives him, so..she couldn't have screamed. Could she?
I didn't think about it being someone who discovers Misty's body. But now that it's mentioned, it makes more sense.
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They didn't think that, because at the end of chapter 9, it says that she used the last of her breath to say that she forgives him, so..she couldn't have screamed. Could she?
I didn't think about it being someone who discovers Misty's body. But now that it's mentioned, it makes more sense.
RE: Seven Days of Terror
Hey, this thing is still going?
I actually read the Prologue before, but when I went into Chapter One, I was like "Hydro Pump lolwut" and I forgot all about it. Maybe I should try to read again. ;o
Zilla, fanfics are menial chat stuff.
EDIT: Gah I didn't realise I posted in a dead thread. ._.
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Hey, this thing is still going?
I actually read the Prologue before, but when I went into Chapter One, I was like "Hydro Pump lolwut" and I forgot all about it. Maybe I should try to read again. ;o
Zilla, fanfics are menial chat stuff.
EDIT: Gah I didn't realise I posted in a dead thread. ._.
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To answer Noobnerd's question for everyone, yes this story is still going. No matter how long it takes for me to finish, this story will not die. I like this fic way too much to just give up. The only way I will be content to let this fic fade into obscurity is if it's been finished.
"BUT PMJ WHY HAVEN'T YOU UPDATED YOUR FIC IT'S BEEN THREE MONTHS????"
(note: in looking to see just how long it's been so I could ask that theoretical question, wow. it's been three months???
/me sees forty Sonics spam their down taunt)
Well, the reason for that is... I'm kinda stuck. Most of you would call that writer's block, but not me! I'd call it... I'd call it... okay fine I'd call it writer's block too. Every time I sit down to write I either end up doing something else entirely, (like I just did while making this post, it's been like 20 minutes and I'm still mid-sentence - wtg me) or I'd just plain not know what to write. It happens without fail every time.
I already gave you guys a little tidbit of chapter 10, or else I'd give you one right now; thing is, I haven't written much past that. Word count as of this writing stands at 1,950, give or take 20 or so "words" that TextPad calls the formatting I write in the chapter so I can just copy the chapter, paste, and hit Post Reply (I've said this before, I'm sure of it). Nearly two thousand words might seem like a lot to you, but those of you who have read everything (WHICH REALLY NEEDS TO BE EVERYONE - TELL YOUR FRIENDS AND ESPECIALLY KRONAR), you'll know that two thousand words ain't nothing to me. My earlier chapters may have sucked more than the first place winner of a sucking contest, but that's changing. This is another reason why I haven't done much - I don't want my fic to just be awesome. I want it to be freakin' amazing. I want people to read my fic and have it inspire them to write their own freakin' amazing stories (which I hope I've done on this forum), and that's why I don't have much done. Everything has to be perfect.
I've taken zilla's suggestion to cut down on the dialogue to heart. I don't know if he was talking about chapter 2 in particular, but he was right that the dialogue is a bit excessive; in fact, it's almost all dialogue. I know more than anyone how much dialogue is present in my story. I rely on it way too much to move the story along because I'm not that great at being descriptive. When I wrote it, I thought it was needed to convey everything properly. However...
PMJ's fic writing pro tip #1: It's not bad to let the reader figure out some things for himself.
I know I probably could have done without a lot of the dialogue that was present in chapter two. When you're writing a story, it's stupid to spoon-feed the reader all the information. It's insulting to the reader's intelligence. Let the reader put together the pieces of the puzzle himself.
A good example of this is found in chapter nine. It's never explicitly said who attacked May, but by the chapter's end, the identity of her attacker becomes glaringly obvious. If I had come right out and said whodunit (off-topic: Firefox says "whodunit" is a word. lol), that would have been stupid. Of course you know whodunit. You don't need me to tell you.
With that said: I am trying to cut down on the excessive dialogue in chapter ten. That's not to say there won't be a lot, since some major stuff just went down. But hopefully it won't feel like you're reading a play or something (quick protip #2, a play script is not a fic, see that attack of the Arceus movie by that banned dude for a shining example of what NOT to do).
Well, there you have it. I'll re-open this thread because I consider this a valid update and I hope you guys don't have any objections to my doing so. Chapter ten likely will not be finished for a long time, but you guys know I'll keep you posted. Feel free to speculate what you think will happen next! By the time you're done reading chapter 10, Misty's not going to be very lonely, if you catch my drift.
Speaking of the wonderful world of speculation, here's one to get the hamster running: If you all recall, Misty made a deal with the agent of death. Forgive Tracey - and mean it - before she dies, and Vaporeon will be at peace. Don't, and she suffers for eternity. Misty said she forgave Tracey, but supposedly her heart wasn't in it. Now she gets killed before she can come to terms with the voice in her head, despite claiming over and over that Tracey really was forgiven.
What happens now? ;o
Oh yeah, and bonus fun fact: Ash still doesn't know Misty tried to kill herself! \o/ She was going to tell him herself later, but OOPS SHE'S DEAD LOL
PMJ's status report
To answer Noobnerd's question for everyone, yes this story is still going. No matter how long it takes for me to finish, this story will not die. I like this fic way too much to just give up. The only way I will be content to let this fic fade into obscurity is if it's been finished.
"BUT PMJ WHY HAVEN'T YOU UPDATED YOUR FIC IT'S BEEN THREE MONTHS????"
(note: in looking to see just how long it's been so I could ask that theoretical question, wow. it's been three months???
/me sees forty Sonics spam their down taunt)
Well, the reason for that is... I'm kinda stuck. Most of you would call that writer's block, but not me! I'd call it... I'd call it... okay fine I'd call it writer's block too. Every time I sit down to write I either end up doing something else entirely, (like I just did while making this post, it's been like 20 minutes and I'm still mid-sentence - wtg me) or I'd just plain not know what to write. It happens without fail every time.
I already gave you guys a little tidbit of chapter 10, or else I'd give you one right now; thing is, I haven't written much past that. Word count as of this writing stands at 1,950, give or take 20 or so "words" that TextPad calls the formatting I write in the chapter so I can just copy the chapter, paste, and hit Post Reply (I've said this before, I'm sure of it). Nearly two thousand words might seem like a lot to you, but those of you who have read everything (WHICH REALLY NEEDS TO BE EVERYONE - TELL YOUR FRIENDS AND ESPECIALLY KRONAR), you'll know that two thousand words ain't nothing to me. My earlier chapters may have sucked more than the first place winner of a sucking contest, but that's changing. This is another reason why I haven't done much - I don't want my fic to just be awesome. I want it to be freakin' amazing. I want people to read my fic and have it inspire them to write their own freakin' amazing stories (which I hope I've done on this forum), and that's why I don't have much done. Everything has to be perfect.
I've taken zilla's suggestion to cut down on the dialogue to heart. I don't know if he was talking about chapter 2 in particular, but he was right that the dialogue is a bit excessive; in fact, it's almost all dialogue. I know more than anyone how much dialogue is present in my story. I rely on it way too much to move the story along because I'm not that great at being descriptive. When I wrote it, I thought it was needed to convey everything properly. However...
PMJ's fic writing pro tip #1: It's not bad to let the reader figure out some things for himself.
I know I probably could have done without a lot of the dialogue that was present in chapter two. When you're writing a story, it's stupid to spoon-feed the reader all the information. It's insulting to the reader's intelligence. Let the reader put together the pieces of the puzzle himself.
A good example of this is found in chapter nine. It's never explicitly said who attacked May, but by the chapter's end, the identity of her attacker becomes glaringly obvious. If I had come right out and said whodunit (off-topic: Firefox says "whodunit" is a word. lol), that would have been stupid. Of course you know whodunit. You don't need me to tell you.
With that said: I am trying to cut down on the excessive dialogue in chapter ten. That's not to say there won't be a lot, since some major stuff just went down. But hopefully it won't feel like you're reading a play or something (quick protip #2, a play script is not a fic, see that attack of the Arceus movie by that banned dude for a shining example of what NOT to do).
Well, there you have it. I'll re-open this thread because I consider this a valid update and I hope you guys don't have any objections to my doing so. Chapter ten likely will not be finished for a long time, but you guys know I'll keep you posted. Feel free to speculate what you think will happen next! By the time you're done reading chapter 10, Misty's not going to be very lonely, if you catch my drift.
Speaking of the wonderful world of speculation, here's one to get the hamster running: If you all recall, Misty made a deal with the agent of death. Forgive Tracey - and mean it - before she dies, and Vaporeon will be at peace. Don't, and she suffers for eternity. Misty said she forgave Tracey, but supposedly her heart wasn't in it. Now she gets killed before she can come to terms with the voice in her head, despite claiming over and over that Tracey really was forgiven.
What happens now? ;o
Oh yeah, and bonus fun fact: Ash still doesn't know Misty tried to kill herself! \o/ She was going to tell him herself later, but OOPS SHE'S DEAD LOL
RE: Seven Days of Terror
I think Max will be the next one to go, but that's what I thought last time.
I really didn't think Misty would be the first one to be killed. That surprised me. I'm going to guess that the next death will also surprise me, so I'm changing my mind. I think Ash will die next!
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I think Max will be the next one to go, but that's what I thought last time.
I really didn't think Misty would be the first one to be killed. That surprised me. I'm going to guess that the next death will also surprise me, so I'm changing my mind. I think Ash will die next!